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Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HCAA84H07882PYBB1YFQD7
Run Details
Model:
Qwen 3.8 Max (Reasoning, XHigh)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
6m 42s
Cost:
$0.097168
Provider:
Alibaba
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
97.24%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
64.15%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
41.37%
Name drop frequency
(details)
63.79%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
40.94%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
67.68%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
41.22%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
87.2132%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The Heartstone pendant seared Rory's
collarbone a second before the oak stones opened their jaws. She skidded to a halt. Moss sighed under her boots. Behind her, Nyx's tall silhouette frayed at the edges. The dark had grown teeth. Isolde stepped past them both.
Her silver hair caught no
light. Her feet left no prints. "The door is rude tonight." Isolde said.
Rory gripped the pendant through
her jumper.
The crimson gem pulsed, warm
and urgent, in time with something deep under the ground.
The insulated delivery bag banged
against her hip.
Yu-Fei had packed it for
a customer in Camden, but Camden
felt like a rumour
. "It knows we're here." Rory said. Nyx solidified beside her. Violet eyes glowed. "It knows what you carry." The standing stones leaned inward.
Wildflowers bloomed between their roots
in thick knots, petals pale as milk, centres black and wet. They turned as Rory moved. Not toward the light. Toward her.
She drew the Fae blade
Isolde had given her.
The moonsilver dagger bit cold
through her fingers.
Its leaf-shaped edge gave off
a faint glow.
The little crescent scar on
her left wrist whitened as she tightened her grip. "Stay close." Nyx made a sound like dry leaves. "I am close. I am the closest thing here that still likes you." Isolde smiled without showing teeth. "The grove favours the hungry. Do not feed it first." Rory searched the stones for Warden sigils. None scored the bark. No one watched this tear. That frightened her more than guards would. She stepped between two stones. The world folded. The clearing opened like a mouth holding its breath. Flowers crowded the grass in colours Rory had seen and several she had not. A ring of hawthorn bent over a pool so still it looked cut from black glass. The air tasted of honey, iron, and green sap. No birds sang. The
silence
listened. Rory glanced at her phone. No signal. The clock read 00:00, then 06:00, then 00:00 again. She switched it off. "Time is loose here." Isolde said. "Loose enough to lose us?" "Only if you ask it to stay." At the pool's edge, the air rippled. Not heat. Not water. A vertical seam of faint distortion hung like a scar over the world's eye. The Heartstone
pulsed
harder. "There." Rory said. Nyx bent over the seam.
Their shadow fingers passed through
it and came back dusted with gold. They stared at the dust, offended. "Dymas." Nyx whispered. Isolde inclined her head. "The belly of the below. Full of kitchens, contracts, and teeth." Rory looked at the rift. "A Hel portal." "A hungry one." Nyx said. "Can we close it?" Isolde answered, "A door with a tongue can swallow the hand that shuts it." Rory sheathed the blade but kept her hand near it. "That sounds like a no." "It sounds like truth. Truth is often a poor tool." Rory went first. The seam opened around her shoulders like wet
silk
. Heat pressed against her face. Then the grove vanished. Amber light filled a sky with no sun. It hung thick and warm, the colour of old honey, and made the vineyards glow from inside. Rows of black vines climbed slopes that curved too smoothly. Each plant sagged with fruit that glistened like polished meat. Orchards stood beyond them.
Their trees bore glass leaves
and figs split open, weeping crimson syrup. The smell hit Rory next. Roasted sugar. Fat. Wine. Spices that stung the back of her throat.
Her stomach clenched with hunger
so sharp it
felt like pain
.
Somewhere ahead, knives tapped against
pans. Laughter rolled in waves, too loud, too sweet. Under it all, something sizzled and hissed like a living thing. The path beneath Rory's boots looked like crushed sugar, but it gave like skin. She kept her steps light. The delivery bag swung against her side, absurd and ordinary, until its smell of soy and hot oil turned to burnt caramel. She stopped beside a vine. A fruit hung at eye level, round and furred like a peach, except its skin moved with a slow
pulse
. She leaned closer. A tiny voice murmured inside it. Not words. A lullaby. Her mother's lullaby. Rory jerked back. "Don't." Nyx said. "It knew me." "Dymas knows appetite. It wears what will lure you." Isolde plucked a blade of grass and let it fall. The grass turned to spun sugar before it touched the ground. "All here offers itself. The offer is the trap." Nyx stepped into the shadow of a fig tree. For a heartbeat, they vanished.
Then they reappeared with a
hiss, their outline smoking. "The dark here has teeth marks." they said. Rory looked at the long shadows stretching from the vines. They looked greasy. They smelled of burnt caramel. "Stay solid." she said. "I prefer honest advice." "Then stay useful." Nyx's violet
eyes narrowed
. The corner of their mouth curved. "Better." They crested a low hill. Below, the land opened into a vast amphitheatre of terraced gardens. At its centre rose a palace of pale bone and darker wood. Its arches formed open mouths. Long tables ran from the palace gates into the vineyards, laid with silver dishes, towers of fruit, and goblets that overflowed without spilling. Figures moved between them. Some wore chef whites. Some wore chains. All smiled. Rory crouched behind a flowering bush. Its blossoms leaned away from her. "Helbound souls." Nyx said. Their voice dropped to a thinner
whisper
. "Contracts bind most." Isolde pointed to a man carrying a tray of roasted birds. His wrists bore a brand in the shape of a fly. "They cook because they must. They serve because they cannot stop." One of the birds on the tray opened its eyes. It sang a note. The man's smile stretched until his gums bled. Rory looked away. Her throat tightened. "Belphegor." Isolde said, "The prince sets the table. The table sets the terms." The pendant dragged Rory's attention toward the palace. Its heat had become a steady
throb
. Not toward the tables. Toward the palace's open mouth. A doorway. No, a throat. "The portal is inside." Rory said. "Of course it is." Nyx said. "Inside the part that wants to eat us." "The best doors are where the teeth are." Isolde said. "That is not
comforting
." "I was not
comforting
. I was accurate." They moved down the slope between rows of herbs that whispered recipes. Rory kept her breath shallow. Every scent
tried to
hook her. Bread. Her childhood kitchen. Eva's flat on a rainy night. She bit the inside of her cheek until copper filled her mouth. At the palace wall, a side arch glowed with a lattice of amber light. The air over it rippled with the same distortion as the Veil, but thicker, layered like varnish. Rory drew the Fae blade. Cold spread up her arm. The dagger's glow brightened until the moonsilver
looked like frozen moonlight
. "Cut." Isolde said. "But do not answer what bleeds." Rory pressed the blade to the ward. The light shrieked. Not a sound. A taste. Salt, ash, and old wine. The blade slid through. The lattice split in a clean line, curling away from the opening like burnt sugar. Nyx slipped through first, incorporeal for a second, then solid again inside. Rory followed. Isolde passed without bending the dust. Inside, the palace breathed. Corridors widened and narrowed with slow rhythm. The walls gleamed with red veins. Torches burned without smoke, their flames the colour of apricot jam. The floor tilted
gently
and guided them downward. Every archway opened onto another wonder. A room of hanging meats murmured prophecies. A cellar held wine sleeping in glass cocoons. A courtyard held silent chefs, their hands moving too fast, their eyes glazed with amber light. They passed a kitchen where a woman spun sugar into cages. Inside each cage, a tiny light beat like a heart. Rory halted. The woman looked up. Her face was kind. Her eyes were empty. "Delivery." the woman said. Rory froze. The woman smiled. "Not you. The dish." She held up a silver platter. Under the dome, something knocked once. Twice. Nyx's shadows tightened. Isolde's hand rested on Rory's sleeve. "Walk." Isolde said. Rory walked. The Heartstone flared so hard Rory gasped. The pendant pointed toward the far end of a hall with no ceiling. Above them, the amber sky swirled. Below, a table stretched farther than sense. Diners sat in robes of
silk
and skin. Some had horns curved back. Some had too many teeth. Gold thread sealed the mouths of others. Servants carried dishes that glowed, steamed, and wept. A choir of pots sang under the clatter of knives. Behind the hall's far end, an empty throne stood beneath a canopy of black vines. Behind the throne, a tear in the air hung there, rimmed with crimson light and breathing in and out. The Heartstone answered it with a
pulse
that made Rory's teeth ache. "There." she whispered. Nyx looked at the diners. "Through them?" "Through the serving path." Isolde said. "The proud do not see hands that carry food." Nyx spread their shadow over the three of them. The hall dimmed at their edges. Rory kept to the wall. The Fae blade stayed cold in her grip. The delivery bag grew heavier with every step. It had chosen to become a witness. They passed close enough to touch the nearest diner. The woman lifted a fruit to her lips. The fruit screamed. The woman bit down. A man drank from a goblet, and his face slid through several ages before settling into a smile. Rory fixed her eyes on the throne. A boy in a stained apron stumbled against Rory's shoulder. His tray clattered. A roast bird rolled free, its beak open in a silent cry. Rory caught the Heartstone before it swung free, but the pendant had already slipped from her collar. Crimson light spilled over the hall. The boy looked at it. His eyes went wide. His mouth opened. A dinner bell pealed from his throat. Every conversation stopped. Every fork halted halfway to every mouth. Nyx cursed in a language that made the torches gutter. Isolde drew herself up. "The table has noticed." The diners turned as one. Their smiles did not change. Their eyes did. Hunger stripped them bare. The food on the nearest table twitched. A goblet overturned, spilling red liquid that crawled back into the cup. From behind the empty throne, the portal
pulsed
. A voice came through it, rich and warm, wet at the edges. "The little courier has brought the key to my kitchen." The black vines overhead dropped like ropes. The doors of the hall slammed shut with the sound of a mouth closing. Rory raised the Fae blade. The cold in her hand turned sharp enough to burn. Then the feast stood.
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9/2/2026, 3:38:03 PM
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1371
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
20
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
49
tagDensity
0.408
leniency
0.816
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
97.24%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1813
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"gently"
count
1
highlights
0
"gently"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
64.15%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1813
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"pulsed"
count
3
1
word
"silence"
count
1
2
word
"silk"
count
2
3
word
"stomach"
count
1
4
word
"pulse"
count
2
5
word
"whisper"
count
1
6
word
"throb"
count
1
7
word
"comforting"
count
2
highlights
0
"pulsed"
1
"silence"
2
"silk"
3
"stomach"
4
"pulse"
5
"whisper"
6
"throb"
7
"comforting"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
234
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
234
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"tried to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
263
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
23
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1813
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
21
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
41.37%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
80
wordCount
1565
uniqueNames
8
maxNameDensity
2.17
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
3.5
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone
5
Rory
34
Nyx
16
Camden
2
Fae
4
Isolde
17
Warden
1
Veil
1
persons
0
"Heartstone"
1
"Rory"
2
"Nyx"
3
"Isolde"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.414
windowScore
0.5
63.79%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
116
glossingSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"felt like a rumour"
1
"felt like pain"
2
"looked like crushed sugar, but it gave li"
3
"looked like frozen moonlight"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1813
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
263
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
94
mean
19.29
std
18.15
cv
0.941
sampleLengths
0
15
1
40
2
7
3
45
4
6
5
12
6
32
7
39
8
2
9
20
10
15
11
23
12
5
13
3
14
54
15
20
16
6
17
5
18
7
19
29
20
3
21
23
22
3
23
15
24
8
25
5
26
4
27
14
28
15
29
10
30
21
31
89
32
25
33
41
34
44
35
3
36
3
37
9
38
30
39
23
40
8
41
18
42
4
43
4
44
3
45
11
46
69
47
12
48
14
49
33
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
234
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
286
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
263
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1567
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
48
adverbRatio
0.03063178047223995
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.0019144862795149968
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
263
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
263
mean
6.89
std
4.11
cv
0.596
sampleLengths
0
15
1
5
2
5
3
9
4
5
5
5
6
6
7
5
8
7
9
7
10
15
11
8
12
15
13
6
14
4
15
3
16
5
17
5
18
16
19
5
20
4
21
2
22
9
23
8
24
8
25
14
26
2
27
7
28
13
29
5
30
10
31
7
32
4
33
5
34
7
35
5
36
3
37
9
38
14
39
16
40
9
41
3
42
3
43
5
44
2
45
9
46
4
47
6
48
5
49
7
40.94%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
24
diversityRatio
0.30038022813688214
totalSentences
263
uniqueOpeners
79
67.68%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
197
matches
0
"Then the grove vanished."
1
"Somewhere ahead, knives tapped against"
2
"Then they reappeared with a"
3
"Then the feast stood."
ratio
0.02
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
41
totalSentences
197
matches
0
"She skidded to a halt."
1
"Her silver hair caught no"
2
"Her feet left no prints."
3
"They turned as Rory moved."
4
"She drew the Fae blade"
5
"Its leaf-shaped edge gave off"
6
"She stepped between two stones."
7
"She switched it off."
8
"Their shadow fingers passed through"
9
"They stared at the dust,"
10
"It hung thick and warm,"
11
"Their trees bore glass leaves"
12
"Her stomach clenched with hunger"
13
"She kept her steps light."
14
"She stopped beside a vine."
15
"She leaned closer."
16
"Her mother's lullaby."
17
"They looked greasy."
18
"They smelled of burnt caramel."
19
"They crested a low hill."
ratio
0.208
41.22%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
165
totalSentences
197
matches
0
"The Heartstone pendant seared Rory's"
1
"She skidded to a halt."
2
"Moss sighed under her boots."
3
"The dark had grown teeth."
4
"Isolde stepped past them both."
5
"Her silver hair caught no"
6
"Her feet left no prints."
7
"Rory gripped the pendant through"
8
"The crimson gem pulsed, warm"
9
"The insulated delivery bag banged"
10
"Yu-Fei had packed it for"
11
"Nyx solidified beside her."
12
"Violet eyes glowed."
13
"The standing stones leaned inward."
14
"Wildflowers bloomed between their roots"
15
"They turned as Rory moved."
16
"She drew the Fae blade"
17
"The moonsilver dagger bit cold"
18
"Its leaf-shaped edge gave off"
19
"The little crescent scar on"
ratio
0.838
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
197
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
53
technicalSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"Long tables ran from the palace gates into the vineyards, laid with silver dishes, towers of fruit, and goblets that overflowed without spilling."
1
"Nyx cursed in a language that made the torches gutter."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
20
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
20
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1
"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
49
tagDensity
0.408
leniency
0.816
rawRatio
0.1
effectiveRatio
0.082
87.2132%