Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HH8HY5C8XJD3628BBMQZ5C

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2m 6s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Her fingers closed around the crescent scar on Rory's wrist. "You still hide it." Rory twisted free. The woman stood too close to the row of clean glasses, her coat damp across the shoulder. Green light from the sign above the street door cut a bright stripe across the pale break in her nose. An old fracture. A newer scar. "Eva." The name hit the sticky counter between them. Silas looked up from the tap valve he had been nursing. He did not ask if she knew the woman. He set the wrench on a cloth and turned the silver signet ring twice across his knuckles. Eva gave him a small smile. "Still doing the face, Si. The one that says leave or I'll make it dull." Rory felt the old rhythm rise in her, the half beat before a fight, the way Eva used to count under her breath before crossing the road. "You look older," Eva said. "You look expensive." "That's the lie that keeps the rent paid." Silas moved down the bar, his left leg taking the long step it always took before the short one. He slid a clean glass from the shelf and poured without waiting. "Anything else?" "Two whiskeys," Eva said. "House or premium?" "Something that can carry a grudge." The Raven's Nest gave off its usual scent after closing, lemon polish over salted peanuts, wet wool over cold metal. The green neon sign pulsed outside the street door. Behind Eva, the old maps curled on the plaster walls. Black-and-white photographs lined the shelves, faces of men who had gone missing before London had learned to forget them. The bookshelf at the rear still stood where it had stood the night Rory arrived, hiding the back room where names were checked at the door like coats. Rory took the glass. The whiskey burned down her throat and settled like a coin in her chest. "You should have stayed in Cardiff." "You should have come back for me." "That wasn't possible." "Possible is what men say when they choose convenience." Eva pulled off one glove. Her fingers were bare, red with cold. "I waited six weeks. You sent one postcard. It said the city was loud." "It was loud." "It was safe." Rory set the glass down with more care than the sound deserved. "I didn't know where to go." "You knew exactly where you were going. Up a train, past the bridge, to a woman who smelled of garlic and fear and needed you to be braver than she was." Silas turned toward the kitchen. "I'll be in the office." "No." Eva's voice changed, lower, edged. "I need to speak with Rory." "Then speak loud. The walls have ears, and the floorboards have habits." Rory watched him go. His limp was louder in the empty room. A shadow shifted at the end of the bar, where the hidden staircase gave onto the kitchen. She had seen that shadow before, carrying messages wrapped in bread labels. Eva saw her watching. "They're still yours, then. The quiet people." "They're mine." "They used to be mine too." Rory leaned back. The stool creaked. "You have a gun." Eva's hand rested on the table's edge. The leather of her glove had come away near the thumb. A small scorch mark sat on the pad. "I have a need," she said. "That's a polite way to put it." "It's a Cardiff way." Eva laughed once. "You left me there, Rory. I stayed because I thought staying was courage. You left because you thought running was courage. We were both wrong, but at least you learned to keep moving." "Where have you been?" "Everywhere that didn't have my name on a lease." "Family?" "Mine found other ways to be cruel. I found a job that pays for cruelty." Rory looked at the crescent scar. The small white mark where the garden fence had caught her when she was nine. Eva had tied her own jumper around it before the ambulance. "You cut your hair," Eva said. "You burned the butterfly." Eva's left sleeve slid down a finger. A faded outline marked the inside of her wrist, the ink gone but not gone. "I did that myself. With a soldering iron. The first one was from a woman in Bristol. She told me pain tells you where the borders are." "And you?" "I tell the borders I'm moving." Rory felt her stomach tighten. "You're not here for my mother's birthday." "I'm here because someone asked me to find a girl who left a flat above a bar and became nobody worth watching." Eva tipped her glass until the whiskey made a gold crescent. "The girl became worth watching after all." "How?" "A courier dropped a bag in my flat. It had your name inside the lining. The name from before." Rory's mouth went dry. "Laila." "Yes. That name came in the post with a photograph." The word hung over the counter. The street outside moved under the glass, footsteps and tyres and a bus braking for the corner. None of it belonged to them. "What photograph?" Eva put a sealed plastic envelope against the whiskey glass. Inside, a picture bent under the light. Two women at a bus stop in Cardiff, years old, one laughing with a paper bag of chips, the other holding the bag by one hand. It was the kind of picture taken by someone standing too close and trying to look invisible. "Who sent it?" "That's what I came to ask you." Rory touched the envelope. Her fingertip left a print on the plastic. "I haven't been in Cardiff for three years." "Evan was." Rory did not move. The glass shook once and sent a drop of whiskey across her thumb. "Who said that?" "Nobody. I said it." Eva's eyes hardened. "Don't make me say his name twice. You used to carry it like a stone." "You used to help me find a flat." "I used to help you find doors. You didn't ask what it cost to leave the windows open." Rory's breath came short. "What cost?" "Mine." The hidden bookshelf gave a single click. They both looked back. Silas stepped through, one hand raised. His face had changed in the way his face did before he told a truth no one wanted. "Miss Carter." Rory stood so fast the stool scraped the floor. "How many times do I have to ask you not to call me that while I'm working." "Not about that." He glanced at Eva, then the plastic envelope. "We have guests." From the street door came three slow knocks. Eva pushed the whiskey away. Her movements became exact, small. She turned the glass half an inch, enough to catch the light toward the door. "That's not the police," she said. "The police knock twice and shout." Rory looked at Silas. "Who?" "Someone who knows the schedule." Silas moved behind the bar and reached under the counter. "Someone who thinks the bar is empty." Another knock, this time on the glass. Rory went to the curtain covering the street window. The green neon sign threw her reflection back, black hair, blue eyes, the pale line of a mouth that used to belong to a girl who waited by the river. Outside, a man stood with his hands open on both sides of the door. No weapon showed. His coat hung too loose across the shoulders. He smiled at the glass as if he could see her through it. "Evan." The name left her before caution did. Eva was already behind the bookshelf. She reappeared with a small case, dark and rectangular, not a bag. Not money. Silas set it on the counter and opened the lid. Inside lay two passports, a phone, and a photograph of the girl from the bus stop, now older, standing in the doorway of the flat above the bar. The back of the photograph had been written in red ink. Rory leaned in. The ink looked fresh. "Check the flat." "Already checked," Silas said. "No one answers. The back window is broken." The man at the glass raised his phone. On its screen appeared a video, grainy and close, of a bedroom. Rory's bedroom. The duvet pulled back. Her black hair falling across a pillow. A small knife resting on the bedside table. The one she used for apples and package tape. The one she kept hidden under the mattress. Rory turned to Eva. "Where is it?" Eva's jaw worked. "That was my flat. They put it in a box. The box was left with my name on it." The man outside tapped the glass once. The sound came through clean, like a knuckle on a coffin. Silas spoke without looking up from the screen. "Rory. Step back." Rory did not step back. She watched the video on the phone, watched her own pillow move as if someone had just left it. The street door swung inward. The green sign buzzed above the man's head. He smiled with both hands open again, one holding the phone, one holding nothing. On the door mat sat a single shoe, black and narrow, with a broken heel. Rory's spare shoe. The one from the bottom of the wardrobe. "Evening, Aurora." The name sounded wrong in his mouth, too clean, too patient. Eva lifted the glass from the counter and hurled it at his face. It shattered against his cheek and the door, and the man did not blink. From under his coat he pulled a short black gun and pressed it against his own throat. "Take me out," he said, "and the live feed sends to every phone in the Nest."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva laughed once [once]"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.195
leniency0.39
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.026
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1620
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1620
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"stomach"
2"footsteps"
3"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences118
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences180
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1620
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1085
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity2.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory22
Eva22
Silas9
Raven1
Nest1
London1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Silas"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.486
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences78
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1620
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences180
matches
0"seen that shadow"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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cv1.104
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66
715
827
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103
118
1231
132
144
153
166
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1818
196
207
213
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233
243
2512
266
2731
285
295
3012
3112
3241
334
347
352
366
376
384
3926
406
417
4240
434
449
451
4615
4732
486
494
99.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"were checked"
1"been written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs170
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences180
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1087
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.021159153633854646
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences180
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences180
mean9
std6.73
cv0.748
sampleLengths
010
14
23
317
420
53
63
71
88
911
109
1117
126
1315
1427
155
163
178
1819
1912
202
214
223
236
2420
259
2610
2719
2828
294
3014
316
327
333
3414
357
3614
373
383
3912
406
4131
425
435
446
456
4612
474
488
4917
42.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.29444444444444445
totalSentences180
uniqueOpeners53
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences109
matches
0"Her fingers closed around the"
1"He did not ask if"
2"He set the wrench on"
3"He slid a clean glass"
4"Her fingers were bare, red"
5"His limp was louder in"
6"She had seen that shadow"
7"It was the kind of"
8"Her fingertip left a print"
9"They both looked back."
10"His face had changed in"
11"He glanced at Eva, then"
12"Her movements became exact, small."
13"She turned the glass half"
14"His coat hung too loose"
15"He smiled at the glass"
16"She reappeared with a small"
17"Her black hair falling across"
18"She watched the video on"
19"He smiled with both hands"
ratio0.193
15.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences109
matches
0"Her fingers closed around the"
1"Rory twisted free."
2"The woman stood too close"
3"An old fracture."
4"A newer scar."
5"The name hit the sticky"
6"Silas looked up from the"
7"He did not ask if"
8"He set the wrench on"
9"Eva gave him a small"
10"Rory felt the old rhythm"
11"Silas moved down the bar,"
12"He slid a clean glass"
13"The Raven's Nest gave off"
14"The green neon sign pulsed"
15"The bookshelf at the rear"
16"Rory took the glass."
17"The whiskey burned down her"
18"Eva pulled off one glove"
19"Her fingers were bare, red"
ratio0.89
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Black-and-white photographs lined the shelves, faces of men who had gone missing before London had learned to forget them."
1"The green neon sign threw her reflection back, black hair, blue eyes, the pale line of a mouth that used to belong to a girl who waited by the river."
2"She watched the video on the phone, watched her own pillow move as if someone had just left it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva laughed once (laugh)"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.208
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.026
85.1309%