Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HH9H8BQ3Q8JJ6FV8W5TY5H

Run Details

Duration:
17.3s
Cost:
$0.013945
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air on the other side did not taste like air. It settled on Aurora’s tongue like powdered cloves and burnt sugar, thick enough to leave a slick, coppery film behind her teeth. She stumbled forward, her boots sinking into moss so dark it bordered on violet. Behind her, the tear in the Veil knit shut with a quiet, sickening sound like wet velvet being torn in reverse. The cold mist of Richmond Park was gone, snuffed out in a heartbeat. Aurora caught herself against a sprawling root. Through the thin leather of her glove, the wood felt warm, coursing with a sluggish, rhythmic pulse that made her yank her hand away. Beneath her collar, the Heartstone pendant flared. What had been a dull, reassuring weight against her sternum was suddenly alive, radiating a feverish, throbbing heat that seeped through the wool of her sweater. The crimson gemstone glowed through the weave of her clothes, casting a faint red halo across her fingers as she touched it. Hel, she thought, the breath lodging in her throat. Or at least the threshold of it. Beside her, Isolde drifted past, her bare feet leaving no depression in the velvet moss. The half-Fae’s silver hair tumbled down to her waist like liquid ore, completely undisturbed by the heavy, windless atmosphere. Her pale lavender eyes swept across the canopy with the detachment of an owl perched over a slaughterhouse. Nyx came last, their silhouette tearing free from the seam where the portal had vanished. In the amber light of this place, the Shade looked less like an absence of light and more like spilled oil, iridescent violet ripples washing over their six-foot-two frame. When they solidified, their feet touched the moss without a sound, their faintly glowing eyes narrowing against the glare. The sky above them was wrong. There were no clouds, no sun, only an unbroken dome of warm, suffocating amber, like the world had been cast inside a block of fossilized resin. Where are we? Aurora asked, her Cardiff accent clipped, sharper than usual to compensate for the tremor in her knees. She kept her right hand clamped over the leaf-shaped hilt of the moonsilver dagger sheared into her belt. The Fae blade was an icy counterweight to the burning stone at her breast, sending needles of cold up her forearm. A garden where the fruit never rots, Isolde murmured, her voice musical, distant, and maddeningly calm. And the hunger never sleeps. Nyx drifted alongside them, their voice a dry whisper that felt as though it were scraping against the inside of Aurora’s ears. Belphegor’s terrace. Dymas. The prince builds high walls to keep the flavor in. Aurora straightened, rolling her shoulders back. She was twenty-five, her shoulder-length black hair damp with sweat already, but she forced her chin up. She thumbed the crescent-shaped scar on the inside of her left wrist, a nervous habit from childhood that had grounded her through worse things than bad air and amber skies. If this is an orchard, where are the trees? she asked. Look up, mortal, Nyx murmured. Aurora tilted her head back. What she had mistaken for cliff faces and granite overhangs were trunks. Colossal, gnarled boles of petrified timber rose hundreds of feet into the honey-colored haze, their bark split into ridges wide enough to park a lorry inside. From the boughs hung clusters of fruit the size of carriage wheels—pomegranates split open to reveal kernels that gleamed like polished rubies, and pale, translucent globes that drifted in the still air like bioluminescent jellyfish, tethered to the vines by threads of spun bronze. The smell was overwhelming. It was the scent of a hundred banquets left to simmer in midsummer heat: roasted almonds, sweet mead, black cherries, and a faint, sickly undertone of fat dripping into an open fire. It was intoxicating. Her stomach, which had been empty since she skipped breakfast at her flat, gave a vicious, audible pang. Her mouth watered so hard it hurt. Do not swallow, Isolde said softly, not looking back as she glided ahead. To taste the gift is to sign the lease. Aurora swallowed her own saliva with great difficulty. Her throat felt dry, her jaw aching from the sudden urge to reach for a low-hanging fig that dripped golden syrup onto the dirt five paces away. She tore her gaze away from the fruit and forced her focus to the ground. The path beneath the violet moss was made of crushed bone and caramelized sugar, packed hard under centuries of unseen feet. Terraces stepped down into a valley so vast it defied perspective. Miles below them, ribbons of emerald vineyards wound around colossal pavilions fashioned from polished white stone and copper. Distant plumes of fragrant steam rose from what looked like sprawling open-air kitchens, and every few seconds, the faint, syncopated chime of silver bells carried up on the stagnant draft. Contracted souls, Aurora noted aloud, watching tiny, frantic shapes moving among the pavilions below. Yu-Fei had once warned her, half in jest, about chefs who disappeared from London kitchens without a trace, lured by the promise of flavors that mortals couldn't imagine. They sought mastery, Nyx said, their form wavering into a thin, smoky tendril that coiled around a bronze trellis before snapping back to humanoid shape. They found an eternity of prep work. Prince Belphegor’s appetites are... broad. Aurora picked her way down the terraced slope, careful not to brush against the hanging leaves. Up close, the foliage was alarming. The broad leaves were edged in tiny, serrated teeth that twitched when her shadow fell across them. A cluster of pale berries shuddered as she stepped past, their skins glistening with a thin dew that smelled unmistakably of fermented cider. The Heartstone throbbed against her ribs, keeping time with her rapid pulse. It wasn't just hot; it was humming. The silver chain vibrated against the skin of her neck, a warning bell that Hel's gravity was pulling at it. She reached up, closing her fist around the stone, letting the heat bite into her palm to drive away the dizzying, decadent fog trying to settle in her brain. Isolde paused at the edge of a tiered fountain. The basin was carved from a single slab of veined green marble, but the liquid trickling from the stone spouts wasn't water. It was clear, pale gold, and bubbled with tiny, lazy effervescence that released the scent of crushed mint and elderflower. The Fae woman leaned over the lip. Her silver hair grazed the surface without causing a ripple. Her lavender eyes reflected the amber sky, utterly vacant yet profoundly attentive. We are expected, Isolde whispered. The table is laid, though the chairs are not yet pulled. Did you tell someone we were coming? Aurora demanded, halting two steps behind her. The truth is a mirror, Aurora Carter, Isolde said, turning her head with an eerie, deliberate slowness. It reflects what stands before it. I brought no news, but the soil here is very gossipy. It drinks our tread. Aurora looked down at her heavy boots. Where she had stepped, the violet moss had darkened to the color of dried blood, weeping a sticky, sweet sap that clung to the rubber soles. Isolde, of course, left nothing—the moss sprang back untouched beneath her weightless glide. But Aurora and the shifting void of Nyx were leaving an unmistakable trail of crushed sugar and bruised earth. We need to keep moving, Rory said, her voice flattening into the brisk, pragmatic register she used when a delivery went wrong in an alley off Shoreditch. Standing here admiring the produce is going to get us served for dinner. Nyx let out a sound that was half a rustle of dry leaves and half a chuckle. Sharp little mortal. But look closer, girl. Your shadow is already eating. Aurora froze. She looked down at the pale caramel stone beside her feet. Under the amber dome, her shadow lay sharp and distinct—except where it touched the edge of the vine-wrapped trellis. There, the outline of her silhouette wasn't flat. It was stretching, pulling toward the petrified roots, thin dark tendrils of her own outline reaching out, straining to lap at the fallen drops of golden syrup that pooled on the stone. The hair on the back of her neck stood up. She drew the moonsilver blade from her belt in a single, fluid motion. The dagger hissed as it cleared the scabbard, the metal giving off a faint, frost-white vapor in the thick heat. The moment the cold edge swept through the air, the creeping shadows snapped back to her boots like startled snakes. The hanging leaves recoiled, curling into defensive fists, and the heavy smell of roasted spices momentarily gave way to the clean, biting tang of winter pine. The cold blade cuts both ways, Isolde remarked, watching the dagger with faint amusement. It freezes the hunger, but it alerts the hearth. Down in the valley, across the terraces of vines and glistening fruit, one of the great pavilions fell silent. The silver bells stopped chiming. From somewhere deep within the ancient, swollen groves, a low, resonant gong echoed out across the amber expanse, vibrating through the soles of Aurora's boots and settling straight into her bones. Move, Aurora said, her grip tightening on the freezing hilt. Now.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
83.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1561
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"completely"
2"softly"
3"utterly"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1561
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"velvet"
count2
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"pang"
count1
7
word"wavering"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count2
9
word"throbbed"
count1
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"marble"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"rhythmic"
2"pulse"
3"weight"
4"whisper"
5"stomach"
6"pang"
7"wavering"
8"glistening"
9"throbbed"
10"vibrated"
11"marble"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences109
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1558
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions8
matches
0"A garden where the fruit never rots, Isolde murmured, her voice musical, distant, and maddeningly calm."
1"Look up, mortal, Nyx murmured."
2"Do not swallow, Isolde said softly, not looking back as she glided ahead."
3"They sought mastery, Nyx said, their form wavering into a thin, smoky tendril that coiled around a bronze trellis before…"
4"We are expected, Isolde whispered."
5"The truth is a mirror, Aurora Carter, Isolde said, turning her head with an eerie, deliberate slowness."
6"We need to keep moving, Rory said, her voice flattening into the brisk, pragmatic register she used when a delivery went…"
7"Move, Aurora said, her grip tightening on the freezing hilt."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1558
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.03
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora16
Veil1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Isolde8
Shade1
Cardiff1
Fae3
Nyx6
London1
Belphegor2
Hel2
Carter1
Rory1
Shoreditch1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Shade"
4"Fae"
5"Nyx"
6"Belphegor"
7"Hel"
8"Carter"
9"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore0.987
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like sprawling open-air kitchens,"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1558
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean39.95
std20.61
cv0.516
sampleLengths
033
148
231
355
416
552
663
732
859
921
1035
1153
1211
135
1487
1564
1622
1750
1880
1942
2037
2162
2268
2351
2429
2516
2614
2738
2865
2940
3029
3113
3259
3323
3466
3523
3624
3731
3811
89.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences109
matches
0"being torn"
1"was gone"
2"was made"
3"were edged"
4"was carved"
46.15% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs260
matches
0"were scraping"
1"was humming"
2"was pulling"
3"were coming"
4"were leaving"
5"was stretching"
38.01% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences109
ratio0.037
matches
0"From the boughs hung clusters of fruit the size of carriage wheels—pomegranates split open to reveal kernels that gleamed like polished rubies, and pale, translucent globes that drifted in the still air like bioluminescent jellyfish, tethered to the vines by threads of spun bronze."
1"It wasn't just hot; it was humming."
2"Isolde, of course, left nothing—the moss sprang back untouched beneath her weightless glide."
3"Under the amber dome, her shadow lay sharp and distinct—except where it touched the edge of the vine-wrapped trellis."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1574
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"faint, frost-white vapor"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.026683608640406607
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.00698856416772554
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean14.29
std8.78
cv0.614
sampleLengths
011
122
214
321
413
57
624
77
826
922
109
117
1215
1319
1418
1515
1629
1719
186
1926
203
2117
2218
2321
2416
255
2622
272
281
2910
306
3117
3230
339
342
355
365
3712
3826
3944
404
4132
423
4318
447
4513
469
478
4827
4915
66.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.44036697247706424
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences103
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences103
matches
0"It settled on Aurora’s tongue"
1"She stumbled forward, her boots"
2"Her pale lavender eyes swept"
3"She kept her right hand"
4"She was twenty-five, her shoulder-length"
5"She thumbed the crescent-shaped scar"
6"It was the scent of"
7"It was intoxicating."
8"Her stomach, which had been"
9"Her mouth watered so hard"
10"Her throat felt dry, her"
11"She tore her gaze away"
12"They sought mastery, Nyx said,"
13"They found an eternity of"
14"It wasn't just hot; it"
15"She reached up, closing her"
16"It was clear, pale gold,"
17"Her silver hair grazed the"
18"Her lavender eyes reflected the"
19"We are expected, Isolde whispered."
ratio0.282
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences103
matches
0"The air on the other"
1"It settled on Aurora’s tongue"
2"She stumbled forward, her boots"
3"The cold mist of Richmond"
4"Aurora caught herself against a"
5"The crimson gemstone glowed through"
6"Hel, she thought, the breath"
7"The half-Fae’s silver hair tumbled"
8"Her pale lavender eyes swept"
9"Nyx came last, their silhouette"
10"The sky above them was"
11"Aurora asked, her Cardiff accent"
12"She kept her right hand"
13"The Fae blade was an"
14"A garden where the fruit"
15"Nyx drifted alongside them, their"
16"The prince builds high walls"
17"Aurora straightened, rolling her shoulders"
18"She was twenty-five, her shoulder-length"
19"She thumbed the crescent-shaped scar"
ratio0.699
97.09% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"If this is an orchard,"
1"To taste the gift is"
ratio0.019
18.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Through the thin leather of her glove, the wood felt warm, coursing with a sluggish, rhythmic pulse that made her yank her hand away."
1"What had been a dull, reassuring weight against her sternum was suddenly alive, radiating a feverish, throbbing heat that seeped through the wool of her sweater…"
2"Nyx drifted alongside them, their voice a dry whisper that felt as though it were scraping against the inside of Aurora’s ears."
3"She thumbed the crescent-shaped scar on the inside of her left wrist, a nervous habit from childhood that had grounded her through worse things than bad air and…"
4"From the boughs hung clusters of fruit the size of carriage wheels—pomegranates split open to reveal kernels that gleamed like polished rubies, and pale, transl…"
5"Her stomach, which had been empty since she skipped breakfast at her flat, gave a vicious, audible pang."
6"They sought mastery, Nyx said, their form wavering into a thin, smoky tendril that coiled around a bronze trellis before snapping back to humanoid shape."
7"A cluster of pale berries shuddered as she stepped past, their skins glistening with a thin dew that smelled unmistakably of fermented cider."
8"It was clear, pale gold, and bubbled with tiny, lazy effervescence that released the scent of crushed mint and elderflower."
9"Where she had stepped, the violet moss had darkened to the color of dried blood, weeping a sticky, sweet sap that clung to the rubber soles."
10"We need to keep moving, Rory said, her voice flattening into the brisk, pragmatic register she used when a delivery went wrong in an alley off Shoreditch."
11"It was stretching, pulling toward the petrified roots, thin dark tendrils of her own outline reaching out, straining to lap at the fallen drops of golden syrup …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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82.1725%