Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HHBGAQWDWWD72SJDT8311F

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory caught the falling highball glass inches from the floorboards, cold stout splashing across her knuckles. She set the thick glass on the zinc draining board, wiped her hand on a dry bar rag, and met the eyes of the customer standing by the coat rack. The woman wore an expensive long dark grey Welsh wool overcoat. A cream silk scarf hid her throat, perfectly tucked beneath a chin held too high. Her blonde hair fell in a razor-sharp bob, pale and severe under the amber sconces. Three years melted off the room. The last time Rory saw Carys Hughes, they were sitting on a wet kerb in Cathays at three in the morning, Carys wearing torn fishnets and smeared kohl, screaming Welsh profanities at a speeding police car while dividing a bag of soggy chips. That girl had grease on her thumbs and fire in her spit. This creature looked like she billed by the quarter-hour. Behind the bar, Silas shifted his weight. His left knee clicked, a dull snap of bone and old cartilage. Hazel eyes narrowed beneath grey-streaked auburn brows, taking in the cut of the woman's coat, the stiffness in her spine, the umbrella dripping puddles onto his sawdust floor. His silver signet ring tapped once against the brass beer tap. A quiet question. Rory gave a minute shake of her head. Silas stepped back into the shadow of the gantry, his limp dragging slightly, hands vanishing into the pockets of his dark cardigan. "Dry white," Carys said. The old Cardiff lilt had vanished, replaced by the clipped, flattened vowels of London chancery courts. "Whatever open bottle won't poison me." Rory pulled a squat tumbler from the rack. "You came to the wrong borough for clean vintage." Carys reached for the leather strap of her designer handbag, her fingers freezing mid-pull. Her gaze dropped from Rory's shoulder-length black hair to the crescent-shaped pale scar curving across her left wrist. "Rory?" "Carter works." "Jesus Christ." "Three pounds fifty for the house plonk." Carys did not move toward the stool. Her knuckles tightened around the Italian calfskin leather of her bag until the seams groaned. The air between them tasted of stale ale, wet wool, and the faint, sweet grease of plum sauce clinging to Rory's sleeves from the evening run for the Golden Empress. "Your father held a service," Carys whispered. "Dad always preferred an audience." "Two hundred people packed into Llandaff Cathedral. Your mother couldn't stand up. She had to be carried to the car." "She always had weak ankles." "We thought you were in the Taff, Rory. We thought someone found you in the mud under the pier." "Evidently not." Rory set the tumbler on the counter. The cheap liquid sloshed, oily and yellow under the low lights. Silas lingered five paces away, polishing a pint glass with a pristine linen cloth, his gaze fixed on the street through the fogged front window. The green neon sign outside cast sick emerald bands across the old admiralty charts tacked to the walls. "You look different," Carys said. "I sleep better." "You look half-starved. You have ink under your fingernails." "Delivery dockets," Rory said. "Pays the rent upstairs. Doesn't require Latin." Carys finally stepped forward, the heels of her leather boots clicking against the timber. She picked up the tumbler, studied the rim for lipstick, and took a small sip. Her throat jerked on the swallow. She set the glass down with a precise, deliberate clink on the dark oak surface. "I passed the bar exams," Carys said. "I read about it in the Western Mail. Page four." "I took pupillage at Crown Office Row." "A handsome little old Georgian office," Rory remarked, leaning against the beer taps, crossing her arms over her chest. "Very respectable. Very dull." "It pays for a flat in Kensington." "It pays for silence, you mean." Carys flinched. The mask cracked, just enough to show the stubborn, terrified girl from Cathays underneath the foundation and pearl earrings. She rubbed her right thumb over the third finger of her left hand, a nervous tick-tock motion she had possessed since their first year tort law tutorials. "He tore your room apart, Rory. After you vanished from the flat. He broke every dish your grandmother gave you. He smashed the mirror with a golf club." "Evan always lacked finesse." "He came to my chambers." Rory kept her posture rigid, though the muscle along her jaw locked tight. "That was two years ago." "He came last Tuesday." Silence dropped over the bar like lead shot. The grandfather clock in the corner chimed the quarter-hour, a dull metallic ring echoing off the framed black-and-white photos of forgotten dead men. "Evan doesn't know where London begins or ends," Rory said. "He gets nosebleeds past Reading." "He hired someone." Carys pulled a manicured hand from her pocket, sliding a small cream envelope across the counter. The paper carried the faint scent of expensive sandalwood soap. "He found the council tax records from your first bedsit in Lewisham. Then he found the company filings for the Chinese place on Gerrard Street." Rory looked at the envelope. She did not touch it. "And you came to warn me out of sisterly love?" "I came because I couldn't bear the thought of him finishing it." "You came because you're terrified he will drag you down with him when he does." Rory leaned in, her bright blue eyes fixing the woman to the stool. "You're a tenant at his father's firm now. Aren't you? Senior partner's pet. If Evan ends up in a cell at Wandsworth, your name is on the front page of the legal gazette." Carys looked down at her polished fingernails. "You always were a cruel bastard, Rory." "I survived Evan. You stayed for the retainers." "I had debts!" "We both had debts." Rory tapped the crescent scar on her wrist against the timber. "Mine just cost more flesh." Silas stopped wiping his glass. His hazel eyes moved to the front door. Through the emerald glare of the neon sign, a pair of headlights swept across the glass, throwing long, predatory shadows over the floorboards. A dark saloon car had pulled up onto the kerb, its engine idling with a wet, throaty rumble. Carys froze, the colour draining entirely from her powdered cheeks. "Carys," Rory said softly. "I had to take the train," Carys whispered. The clipped London vowels splintered, Cardiff bleeding through the cracks. "He followed my cab from Paddington. I swear on my mother's life, Rory, I thought I lost him at the tube station. I went down into the underground. I took three different lines." "You idiot," Rory said, the word cold and flat. "You complete bloody amateur." Outside, two car doors slammed shut in unison. The brass bell above the tavern door jangled once, a sharp metallic strike that cut the room open. Silas dropped the linen cloth, his right hand slipping smoothly into the shelf beneath the till. Two heavy men in rain-soaked trench coats filled the threshold, the stench of wet wool and London rain rushing in behind them, their eyes locking onto the blonde hair at the bar before drifting directly to Rory.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.271
leniency0.542
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.042
79.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1200
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"very"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1200
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"pristine"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"weight"
2"lilt"
3"pristine"
4"silence"
5"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1200
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
45.83% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount816
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.08
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Welsh2
Rory17
Carys14
Hughes1
Cathays2
Silas5
Cardiff2
London3
Italian1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carys"
2"Hughes"
3"Silas"
places
0"Cathays"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore0.458
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like she billed by the quarter-hou"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1200
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean21.05
std19.48
cv0.925
sampleLengths
016
130
241
36
455
59
661
730
826
917
1032
111
122
132
147
1552
167
175
1820
195
2019
212
2261
235
243
259
2611
2750
287
2910
307
3123
327
336
3448
3528
364
375
3818
394
4031
4115
4254
4320
4412
4561
4614
478
483
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs120
matches
0"were sitting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences99
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount827
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"beneath grey-streaked auburn"
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.020556227327690448
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009673518742442563
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean12.12
std8.76
cv0.723
sampleLengths
016
130
211
315
415
56
643
712
89
97
1012
1128
1211
133
148
1522
164
1716
186
198
209
2114
2218
231
242
252
267
277
2815
2930
307
315
3220
335
3419
352
367
3711
3825
3918
405
413
429
434
447
4514
4615
476
4815
497
50.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35353535353535354
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners35
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences56
matches
0"She set the thick glass"
1"Her blonde hair fell in"
2"His left knee clicked, a"
3"His silver signet ring tapped"
4"Her gaze dropped from Rory's"
5"Her knuckles tightened around the"
6"She picked up the tumbler,"
7"Her throat jerked on the"
8"She set the glass down"
9"She rubbed her right thumb"
10"She did not touch it."
11"His hazel eyes moved to"
ratio0.214
4.64% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences56
matches
0"Rory caught the falling highball"
1"She set the thick glass"
2"The woman wore an expensive"
3"A cream silk scarf hid"
4"Her blonde hair fell in"
5"The last time Rory saw"
6"That girl had grease on"
7"This creature looked like she"
8"His left knee clicked, a"
9"Hazel eyes narrowed beneath grey-streaked"
10"His silver signet ring tapped"
11"A quiet question."
12"Rory gave a minute shake"
13"Silas stepped back into the"
14"The old Cardiff lilt had"
15"Rory pulled a squat tumbler"
16"Carys reached for the leather"
17"Her gaze dropped from Rory's"
18"Carys did not move toward"
19"Her knuckles tightened around the"
ratio0.911
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The brass bell above the tavern door jangled once, a sharp metallic strike that cut the room open."
1"Two heavy men in rain-soaked trench coats filled the threshold, the stench of wet wool and London rain rushing in behind them, their eyes locking onto the blond…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Carys whispered (whisper)"
1"Carys whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.188
leniency0.375
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.083
84.8439%