Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HJ2AM1BCJS0539P53NZ5EJ

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Duration:
24.4s
Cost:
$0.021992
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory drove the steel pick into the ice block with enough force to splinter the wooden cutting board beneath it. Slivers of ice sprayed across the zinc counter, skittering against the sleeve of the woman on stool three. The woman did not flinch. She smoothed the cuff of her expensive beige English wool coat, her fingers trembling just enough to rattle the silver charms against her wrist. Eva had never flinched at broken things, only at poor posture. "You missed the glass," Eva said. Rory dropped the pick. The metal clattered against the drainage grate with a hollow ring. "Soho is full of better gin joints," Rory said. "None of them employ girls from Cardiff who vanished into thin air." "Nobody vanishes in London. We just stop looking over our shoulders." Eva leaned forward. The dim overhead bulb caught the delicate gold chain around her neck, a graduation gift from Brendan Carter that Rory recognized instantly. Her father had always possessed a weakness for goddaughters who actually finished their law degrees. "Your father still leaves the porch light on," Eva said. "My father should conserve electricity." "He thinks you died in the river, Rory. Or worse." "Living in England is hardly worse than death." Eva reached across the zinc, her manicured nail tapping the wood near Rory's hand. Rory did not pull away, but her muscles locked. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the amber light, pale and rigid against her olive skin. "Look at you," Eva whispered. "Black hair. Dark clothes. You smell like sesame oil and stale draft beer." "I smell like an honest shift." "You smell like someone hiding." Across the narrow room, floorboards creaked under a measured stride. Silas Blackwood stepped from the shadow of the tall mahogany bookshelf, his left knee clicking faintly with every alternate step. He wiped down a heavy crystal tumbler with a spotless white linen cloth, his hazel eyes settling on Eva with the calm scrutiny of an old hawk. The silver signet ring on his right hand gleamed under the green neon sign humming outside the front window. He did not speak. He merely positioned himself at the end of the bar, leaning his six-foot frame against the rail, close enough to listen, far enough to ignore. Eva tracked the older man's movement, her eyes narrowing. "Charming company," Eva said. "Does your landlord know you work a second job delivering noodles on a battered moped?" "Mr Blackwood knows precisely what he needs to know." "He carries himself like an officer." "He pours liquor," Rory said. "Drink yours, or leave." "I took three trains to get here." "Paddington has trains departing every twenty minutes. Catch the next one." "Evan is out." The name dropped like lead onto the counter. Rory kept her breathing steady, but the room seemed to shrink, the walls closing in until the old maps and black-and-white portraits blurred into streaks of grey. Her left wrist throbbed with a phantom ache, cold and sharp. "The restraining order expired," Eva said. "Restraining orders are paper." "He asked about you. At the club. At the firm. He bought drinks for the junior clerks until someone gave him an address." "I do not have an address." "You had a forwarding depot in Shoreditch. The one you used for your post." Rory stared at her childhood friend. The silence between them stretched, thick with the scent of gin, lemon peel, and old grease. Eva had always possessed that dangerous, soft-spoken determination, the sort that made people confess sins in drawing rooms over Earl Grey tea. "You came to warn me," Rory said. "I came to fetch you." "I am not a stray terrier, Eva." "You are living in a hole above a dive bar. You threw away three years of university. Your mother cries every Sunday over roast beef, and you are playing at being invisible." "Evan broke three of my ribs on the kitchen tile while you were at a dinner party in Penarth," Rory said, her voice flat, devoid of theatrical fury. "You told me to be patient with him. You told me he was under stress from the chambers." Eva flinched then. A sharp, red blush climbed her neck, mottling the pale skin above her pearl collar. "I did not know the extent of it," Eva said. "You knew." "I gave you the train fare to leave Cardiff!" "Because you wanted the blood off your rug," Rory said. Silas set the crystal tumbler down onto the counter. The heavy base hit the surface with a decisive thud that echoed off the high ceiling. "Closing time approaches, ladies," Silas said. His voice rumbled low and gravelly, rich with an authority that brooked no argument. "The taps run dry in five minutes." Eva did not look at him. Her eyes remained locked on Rory, wide and glossy with unshed tears. "Come back with me tonight," Eva pleaded, her voice dropping into a desperate cadence. "My brother has an empty cottage near Brecon. Nobody knows it exists. Evan will never look in the hills. We can start over." "I have already started." "As what? A barmaid? A courier?" "As someone who sleeps with both eyes shut." Eva laughed, a dry, cracked sound that held no humour. She reached into her leather handbag, her fingers digging through receipts, cosmetics, and a leather-bound diary before pulling out a small brass key. She slapped it onto the zinc between them. "He followed me to Newport," Eva said. The ice melted in the steel well, water trickling through the drain with a rhythmic drip. "What did you say?" Rory asked. "He followed my car to the station. I saw him on platform four." "Eva." "I lost him at Swindon. I swear I lost him at Swindon. I changed carriages, I sat with a family, I did not look back." Silas moved. The limp vanished under the sudden speed of a man half his age. He reached the heavy oak entrance, his hand parting the velvet curtain just enough to peer into the rain-slick Soho alleyway. A black saloon car idled beneath the green neon glare of the sign, its headlights dark, the exhaust pluming white into the damp air. "Rory," Silas said quietly. "He was behind you," Rory said, her gaze fixed on the brass key. "He was two carriages back," Eva whispered. "He smiled at me when the train pulled into Paddington. He carried a bouquet of white lilies." The latch on the front door rattled. Silas did not hesitate. His right hand dipped under the dark wood of the counter, coming back up with a short-barrelled shotgun. He racked the slide with a clean, brutal mechanical snap that filled the room. The front door burst inward, shattering the brass chain against the frame.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.346
leniency0.692
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.038
95.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1132
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1132
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"crystal"
count2
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"mechanical"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"crystal"
2"throbbed"
3"silence"
4"echoed"
5"rhythmic"
6"velvet"
7"mechanical"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1132
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
18.42% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount684
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.63
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
English1
Rory15
Eva18
Brendan1
Carter1
Blackwood1
Earl1
Grey1
Silas6
Soho1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Brendan"
3"Carter"
4"Blackwood"
5"Earl"
6"Grey"
7"Silas"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.184
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1132
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean17.15
std16.34
cv0.953
sampleLengths
020
118
240
36
415
59
612
711
840
910
105
1110
128
1342
1418
156
165
17105
189
1919
209
216
229
237
2411
253
268
2738
286
294
3023
316
3214
3344
347
355
367
3732
3846
3918
4010
412
429
4310
4425
4527
4618
4737
484
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs107
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences98
ratio0
matches(empty)
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount692
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"dangerous, soft-spoken determination,"
2"clean, brutal mechanical snap"
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02745664739884393
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010115606936416185
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean11.55
std7.05
cv0.61
sampleLengths
020
118
25
324
411
56
64
711
89
912
1011
113
1222
1315
1410
155
1610
178
1814
199
2019
215
2213
236
245
2510
2620
2727
2819
294
3025
319
324
3315
349
356
365
374
387
3911
403
418
4227
4311
446
454
4623
476
4814
496
48.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.336734693877551
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences49
matches
0"She smoothed the cuff of"
1"Her father had always possessed"
2"He wiped down a heavy"
3"He did not speak."
4"He merely positioned himself at"
5"Her left wrist throbbed with"
6"His voice rumbled low and"
7"Her eyes remained locked on"
8"She reached into her leather"
9"She slapped it onto the"
10"He reached the heavy oak"
11"His right hand dipped under"
12"He racked the slide with"
ratio0.265
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences49
matches
0"Rory drove the steel pick"
1"Slivers of ice sprayed across"
2"The woman did not flinch."
3"She smoothed the cuff of"
4"Eva had never flinched at"
5"Rory dropped the pick."
6"The metal clattered against the"
7"Eva leaned forward."
8"The dim overhead bulb caught"
9"Her father had always possessed"
10"Eva reached across the zinc,"
11"Rory did not pull away,"
12"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
13"Silas Blackwood stepped from the"
14"He wiped down a heavy"
15"The silver signet ring on"
16"He did not speak."
17"He merely positioned himself at"
18"Eva tracked the older man's"
19"The name dropped like lead"
ratio0.98
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
73.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Eva had always possessed that dangerous, soft-spoken determination, the sort that made people confess sins in drawing rooms over Earl Grey tea."
1"She reached into her leather handbag, her fingers digging through receipts, cosmetics, and a leather-bound diary before pulling out a small brass key."
2"He racked the slide with a clean, brutal mechanical snap that filled the room."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Rory said, her voice flat, devoid of theatrical fury"
1"Eva pleaded, her voice dropping into a desperate cadence"
92.31% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Eva pleaded (plead)"
2"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.346
leniency0.692
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.115
81.3572%