Run: 2026-09-03-01M1K4WE9YVZ5B5YYYQQ3CZ585

Run Details

Duration:
2m 9s
Cost:
$0.023483
Provider:
Meta

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory ducked under the low branch and stopped breathing for a second. Richmond Park had gone wrong around her. Not in a big way. The path was still there, churned mud and wet leaves under her trainers, the evening damp of early autumn still in her nose. But the oaks ahead were too big. That was the only word for them. Trunks as wide as buses, bark furrowed deep enough to fit her fist into, roots shouldering up out of the ground like knuckles. They stood in a loose circle, seven of them, leaning inward, and between the two largest the air looked bruised. Nyx was already there, waiting. In solid form they stood a full head taller than her, a humanoid cutout of night that drank the grey daylight. Their edges would not stay still. If Rory looked straight at them she saw shoulders, the suggestion of a coat, long fingers. If she looked sideways they smeared. "That," Rory said, and pushed her straight black hair back behind her ears, "is not a normal arrangement of trees." A whisper moved, though the leaves above did not. "No." Nyx's voice never came from quite the right direction. It brushed the back of her neck like wind through a keyhole. They tilted their head toward the space between the oaks. Their eyes opened in the dark of their face, two faint violet coals. "You feel it?" Rory stepped closer. She felt stupid for hesitating and did it anyway, testing the air with her palm the way she'd test bathwater. Three inches from the gap, the hairs on her forearm stood up. A low static prickled across the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, white and thin from a fall off a Cardiff garden wall when she was nine. The pendant under her jacket shifted. It was a thumbnail-sized stone, deep crimson on a silver chain, and it held a faint inner glow even through the fabric, warming nothing. Just there. "I feel something," she said. She was cool-headed on delivery runs through estates at midnight, cool-headed when her ex had shouted, but her pulse was doing something unprofessional now. "What do you see?" "Shimmer." Nyx lifted a shadowed hand. The darkness of their fingers thinned at the tips, going incorporeal, threading into the air and disappearing. "Like heat off pavement. The skin of the world pulled tight." The Veil. Rory had heard the word twice now and hated how much sense it made. A barrier. And here, between the oaks, it was worn thin enough for even her to feel with her human hands. Beyond the gap, the light was different. That was what unsettled her most. In the park it was nearly seven, sky going pewter. Through the bruised air she saw gold. She glanced at Nyx. "Together, then?" "Stay close to me," the whisper said. "Do not eat anything until she offers it." "Comforting." Rory stepped through. Cold washed up her legs first, then heat kissed her face, and then the ground tipped — not really, but her inner ear insisted it had. She stumbled. Nyx caught her elbow with a hand that was solid one instant and smoke the next, steadying her without quite touching bone. The smell hit her after. Honeysuckle and crushed green stems and wet earth after rain. And underneath, something wilder, like ozone before lightning. They were inside. The circle of oaks closed behind them, bark now moss-soft and strung with lichen that glowed a pale, drowned green. No path. No London hum. No planes. The city had been muted as if someone had pressed a hand over its mouth. In its place came small sounds made enormous: a bee working close to her ear, water dripping somewhere with metronomic patience, leaves turning over in a wind she could not feel on her skin. Light filtered down in shafts thick with pollen. It should have been autumn. It was not. Wildflowers bloomed everywhere, a reckless profusion that made her delivery-bag eyes want to inventory them — buttercups and red campion and orchids she had no name for, blue as a gas flame, opening right through the moss. They brushed her ankles. Pollen dusted her black jeans gold. "Jesus," she breathed. "Not here," Nyx murmured, amused and uneasy at once. They had gone less solid, their outline fraying at the shoulders, shadow bleeding into the greater shadows under the trees. This place liked them less, or more. Rory couldn't tell. Their violet gaze swept the clearing, restless. "Time is — loose. Do not trust your phone." She pulled it out anyway. The screen showed 18:42, then 18:41, then a string of nonsense characters, then 18:42 again. She shoved it back in her pocket. Her out-of-the-box thinking, the thing that had gotten her through pre-law tutorials she hated and out of Evan's flat with her duffel intact, supplied only this: keep walking. Standing still in a fairy tale was how you got rooted. They moved deeper. The ground gave softly under her trainers, moss and flowers springing back. Nyx made no sound at all. Rory looked down without meaning to and realized she could see the print of her own soles, dark dents in the dew, and beside them — nothing. Where Nyx walked, the dew lay unbroken, the grass unbent. Even their shadow had no shadow here. The unease crawled up her spine and settled at the base of her skull. "Talk to me," she said quietly. "Aldric — I mean. You’ve been through thin places before." Nyx was quiet long enough that she thought they wouldn't answer. The whisper came at last, thinner. "In sixteen forty-three I reached for something through a circle of my own making. I was impatient. The dark between realms is cold, Rory Carter. This is not that dark. This is — old green. It watches." As if to prove it, the trees opened. The clearing was not large, perhaps the size of Silas's bar upstairs and down, but Rory's eyes could not find its edges properly. Mist hung at knee height, curling around stones and roots. In the center, a pool of black water reflected a sky she could not see when she looked up. Around it, more wildflowers, white this time, their petals open despite the failing light outside which did not, here, fail. And by the water stood a woman. She had not been there a blink before. Rory was sure of it. One moment, mist; the next, a figure with silver hair to her waist, loose and moving though the air was still. Her face was ageless in the way that made Rory's brain skip — neither young nor old, skin smooth as river stone, cheekbones sharp. Her eyes, when they lifted to Rory, were pale lavender, startling and calm. "Rory," Nyx breathed, a warning and an introduction. "I know," Rory said. Her mouth had gone dry. "Isolde Varga." The woman smiled. She wore something grey and green that might have been woven leaves or might have been silk; it shifted when Rory tried to focus. She stepped around the pool toward them, barefoot over sharp stones and wet moss, and where she passed the dew remained perfect. She left no footprints at all. "You came the long way round, little crow," Isolde said. Her voice was low and musical, each word rounded. "Through thorn and shadow, with yesterday in your pocket and tomorrow chewing the string. It is always the lost ones who find the grove first." Rory glanced at Nyx. Little crow? She decided not to ask. "We didn't mean to intrude. The oaks —" "All doors intrude," Isolde said pleasantly. "That is their nature. And all guests are thieves until they are named. What will you trade for naming, shadow-borne and starling-eyed?" Starling-eyed. Rory caught her own reflection in the black pool as she shifted — her bright blue eyes wide, her face pale under her dark fringe — and looked away quickly. Riddles. Right. Eva had warned her the seer spoke sideways. "We need help," Rory said, keeping her voice level. Cool-headed. Intelligent. She could do direct even if Isolde couldn't. "Something's tearing through. People are getting hurt. Nyx says the barrier's thin." "The Veil wears gauze in winter," Isolde said, circling the pool. Her silver hair caught the strange gold light and threw it back white. "What was sealed with summer oaths loosens when the nights grow teeth. You feel the draft, then? Even you, with your mortal skin and mortal clocks?" "The shimmer between the oaks," Rory said. "I felt static. On my scar." "Scars remember openings." Isolde stopped in front of her, close enough that Rory could smell rain on stone. Those lavender eyes searched her face with a weight that felt like being read aloud. "You carry a coal from the glutton's garden around your neck, and you do not know who hung it there. You walk with a night that was once a man. You ask the way forward while standing backward in the stream." Rory's hand went instinctively to the pendant. The crimson stone pulsed once, faintly warm, as if acknowledging its description. Dymas, she thought. Excess and feasts and helbound souls in kitchens. She didn't know how she knew the word would fit, only that it sat heavy as the stone itself. An unknown benefactor, Eva had said. Keep it close. "I don't know who gave it to me," she admitted. "It just — arrived. If you know what it is —" "I know what all things are when they are here," Isolde said, which was not an answer and was somehow true. She could not lie, Rory remembered. That didn't mean she would explain. "A heart remembers beating. A stone remembers fire. Yours remembers hunger. Keep it hidden when the amber sky calls, little crow, lest the hungry remember you." A chill moved through Rory that had nothing to do with temperature. Nyx drifted closer, their form tightening again into something more solid, more protective. "Seer," they whispered, and the wildflowers near their feet bowed away from the cold of them. "Will you give her counsel, or only circles?" Isolde laughed, a sound like water over pebbles. "Both, Nightwhisper. Both. Counsel is a circle if you walk it long enough." She turned away to the edge of the pool where a flat stone lay half-submerged, and from beneath the white flowers she drew a slender dagger. Rory's breath caught. It was leaf-shaped, narrow to a wicked point, the metal a pale silver that seemed to drink the gold light and return moonlight. Even from three feet away she felt the cold coming off it. In the dim of the grove it held a faint luminescence, like the edge of the moon through cloud. Isolde held it out hilt-first. "For the crow who walks into thorns. Moonsilver bites what iron cannot. It will open what is shut, if you are willing to bleed a little for the opening. Wards. Lies made solid. Demon-hide." Rory hesitated. "You're giving this to me?" "A gift is a debt with its face covered," Isolde said. "Take it, and owe the grove a story when you have survived to tell one." That sounded fair enough to be dangerous. Rory took it. The hilt was wrapped in something like bark-cloth, but the cold traveled straight through her palm up into her wrist, numbing the old scar. The blade was lighter than it should have been. Her reflection warped along its length, her blue eyes stretched thin. "Thank you," she said, and meant it. She slipped the dagger carefully into her jacket beside the pendant, cold against heat, and shivered. Isolde was already retreating into mist, her form thinning at the edges in a way that reminded Rory horribly and wonderfully of Nyx. No footprints marked where she had stood. Only the flowers, still upright, still blooming out of season, as if no weight had ever pressed them. "Wait —" Rory stepped forward, moss sucking at her shoes. "How do we get back? How much time —" "An hour here is a blink there, or a lifetime," Isolde called, her voice now coming from everywhere, riddle to the last. "Walk out by the way you did not come in. Follow the shadow that casts you. And crow — do not eat the pomegranate when the fat prince offers it." Then she was gone. The pool lay black and still. The bee resumed its work. Somewhere far above, or below, London cleared its throat and remembered how to hum. Rory looked at Nyx. Nyx looked back with those faint violet eyes, solidifying by degrees into their tall, familiar dark. "Follow the shadow that casts you," Rory repeated. She tightened her grip on the cold hilt inside her jacket and felt the crimson stone beat once, slow as a heart, against her ribs. "Great. Love that for us." Behind them, the oaks waited, and the bruised air between them shivered faintly, ready to let them through — or not.
created_at"2026-09-03T08:06:37.639Z" 9/3/2026, 8:06:37 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Isolde said pleasantly [pleasantly]"
2"She turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.451
leniency0.902
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.118
90.75% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2163
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"softly"
2"quickly"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2163
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"churned"
count1
1
word"furrowed"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count3
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"unsettled"
count1
5
word"comforting"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"weight"
count2
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"churned"
1"furrowed"
2"whisper"
3"pulse"
4"unsettled"
5"comforting"
6"silk"
7"perfect"
8"weight"
9"pulsed"
10"chill"
11"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences162
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences190
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2175
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1682
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.66
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Park1
Rory28
Cardiff1
Veil1
Nyx15
London2
Evan1
Silas1
Starling-eyed1
Cool-headed1
Isolde11
Eva2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
4"Cool-headed"
5"Isolde"
6"Eva"
places
0"Park"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore0.668
windowScore0.333
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like being read aloud"
1"as if acknowledging its description"
2"silver that seemed to drink the gold light and return moonlight"
3"something like bark-cloth, but the cold trav"
62.07% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.379
wordCount2175
matches
0"not really, but her inner ear insisted it had"
1"not large, perhaps the size of Silas's bar upstairs and down, but Rory's eyes could not find its edges properly"
2"neither young nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences190
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean33.46
std23.81
cv0.712
sampleLengths
012
192
254
320
410
544
63
794
833
934
1037
1130
126
1315
141
153
1650
1723
183
1976
2063
213
2255
2366
243
2562
2614
2716
2854
298
3072
317
3271
338
3411
3555
3644
3719
3828
3941
4031
4150
4213
4374
4458
4521
4659
4712
4837
4947
94.43% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences162
matches
0"been muted"
1"got rooted"
2"been woven"
3"was wrapped"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs291
matches
0"was doing"
1"was already retreating"
22.56% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences190
ratio0.042
matches
0"Cold washed up her legs first, then heat kissed her face, and then the ground tipped — not really, but her inner ear insisted it had."
1"Wildflowers bloomed everywhere, a reckless profusion that made her delivery-bag eyes want to inventory them — buttercups and red campion and orchids she had no name for, blue as a gas flame, opening right through the moss."
2"Rory looked down without meaning to and realized she could see the print of her own soles, dark dents in the dew, and beside them — nothing."
3"One moment, mist; the next, a figure with silver hair to her waist, loose and moving though the air was still."
4"Her face was ageless in the way that made Rory's brain skip — neither young nor old, skin smooth as river stone, cheekbones sharp."
5"She wore something grey and green that might have been woven leaves or might have been silk; it shifted when Rory tried to focus."
6"Rory caught her own reflection in the black pool as she shifted — her bright blue eyes wide, her face pale under her dark fringe — and looked away quickly."
7"Behind them, the oaks waited, and the bruised air between them shivered faintly, ready to let them through — or not."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1649
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.03820497271073378
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007883565797453002
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences190
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences190
mean11.45
std8.65
cv0.756
sampleLengths
012
17
25
323
47
57
623
720
85
921
106
1116
126
1320
149
151
169
1712
1810
1913
203
213
2220
2312
2427
256
2624
272
285
2924
304
316
3217
3311
342
3514
362
3719
387
396
4010
417
424
432
447
458
461
473
4826
492
64.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.42105263157894735
totalSentences190
uniqueOpeners80
94.56% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences141
matches
0"Even their shadow had no"
1"Only the flowers, still upright,"
2"Then she was gone."
3"Somewhere far above, or below,"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences141
matches
0"They stood in a loose"
1"Their edges would not stay"
2"It brushed the back of"
3"They tilted their head toward"
4"Their eyes opened in the"
5"She felt stupid for hesitating"
6"It was a thumbnail-sized stone,"
7"She was cool-headed on delivery"
8"She glanced at Nyx."
9"They were inside."
10"It should have been autumn."
11"It was not."
12"They brushed her ankles."
13"They had gone less solid,"
14"Their violet gaze swept the"
15"She pulled it out anyway."
16"She shoved it back in"
17"Her out-of-the-box thinking, the thing"
18"They moved deeper."
19"she said quietly"
ratio0.284
69.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount110
totalSentences141
matches
0"Rory ducked under the low"
1"Richmond Park had gone wrong"
2"The path was still there,"
3"That was the only word"
4"Trunks as wide as buses,"
5"They stood in a loose"
6"Nyx was already there, waiting."
7"Their edges would not stay"
8"Rory said, and pushed her"
9"A whisper moved, though the"
10"Nyx's voice never came from"
11"It brushed the back of"
12"They tilted their head toward"
13"Their eyes opened in the"
14"Rory stepped closer."
15"She felt stupid for hesitating"
16"A low static prickled across"
17"The pendant under her jacket"
18"It was a thumbnail-sized stone,"
19"She was cool-headed on delivery"
ratio0.78
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences141
matches
0"If Rory looked straight at"
1"If she looked sideways they"
2"As if to prove it,"
3"Even from three feet away"
ratio0.028
27.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"In solid form they stood a full head taller than her, a humanoid cutout of night that drank the grey daylight."
1"Nyx caught her elbow with a hand that was solid one instant and smoke the next, steadying her without quite touching bone."
2"The circle of oaks closed behind them, bark now moss-soft and strung with lichen that glowed a pale, drowned green."
3"Wildflowers bloomed everywhere, a reckless profusion that made her delivery-bag eyes want to inventory them — buttercups and red campion and orchids she had no …"
4"They had gone less solid, their outline fraying at the shoulders, shadow bleeding into the greater shadows under the trees."
5"Her out-of-the-box thinking, the thing that had gotten her through pre-law tutorials she hated and out of Evan's flat with her duffel intact, supplied only this…"
6"Her face was ageless in the way that made Rory's brain skip — neither young nor old, skin smooth as river stone, cheekbones sharp."
7"The crimson stone pulsed once, faintly warm, as if acknowledging its description."
8"It was leaf-shaped, narrow to a wicked point, the metal a pale silver that seemed to drink the gold light and return moonlight."
9"Isolde was already retreating into mist, her form thinning at the edges in a way that reminded Rory horribly and wonderfully of Nyx."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
32.35% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
3"she admitted (admit)"
4"they whispered (whisper)"
5"Rory repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.392
leniency0.784
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.235
83.2546%