Run: 2026-09-03-01M1K9KYT4B5R4P4V24S2754VT

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The first thing she saw was the suit. The second was the watch, a thin gold sliver that had never survived a real weekend in Cardiff. He took the last stool at the bar without asking and set his elbows on the wood as if he owned it. "Rory Carter." The voice landed where the suit had not: familiar as a scar. She turned from the shelf and let her eyes trace the jaw, the haircut, the tidy knot of his tie. "Rhys Owen. You don't belong in this part of town." He laughed, and the sound was older, slower, but it was his. "I came in for a drink, and you're the third ghost I've seen this month." "Third?" "R. I saw someone on the tube who looked like Evan. It was a bald man selling toffee." His thumb moved over the rim of the glass. "You're the real one, though." She poured him a whiskey and put it down with perhaps too much care. Behind the quiet, a stack of damp glasses had been breathing. The bar coat her. "I heard you went into insurance," she said. "I took a law firm's risk practice. You're saying I sold out." "I'm not saying anything." "No, you're eyeing me like I've been mounted and placed behind glass." Rory looked at him properly. He was bigger...? No longer the boy who climbed fire escapes for the Old Arc because she asked, who played guitar in the street... Cold. He was thin in the shoulders now, grey at the temples. He had chosen a good single malt and he held it like a solution. "You used to wear a bracelet that rattled," she said. "They fired me. I became a man in a suit." "Don't." "Don't what?" "Bare." Her own voice surprised her. "You used to be the only one who said what, precisely." He looked at his glass in the green bubble of the bar. The Raven's Nest went on around them: the old maps on the wall, a photograph of a bridge in Prague, the low hum of rain—no, no rain. The hum of conversation at the far end of the counter. "Seven years and you still have the exact same scar," he said, pointing at her wrist where the little crescent lay pale. "I heal like a dog." He winced. A dog. The old joke. She had been too quick to pick it up again. "Tell me about Cardiff," she said. "What is there to say. The roads, the pavement under the bay. I can't— I tried to do the funeral in memory of my mother; she only needs a little faint." He stopped. "You ever go back?" "I can't." "I know." Their glasses went dumb together. Her elbow found the sticky wood on the counter, and for a moment the whole bar was just the two of them, the frost on the nap, the mute neon, and the years between them. "You don't remember the farm?" he said. "Which farmland." "Rusty Hill. The fire. You sent the tower the night that..." "Oh, God." "You swum the boy—" "I did not swim." "You went into the spill with your shoes off. You brought out his dog." "It bit me." "Your hair was smelling of campfire for a week, and you never complained." He raised his glass. "That's why I was such a waste." She sat back. "That was never me." "Wasn't it?" "Then I moved here, be some rings went out down." She rubbed at the scar. "You liked the girl you could protect. I would have cleaned her in her life." "You've no idea what I like." "I know what you wanted." He did not blink. The saying between them hummed. A laugh came from the tight little? No, from the back of the bar, where a man was checking his watch. The Raven's Nest had a fine coat of silence at this hour. "Now you're on your own," she said, and wanted to take it back. "I have seen mistakes," he said. "A foundation. It's a trend." "Let's discuss my problems," she said. "There is a " Let me. He held up a hand. "Wait." He had taken something from the inner pocket, a folded envelope. The cheap paper caught at the light. It was even abandoned. "What do you want?" "For you to know I didn't come here by accident." "You said you came in for the—" "I said I came in for the man. And I don't believe that about you, maybe." He placed the envelope on the wet rus. It was frayed at the edges. "Three nights ago. A manager at a cash gym in Cardiff. He showed me a photograph of yourself and asked if the girl in it had gone." Rory looked at the envelope. "He knows. He is out, and he knows you're in the London area, and he described the Raven's Nest as my back." She tried to swallow. "There is no procedure." "He said a bad word. He said you were good at being," Rhys pushed the envelope across the wood. "Have I" "Not the envelope. But that's it. I'm now a licensed officer — not a desk in risk... whatever I could do. I'm giving you time. He's not starting to be amused." She looked at his face, the clean jaw, straightened collar. The boy who had climbed out of the fire would have said lots. This man was not commanding. "Why you?" she said. "Because I have, my last name." "Owen?" she asked. Savannah. "Because in the old fire, and you're about to expect it. Because I went out from your life with a quill of texts, and you never replied, so I blotted it all. I'm sorry. Because I live with those unanswered, and I'm here to say: you looked at me at this bar, and you know." She picked up the envelope, unopened. "So he's on his way here?" "I don't know. I just wanted you to know how careful I have been, in the mask of them/I'm a lawyer by trade, and I'm not good at what I can't quite." "One question." "am." "Did you see him by night?" "K. Three nights ago. But he hasn't got the address. In the neon green, she saw another figure outside the glass of the front door: a man, dark hair, his hand pressed to the door in a way that turned her blood to cold. " I know him," she said. Rhys stood, gathering the dark. "Then we're not done, the." Already, the door was opening. The bell didn't ring. In the doorway, the rain-smeared long coat, the shoe. "Rhys," she said, without breathing. "You're not putting your coat away. You're going to be you." He moved to the bar's exit. But everything was at last.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
91.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences67
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen55
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1140
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount561
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.36
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Raven"
discoveredNames
Cardiff1
Rory2
Old1
Arc1
Raven2
Nest2
Prague1
Let1
Savannah1
Rhys2
You1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Savannah"
4"Rhys"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences33
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1140
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs74
mean15.41
std14.62
cv0.949
sampleLengths
048
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232
310
427
51
632
729
88
912
104
1112
1255
1310
1410
151
162
1717
1850
1922
205
2117
226
2337
242
252
2640
277
282
2911
302
314
324
3314
343
3524
367
372
3830
396
405
4142
4213
4311
446
456
466
4722
484
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences67
matches
0"was frayed"
58.16% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs94
matches
0"was checking"
1"was opening"
92.29% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences113
ratio0.018
matches
0"The Raven's Nest went on around them: the old maps on the wall, a photograph of a bridge in Prague, the low hum of rain—no, no rain."
1"\"What is there to say. The roads, the pavement under the bay. I can't— I tried to do the funeral in memory of my mother; she only needs a little faint.\" He stopped."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount497
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.026156941649899398
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.002012072434607646
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean10.09
std8.99
cv0.891
sampleLengths
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118
222
32
412
520
610
712
815
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1214
1311
144
158
1612
174
1812
195
203
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221
2311
2414
2510
2610
271
282
296
3011
3112
3227
3311
3422
355
362
372
383
3910
406
4133
424
432
442
455
4635
477
482
4911
63.72% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4247787610619469
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences52
matches
0"No longer the boy who"
1"Already, the door was opening."
ratio0.038
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences52
matches
0"He took the last stool"
1"She turned from the shelf"
2"He laughed, and the sound"
3"His thumb moved over the"
4"She poured him a whiskey"
5"He was bigger...?"
6"He was thin in the"
7"He had chosen a good"
8"Her own voice surprised her"
9"He looked at his glass"
10"he said, pointing at her"
11"She had been too quick"
12"Their glasses went dumb together."
13"Her elbow found the sticky"
14"He raised his glass"
15"She sat back."
16"She rubbed at the scar"
17"He did not blink."
18"she said, and wanted to"
19"He held up a hand."
ratio0.577
8.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences52
matches
0"The first thing she saw"
1"The second was the watch,"
2"He took the last stool"
3"The voice landed where the"
4"She turned from the shelf"
5"He laughed, and the sound"
6"His thumb moved over the"
7"She poured him a whiskey"
8"The bar coat her."
9"Rory looked at him properly."
10"He was bigger...?"
11"He was thin in the"
12"He had chosen a good"
13"Her own voice surprised her"
14"He looked at his glass"
15"The Raven's Nest went on"
16"The hum of conversation at"
17"he said, pointing at her"
18"The old joke."
19"She had been too quick"
ratio0.904
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"In the neon green, she saw another figure outside the glass of the front door: a man, dark hair, his hand pressed to the door in a way that turned her blood to …"
98.68% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, without breathing"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.9247%