Run: 2026-09-03-01M1K9PYC5QBR3DB47XKNXWD86

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5m 38s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Rory Carter." The name caught her like a hand on the back of the neck. She kept her spine to the room and worked the tea towel around the inside of a pint glass until it squeaked. "You've got the wrong person." "Cardiff. 2019. You nearly broke my nose in a mock trial." Her hand stilled. She set the glass down and turned. Rhys Vaughan sat on the stool nearest the service hatch. The last time she had seen him he had been wearing a second-hand tweed jacket with a missing button and quoting Article 8 of the Human Rights Act at a bus stop. This version wore a navy suit that moved with him like an extra shadow. His jaw had sharpened. His accent had not. "You look," he said. "Don't." She reached for another glass. The Raven's Nest smelled of spilled bitter and furniture polish. The old maps on the wall behind Rhys had started to curl at the edges. The black-and-white photographs had not moved in forty years. Only the people under them changed. "What are you doing in Soho?" she asked. "Working." He loosened his tie a fraction more. "You work here now?" "Something like that." "Still reading law?" "No." The word dropped between them and stayed there, heavy as a wet coat. Rhys watched her as if waiting for the rest of a sentence that would never come. "Can I get a whisky?" he asked. "Lagavulin. If you've got it." "This is a bar, not a student union." He smiled, but the corners of his eyes did not move. "That's the Rory I remember." She pulled the bottle from the top shelf and poured two fingers. "Fourteen pounds." "Christ." "London prices." He slid a twenty across the wood. She gave him coins. He left them on the bar. "Keep the change." "Don't tip me for doing my job." Rhys lifted the glass. The liquid moved in slow amber waves. "What happened to you, Rory? Last I heard, you were going to take the Bar by storm." "I heard you joined Byrne and Kell." "It's a living." "Defending the worst people money can buy." "Everyone deserves representation." "That's what you tell yourself when the invoice clears." He set the glass down too carefully. "You always did see the world in black and white." "Only because I used to think you did too." The low hum of the glasswasher filled the space. From the far end of the bar, Silas glanced over once, then returned to polishing a silver shaker. The signet ring on his right hand clicked against the metal. Rhys scanned the room as though he needed to remember where he was. "I remember your first pro bono case. Old man Farrell. You cried in the gents after the judge ruled against him." "That was a long time ago." "Six years isn't that long." "Six years is an entire degree for some people. A marriage. A war." "You stopped calling," he said. "After Evan." Aurora's thumb found the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. An old habit. She made herself stop. "I changed my number." "I tried to find you." "Evan asked you to." Rhys's expression flickered. "He told me you'd left. That was all." "But you knew." She held his gaze. "You knew what he was like." The only answer was the faint crack of a beer tap opening somewhere down the bar. Then he nodded. "I knew. I didn't do enough." "Neither did I." Aurora picked up the damp towel. "Until I did." Silas moved down the bar, his slight limp almost silent on the rubber mats. He placed a rack of clean glasses below the counter and said nothing. His presence was enough. Rhys drained his whisky. The ice shifted and clicked against the glass. "So who is he?" "Who?" "The man in the photograph. The one on the wall behind you." Aurora did not turn. "He ran this place before Silas. Died in seventy-four. Why?" "Just wondered if you still talked about people like that. The ones who never got to leave." Her jaw tightened. "I'm still here." "Are you?" She reached for his empty glass and set it in the wash tray. "If you've come to unburden your conscience, Rhys, the service charge is extra." "Fair enough." He checked his watch, a thin gold thing on a leather strap. "Look, I didn't mean to ambush you." "Then don't. Finish your drink and head back to whatever hotel room you've booked." "It's not that simple." "It never is with you." For a long moment, neither of them spoke. The rain outside had not started, but the air pressed in through the door each time a punter left. The green neon sign above the entrance threw a pale wash over the paving stones. Rhys reached into his jacket and withdrew a slim envelope. Cream stock. The name Byrne and Kell printed in the corner. "I didn't want to do it like this." Aurora looked at the envelope, then at him. Her hands stayed at her sides. "That's not a social call." "No." "For who?" Rhys's jaw worked. He placed the envelope on the polished wood between them. "Evan Doyle." The words made a sound like a key snapping in a lock. Aurora did not move. Somewhere in her chest, a door she had nailed shut shifted on its frame. "I'm serving you with an application," Rhys said. "He's seeking a non-molestation order. Claiming harassment." "That's a lie." "I know." For a moment, the old Rhys surfaced, drowning behind the neat hair and the sharp suit. "But it's my job." Aurora picked up the envelope. The paper felt thicker than it had any right to. She turned it over once, then held it above the sink full of dirty glasses. "Rory—" "You can tell your client something for me." Rhys stood. "I'm not the enemy." "No." She dropped the envelope into the sink. Soapy water bled through the cream stock, darkening the edges. "You're just the one who hands over the weapon." Behind her, Silas set the shaker down with a single, deliberate click. Rhys opened his mouth, then closed it. The city beyond the door carried on without them, loud and indifferent. "I'll file the response," Aurora said. "And then I'll make sure everyone knows what he did. What you knew." "You'll need legal representation." "That a pitch?" "A warning." Aurora turned to face him fully. The old maps curved at the edges, the photographs yellowed, the room pressed close as a jury box. "Tell Evan I'll see him in court."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.312
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1099
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
90.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1099
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences77
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1099
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
53.70% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount675
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.93
worstName"Rhys"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rhys"
discoveredNames
Vaughan1
Article1
Human1
Rights1
Act1
Raven1
Nest1
Rhys13
Silas3
Aurora8
Byrne1
Kell1
Soapy1
persons
0"Vaughan"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Rhys"
4"Silas"
5"Aurora"
6"Byrne"
7"Kell"
places(empty)
globalScore0.537
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if waiting for the rest of a sentence that would never come"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1099
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs85
mean12.93
std11.74
cv0.908
sampleLengths
02
135
25
311
410
564
64
71
845
98
1012
113
123
131
1429
1512
168
1716
1814
191
202
2117
223
237
2428
257
263
277
283
299
3017
319
3238
3334
346
355
3613
377
3817
394
405
414
4211
4313
4419
456
4612
4731
4816
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs112
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences142
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount679
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.025036818851251842
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005891016200294551
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean7.74
std5.15
cv0.666
sampleLengths
02
113
222
35
411
53
67
710
832
914
104
114
124
131
145
1510
1615
179
186
198
208
214
223
233
241
2513
2616
277
285
298
3011
315
3212
332
341
352
367
374
386
393
407
414
427
4317
447
453
467
473
489
497
58.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.38028169014084506
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners54
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"Only the people under them"
1"Then he nodded."
2"Somewhere in her chest, a"
ratio0.043
80.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences69
matches
0"She kept her spine to"
1"Her hand stilled."
2"She set the glass down"
3"His jaw had sharpened."
4"His accent had not."
5"She reached for another glass."
6"He loosened his tie a"
7"He smiled, but the corners"
8"She pulled the bottle from"
9"He slid a twenty across"
10"She gave him coins."
11"He left them on the"
12"He set the glass down"
13"She made herself stop."
14"She held his gaze"
15"He placed a rack of"
16"His presence was enough."
17"Her jaw tightened."
18"She reached for his empty"
19"He checked his watch, a"
ratio0.348
10.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences69
matches
0"The name caught her like"
1"She kept her spine to"
2"Her hand stilled."
3"She set the glass down"
4"Rhys Vaughan sat on the"
5"The last time she had"
6"This version wore a navy"
7"His jaw had sharpened."
8"His accent had not."
9"She reached for another glass."
10"The Raven's Nest smelled of"
11"The old maps on the"
12"The black-and-white photographs had not"
13"He loosened his tie a"
14"The word dropped between them"
15"Rhys watched her as if"
16"He smiled, but the corners"
17"She pulled the bottle from"
18"He slid a twenty across"
19"She gave him coins."
ratio0.899
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.078
leniency0.156
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.6700%