Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KA4HK4QGS1K3SGAKD54Y0Y

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Duration:
2m 4s
Cost:
$0.023970
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Still alive, then." The glass slipped in my hand, but I caught it before it hit the floor. I knew the voice before I turned, the old Cardiff lilt now clipped and sharpened like a barrister's closing statement. Eva Thorne stood just inside the door of The Raven's Nest, shaking the rain from her collar. She didn't look like the girl who once hot-wired a lecturer's Mini and drove us to Penarth for a laugh. This woman wore a navy coat cut from money, pearl studs in her ears, and a patent leather briefcase that might as well have been a warning sign. "Rory." She said my name like a fact she'd been carrying. "It is you." "Hello, Eva." She moved toward the bar. Her heels struck the old floorboards with the rhythm of someone used to ending conversations. Behind me, Silas shifted his weight onto his good leg. The silver signet ring on his right hand clicked against the bottle he was drying, but he didn't speak. "You work here?" Eva asked. "I live above it." "A bar above a bar." Her smile stayed in the shallow end. "That's very you." "No lectures, Eva." I set the clean glass on the shelf and picked up another. "What are you drinking?" "Gin and tonic. Fever-Tree if they have it." "They have it." Silas reached beneath the bar without being asked. His grey-streaked head dipped once, but I felt his attention lingering on my hands like a spotter ready to catch a falling weight. Eva perched on a stool. The leather creaked under an unfamiliar stillness. The girl I'd known couldn't sit still for a bus ride. This version folded her hands on the bar with the kind of patience that made me want to knock something over. "Three years," she said. "No calls. No Christmas cards." "I didn't have your address." "You could have asked my mother." "I didn't want to risk hearing your voice." I poured the gin, let the tonic hiss against the ice. "You'd have told me to come home." "Is that so terrible?" "Home was a one-bedroom flat with a broken lock and Evan's keys on the hook." I pushed the drink toward her. A little tonic slopped over the rim. Neither of us mentioned it. Eva's manicured hand stopped halfway to the glass. Her nails were the colour of dried blood, which I tried not to read as a sign. "Don't do that," she said. "Don't do what?" "Make him a monster in every sentence." I wiped the bar with the cloth, slow circles. "He did that himself." "You never gave me a chance to explain." She lifted the glass and took a sip. "After you left, I didn't know which story to believe." "You knew which story to believe. You drove the car." Her eyes flicked away, toward the black-and-white photographs on the wall. Old Soho faces stared back with cigarette smoke and lost years. Some of them looked less tired than Eva did in that moment. "I was twenty-three," she said. "I thought love meant staying loyal through the hard parts." "It wasn't love. It was a fracture I kept hiding under long sleeves." Eva shifted on the stool. The old maps on the walls seemed to lean in. Silas turned his back, but I saw the muscle in his jaw. "He's changed, Rory." Eva's voice dropped, soft and careful, the way people handle glass they've already dropped once. "Therapy. Medication. He doesn't drink anymore." "Good for him." "He asks about you." I laughed, short and brittle. "What do you tell him?" "That you're safe." Eva paused. "That you're building a life." "Delivering noodles and sleeping above a gin shelf. Career of the year." Eva's mouth tightened. "You could have finished your degree. You were the best of us." "No, I was the best at pretending. You were the best at staying." The words sat between us, ugly and true. Eva's fingers traced the rim of her glass. The steam from the glass washer fogged the mirror behind the bar, and for a second her reflection blurred, softer, closer to the girl who'd once pressed a cold flannel to my swollen face and said we'd never go back. The memory curdled. "I'm in London for a case," she said after a long pause. "A property dispute. Complicated. The sort of thing that pays for coats like this." "I didn't ask." "You should have." She reached into her briefcase and withdrew a slim folder. She didn't open it. Just laid it on the bar like a losing hand. "The client wanted this meeting in neutral territory. I thought it would be easier if I came first." "Client?" Eva looked at me then, and for the first time something flickered behind the polish. Not guilt exactly. Regret, maybe. Or the memory of it. "Evan." The word landed with the weight of a thrown brick. Somewhere in the pub, a man laughed. Glasses clinked. Rain tapped the window. But all of it came through cotton wool. Silas had gone still. His hand was no longer on the bottle. It rested below the bar, where I knew he kept the old Browning locked in a drawer. "You're meeting Evan here," I said. "I'm trying to give you both a chance to close this properly." "There's nothing to close." My voice was steady, which surprised me. "He knows what he did." "He wants to apologise. In person." I reached for my own glass, but it was empty. The scar on my left wrist caught the light as I moved, a small crescent I'd had since childhood. It ached anyway. "Tell me something, Eva." I leaned forward. "Are you his solicitor or his friend?" She didn't blink. "I'm his wife." The floor dropped. The folder sat between us like a confession. All the air in The Raven's Nest seemed to vanish into the old maps and black-and-white faces. "His wife." The words tasted like copper. "Three years is a long time, Rory." "And that makes it what? A love story?" "It makes it complicated." Eva reached out, but I pulled back. "Please just hear him out. Five minutes. For me." I opened my mouth to tell her to leave, but the door swung open behind her. Cold air rolled across the room and the green neon from outside bled green across the threshold. A man stepped in. Tall. Broader than I remembered. His face half in shadow. Eva turned, and her expression shifted into something I recognized from every bruised morning after. "Rory," Evan said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The words tasted like [like]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.311
leniency0.623
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.033
95.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.07% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"weight"
2"flicked"
3"traced"
4"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1096
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount743
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Cardiff1
Thorne1
Raven2
Nest2
Mini1
Penarth1
Silas4
Soho1
Eva13
Browning1
persons
0"Thorne"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
5"Browning"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Penarth"
2"Soho"
globalScore0.625
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1096
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean16.86
std14.28
cv0.847
sampleLengths
03
135
265
314
42
549
65
74
815
919
108
113
1231
1344
149
155
166
1726
184
1933
2025
215
223
237
2413
2526
2610
2734
2815
2913
3027
3124
323
334
3410
3510
3612
3715
3813
3956
403
4126
423
4345
441
4525
461
4731
4829
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs140
matches
0"was drying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences121
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount749
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.029372496662216287
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0026702269692923898
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean9.06
std6.28
cv0.693
sampleLengths
03
115
220
317
420
528
611
73
82
95
1015
1110
1219
135
144
1512
163
1715
184
198
203
218
2223
235
247
2511
2621
274
285
295
306
3119
327
334
3421
357
365
378
3817
395
403
417
429
434
4416
4510
4610
4711
4811
4912
65.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4297520661157025
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners52
95.24% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences70
matches
0"Just laid it on the"
1"Somewhere in the pub, a"
ratio0.029
65.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences70
matches
0"I knew the voice before"
1"She didn't look like the"
2"She said my name like"
3"She moved toward the bar."
4"Her heels struck the old"
5"Her smile stayed in the"
6"I set the clean glass"
7"His grey-streaked head dipped once,"
8"I poured the gin, let"
9"I pushed the drink toward"
10"Her nails were the colour"
11"I wiped the bar with"
12"She lifted the glass and"
13"Her eyes flicked away, toward"
14"I laughed, short and brittle."
15"she said after a long"
16"She reached into her briefcase"
17"She didn't open it."
18"His hand was no longer"
19"It rested below the bar,"
ratio0.386
24.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences70
matches
0"The glass slipped in my"
1"I knew the voice before"
2"Eva Thorne stood just inside"
3"She didn't look like the"
4"This woman wore a navy"
5"She said my name like"
6"She moved toward the bar."
7"Her heels struck the old"
8"The silver signet ring on"
9"Her smile stayed in the"
10"I set the clean glass"
11"Silas reached beneath the bar"
12"His grey-streaked head dipped once,"
13"Eva perched on a stool."
14"The leather creaked under an"
15"The girl I'd known couldn't"
16"This version folded her hands"
17"I poured the gin, let"
18"I pushed the drink toward"
19"A little tonic slopped over"
ratio0.871
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"This woman wore a navy coat cut from money, pearl studs in her ears, and a patent leather briefcase that might as well have been a warning sign."
1"The steam from the glass washer fogged the mirror behind the bar, and for a second her reflection blurred, softer, closer to the girl who'd once pressed a cold …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.131
leniency0.262
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.5473%