Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KA9921AM3E4TY746N02AW6

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon hummed through the rain-slicked street, a green pulse that painted the pavement in sickly light. The Raven's Nest. Same sign, same cracked step, same smell of spilled ale and wood polish that hit you like an old memory you hadn't asked for. Rory pushed through the door and the warmth wrapped around her, chased the damp from her shoulders. The place hadn't changed in five years. Same maps on the walls, same black-and-white photographs of faces she'd never known, same low murmur of conversation that parted around her entrance like water around a stone. She ordered a whiskey from the new girl behind the bar, a nervous thing with ink-stained fingers, and found a corner stool. She just wanted to sit. The delivery shift had run long, her legs ached, and the flat above the bar would be cold and empty and waiting with all its silence. Then she saw him. He was half-hidden in the shadows near the back, nursing a drink that looked untouched. A familiar slope to his shoulders, same way he'd always hunched over his textbooks in university when he was trying to disappear into the margins. She almost looked away. London was full of ghosts if you let it be. But then he looked up. And she knew the eyes before she knew the face, that pale grey that used to crinkle when he laughed. But the laugh lines had deepened into something else. His jaw had sharpened, his hair was shorter, and the easy boyish softness she remembered from Cardiff had been carved away, replaced by a man whose mouth had forgotten how to smile. She stayed frozen halfway. "Rory?" His voice cracked on her name. The sound of it was old and surprised, like a door opening in a house she'd thought abandoned. "Felix." She heard herself say the name, and the sound of it made him flinch, almost imperceptibly. "Felix Harding." He set his glass down. The whisky barely sloshed. Steady hands, too steady. "You're... you look good. Different. Your hair's longer. You look good." "You already said good." "Did I?" He laughed, a hollow sound. "Five years and I've lost all my conversational skills." "I thought you were in Prague." The words hung in the air, heavier than she'd intended. "I was." He gestured at the stool next to him, a silent question. "Can you...?" She made a decision for herself. Not for the past, not for whatever she was feeling. She sat. The new bartender brought her whiskey over, looked at Felix, and he shook his head. The girl retreated with the nervousness of someone who could smell old history on two strangers and wanted no part of it. "How long have you been back?" Rory asked. "A month. Two. Time's been doing strange things lately." "And you didn't call." He turned the glass in his hands. "I didn't know if you'd want to see me. After everything." The words sat between them, unspooling images she'd locked away: the train station in Cardiff, the rain coming down sideways, Felix's hand on her shoulder, and her own voice, sharp and cruel, telling him that some promises weren't worth keeping. "That was five years ago," she said, but the words tasted flat. "And you've been well." It wasn't a question. "I've been fine, Felix. I've been living. I work at a restaurant, delivering food. I live above this bar. It's not much, but it's mine." He nodded slowly. "You're not doing law." "I dropped out. A month before finals." She watched his face change, the slow dawn of understanding. "Evan happened. Then I happened. Or stopped happening. I ran." "Evan?" Something in his voice went hard. "Is that the...?" "The one who was supposed to just be a friend? Yes." She took a sip of the whiskey and let it burn. "He wasn't. It took me six months to realize that the handprints on my arms weren't love. Then I got on a train to London and didn't look back." Felix studied her face, and she held still for the weight of his gaze. Her scar itched, that old souvenir from childhood, but she didn't touch it. "I used to think about you," Felix said. "In Prague. When things got... hard. I used to think about that night at the docks, when we talked about what we wanted to do with our lives. You wanted to defend the little people. I wanted to excavate history. We had all these plans." "And what happened to the plans?" "The plans got married." He said it flatly, without bitterness, which somehow made it worse. "To a German woman named Heidi. She's beautiful. We had a daughter. Elsa. She's three now." Rory felt something tighten in her chest. "Felix, that's... that's wonderful. Why are you sitting in a bar in London alone?" "Because I walked in on Heidi in our bedroom with our marriage counselor." He picked up his glass and finally drank. "And then I got on a plane and ended up here. I haven't been able to go back." She watched the way his jaw tightened, the way his knuckles went white around the glass. Not the shaky boy she'd left at the train station. A man with a deeper kind of ache, one that had settled into the bones. "I'm sorry," she said, and meant it. "Don't be. I was going to come home eventually. She just accelerated the timeline." His laugh was bitter and real. "You know what the strangest thing is?" "What?" "Heidi looked at me the way you did at the train station. All those years ago. And I realized I never wanted to feel like that again, like I was the one being left behind. So I left first." The words landed in her chest, a blow she'd felt coming and still couldn't block. She studied the grain of the bar's wood, traced a ring left by someone's cold pint. "Is that why you didn't call me? Because I left you?" Felix was quiet for a long moment. "No," he said finally. "I didn't call you because I didn't know who I was when I got to Prague. And then I became someone else entirely, and I was afraid that if you saw him, you'd mourn the boy you knew. I didn't want you to grieve for me, Rory. I wanted you to remember the person I was. Before everything hardened." "My mother used to say that memory is the only home we really have." She looked at him. "But it's not, Felix. It's just a place we visit. We don't have to live there." "You still believe that?" "I have to." She lifted her glass. "I'm all the proof I've got." He met her eyes and, slowly, the smallest smile touched the corner of his mouth. Not the old smile, but a scarred, wiser thing. "To proof," he said. "To proof." Their glasses met with a soft click, and for a moment, the silence between them felt less like a wound and more like a scar, something that had healed enough to touch.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"his voice went hard [hard]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.34
leniency0.681
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.085
87.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1187
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1187
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"warmth"
2"silence"
3"familiar"
4"weight"
5"traced"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles went white"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences63
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences63
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1187
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount715
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.7
worstName"Felix"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Felix"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Cardiff2
Felix5
Rory3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Felix"
2"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
31.51% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.685
wordCount1187
matches
0"not much, but it's mine"
1"Not the old smile, but a scarred, wiser thing"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean22.4
std17.56
cv0.784
sampleLengths
044
152
253
34
454
55
661
74
81
924
1019
1124
124
1316
146
1510
1615
1718
1837
198
209
214
2218
2340
2412
258
2625
277
2827
2910
3051
3127
3253
336
3431
3521
3639
3741
387
3927
401
4139
4231
4311
447
4563
4634
474
4813
4924
99.69% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences63
matches
0"been carved"
91.60% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs123
matches
0"was trying"
1"was feeling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences92
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount720
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"known, same low murmur"
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.03611111111111111
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011111111111111112
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean12.9
std10.35
cv0.802
sampleLengths
017
13
224
317
47
528
622
75
826
94
1015
1125
124
1310
145
1520
169
1732
184
191
206
2118
2217
232
245
254
264
2711
284
297
309
316
3210
3313
342
356
3610
372
3815
3922
408
419
424
437
4411
4540
4612
478
4825
493
51.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.358695652173913
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners33
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then she saw him."
ratio0.017
16.61% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences59
matches
0"She ordered a whiskey from"
1"She just wanted to sit."
2"He was half-hidden in the"
3"She almost looked away."
4"His jaw had sharpened, his"
5"She stayed frozen halfway."
6"His voice cracked on her"
7"She heard herself say the"
8"He set his glass down."
9"He laughed, a hollow sound"
10"He gestured at the stool"
11"She made a decision for"
12"He turned the glass in"
13"she said, but the words"
14"It wasn't a question"
15"He nodded slowly."
16"She watched his face change,"
17"She took a sip of"
18"Her scar itched, that old"
19"He said it flatly, without"
ratio0.508
44.75% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences59
matches
0"The neon hummed through the"
1"The Raven's Nest."
2"Rory pushed through the door"
3"The place hadn't changed in"
4"She ordered a whiskey from"
5"She just wanted to sit."
6"The delivery shift had run"
7"He was half-hidden in the"
8"A familiar slope to his"
9"She almost looked away."
10"London was full of ghosts"
11"His jaw had sharpened, his"
12"She stayed frozen halfway."
13"His voice cracked on her"
14"The sound of it was"
15"She heard herself say the"
16"He set his glass down."
17"The whisky barely sloshed."
18"He laughed, a hollow sound"
19"The words hung in the"
ratio0.831
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The neon hummed through the rain-slicked street, a green pulse that painted the pavement in sickly light."
1"Same sign, same cracked step, same smell of spilled ale and wood polish that hit you like an old memory you hadn't asked for."
2"Same maps on the walls, same black-and-white photographs of faces she'd never known, same low murmur of conversation that parted around her entrance like water …"
3"He was half-hidden in the shadows near the back, nursing a drink that looked untouched."
4"The girl retreated with the nervousness of someone who could smell old history on two strangers and wanted no part of it."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, but the words tasted flat"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She heard (hear)"
1"He laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.191
leniency0.383
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.085
80.3176%