Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KAAHT1A53JQJ6GA4CVMJFV

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Duration:
1m 30s
Cost:
$0.000460
Provider:
OpenInference

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant had grown warm against Rory’s chest. Not the gentle heat of skin or the stray sun through a window, but a pulsing, insistent throb that matched her heartbeat—or perhaps commanded it. She pressed her palm to the silver chain, feeling the deep crimson gemstone buzz beneath her fingers like a trapped bee. “We’re close,” Nyx whispered. The shadow at her side flickered, its humanoid silhouette rippling as it drifted through the underbrush of Richmond Park. Even at dusk, the trees here bent in ways that made Rory’s eyes ache. The oaks twisted skyward and then curved back down, their branches kissing the earth, forming arches and doorways that led nowhere—or everywhere. Rory tucked a strand of black hair behind her ear and kept walking. Her delivery uniform chafed at the collar, the bright orange of the Golden Chef logo clashing against the deepening purple twilight. She hadn’t planned on supernatural excursions after her shift. She never did. “You’re certain this is the right path?” Isolde’s voice carried a musical lilt, ancient and young at once. The half-Fae moved without sound, her silver hair catching the last light like strands of moonlight spun into silk. She wore robes that seemed to shift between green and grey, and she left no footprints in the damp earth. “The Veil is thin here.” “It’s not a question of certainty,” Nyx replied, their voice like wind through dry leaves. “The Heartstone knows.” Rory tugged the pendant free of her shirt, holding it up. The gem glowed now, a deep, hungry crimson that painted her calloused fingers in bloodlight. It pulled. Not hard—just a constant, gentle insistence, like a child tugging at a parent’s sleeve, asking to be led somewhere important. “Then let’s follow it,” she said. The trees parted. Not literally—there was no sound of splintering wood or shifting branches. But the space between two massive oaks shimmered, and the world beyond the park’s familiar paths began to change. The grass beneath their feet transitioned from London’s manicured green to something wilder, richer, dotted with flowers that bloomed in colors Rory had never seen before. Blue so deep it was almost black. Red like fresh-spilled wine. Gold that seemed to glow from within. “This is new,” Nyx said. Their form solidified slightly, taking on the appearance of a tall figure in a dark cloak, though their features remained indistinct, like a painting left out in the rain. Isolde paused at the threshold. Her pale lavender eyes scanned the landscape, and for a moment, a flicker of something—concern? memory?—crossed her ageless face. “This is not the Fae realm.” “No shit,” Rory muttered. The air smelled wrong. Not bad, exactly, but wrong in the way that a familiar song played in a different key felt wrong. Sweet and heavy, thick with the scent of roasted meats and fresh bread and something like cinnamon, but deeper, richer, more decadent than any spice she’d ever encountered. Her stomach rumbled despite herself. “Hungry?” Nyx asked. “Always,” Rory said. “That’s not the problem.” The problem was the landscape itself. They stood on a hillside overlooking a valley that stretched impossibly far, further than the park’s boundaries should have allowed. And at the center of that valley lay a city—a sprawling, chaotic metropolis of spires and domes and towers that defied gravity and logic in equal measure. Some buildings were carved from what appeared to be solid chocolate. Others gleamed like they were made of polished amber or crystallized honey. Rivers of what might have been mead wound through the streets, and the whole place sparkled with a warm, golden light. “Dymas,” Isolde breathed. “The Realm of Gluttony.” Rory’s hand went to the small of her back, where the Fae-forged blade sat sheathed against her spine. The slender, leaf-shaped dagger was cold even through her jacket, its moonsilver surface drinking in the amber light. “This isn’t where we wanted to end up.” “The Heartstone brought us here.” Nyx drifted forward, their shadowy form casting no reflection in the strange light. “Perhaps this is where we need to be.” “Or perhaps we’re being led into a trap.” Isolde’s voice held a warning edge. “Belphegor’s domain is not kind to mortals, Rory. You must be careful. Everything here will tempt you. Everything here will try to make you stay.” Rory swallowed hard, her throat dry despite the honey-sweet air. She thought of her tiny flat above Silas’s bar. The leaky faucet in the bathroom. The stack of unopened bills on her kitchen table. She thought of her mother, back in Cardiff, who still called every Sunday to ask when she was coming home. “I have nothing they’d want,” she said. “I’m just a delivery girl.” Isolde’s laugh was like wind chimes in a storm. “Child, the Princes of Sin want everyone. That’s what makes them princes.” They descended into the valley. The path was paved in stones that looked like candied almonds, and each step released a faint, sweet fragrance. The sounds of the city grew louder as they approached—laughter, music, the clinking of glasses, the sizzle of things cooking. But beneath it all ran a current that made Rory’s skin crawl. A rhythm. A heartbeat. Something vast and patient and endlessly hungry. “Listen,” Nyx said, pausing at what appeared to be an outer gate. It wasn’t made of iron or wood or stone—it was made of bread. A colossal loaf, crusty and golden, arching over the road. Steam rose from it, carrying the scent of fresh-baked sourdough. “That’s…” Rory started. “Edible insults are common here.” Isolde examined the structure with a mixture of fascination and distaste. “Belphegor delights in turning sustenance into architecture. He believes it is the ultimate irony—creating permanence from that which is made to be consumed.” Rory ran her fingers along the surface. It was warm. Soft. She could feel the give of the crust beneath her touch, and for a moment, she was seized with the irrational urge to tear off a piece. Just a taste. Just to know— She yanked her hand back. The pendant burned against her sternum. Warning. “Careful, little mortal.” Nyx’s voice was unusually tight. “This place feeds on desire. It amplifies what you already want.” “And what do I want?” Rory asked, her voice coming out rougher than she intended. The shadow was silent for a long moment. Then: “You want to be somewhere. You want to belong. You want home.” Rory’s throat tightened. She didn’t ask how Nyx knew. She didn’t want to know. The city’s streets opened before them like a feast spread on a giant table. Buildings rose on either side, their windows glowing warm and golden. Every doorway seemed to invite her in. Every window displayed something delightful—cakes frosted with impossible precision, flags of meat and cheese, sculpted marzipan figures cavorting in sugar snow. Creatures walked these streets. Some were recognizably human, or had been once. Others were things she couldn’t name, beings that shifted and flowed and wore their hunger like clothing. A being made entirely of smoke and embers paused to watch them pass, its coal-black eyes tracking Rory’s movement with predatory interest. “Don’t meet their eyes,” Isolde murmured. “Don’t speak unless spoken to. And for the gods’ sake, don’t eat anything.” “Even if they offer?” Rory asked. “Especially if they offer.” At the city’s heart, past market squares and feasting halls and streets paved with what looked suspiciously like hardened sugar, they found the palace. It rose from the ground like a fungus—no, like a cake, layered and ornate, with spires that looked like dripping frosting and walls that seemed to pulse with soft, warm light. The main entrance was a massive archway shaped like an open mouth. “Charming,” Rory said. “Belphegor has a sense of humor,” Isolde replied. “Dark, twisted, and immense.” The approaching bells began to toll—but they didn’t sound like bells. They sounded like dinner chimes. Elegant. Precise. Calling all souls to the table. The pendant on Rory’s chest pulsed so hard she felt it against her ribs like a second heart. She looked down at the crimson gem, watching it glow, watching the light beat in time with the chimes. “Well,” she said, forcing a lightness she didn’t feel. “When in Dymas, I suppose.” Nyx’s shadow shifted, forming what might have been a smile. “Precisely.” She stepped through the archway, and the mouth closed behind her.
created_at"2026-09-03T09:41:42.864Z" 9/3/2026, 9:41:42 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.525
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1407
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1407
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"throb"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"calloused fingers"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count2
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"flicker"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"chaotic"
count1
11
word"crystallized"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"could feel"
count1
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"pulse"
count1
16
word"sense of"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"throb"
1"flickered"
2"lilt"
3"silk"
4"calloused fingers"
5"shimmered"
6"familiar"
7"scanned"
8"flicker"
9"stomach"
10"chaotic"
11"crystallized"
12"structure"
13"could feel"
14"desire"
15"pulse"
16"sense of"
17"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
39.90% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences111
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1395
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.81% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1166
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Chef1
London1
Fae-forged1
Isolde8
Silas1
Cardiff1
Sunday1
Nyx9
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Silas"
3"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.728
windowScore0.833
13.01% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"robes that seemed to shift between green and grey, and she left no footprints in the damp earth"
1"something like cinnamon, but deeper, richer"
2"looked like candied almonds, and each ste"
3"walls that seemed to pulse with soft, warm light"
4"looked like dripping frosting and walls t"
56.63% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.434
wordCount1395
matches
0"Not the gentle heat of skin or the stray sun through a window, but a pulsing, insistent throb"
1"Not bad, exactly, but wrong in the way"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean29.06
std23.03
cv0.792
sampleLengths
054
14
255
346
462
518
648
76
83
974
1034
1130
124
1356
143
157
1697
177
1844
1926
2039
2154
2212
2321
245
2562
2645
273
2839
2944
3012
3119
3215
3321
3414
3553
3651
3719
386
394
4067
413
4212
4324
4437
4514
4611
4711
86.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences111
matches
0"were carved"
1"were made"
2"was paved"
3"was made"
4"was seized"
5"being made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs200
matches
0"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences128
ratio0.102
matches
0"Not the gentle heat of skin or the stray sun through a window, but a pulsing, insistent throb that matched her heartbeat—or perhaps commanded it."
1"The oaks twisted skyward and then curved back down, their branches kissing the earth, forming arches and doorways that led nowhere—or everywhere."
2"Not hard—just a constant, gentle insistence, like a child tugging at a parent’s sleeve, asking to be led somewhere important."
3"Not literally—there was no sound of splintering wood or shifting branches."
4"Her pale lavender eyes scanned the landscape, and for a moment, a flicker of something—concern?"
5"memory?—crossed her ageless face."
6"And at the center of that valley lay a city—a sprawling, chaotic metropolis of spires and domes and towers that defied gravity and logic in equal measure."
7"The sounds of the city grew louder as they approached—laughter, music, the clinking of glasses, the sizzle of things cooking."
8"It wasn’t made of iron or wood or stone—it was made of bread."
9"Just to know—"
10"Every window displayed something delightful—cakes frosted with impossible precision, flags of meat and cheese, sculpted marzipan figures cavorting in sugar snow."
11"It rose from the ground like a fungus—no, like a cake, layered and ornate, with spires that looked like dripping frosting and walls that seemed to pulse with soft, warm light."
12"The approaching bells began to toll—but they didn’t sound like bells."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1184
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender, leaf-shaped dagger"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.030405405405405407
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007601351351351352
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean10.9
std7.43
cv0.682
sampleLengths
08
125
221
34
419
514
622
713
821
99
103
1118
1219
1320
145
1515
163
1711
1815
192
2020
216
223
2311
2419
2526
267
274
287
295
3029
315
3215
334
346
354
364
3719
3828
395
403
413
424
436
4420
4527
4611
4712
4821
493
68.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.453125
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners58
74.07% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"Just a taste."
1"Just to know—"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences90
matches
0"She pressed her palm to"
1"Her delivery uniform chafed at"
2"She hadn’t planned on supernatural"
3"She never did."
4"She wore robes that seemed"
5"Their form solidified slightly, taking"
6"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
7"Her stomach rumbled despite herself."
8"They stood on a hillside"
9"She thought of her tiny"
10"She thought of her mother,"
11"They descended into the valley."
12"It wasn’t made of iron"
13"It was warm."
14"She could feel the give"
15"She yanked her hand back."
16"She didn’t ask how Nyx"
17"She didn’t want to know."
18"It rose from the ground"
19"They sounded like dinner chimes."
ratio0.256
54.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences90
matches
0"The pendant had grown warm"
1"She pressed her palm to"
2"The shadow at her side"
3"The oaks twisted skyward and"
4"Rory tucked a strand of"
5"Her delivery uniform chafed at"
6"She hadn’t planned on supernatural"
7"She never did."
8"Isolde’s voice carried a musical"
9"The half-Fae moved without sound,"
10"She wore robes that seemed"
11"Nyx replied, their voice like"
12"Rory tugged the pendant free"
13"The gem glowed now, a"
14"The trees parted."
15"The grass beneath their feet"
16"Their form solidified slightly, taking"
17"Isolde paused at the threshold."
18"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
19"The air smelled wrong."
ratio0.811
55.56% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"Even at dusk, the trees"
ratio0.011
8.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Not the gentle heat of skin or the stray sun through a window, but a pulsing, insistent throb that matched her heartbeat—or perhaps commanded it."
1"Even at dusk, the trees here bent in ways that made Rory’s eyes ache."
2"The oaks twisted skyward and then curved back down, their branches kissing the earth, forming arches and doorways that led nowhere—or everywhere."
3"She wore robes that seemed to shift between green and grey, and she left no footprints in the damp earth."
4"The gem glowed now, a deep, hungry crimson that painted her calloused fingers in bloodlight."
5"Not hard—just a constant, gentle insistence, like a child tugging at a parent’s sleeve, asking to be led somewhere important."
6"The grass beneath their feet transitioned from London’s manicured green to something wilder, richer, dotted with flowers that bloomed in colors Rory had never s…"
7"They stood on a hillside overlooking a valley that stretched impossibly far, further than the park’s boundaries should have allowed."
8"And at the center of that valley lay a city—a sprawling, chaotic metropolis of spires and domes and towers that defied gravity and logic in equal measure."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory asked, her voice coming out rougher than she intended"
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory muttered (mutter)"
2"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
3"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.2
76.6506%