Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KAE9M20TPS3XZTNZABHHCY

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Duration:
4m 46s
Cost:
$0.002184
Provider:
Relace

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones rose from the frost-nipped grass at the edge of Richmond Park like the exposed ribs of something enormous, each one taller than Rory and grown from oak turned to grey stone. The bark was still there, fossilized into whorls and furrows, so the monoliths looked less like monuments than trees that had outlived themselves by a thousand years. Nine of them stood in a ring, each leaning at a different angle, as if the circle had begun to fall and thought better of it. November had laid its cold hand over the park. The tourists were gone, the deer were distant shapes in the grey veil of afternoon, and beyond the ring of stones London hummed its indifferent music. The winter solstice was six weeks out. The Veil between worlds was wearing thin—that was the rumor, and the reason she was here, teeth chattering, chasing a half-fae seer's riddle through a royal park. "The heart finds the door," Rory muttered. "Then stop thinking like a barrister." Nyx drifted at her shoulder, a humanoid cutout of living shadow against the slanting light. Their faintly glowing violet eyes were the only part of them that held a shape. "The heart does not read. It opens." Rory didn't argue. She'd known Nyx for less than a month, long enough to learn they were never wrong about the impossible, and that being right made them no easier to travel with. The heartstone pendant hung beneath her collar, deep crimson and thumbnail-small, a gift from an unknown benefactor. It had been warm against her skin for the last hour—not with the slow furnace-heat it gave off near a Hel portal, but with something brighter, quicker. It pulled, the way a thread pulls toward a needle. "Fine," she said. "My heart. Opening." And she stepped between the two nearest stones. The boundary didn't so much resist as notice her. The air thickened to clear honey, and for one disorienting heartbeat Rory felt herself suspended—not drowning, not sinking, something in between—and then she was through, and the sound of London vanished like a candle pinched out. Silence. One long breath of it. Then the world took its own breath, and sound returned wrong. No traffic. No wind. No distant sirens. Instead, a high, crystalline chiming, so faint and so everywhere that Rory couldn't tell if it came from the trees or the sky or the flowers at her feet. And there were flowers. Wildflowers in November—not stragglers but a meadow of them, delphiniums and poppies and cornflowers and a dozen species she had no name for, blooming in absurd, impossible color beneath a canopy of oaks that had never lost their leaves. The light was amber, a warm late-afternoon glow that had no business existing at this hour, and the air lay against her skin like water held a degree above blood temperature. Nyx came through the boundary behind her, and their silhouette—usually a crisp edge of shadow against daylight—blurred, refracted, as if seen through the join of two panes of glass. Their violet eyes pulsed once. "This place is between," they said. Their voice was a whisper carried on an unfelt wind, but it sounded thin, thinner than Rory had ever heard it. "I have walked the seams of the world for four hundred years. This is the first ground that feels like a body instead of a place. It has a pulse." Rory listened. Beneath the chiming, she could hear something that might have been a distant drum—or only the blood moving in her own ears. She couldn't tell. That was the unsettling part: she couldn't tell where she ended and the grove began. The heartstone pulsed, hot against her sternum, and a faint inner glow bled through her collar like embers through ash. "Which way?" she asked the grove, or Nyx, or herself. There was at least a pretense of direction. A path of beaten earth curved away between the flowers, ducked beneath a low arch of oak branches, and ran toward the deeper amber of the interior. Rory took it. Nyx drifted at her side, leaving the flowers undisturbed, which was natural enough for a shadow. But Rory noticed she left no footprints either. The moss closed behind her heel like water closing over a stone. She filed it away. The trees ahead were not oaks. They were willows hung with silver streamers of leaf, and between them grew flowering shrubs covered in blossoms shaped like bells, and from those bells came the chiming. Rory stopped beneath one and saw the insects. They were the size of her thumb, bodies made of something like molten glass, and inside them pulsed not organs but light—tiny lanterns carried by winged things with too many legs and no face at all. One flew out of its bell, circled Rory's head once, and the air turned suddenly, cloyingly sweet: crushed honey and cut grass and something older underneath, green wine and woodsmoke from a fire no one had lit yet. Then it was gone. "How long have we been walking?" she asked. Nyx paused in the middle of the path. "Three minutes by the pulse of your heart. An hour by the light." They raised their head, and their whisper frayed at the edges. "And I would swear we passed that tree already." Rory looked. It was a silver willow, smooth and pale, and among its roots sat a cairn of grey stones, stacked with deliberate care. She was certain she hadn't seen it before. "Was that—" "No." The grove hummed. The heartstone pressed against her collar like a hand on her shoulder, warning or encouraging; she still couldn't tell which. The center of the grove was not a clearing. It was a pool. Ink-dark water filled a perfect circle, twenty feet across, so still it mirrored the canopy above. Except the reflection was wrong. The canopy overhead was silver willow and amber oak; the reflection showed a bruised violet sky, a moon the color of a vein, and a field of pale flowers that did not exist on this side of anything. Rory crouched at the edge, and the cold rolling off the surface tasted of iron and honeysuckle. The moon in the reflection moved. Not much, but it moved—a fraction of a fraction—between one breath and the next. "Is this Hel?" she whispered. "No." Nyx stood at the pool's edge, their shadow-form rippling not with wind but with something that looked like recognition. "Hel is ash and appetite. This is older. This is the wound between the worlds." They extended a hand toward the surface, then stopped, inches above the water. "If I touch this, I might not come back." The Fae-forged blade at Rory's hip—Isolde's gift, slender and leaf-shaped, cold as midwinter—had begun to glow with a faint pearl light, the way it did in moonlight. She drew it without deciding to, and the weight of it in her palm felt like a door closing behind her. "It's inviting you," she said. Nyx withdrew their hand very slowly. "It is. That is what makes it dangerous." And in the silence, Rory noticed the flowers around the pool. They grew in a perfect ring—except on one side, where they lay flat. Not broken, but bent, pressed down by the passage of something heavy. She followed the bent line across the moss, expecting a footprint. There were none. The moss was unmarked. "Nyx." They came to her side, looked, and went very still. "No footprints." A shiver ran up Rory's spine, cold and intimate as a fingertip. Isolde left no footprints. The half-fae seer, exiled for sharing futures with mortals, had stood here. Recently. The flowers hadn't straightened yet. "She was here," Rory said. "Or she's here now." "And we cannot see her," Nyx said. Rory turned in a slow circle, the blade low at her side. The wildflowers bloomed in no season because they belonged to no season. The pool reflected a world that had no intention of being looked at. Somewhere between one chime and the next, a silver-haired woman with pale lavender eyes was watching them, and Rory could feel it—the weight of that attention, like a held breath against the back of her neck. The willow at the pool's edge shivered. Its silver leaves stirred in a wind that touched nothing else, and its branches parted slowly, like curtains drawn back by invisible hands. For a moment the amber light broke on the pale shape of a figure standing among the roots—a dress green as deep water, hair the color of moonlight, and two eyes that caught the light and kept it. She was smiling a smile that meant something Rory didn't yet have a word for. Then she was gone. The branches settled. Only the cairn of stones remained, and on top of it, where there had been nothing before, lay a sprig of white flowers, faintly luminous. A gift. An invitation. Maybe both. Rory let out a breath she hadn't realized she was holding and sheathed the blade. Her hands were trembling, but her voice came out steady. "Well. She knows we're here." Nyx said nothing. Their shadow-form had drawn inward, dense and dark, pulled taut like a fist. They were afraid, Rory realized. The creature who lived between shadows, who had walked the seams of the world for four centuries, was afraid of a garden. "Come on," she said, and started toward the willow. "Let's go find the door."
created_at"2026-09-03T09:43:45.552Z" 9/3/2026, 9:43:45 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1599
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1599
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"crystalline"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"perfect"
count2
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"crystalline"
2"pulsed"
3"whisper"
4"pulse"
5"perfect"
6"weight"
7"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1583
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.97% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1428
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory22
London2
Veil1
Nyx10
Hel1
November2
Fae-forged1
Isolde2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Hel"
globalScore0.73
windowScore0.833
47.26% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"something like molten glass, and inside them"
1"looked like recognition"
2"felt like a door closing behind her"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords3.79
wordCount1583
matches
0"not with the slow furnace-heat it gave off near a Hel portal, but with something brighter, quicker"
1"not stragglers but a meadow of them, delphiniums"
2"not organs but light"
3"Not much, but it moved"
4"not with wind but with something"
5"Not broken, but bent, pressed down by the passage of something heavy"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean33.68
std31.76
cv0.943
sampleLengths
087
169
27
343
487
514
645
717
8110
934
1057
1142
1220
1310
1474
154
16120
178
1841
1932
202
211
2223
2313
2496
255
2657
2748
285
2914
3047
317
321
3310
342
3534
369
377
3873
3983
407
4125
426
4325
445
4543
4614
92.50% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences110
matches
0"were gone"
1"was gone"
2"being looked"
3"was gone"
53.16% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs227
matches
0"was wearing"
1"was watching"
2"was smiling"
3"was holding"
4"were trembling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences122
ratio0.115
matches
0"The Veil between worlds was wearing thin—that was the rumor, and the reason she was here, teeth chattering, chasing a half-fae seer's riddle through a royal park."
1"It had been warm against her skin for the last hour—not with the slow furnace-heat it gave off near a Hel portal, but with something brighter, quicker."
2"The air thickened to clear honey, and for one disorienting heartbeat Rory felt herself suspended—not drowning, not sinking, something in between—and then she was through, and the sound of London vanished like a candle pinched out."
3"Wildflowers in November—not stragglers but a meadow of them, delphiniums and poppies and cornflowers and a dozen species she had no name for, blooming in absurd, impossible color beneath a canopy of oaks that had never lost their leaves."
4"Nyx came through the boundary behind her, and their silhouette—usually a crisp edge of shadow against daylight—blurred, refracted, as if seen through the join of two panes of glass."
5"Beneath the chiming, she could hear something that might have been a distant drum—or only the blood moving in her own ears."
6"They were the size of her thumb, bodies made of something like molten glass, and inside them pulsed not organs but light—tiny lanterns carried by winged things with too many legs and no face at all."
7"The heartstone pressed against her collar like a hand on her shoulder, warning or encouraging; she still couldn't tell which."
8"The canopy overhead was silver willow and amber oak; the reflection showed a bruised violet sky, a moon the color of a vein, and a field of pale flowers that did not exist on this side of anything."
9"Not much, but it moved—a fraction of a fraction—between one breath and the next."
10"The Fae-forged blade at Rory's hip—Isolde's gift, slender and leaf-shaped, cold as midwinter—had begun to glow with a faint pearl light, the way it did in moonlight."
11"They grew in a perfect ring—except on one side, where they lay flat."
12"Somewhere between one chime and the next, a silver-haired woman with pale lavender eyes was watching them, and Rory could feel it—the weight of that attention, like a held breath against the back of her neck."
13"For a moment the amber light broke on the pale shape of a figure standing among the roots—a dress green as deep water, hair the color of moonlight, and two eyes that caught the light and kept it."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1456
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"older underneath, green wine"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.03021978021978022
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.007554945054945055
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean12.98
std10.45
cv0.806
sampleLengths
034
127
226
39
426
57
627
77
821
915
107
113
1230
1317
1427
1510
163
1711
189
1936
201
215
2211
232
242
253
2629
274
2839
2931
3029
315
326
3321
3430
352
3622
373
3815
3920
4010
418
4227
433
4416
458
4612
474
486
4928
56.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.39344262295081966
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences93
matches
0"Then the world took its"
1"Instead, a high, crystalline chiming,"
2"Then it was gone."
3"Somewhere between one chime and"
4"Then she was gone."
5"Only the cairn of stones"
ratio0.065
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences93
matches
0"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
1"She'd known Nyx for less"
2"It had been warm against"
3"It pulled, the way a"
4"Their violet eyes pulsed once."
5"Their voice was a whisper"
6"She couldn't tell."
7"she asked the grove, or"
8"She filed it away."
9"They were willows hung with"
10"They were the size of"
11"They raised their head, and"
12"It was a silver willow,"
13"She was certain she hadn't"
14"It was a pool."
15"They extended a hand toward"
16"She drew it without deciding"
17"They grew in a perfect"
18"She followed the bent line"
19"They came to her side,"
ratio0.28
78.28% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences93
matches
0"The standing stones rose from"
1"The bark was still there,"
2"November had laid its cold"
3"The tourists were gone, the"
4"The winter solstice was six"
5"The Veil between worlds was"
6"Nyx drifted at her shoulder,"
7"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
8"Rory didn't argue."
9"She'd known Nyx for less"
10"The heartstone pendant hung beneath"
11"It had been warm against"
12"It pulled, the way a"
13"The boundary didn't so much"
14"The air thickened to clear"
15"Wildflowers in November—not stragglers but"
16"The light was amber, a"
17"Nyx came through the boundary"
18"Their violet eyes pulsed once."
19"Their voice was a whisper"
ratio0.763
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
8.09% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The bark was still there, fossilized into whorls and furrows, so the monoliths looked less like monuments than trees that had outlived themselves by a thousand …"
1"Nine of them stood in a ring, each leaning at a different angle, as if the circle had begun to fall and thought better of it."
2"The Veil between worlds was wearing thin—that was the rumor, and the reason she was here, teeth chattering, chasing a half-fae seer's riddle through a royal par…"
3"Wildflowers in November—not stragglers but a meadow of them, delphiniums and poppies and cornflowers and a dozen species she had no name for, blooming in absurd…"
4"The light was amber, a warm late-afternoon glow that had no business existing at this hour, and the air lay against her skin like water held a degree above bloo…"
5"Nyx came through the boundary behind her, and their silhouette—usually a crisp edge of shadow against daylight—blurred, refracted, as if seen through the join o…"
6"Beneath the chiming, she could hear something that might have been a distant drum—or only the blood moving in her own ears."
7"The heartstone pressed against her collar like a hand on her shoulder, warning or encouraging; she still couldn't tell which."
8"The canopy overhead was silver willow and amber oak; the reflection showed a bruised violet sky, a moon the color of a vein, and a field of pale flowers that di…"
9"For a moment the amber light broke on the pale shape of a figure standing among the roots—a dress green as deep water, hair the color of moonlight, and two eyes…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
75.93% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.37
leniency0.741
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.148
77.2067%