Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KBWY09STVNFV1B8Y7BYYC2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 40s
Cost:
$0.002869
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gate should have been locked. Rory stood at the Richmond Park entrance, the paper bag from Golden Empress growing cold in her hands. Richmond Gate at half past eleven on a Tuesday night. The sign said the park closed at dusk. The chain that should have held the gates together lay coiled on the ground like a sleeping snake, the padlock still attached, still closed. Someone had cut it. The pendant under her shirt pulsed against her sternum. Warm. Insistent. She should have turned around. She knew that now, the way you know a thing in your bones before your brain catches up. But the delivery was paid for in advance, cash, and the note pinned to the order was specific: *Leave it at the stones. You'll know them when you see them.* No name. No number. Just the address: Richmond Park, and a postcode that didn't exist. The pendant pulsed again. Harder. Rory stepped through the gate. The path was wrong. She knew Richmond Park. She'd delivered to the café near Petersham Gate, to the deer sanctuary, to the stupidly expensive houses that backed onto the park's edge. She knew the way the tarmac curved past the Isabella Plantation, the way the oaks leaned over the path like old men sharing secrets. This path wasn't that path. It was the same tarmac, same cracks, same faded white line down the middle. But the trees on either side were too close. The gap between them narrowed as she walked, and when she looked back, the gate was already out of sight, swallowed by darkness that seemed thicker than the night air should have allowed. The city sounds died. That was the first thing that truly frightened her. London never goes silent. There's always traffic, always sirens, always the distant rumble of the tube shaking the earth. But as she walked, the sounds faded one by one, like someone turning down a radio dial. First the traffic. Then the planes. Then the wind itself, which had been rustling the leaves when she arrived, fell still. The air went quiet. Heavy. Like the moment before a storm, but there was no storm coming. The sky above the trees was clear, scattered with stars that seemed too bright, too close. Rory stopped walking. The pendant burned against her chest. She pulled out her phone to check the time. The screen flickered, then settled on 3:47 AM. She'd left the restaurant at eleven. The walk from the gate couldn't have taken more than ten minutes. She tapped the map app, and the blue dot showed her position in the middle of the park, exactly where she expected. But the dot was moving. Drifting east, away from her, as if her phone thought she was somewhere else entirely. The battery read 4%. It had been at 80% when she left. Rory shoved the phone back into her pocket and kept walking. The deer were the next wrong thing. A small herd stood at the edge of the path, heads raised, antlers catching the starlight. Richmond Park had hundreds of deer, she'd seen them a dozen times, but these were too still. They didn't graze. They didn't flick their ears at the flies. They just stood, facing her, their breath pluming in the cold air. She counted seven. Then she blinked, and there were nine. She didn't look again. The bag in her hands was warm. She could feel the heat through the paper, the same heat that had been in the container when Yu-Fei had handed it to her, before it had gone cold on the walk over. It was heavier now, too. Heavier than congee and a plastic spoon had any right to be. She didn't open it. She didn't want to know what was inside. She should have turned around. She almost did. Her feet had already started to pivot when she saw the flowers. They lined the path ahead of her, a carpet of wildflowers that shouldn't have been there. It was November. The ground should have been bare, the branches skeletal. But these flowers bloomed in colours she couldn't name, colours that shifted when she looked at them directly, like oil on water. Blue that was almost purple. Red that was almost black. Petals that seemed to breathe. The note in her pocket crinkled as she shifted her weight. *Leave it at the stones.* The stones. The standing stones. She'd heard about them, the old oaks that marked the boundary of the grove. Local legend said they were older than the park, older than the Romans, older than anything that had a right to be in southwest London. She'd always assumed it was tourist nonsense, the kind of thing pub landlords told to keep the pints flowing. The pendant pulsed. Warm. Warm. Hot. Rory walked on. The flowers grew thicker as she went, until they covered the path entirely and she had to step on them. They gave under her boots with a soft, wet sound, and something brushed against her ankles. Not the petals. Something underneath, something that pressed up against the leather of her boots like a tongue testing a wound. She didn't look down. The stones appeared before she was ready for them. One moment the path was empty, the next they were there, a circle of massive oak trunks that had been shaped into something that wasn't quite a tree anymore. They stood in a clearing that opened suddenly, impossibly, as if the forest had simply decided to step aside. The wildflowers grew thicker here, carpeting the ground in that shifting, breathing colour. And in the centre of the circle, a figure. Rory froze. The figure was tall, too tall, its proportions wrong in a way that made her stomach lurch. It stood perfectly still, facing away from her, its head tilted at an angle that should have been painful. It wore something dark that moved in the still air, fabric that rippled without wind. The pendant was so hot now it felt like a brand against her skin. *Run*, she thought. *Run now, before it turns around.* But her feet wouldn't move. Her body had decided, without consulting her, that running was not an option. That whatever this was, it would catch her. That the only thing worse than standing still was giving it a reason to chase. The figure didn't turn. It didn't need to. The air around it shimmered, and Rory realised with a cold, creeping horror that the flowers at its feet were not flowers at all. They were mouths. Hundreds of tiny, open mouths, all of them moving, all of them whispering in a language that sounded almost like Welsh, almost like something she should understand. The note in her pocket grew heavy. She pulled it out, her fingers numb, and looked at it for the first time since she'd left the restaurant. The handwriting had changed. *Stay*, it said now. *We've been waiting.* The figure began to turn. Its shoulders shifted first, then the long column of its neck, and Rory saw that the fabric it wore was not fabric at all. It was skin, pale and seamless, stretched over a frame that had too many joints. The head kept rotating past the point where a neck should have stopped, and the face that came into view was hers. Her black hair. Her bright blue eyes, but the blue was wrong, too bright, like the flowers. Her small crescent scar on the left wrist, raised and glistening as if it had just been cut. Her mouth, open in a smile that showed too many teeth, all of them sharp, all of them wet. The thing that wore her face took a step forward. The mouths at its feet opened wider. And the pendant, hot as a coal against her sternum, went cold.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
88.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1312
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"suddenly"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1312
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"pulsed"
count3
1
word"sanctuary"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"lurch"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"sanctuary"
2"flickered"
3"could feel"
4"weight"
5"stomach"
6"lurch"
7"shimmered"
8"glistening"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
76.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"know"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"started to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords28
totalWords1312
ratio0.021
matches
0"Leave it at the stones. You'll know them when you see them."
1"Leave it at the stones."
2"Run"
3"Run now, before it turns around."
4"Stay"
5"We've been waiting."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"*Stay*, it said now."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount1312
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Richmond5
Park4
Golden1
Empress1
Gate2
Tuesday1
Petersham1
Isabella1
Plantation1
Yu-Fei1
November1
Romans1
London2
Rory8
Welsh1
Warm3
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Rory"
2"Welsh"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"Petersham"
4"Isabella"
5"Plantation"
6"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed thicker than the night air should have allowed"
1"quite a tree anymore"
2"felt like a brand against her skin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1312
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences130
matches
0"saw that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean25.73
std24.74
cv0.962
sampleLengths
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164
211
353
415
55
65
74
851
95
1056
114
1266
1333
143
156
1677
1712
1811
1963
2010
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2320
2465
2516
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283
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304
319
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339
342
3551
3614
379
3841
394
404
4154
4227
434
447
455
4661
4754
4810
497
97.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences130
matches
0"been locked"
1"was paid"
2"been shaped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs232
matches
0"was giving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences130
ratio0
matches(empty)
88.35% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1313
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same faded white line"
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.046458492003046456
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.008377760853008377
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean10.09
std7.53
cv0.746
sampleLengths
06
118
210
38
424
54
69
71
81
95
1018
1123
127
132
142
1511
164
171
185
194
204
2123
2224
235
2414
259
2633
274
289
294
3015
3117
323
333
3415
354
361
3712
3816
393
406
419
428
436
4412
4522
465
4715
484
498
36.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.3153846153846154
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences119
matches
0"Just the address: Richmond Park,"
1"Then the planes."
2"Then the wind itself, which"
3"Then she blinked, and there"
ratio0.034
75.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences119
matches
0"She should have turned around."
1"She knew that now, the"
2"You'll know them when you"
3"She knew Richmond Park."
4"She'd delivered to the café"
5"She knew the way the"
6"It was the same tarmac,"
7"She pulled out her phone"
8"She'd left the restaurant at"
9"She tapped the map app,"
10"It had been at 80%" 1/1/1980, 12:00:00 AM
11"They didn't graze."
12"They didn't flick their ears"
13"They just stood, facing her,"
14"She counted seven."
15"She didn't look again."
16"She could feel the heat"
17"It was heavier now, too."
18"She didn't open it."
19"She didn't want to know"
ratio0.361
65.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences119
matches
0"The gate should have been"
1"Rory stood at the Richmond"
2"Richmond Gate at half past"
3"The sign said the park"
4"The chain that should have"
5"Someone had cut it."
6"The pendant under her shirt"
7"She should have turned around."
8"She knew that now, the"
9"You'll know them when you"
10"The pendant pulsed again."
11"Rory stepped through the gate."
12"The path was wrong."
13"She knew Richmond Park."
14"She'd delivered to the café"
15"She knew the way the"
16"This path wasn't that path."
17"It was the same tarmac,"
18"The gap between them narrowed"
19"The city sounds died."
ratio0.79
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"She'd delivered to the café near Petersham Gate, to the deer sanctuary, to the stupidly expensive houses that backed onto the park's edge."
1"The sky above the trees was clear, scattered with stars that seemed too bright, too close."
2"They just stood, facing her, their breath pluming in the cold air."
3"She could feel the heat through the paper, the same heat that had been in the container when Yu-Fei had handed it to her, before it had gone cold on the walk ov…"
4"Local legend said they were older than the park, older than the Romans, older than anything that had a right to be in southwest London."
5"Something underneath, something that pressed up against the leather of her boots like a tongue testing a wound."
6"One moment the path was empty, the next they were there, a circle of massive oak trunks that had been shaped into something that wasn't quite a tree anymore."
7"Hundreds of tiny, open mouths, all of them moving, all of them whispering in a language that sounded almost like Welsh, almost like something she should underst…"
8"It was skin, pale and seamless, stretched over a frame that had too many joints."
9"Her small crescent scar on the left wrist, raised and glistening as if it had just been cut."
10"Her mouth, open in a smile that showed too many teeth, all of them sharp, all of them wet."
11"The thing that wore her face took a step forward."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
84.6199%