Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KCCNTHX24RE5SRK0RHQ55T

Run Details

Duration:
3m 15s
Cost:
$0.006816
Provider:
SiliconFlow

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant burned through her shirt before she reached the stones. Rory Carter pressed her palm flat against the silver chain and felt the crimson gem thrum against her sternum like a desperate second heartbeat. Three nights it had glowed through her cotton top while she stared at the ceiling above Silas' bar. Three nights of warmth spreading across her ribs, making her think of fevers and infections, of things that should not be inside anyone. And then tonight the warmth had become a pull. An insistence. It dragged her out of bed, into a cab to Richmond, then on foot through the locked park gates, through whipping branches and ankle-deep mud, past oaks that leaned toward her as she passed. She had come to find out why. The grove looked ready to answer. A broken ring of standing stones hulked in the clearing, grey and heavy, older than anything else in London. Wildflowers carpeted the ground, bluebells and foxgloves and blossoms she had no names for, all wide open in November, all wrong. The air carried crushed green and cold earth, and beneath it a metallic tang that coated her tongue. Copper. Blood. Recent. She stopped at the edge of the circle, one foot on bracken, one foot on grass. The pendant thrummed. Her left wrist ached where the old crescent scar sat, a phantom itch she could not scratch. The silence hit her like a wall. No wind in the branches. No rustle of small things in the undergrowth. No distant traffic from the city that should have hummed beyond the treeline. The grove held its breath, and so did she. Behind her, something laughed. Not a human laugh. Too clipped, too dry, like stones knocking together. It came from the hawthorn thicket she had squeezed through minutes earlier, from the tangle that had scratched her forearms. She turned, slow. The branches stood still. The shadows between the trunks lay flat and empty. The scratches on her arms were fresh and parallel. Deliberate. She turned back to the stones, and a flicker crossed her vision. A stone inside the circle shifted, a grey tooth sliding in its socket. She snapped her head round. The stone stood motionless, exactly as it had been, patient. Nothing had moved. Except the flowers. Every bloom in the clearing faced her now. Bluebells, foxgloves, the nameless white blossoms, all turned toward her position like a field of small green eyes. The rational part of her, the part that had packed up her life in Cardiff and started over in London, offered explanations. A breeze. A trick of the moonlight. Drunk students from Richmond town. Each one crumbled before she finished the thought. The pendant flared, warmth tipping into needles against her sternum. Footsteps. Soft, deliberate, starting at the northern edge of the circle and moving anticlockwise. She counted. Ten. Twelve. The sound stopped at the eastern stone. Rory pulled her phone from her pocket, kept it low at her side, and angled the camera toward the grove. The screen flickered green in the darkness. Stones, flowers, the bare centre of the circle. She swept the camera in a slow pan. A figure stood at the eastern stone. Her thumb froze. The figure was thirty feet away, roughly human-shaped but too tall, too narrow, its edges bleeding into the dark like ink in water. Where a face should have been sat a smooth pale oval, tilted at an angle that made her throat tighten. It did not move. It had not moved. Which meant it had stood there the whole time, between the hawthorn and the circle, watching her pass. Or that it existed only on her screen. The phone buzzed once. The figure tilted its head, and static gathered around it like hair floating in water. A voice spoke from directly behind her. "Malphora." The word landed in her chest like a stone dropped into still water. She did not know that name. She had never heard it. But the pendant answered it, a low thrum that vibrated through her ribs and into her spine, and something in her, something she did not want to name, wanted to turn around and answer. Her scarred wrist throbbed in time with the gem. She turned. The centre of the circle held a bare patch of earth. No flowers, no grass, just dark soil wetter than the ground around it, as if the frost had been licked away. A shape pressed into the mud. Long. Narrow. The impression of a body with fingers too long and joints set at the wrong angles, something that had lain there recently and breathed the warmth out of the ground. It steamed in the cold night air. The pendant pulled. Not burned, but pulled, a steady tug at her sternum toward the circle, toward the waiting impression. And in the small rational corner of her mind, she understood. The shape was a measure. The thing at the eastern stone had been counting her footsteps, measuring her stride, the way you measure someone for a coffin. The laugh had been a greeting. The flowers had turned to track her. The grove had known she was coming before she knew herself, and the shape in the earth had been waiting for her to arrive. She took a step back. The impression breathed. A long, slow exhalation rolled over her ankles, smelling of old soil and honey and, underneath, the damp sweetness of rot. The bare patch of earth was no longer empty. A woman lay in it. Skin the colour of ash, hair spread across the black soil like dark water, eyes open and fixed above. Her lips moved without sound, forming a word with slow, deliberate care. Malphora. The pendant burned white against her sternum. Her scar split open, a thin line of warmth running down her wrist, blood or not-blood, impossible to tell. The standing stones began to turn. Not quickly, but with terrible deliberation, grinding in their sockets like the roots of an ancient tree shifting, all of them facing her, all of them. The woman in the earth sat up. Rory ran. Her trainers found purchase on the bracken. The hawthorn thicket loomed ahead, the gap she had come through, the way back to the world. She hit the branches with her shoulder and felt them tear at her jacket, her arms, her cheek. Behind her the laugh came again, closer now, right at her back, and the pendant seared against her skin like a brand, like something held on to her and hauled her backwards toward that measured hollow of mud. She clawed through the gap between the trunks. The grove swallowed her. The pendant went cold.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1120
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1120
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"warmth"
count5
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"loomed"
count1
8
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"flicker"
3"footsteps"
4"flickered"
5"vibrated"
6"throbbed"
7"loomed"
8"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences109
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1120
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions0
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount1117
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.27
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Three"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Three2
Richmond2
London2
November1
Cardiff1
Rory3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Three"
2"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"London"
2"November"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
21.43% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.786
wordCount1120
matches
0"Not burned, but pulled, a steady tug at her sternum toward the circle, towar"
1"Not quickly, but with terrible deliberation, grinding in their sockets like t"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"know that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean30.27
std29.15
cv0.963
sampleLengths
011
1110
213
358
43
536
642
74
858
943
1071
1110
1225
1343
147
1580
1619
177
181
1967
202
2170
227
2358
2437
255
263
2766
281
2926
3032
317
322
3380
348
354
364
98.83% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"been sat"
1"been licked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs164
matches
0"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences110
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount51
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount1
adverbRatio0.0196078431372549
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean10.18
std8.17
cv0.803
sampleLengths
011
124
218
323
49
52
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77
86
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1021
1118
121
131
141
1516
163
1717
187
195
208
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229
234
244
258
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273
284
299
309
311
3212
3313
345
3510
363
373
388
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412
425
435
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461
4713
482
491
43.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.33636363636363636
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners37
70.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences94
matches
0"Too clipped, too dry, like"
1"Soft, deliberate, starting at the"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences94
matches
0"It dragged her out of"
1"She had come to find"
2"She stopped at the edge"
3"Her left wrist ached where"
4"It came from the hawthorn"
5"She turned, slow."
6"She turned back to the"
7"She snapped her head round."
8"She swept the camera in"
9"Her thumb froze."
10"It did not move."
11"It had not moved."
12"She did not know that"
13"She had never heard it."
14"Her scarred wrist throbbed in"
15"It steamed in the cold"
16"She took a step back."
17"Her lips moved without sound,"
18"Her scar split open, a"
19"Her trainers found purchase on"
ratio0.234
71.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences94
matches
0"The pendant burned through her"
1"Rory Carter pressed her palm"
2"It dragged her out of"
3"She had come to find"
4"The grove looked ready to"
5"A broken ring of standing"
6"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, bluebells"
7"The air carried crushed green"
8"She stopped at the edge"
9"The pendant thrummed."
10"Her left wrist ached where"
11"The silence hit her like"
12"The grove held its breath,"
13"It came from the hawthorn"
14"She turned, slow."
15"The branches stood still."
16"The shadows between the trunks"
17"The scratches on her arms"
18"She turned back to the"
19"A stone inside the circle"
ratio0.777
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Three nights of warmth spreading across her ribs, making her think of fevers and infections, of things that should not be inside anyone."
1"It dragged her out of bed, into a cab to Richmond, then on foot through the locked park gates, through whipping branches and ankle-deep mud, past oaks that lean…"
2"The air carried crushed green and cold earth, and beneath it a metallic tang that coated her tongue."
3"The impression of a body with fingers too long and joints set at the wrong angles, something that had lain there recently and breathed the warmth out of the gro…"
4"The thing at the eastern stone had been counting her footsteps, measuring her stride, the way you measure someone for a coffin."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
86.4273%