Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KRVVB93RSHYZ9Y8F1X20G3

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Duration:
54.3s
Cost:
$0.006222
Provider:
Fireworks

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass hit the floor before she said his name. She stood with a Yu-Fei Cheung delivery bag slung over one shoulder and a cold pint sweating in her other hand. The distinctive green neon sign above the entrance hummed behind her. A small rectangular wooden table in The Raven’s Nest bore the dent of her elbow. The pint slid. “Christ.” Silas did not look up from polishing a small brass hip flask. He wore his neatly trimmed grey-streaked auburn beard the same way he wore his silver signet ring, always on his right hand. His slight limp caught as he shifted his weight. “You’re late.” “I’m not here for a drink,” Aurora said. “You’re holding a pint.” She set it down hard. The bar smelled of old leather and citrus cleaner. Walls covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs watched them. “Rory.” He said it like a test. She had not heard anyone call her that since Cardiff. “Silas.” The name sat between them. He had been a family friend once, her mother’s solicitor’s contact, the man who brought her sweets after school visits to the barrister’s chambers where Brendan Carter worked. She had been fifteen when she last saw him. He had been forty-eight and whole-kneed. “You grew your hair.” “Shoulder length. It’s easier.” Her straight black hair fell past her collar. She tucked it behind her ear. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the bar light. “You left Cardiff.” “I left Evan.” Silas set the hip flask down. He polished the same spot again. “I heard.” She laughed once, short and sharp. “You heard? From whom? Eva? She’s the one who got me the flat.” “Eva still thinks the world owes her a phone call.” He poured a measure of whisky into a glass he did not offer. “She sends postcards. From places she won’t name.” Aurora stared at the old maps on the wall. A yellowed photograph of a young woman with bright blue eyes stared back. “Is this where you hide now?” Silas’ hazel eyes flicked up. “It’s where I work.” “Is that what we call it.” He lifted his chin. “The Nest feeds people. It also keeps people. You’re living above it. You should know.” “I know the rent’s cheap.” “And the noise at two a.m. when the regulars argue about football.” “At least it isn’t Evan.” Silas’ jaw tightened. He did not ask. They had known each other in another life. Jennifer Carter née Ellis had introduced them after a school fundraiser. Silas had been a quiet man with a neat auburn beard and no limp. He had taken a teenage Aurora to the back room behind the bookshelf at his old chambers to show her how to pick a simple lock. *For emergencies*, he had said. *Never use it*. She had kept the habit of noticing hinges. Now the bar had a hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings. The same trick, different stage. “You’re not the same girl who tried to steal my signet ring,” he said. “You tried to let me.” “I tested you.” “I passed.” He smiled without warmth. “You always did think outside the box.” She shifted the delivery bag. The paper crinkled. “I’m on shift.” “Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress,” Silas said. “You work nights now.” “Part time. Pays the rent.” “You could be at university.” “I was at university. Pre-Law. Cardiff. I quit.” “Because of him.” “Because of a lot of things.” Silas reached under the bar and pulled out a thin file. He slid it across the wood. The top sheet bore her name. Aurora Carter. Age twenty five. The small crescent scar noted in a clinical line. “You’ve been watching me.” “I watch the street.” He tapped the file. “You’re in it.” She opened the file. Inside, a printout of a CCTV still. Her own face, blurred, leaving the flat at 3 a.m. three nights ago. A man followed her two streets down. “Evan?” “New surname. New phone.” Silas’ voice dropped. “He’s not the kind to forget a girl who embarrassed him in court.” Aurora’s fingers went cold. “I have a restraining order.” “Paper doesn’t stop men like him. It just makes them careful.” She closed the file. “Why show me this.” “Because you live above my bar.” He leaned forward, elbows on the worn wooden bar top. “Because your mother would have wanted me to look after you.” The mention of Jennifer Carter landed like a slap. Her mother had died two years ago. Welsh teacher, soft hands, always smelling of chalk. “Don’t.” “Don’t what.” “Don’t use her.” Silas picked up the hip flask again. The metal clicked against the glass. “I don’t use people, Rory. I use information.” “Is that what I am now? Information?” “You’re a liability.” The word hung. She felt her pulse in her throat. “You knew my father,” she said. “Brendan Carter. Did you know he called you before he died?” Silas’ hand stilled. “He said you were the only person he trusted who wasn’t a barrister.” “He was a good man.” “He was a coward.” Silas said nothing. Aurora leaned in. “He knew Evan was hitting me. He knew and he did nothing. He told me to keep my head down. My own father.” “You were a child.” “I was twenty two.” The bar door opened. A cold draft rolled in. A tall man in a black coat stepped inside, eyes scanning the room. He wore a cheap watch and a nervous smile. He headed straight for the back booth. Silas watched him. His slight limp became more pronounced as he shifted. “That’s him,” Aurora said. “The one from the still.” Silas did not turn. “You want me to go?” “Go where?” She understood suddenly. He had not been watching her. He had been waiting. “Silas.” “The bookshelf,” he said. “Behind the maps. Push the third volume from the left. *The Spy Who Came In From The Cold*. It’s loose.” “You’re asking me to hide.” “I’m asking you to be smart.” She laughed, a real one this time. “You taught me that.” The man in the black coat looked up. He saw them. He saw the file. Silas stood. He was six foot one and moved with quiet authority despite the limp. “Rory,” he said. “Don’t run straight. Don’t look back.” The man moved. Aurora shoved the third volume. The bookshelf swung inward with a soft sigh. Cold air rushed from the hidden back room. She grabbed the delivery bag and stepped through just as the bar door burst open again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences71
tagDensity0.155
leniency0.31
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1100
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1100
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"clandestine"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"clandestine"
3"warmth"
4"pulse"
5"scanning"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences156
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords13
totalWords1100
ratio0.012
matches
0"For emergencies"
1"Never use it"
2"The Spy Who Came In From The Cold"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount687
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.46
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Raven1
Nest1
Cardiff1
Brendan1
Carter4
Aurora8
Ellis1
Silas10
Jennifer2
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Cheung"
2"Nest"
3"Brendan"
4"Carter"
5"Aurora"
6"Ellis"
7"Silas"
8"Jennifer"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.772
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1100
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences156
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean12.5
std13.05
cv1.044
sampleLengths
010
150
21
343
42
58
64
724
81
916
101
1148
124
1330
143
153
1612
172
1819
1931
2022
216
229
236
2419
255
2612
275
287
2975
3021
3114
325
333
342
3511
3611
3710
385
395
408
413
426
4337
444
4511
4631
471
4820
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"been fifteen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs114
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences156
ratio0
matches(empty)
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount503
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small rectangular wooden table"
1"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.027833001988071572
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005964214711729622
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences156
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences156
mean7.05
std5.01
cv0.71
sampleLengths
010
121
211
315
43
51
612
722
89
92
108
114
125
139
1410
151
166
1710
181
195
2028
219
226
234
2412
256
2612
273
283
296
306
312
326
3313
3423
358
369
3713
386
395
404
416
424
4315
445
4512
465
473
484
498
42.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.26282051282051283
totalSentences156
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
29.52% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences84
matches
0"She stood with a Yu-Fei"
1"He wore his neatly trimmed"
2"His slight limp caught as"
3"She set it down hard."
4"He said it like a"
5"She had not heard anyone"
6"He had been a family"
7"She had been fifteen when"
8"He had been forty-eight and"
9"Her straight black hair fell"
10"She tucked it behind her"
11"He polished the same spot"
12"She laughed once, short and"
13"He poured a measure of"
14"He lifted his chin."
15"He did not ask."
16"They had known each other"
17"He had taken a teenage"
18"She had kept the habit"
19"He smiled without warmth."
ratio0.476
1.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences84
matches
0"The glass hit the floor"
1"She stood with a Yu-Fei"
2"The distinctive green neon sign"
3"A small rectangular wooden table"
4"The pint slid."
5"Silas did not look up"
6"He wore his neatly trimmed"
7"His slight limp caught as"
8"She set it down hard."
9"The bar smelled of old"
10"Walls covered with old maps"
11"He said it like a"
12"She had not heard anyone"
13"The name sat between them."
14"He had been a family"
15"She had been fifteen when"
16"He had been forty-eight and"
17"Her straight black hair fell"
18"She tucked it behind her"
19"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
ratio0.917
59.52% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"Now the bar had a"
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He had been a family friend once, her mother’s solicitor’s contact, the man who brought her sweets after school visits to the barrister’s chambers where Brendan…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences71
tagDensity0.099
leniency0.197
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.1957%