Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KS25CGC042WKDS32N43748

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17.8s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt clicked, and I kept the heavy brass latchkey wedged between my knuckles just in case. Lucien Moreau stood on the narrow landing, smelling of rain and expensive vetiver. His charcoal wool overcoat carried not a single speck of East London grime, though the greasy steam from the curry house downstairs curled thick around his tailored shoulders. "You took your time, Rory." "You did not call." "I rarely do." He stepped past me without waiting for an invitation, the polished ferrule of his ivory cane clicking softly against the warped floorboards. I slammed the door shut, throwing all three bolts home in rapid succession. Ptolemy hissed from atop a precarious stack of translation lexicons, his striped tail puffing into a bottle brush before he bolted under the sofa. Lucien paused, casting an amused glance at the scattered parchment and open grimoires cluttering Eva's small oak table. His right eye, pure molten amber, caught the harsh light of the bare overhead bulb. His left remained bottomless black, absorbing everything and offering nothing in return. "Charming retreat," he murmured, his French vowels clipping the edge of the sarcasm. "A little scholarly for your tastes, perhaps. But safe." "It was safe until about ten seconds ago." "Cruel. After I came all this way across the river." "You did not come across the river for a social call, Lucien." He turned slowly, setting both leather-gloved hands over the carved ivory head of his cane. The platinum hair swept back from his temples looked like spun silver under the yellow light. Six months had done nothing to soften the sharp cut of his jawline or the faint, sulfurous heat radiating through the expensive weave of his suit. "Must every conversation begin with an interrogation?" "With you? Absolutely." "Pity." He peeled off his left glove, finger by finger, revealing pale skin and dark, sharp nails. "I preferred you when you were less suspicious." "You mean when I was naive enough to trust you in Marseille." The glove hit Eva's dining table with a dull slap, right beside an open tin of dried sage. Lucien did not look away. The amber in his right eye flared slightly, a telltale flicker of the bloodline he kept tethered behind silk ties and immaculate manners. "I kept you alive in Marseille." "You used me as bait." "And you caught the prize. Efficiently, if memory serves." "You left me in a burning warehouse with three broken ribs and an angry pack of hellhounds." "I came back for you." "Twenty minutes late." "I stopped to kill their master." His voice dropped into that low, melodic cadence that made the short hairs on the nape of my neck prickle. "A detail you consistently omit when recounting the tale." The space between us shrank, though neither of us had taken a deliberate step. The cramped flat seemed to compress under the weight of him, pushing out the smell of stale tea and dusty paper, replacing it with ozone and hot metal. My left wrist burned beneath my cuff, the little crescent scar throbbing in rhythm with my pulse. "Eva is out until midnight," I said, leaning back against the bolted door. "If you came to steal her notes on the Avaros seals, you wasted a trip. I burned the copies yesterday." "I care nothing for the seals." "Then why are you here?" "A courier delivered a peculiar rumour to my parlour this morning." Lucien took a single, measured stride toward me, the cane tapping once. "A girl with black hair and a Welsh lilt was seen running deliveries for a noodle shop in Limehouse." "It pays the rent." "You have a first-class degree in law." "Pre-law." "A technicality." He stopped less than two feet away. He was taller by half a head, broad enough to blot out the rest of the dingy room. "You vanished into thin air, Rory. No forwarding address. No message. Only an empty room and a missing dagger from my private collection." "The dagger was mine. You lost it to me in a bet." "I allowed you to win." "You cheated, and I caught you. Big difference." A ghost of a smile touched his lips, gone before it could fully form. He reached out with his bare hand, pausing an inch from my face. The heat coming off his palm felt like an open furnace door in winter. I refused to flinch, refused to give him the satisfaction of looking away from that unnerving, mismatched gaze. "You look thin," he said quietly. "I eat fine." "You look tired." "I work hard." "You look ready to stab me." "I am considering it." His thumb brushed the edge of my jawline. The contact sent a sharp jolt straight down my spine, hot and illicit. His skin was rougher than it looked, calloused from decades of handling steel and silver. For a fraction of a second, the cold mask slipped from his features, revealing the raw, possessive hunger that had terrified me in France just as much as it had drawn me in. "Try it," he whispered. "See how far you get." "Do not test me, Luc." "I missed the sound of that name on your lips." "It is a bad habit I am trying to break." "Some habits are worth keeping." His hand slid down to my throat, not choking, merely resting there over my racing pulse. His thumb stroked the hollow beneath my ear with deliberate, torturous precision. My breath caught in my throat. I hated how easily my body betrayed me, how the memory of his mouth against my neck flared up hot and vivid in the cramped East London flat. "Evan knows you are in London," Lucien said, his tone turning utterly flat, professional, and lethal. The air froze in my lungs. The heat on my skin instantly turned to ice. "What?" "Your former fiancé. He hired three tracking hounds from the lower wards yesterday afternoon." Lucien did not remove his hand; his grip tightened just enough to anchor me. "He paid double the standard rate for your living return." "That is impossible. I covered my tracks." "You used your real name to sign a lease above a pub." "The landlord is human." "The barkeep is not." Lucien pulled his hand back, reaching inside his charcoal jacket to retrieve a heavy iron medallion, stamped with a snarling, three-headed canine. It was smeared with fresh, black ichor. "They did not wait for nightfall. I intercepted the first pair at Aldgate station." "You led the third one here," I breathed, horror uncoiling in my gut. "I did not lead anything, Rory. I killed two." The glass in the front window shattered into a thousand glittering shards. A heavy, clawed mass crashed through the frame, bringing half the brickwork with it. The beast landed on the coffee table, crushing Eva's research beneath three hundred pounds of black fur, jagged bone ridges, and snapping, dripping jaws. Lucien twisted the ivory handle of his cane, drawing four feet of shimmering, silver-inlaid steel in one fluid stroke, his amber eye blazing like a wildfire. "Behind me," he ordered.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.441
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.034
83.12% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1185
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
3"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1185
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"absolutely"
count1
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"lilt"
count1
7
word"down my spine"
count1
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"standard"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"absolutely"
1"flicker"
2"silk"
3"weight"
4"pulse"
5"measured"
6"lilt"
7"down my spine"
8"racing"
9"standard"
10"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences51
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1185
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
97.71% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount765
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.05
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
East2
London2
Eva3
French1
Lucien8
France1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
places
0"East"
1"London"
2"France"
globalScore0.977
windowScore1
43.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like spun silver under the yellow"
1"felt like an open furnace door in winte"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1185
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean18.52
std19.6
cv1.059
sampleLengths
018
141
25
34
43
522
682
722
88
910
1012
1157
127
133
1425
1512
1646
176
185
199
2017
215
223
2335
2459
2533
266
275
2842
294
307
311
3250
3312
345
358
3659
376
383
393
403
416
424
4369
449
455
4610
4710
485
4962
98.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences51
matches
0"was smeared"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs120
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences97
ratio0.01
matches
0"\"Your former fiancé. He hired three tracking hounds from the lower wards yesterday afternoon.\" Lucien did not remove his hand; his grip tightened just enough to anchor me."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount768
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"bottomless black, absorbing everything"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.02734375
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01171875
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean12.22
std7.51
cv0.615
sampleLengths
018
113
228
35
44
53
622
713
824
918
1015
1112
1213
139
148
1510
1612
1715
1816
1926
207
213
2217
238
2412
2518
265
2723
286
295
309
3117
325
333
3426
359
3614
3728
3817
3913
4020
416
425
4323
4419
454
467
471
489
4918
49.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3402061855670103
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
24.08% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences49
matches
0"His charcoal wool overcoat carried"
1"He stepped past me without"
2"I slammed the door shut,"
3"His right eye, pure molten"
4"His left remained bottomless black,"
5"he murmured, his French vowels"
6"He turned slowly, setting both"
7"He peeled off his left"
8"His voice dropped into that"
9"My left wrist burned beneath"
10"I said, leaning back against"
11"He stopped less than two"
12"He was taller by half"
13"He reached out with his"
14"I refused to flinch, refused"
15"he said quietly"
16"His thumb brushed the edge"
17"His skin was rougher than"
18"His hand slid down to"
19"His thumb stroked the hollow"
ratio0.49
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences49
matches
0"The third deadbolt clicked, and"
1"Lucien Moreau stood on the"
2"His charcoal wool overcoat carried"
3"He stepped past me without"
4"I slammed the door shut,"
5"Ptolemy hissed from atop a"
6"Lucien paused, casting an amused"
7"His right eye, pure molten"
8"His left remained bottomless black,"
9"he murmured, his French vowels"
10"He turned slowly, setting both"
11"The platinum hair swept back"
12"He peeled off his left"
13"The glove hit Eva's dining"
14"Lucien did not look away."
15"The amber in his right"
16"His voice dropped into that"
17"The space between us shrank,"
18"The cramped flat seemed to"
19"My left wrist burned beneath"
ratio0.959
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"For a fraction of a second, the cold mask slipped from his features, revealing the raw, possessive hunger that had terrified me in France just as much as it had…"
1"Lucien twisted the ivory handle of his cane, drawing four feet of shimmering, silver-inlaid steel in one fluid stroke, his amber eye blazing like a wildfire."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"he murmured, his French vowels clipping the edge of the sarcasm"
1"Lucien said, his tone turning utterly flat, professional, and lethal"
2"I breathed, horror uncoiling in my gut"
82.20% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"he whispered (whisper)"
2"I breathed (breathe)"
3"he ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.119
leniency0.237
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.136
77.6600%