Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KS2WAZKEKXWV30ZB7R7D0K

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Duration:
42.8s
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$0.013846
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Google AI Studio

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The heavy crystal tumbler slipped between my fingers, shattering against the zinc counter. Vodka and crushed ice splattered over my trainers. "Still as clumsy with glassware as you were with moot court evidence, Carter." The voice hit me like ice water down the collar. I froze with the rag gripped in my right hand, glass shards digging into the rubber sole of my shoe. Carys Hughes stood on the other side of the counter. She wore an immaculate charcoal wool coat over an ivory silk blouse that cost more than my monthly rent on the room upstairs. Her blonde bob sat razor-sharp against her jawline. Not a hair out of place. No ink stains on her fingers, no scars peeking from under tailored cuffs. "Hughes." "Rory. God, it actually is you." Carys slid onto a stool, her leather handbag resting against the polished timber. "Five years. You vanish off the face of Wales without a forwarding address, and I find you pouring gin in a Soho dive." "Vodka, actually." "Always splitting hairs." She glanced around the room, taking in the faded maritime maps, the cracked leather booths, the yellowed black-and-white portraits curling on the walls. "Your father told everyone you took a corporate placement in Edinburgh." "My father tells people what keeps his chambers happy." "He looked hollow at the Michaelmas banquet last term. Lost half his weight." I swept the broken glass into a black plastic dustpan, the scrape of zinc masking the hitch in my breath. Down at the far end of the counter, Silas Blackwood paused his inventory ledger. His hazel eyes shifted toward Carys, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the green neon bleed from the street window. He dragged his bad left leg two paces closer, silent as an owl, before setting down a dry highball glass. "Can I get you something, miss?" Silas said. His voice possessed that calm, flat weight that made people straighten their spines. "A dry martini. Tanqueray, if you have it," Carys said, without looking at him. Her eyes stayed locked on my face. "Though looking at this place, perhaps a clean beer is safer." Silas didn't blink. He reached for a fresh bottle behind the rail. "What brings you across the bridge, Carys? Corporate litigation usually keeps to the City." "Simpson and Croft took the third floor on Dean Street. I made partner last month." "Partner at twenty-five. Dad must have popped a vein in celebration." "He bought me a flat in Kensington. You would have made it first, you know." Carys pulled off a black leather glove, one finger at a time. "Everyone knew it. You were top of the list for pupillage. Brendan's golden girl. And then you dropped off the earth over a weekend." "People change tracks." "People don't swap the bar for bar work unless they're running." The silence hung between us, thick with the stench of stale ale and damp coats. Silas placed the martini glass in front of her. The gin was clear, cold, garnished with a single twist of lemon. "On the house," Silas said quietly, then limped toward the cellar door. Carys watched him go, raising an eyebrow. "Charming staff," she murmured. "Very Soho. Very underground." "He owns the place." "And you live above it?" She looked at the hem of my faded grey cotton jumper, then down at the white crescent scar tracing the skin near my left wrist. Her eyes lingered on it. She knew where that scar came from. She had sat in the common room at Cardiff University the afternoon Evan dragged me out by the arm, laughing off the bruises as drunken exuberance. "It suits me," I said. "You smell like delivery boxes and fried ginger, Rory." "Yu-Fei pays in cash and doesn't ask for my tax code." "Is this your rebellion? Slumming it in Soho to spite your parents?" "You never did understand the difference between spite and survival, Hughes." She sipped her drink, the ice clinking against the glass. A tiny, condescending smirk pulled at the corner of her lips. The same smirk she wore whenever she found an error in an opponent's skeleton argument. "Evan came to chambers three months ago," she said. The zinc counter beneath my palms felt suddenly freezing. "Did he." "Asked Brendan if he had an address for you. A phone number. Anything." Carys set her glass down with a precise, metallic tap. "He looked good. Very sharp. He took over his family's property development firm in Newport. He asked after you with so much concern, Rory. He said you had a breakdown before you left. Said you needed help." "Evan is a liar." "He seemed devastated." "Evan threw me down a flight of stone stairs behind the student union, Carys." She didn't flinch. Her gaze drifted to the row of whisky bottles behind me. "Couples have bad rows. You shouldn't have thrown away your career over a messy breakup." "A messy breakup." I leaned across the counter, keeping my voice down to a sharp whisper. "I had three cracked ribs and a ruptured spleen. I spent four days in the University Hospital of Wales under an alias because he was waiting in the lobby with a bouquet of lilies." "And look at you now," she countered, her voice dropping into that smooth, courtroom cadence. "Hiding behind an old man's bar, scraping pennies from grease traps, jumping at shadows. Look at what you gave up. I have the corner office that Brendan reserved for you. I have the silk gown waiting for me in five years. You were brilliant, Carter. You were the best of us. And you threw it in the gutter." "I stayed alive." "Did you?" She picked up her bag and drew out a gold embossed business card, sliding it across the damp zinc between us. "Call your father. Or call me. Evan is in London for the property summit this weekend. He's staying at the Langham." I stared at the black ink on the card. The letters blurred slightly under the green neon glare. "Why are you here, Carys?" "I told you. Dean Street." "Nobody walks into a dive south of Oxford Street by accident when their firm is on Dean Street." Carys paused, her hand hovering over her leather gloves. For the first time, the polished mask slipped, revealing something cold and calculating underneath. "Evan asked me to find out where you worked," she said. The heavy wooden front door of the bar swung open with a violent crack, the brass bell clattering frantically against the frame. Two tall broad-shouldered men in heavy black wool coats filled the doorway, blocking out the wet street outside. Behind them on the pavement, a silver Mercedes idled against the kerb, its rear door already open. Silas's footsteps halted at the cellar threshold. His hand vanished beneath the wooden counter. "Rory," Carys whispered, sliding off the stool. "He just wants to talk."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She glanced around [around]"
1"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.32
leniency0.64
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.08
78.39% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1157
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.46% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1157
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"crystal"
count1
1
word"silk"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"calculating"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"silk"
2"weight"
3"silence"
4"eyebrow"
5"tracing"
6"whisper"
7"calculating"
8"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences55
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences89
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1157
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
78.57% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount630
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.43
worstName"Carys"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Hughes1
Silas6
Blackwood1
Carys9
Cardiff1
University1
Evan1
Mercedes1
persons
0"Hughes"
1"Silas"
2"Blackwood"
3"Carys"
4"Evan"
5"Mercedes"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.786
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1157
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean19.95
std18.74
cv0.94
sampleLengths
013
18
213
330
410
550
61
742
82
937
109
1113
1277
138
1413
1532
1612
1714
1815
1911
2051
213
2211
2336
2412
257
268
274
2868
295
309
3111
3212
3311
3436
359
369
372
3860
394
403
4114
4214
4315
4450
4573
463
4744
4818
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs92
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences89
ratio0
matches(empty)
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount634
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"razor-sharp against her"
1"tall broad-shouldered men"
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.014195583596214511
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007886435331230283
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences89
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences89
mean13
std8.86
cv0.682
sampleLengths
013
18
213
310
420
510
623
78
86
913
101
1119
1223
132
1426
1511
169
1713
1820
1914
2023
2120
228
2313
2414
257
2611
273
289
2914
3015
3111
3227
3324
343
3511
3615
379
3812
3912
407
414
424
434
4430
455
467
4726
485
499
83.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5168539325842697
totalSentences89
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences50
matches
0"I froze with the rag"
1"She wore an immaculate charcoal"
2"Her blonde bob sat razor-sharp"
3"She glanced around the room,"
4"I swept the broken glass"
5"His hazel eyes shifted toward"
6"He dragged his bad left"
7"His voice possessed that calm,"
8"Her eyes stayed locked on"
9"He reached for a fresh"
10"She looked at the hem"
11"Her eyes lingered on it."
12"She knew where that scar"
13"She had sat in the"
14"She sipped her drink, the"
15"She didn't flinch."
16"Her gaze drifted to the"
17"I leaned across the counter,"
18"she countered, her voice dropping"
19"She picked up her bag"
ratio0.44
20.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences50
matches
0"The heavy crystal tumbler slipped"
1"Vodka and crushed ice splattered"
2"The voice hit me like"
3"I froze with the rag"
4"Carys Hughes stood on the"
5"She wore an immaculate charcoal"
6"Her blonde bob sat razor-sharp"
7"Carys slid onto a stool,"
8"She glanced around the room,"
9"I swept the broken glass"
10"His hazel eyes shifted toward"
11"He dragged his bad left"
12"His voice possessed that calm,"
13"Carys said, without looking at"
14"Her eyes stayed locked on"
15"Silas didn't blink."
16"He reached for a fresh"
17"Carys pulled off a black"
18"The silence hung between us,"
19"Silas placed the martini glass"
ratio0.88
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She wore an immaculate charcoal wool coat over an ivory silk blouse that cost more than my monthly rent on the room upstairs."
1"His voice possessed that calm, flat weight that made people straighten their spines."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Carys slid, her leather handbag resting against the polished timber"
1"Carys said, without looking at him"
2"she countered, her voice dropping into that smooth, courtroom cadence"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"Carys whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.16
leniency0.32
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.08
81.8165%