Run: 2026-09-03-01M1KZVR0TBNXCQXWGQJWY4EGG

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Duration:
3m 58s
Cost:
$0.038967
Provider:
Tencent

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory couldn't see the Veil. She knew it was there, a faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight, because Nyx had described it and Isolde had confirmed it with a riddle, but to her own eyes the rift point looked like nothing more than a patch of hot, wavering air above a forgotten stretch of Richmond Park earth. The Heartstone Pendant told her the truth. The deep crimson gem—no bigger than her thumbnail, strung on a silver chain—burned warm against her sternum, a steady pulse that matched the quickened beat of her heart. It had been a gift from an unknown benefactor, a stone plucked from Dymas itself, and it always knew when Hel was close. She pushed a strand of straight, shoulder-length black hair from her bright blue eyes and squinted at the empty air. "How thin is it?" "Thin as old parchment," Nyx said. The Shade solidified at her left, drawing themselves up from a pool of their own shifting darkness until they stood a little over six feet tall, a humanoid silhouette woven from living shadow. Faint violet light burned in the pits of their eyes. They didn't walk so much as flow, and when they spoke, it sounded like a whisper carried on the wind. "We cross now, before the Wardens circle back to this rift." On her right, Isolde Varga—ethereal, ageless, her pale lavender eyes reflecting the dull grey of the London sky—tilted her head. Silver hair spilled past her waist, stirring though the air was still. Rory had come to learn that the Half-Fae seer left no footprints when she walked; the damp soil behind them was unbroken where Isolde stood, as though she were a thought rather than a woman. "To bite the fruit, one must first find the orchard," Isolde murmured. She could not lie—Rory knew that now, knew it as surely as she knew the weight of the blade at her hip—but the Seer's truths were often wrapped in briars. "The Prince of Feasts keeps a table you have not yet seen." Rory's fingers found the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade. Moonsilver, slender and leaf-shaped, the dagger was always cold to the touch, a biting chill that seeped through her glove and into her palm. Isolde had given it to her, a weapon of the Fae Courts that could cut through magical wards and drink the lives of demons. Just holding it steadied her. "Let's go," Rory said. She stepped into the wavering air. The world turned inside out. For a heartbeat there was no ground, no sky, only the sensation of slipping through a membrane that clung like cobwebs and then tore. The pendant flared hot enough to make her gasp, and then the heat vanished, replaced by a thick, cloying warmth that filled her lungs like syrup. She staggered, catching herself, boots sinking into loam so rich and dark it looked ground from midnight. Nyx flowed through after her, shadow trailing smoke. Isolde was already there, standing in the middle of a path of crushed grape skins, her silver hair catching a light that was no longer grey. Rory looked up, and the breath left her in a rush. The sky was warm amber, a vast dome of honeyed light stretching from horizon to horizon with no sun to give it birth. It bathed everything in a perpetual golden hour, making the sprawling vineyards before them shimmer as if seen through a glass of old wine. Row upon row of vines climbed gentle hills, their leaves a deep, unnatural green, heavy with clusters of grapes the color of bruised twilight. Beyond the vineyards stood orchards, trees twisting toward the amber sky, their branches bowed under fruits that glowed faintly from within. "Welcome to Dymas," Nyx whispered, their voice almost lost in the rustle of leaves that sounded too much like whispering. Rory became aware of the pendant again, pulsing against her chest, a steady, drowsy thrum, like a cat purring. The air was filled with scent: roasted meat, caramelized sugar, ripe figs, and beneath it all, the sour-sweet reek of fruit left too long in the sun. "Where are the people?" Rory asked, keeping her voice low. Isolde glided forward, her feet making no sound, leaving no mark in the dirt. "The hands that harvest are not always the mouths that eat." They moved deeper. The path led them between two rows of vines. Up close, the grapes were larger than Rory's fist, their skins dusted with a silvery bloom. She reached out, then thought better of it. Something about the fruit seemed too eager, the way the heavy clusters leaned toward her warmth. A sound drifted to them: the rhythmic snip of shears, the thud of baskets being filled, and under it, a low, wordless humming. They crested a small rise and saw them. Dozens of figures moved through the vineyard, harvesting the grapes. They were human-shaped, but their skin had a waxy, translucent pallor, and their eyes were hollow pits that seemed to drink the amber light rather than reflect it. Helbound souls, contracted from Earth, their very selves bound to serve in Hel's gardens and kitchens. They worked with a mechanical grace, never speaking, only humming that same sorrowful tune. One of them, a woman with hair like dried corn, reached for a high cluster. Her fingers brushed the fruit, and the vine recoiled, tendrils whipping around her wrist. She didn't cry out. She simply went still, her hollow eyes fixed on nothing, until the vine loosened and let her drop the grapes into her basket. Rory's hand tightened on the cold hilt of her blade. "They're slaves." "Contracts are chains forged in ink and hunger," Isolde said, her voice soft. "The vine remembers the hand that fed it, but the hand forgets it ever held a knife." Nyx drifted closer to the workers, their shadow form elongating. "They cannot leave. The Prince's gardens are generous, but generosity here is a cage with golden bars." Unease prickled the back of Rory's neck. This was a place of excess and indulgence, yes, but the excess was built on the bound. The beauty of the vineyard suddenly felt like a mouth, waiting to close. They pressed on, leaving the harvesters behind. The path narrowed, winding into an orchard where the trees were ancient things, their trunks gnarled and wide as cottages. Fruits hung in impossible abundance: pears that shimmered like opals, apples with skins the color of a fresh bruise, and great golden gourds that pulsed with a faint inner light. Rory paused beside one tree, its branches heavy with fruit that looked like plums made of smoked glass. A single blossom drifted down, landing on her sleeve. Even as she watched, the petals curled inward, turning from pink to brown to dust in the space of three heartbeats. She reached out to brush the ash away, and a tendril from a nearby vine shot toward her, faster than a snake. Rory reacted without thinking. She drew the Fae-Forged Blade in one smooth motion, the moonsilver dagger gleaming dully in the amber light. The movement pulled her left sleeve back, baring the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist. The blade was frigid, the cold of it sharp in her hand. She slashed at the tendril. There was a sound like a struck bell, and the vine jerked back. The cut end smoked, oozing a sap that looked—and smelled—like mulled wine. Where the moonsilver had passed, a faint shimmer in the air dissipated; the vine had been protected by a minor ward, and the blade had sliced through it as if it weren't there. "Well," Rory said, exhaling slowly, "that answers that." Nyx solidified beside her, violet eyes bright. "The blade drinks magic. It will drink the Prince's creatures just as easily, if they come." Isolde touched the trunk of the tree, her pale hand lingering on the bark. She left no mark, not even a disturbance in the dust. "The orchard gives, and the orchard takes. Ask not the fruit for mercy, for mercy is a season that does not grow here." They went deeper, and the orchard opened into a garden that stole the breath from Rory's lungs. It was an explosion of color and scent, a mad, glorious tangle of ingredients Rory couldn't name. Vegetables the size of boulders grew beside herbs that chimed faintly when the breeze stirred their leaves. Flowers bloomed in colors that hurt the eye, and the air was so thick with pollen that it glittered like fine gold dust. In the center of the garden stood a long table, heaped with a feast that defied reason. Whole roasted beasts with skin like lacquered mahogany, towers of fruits, breads still steaming, and sauces that swirled with colors Rory had never seen. But there was no one eating. The table was laid, the food steaming, and yet the garden was empty of feasters. "Where is everyone?" Rory asked. As if in answer, a roar of laughter and clattering platters echoed from beyond a hedge of towering sunflowers. Nyx shifted, their form turning incorporeal, melting into the shadows beneath the plants to scout. Isolde and Rory waited, the Seer's silver hair stirring, Rory's pendant pulsing a slow, warning warmth. Nyx returned a moment later, reforming with a rush of wind. "A grand feast," they whispered, voice urgent. "Beyond the hedge. Helbound souls serving, and others… indulging. A culinary competition. The Prince's guests eat until they burst, and then they are made whole to eat again." Rory's stomach turned. The wonder of the amber sky, the singing herbs, the glowing fruit—it was all a veneer over something ravenous. She looked at Isolde, expecting a riddle, but the Seer's pale lavender eyes were fixed on the horizon, where a vast pavilion of silken tents rose against the warm amber sky. "The table is set," Isolde said, her voice barely a thread of sound. "And we have not yet been invited." Rory tightened her grip on the cold blade. The Heartstone Pendant thrummed against her skin, a steady, seductive rhythm, like a heartbeat inviting her deeper into the glittering, hungry heart of Dymas. She took a step forward, and the garden seemed to lean in with her, the vines and the flowers and the heavy, perfumed air all whispering the same wordless promise: *More.* They moved toward the pavilion.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.476
leniency0.952
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.39% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1743
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.23% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1743
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"wavering"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"quickened"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count3
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"mechanical"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"gleaming"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"wavering"
1"pulse"
2"quickened"
3"whisper"
4"weight"
5"chill"
6"warmth"
7"rhythmic"
8"mechanical"
9"shimmered"
10"pulsed"
11"gleaming"
12"echoed"
13"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
99.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1735
ratio0.001
matches
0"More."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions70
wordCount1542
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.43
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Nyx8
Isolde12
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Dymas2
Hel2
Shade1
Varga1
London1
Half-Fae1
Rory22
Seer3
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Fae4
Courts1
Earth1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Isolde"
2"Pendant"
3"Shade"
4"Rory"
5"Seer"
6"Blade"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Dymas"
3"Hel"
4"London"
5"Earth"
globalScore0.787
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like nothing more than a patch of"
1"sounded like a whisper carried on the wind"
2"pits that seemed to drink the amber light rather than reflect it"
3"felt like a mouth, waiting to close"
4"looked like plums made of smoked glass"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1735
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"learn that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean41.31
std31.8
cv0.77
sampleLengths
0119
124
26
374
467
554
662
74
86
955
1051
1111
1292
1320
1446
1510
1625
173
1849
1923
208
21124
2212
2330
2427
2537
2657
2770
2854
2958
308
3123
3248
3317
34119
355
3650
3746
3853
3920
4063
415
84.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences99
matches
0"was filled"
1"being filled"
2"was built"
3"been protected"
4"was laid"
5"were fixed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs259
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences110
ratio0.064
matches
0"The deep crimson gem—no bigger than her thumbnail, strung on a silver chain—burned warm against her sternum, a steady pulse that matched the quickened beat of her heart."
1"On her right, Isolde Varga—ethereal, ageless, her pale lavender eyes reflecting the dull grey of the London sky—tilted her head."
2"Rory had come to learn that the Half-Fae seer left no footprints when she walked; the damp soil behind them was unbroken where Isolde stood, as though she were a thought rather than a woman."
3"She could not lie—Rory knew that now, knew it as surely as she knew the weight of the blade at her hip—but the Seer's truths were often wrapped in briars."
4"The cut end smoked, oozing a sap that looked—and smelled—like mulled wine."
5"Where the moonsilver had passed, a faint shimmer in the air dissipated; the vine had been protected by a minor ward, and the blade had sliced through it as if it weren't there."
6"The wonder of the amber sky, the singing herbs, the glowing fruit—it was all a veneer over something ravenous."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1558
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.03209242618741977
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.007060333761232349
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean15.77
std8.85
cv0.561
sampleLengths
05
156
27
328
423
520
64
76
833
910
1020
1111
1220
1312
1435
1512
1630
1712
189
1924
2024
215
224
236
245
2524
2626
2717
288
2926
3011
3123
3224
3324
3421
3520
3619
3727
3810
3914
4011
413
429
4316
448
4516
4623
478
4810
4928
62.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.39090909090909093
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners43
35.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"Just holding it steadied her."
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences95
matches
0"She knew it was there,"
1"It had been a gift"
2"She pushed a strand of"
3"They didn't walk so much"
4"She could not lie—Rory knew"
5"She stepped into the wavering"
6"She staggered, catching herself, boots"
7"It bathed everything in a"
8"They moved deeper."
9"She reached out, then thought"
10"They crested a small rise"
11"They were human-shaped, but their"
12"They worked with a mechanical"
13"Her fingers brushed the fruit,"
14"She didn't cry out."
15"She simply went still, her"
16"They pressed on, leaving the"
17"She reached out to brush"
18"She drew the Fae-Forged Blade"
19"She slashed at the tendril."
ratio0.284
44.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences95
matches
0"Rory couldn't see the Veil."
1"She knew it was there,"
2"The Heartstone Pendant told her"
3"The deep crimson gem—no bigger"
4"It had been a gift"
5"She pushed a strand of"
6"The Shade solidified at her"
7"They didn't walk so much"
8"Rory had come to learn"
9"She could not lie—Rory knew"
10"Rory's fingers found the hilt"
11"Moonsilver, slender and leaf-shaped, the"
12"Isolde had given it to"
13"She stepped into the wavering"
14"The world turned inside out."
15"The pendant flared hot enough"
16"She staggered, catching herself, boots"
17"Nyx flowed through after her,"
18"Isolde was already there, standing"
19"Rory looked up, and the"
ratio0.832
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"Even as she watched, the"
1"As if in answer, a"
ratio0.021
37.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The deep crimson gem—no bigger than her thumbnail, strung on a silver chain—burned warm against her sternum, a steady pulse that matched the quickened beat of h…"
1"Rory had come to learn that the Half-Fae seer left no footprints when she walked; the damp soil behind them was unbroken where Isolde stood, as though she were …"
2"Isolde was already there, standing in the middle of a path of crushed grape skins, her silver hair catching a light that was no longer grey."
3"It bathed everything in a perpetual golden hour, making the sprawling vineyards before them shimmer as if seen through a glass of old wine."
4"Isolde glided forward, her feet making no sound, leaving no mark in the dirt."
5"They were human-shaped, but their skin had a waxy, translucent pallor, and their eyes were hollow pits that seemed to drink the amber light rather than reflect …"
6"Fruits hung in impossible abundance: pears that shimmered like opals, apples with skins the color of a fresh bruise, and great golden gourds that pulsed with a …"
7"Where the moonsilver had passed, a faint shimmer in the air dissipated; the vine had been protected by a minor ward, and the blade had sliced through it as if i…"
8"As if in answer, a roar of laughter and clattering platters echoed from beyond a hedge of towering sunflowers."
9"Isolde and Rory waited, the Seer's silver hair stirring, Rory's pendant pulsing a slow, warning warmth."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Isolde said, her voice soft"
1"they whispered, voice urgent"
2"Isolde said, her voice barely a thread of sound"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.476
leniency0.952
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.286
75.2291%