Run: 2026-09-03-01M1M05KN3KRXG30ZA4YJ8ZPRP

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Duration:
4m 9s
Cost:
$0.039857
Provider:
Tencent

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt gave a metallic groan and I hauled the door open on the tail end of a curse. I'd expected Eva back from her research trip, arms full of takeaway and apologies for losing her keys again. Instead, Lucien Moreau stood in the cramped communal hallway, one hand raised to knock, the other curled around the ivory head of his cane. His platinum blond hair was slicked back, a tailored charcoal suit sharp enough to cut the gloom. Heterochromatic eyes, one amber, one black, fixed on me, and the copper tang of blood drifted from him on the warm air rising from the curry house below. "You changed the deadbolts." "Three of them. Eva's idea." "Not for Eva." He stepped forward, not waiting for an invitation. "You've been looking over your shoulder." My hand tightened on the door. I could have slammed it. Should have. But his shoulder was dark and sticky, the charcoal wool soaked through near the collarbone. "You're bleeding on Eva's doormat." He glanced down, almost surprised. "It's not mine." "Liar." "Mostly not mine." He swayed, just slightly, and the cane clicked against the floorboards. "May I come in, or would you prefer I bleed in the hall?" I should have said no. I stepped back. He moved past me into the flat, and the cramped one-bedroom swallowed him whole. Every surface was buried under Eva's research, books stacked in precarious towers, scrolls unrolled across the small dining table, research notes pinned to the walls like incantations. The single window looked out over Brick Lane, fogged at the edges, the neon sign of the curry house below painting the clutter in greasy reds and golds. The scent of cumin and frying onions seeped up through the floorboards, fighting with the dust and old paper. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby, lifted his head from a pile of paperbacks, blinked his disapproval, and went back to sleep. Lucien took in the chaos and the blade hidden in his cane gave a faint snick as he leaned on it. "Charming." "Eva's in Marrakesh chasing a grimoire." I shut the door and threw all three deadbolts. "I'm housesitting. Studying. Not receiving gentlemen callers with stab wounds." "Gentlemen?" One dark brow arched. "After all this time, you still can't lie to save your life." I turned on him. "What do you want, Lucien?" His gaze dropped to my mouth, then lower, to the crescent scar on my left wrist. My thumb was already worrying the crescent mark. I snatched my hand down. "You still do that when you're cornered." "I'm not cornered." The lie tasted like copper. "I'm cautious. There's a difference. One gets you killed in your world." "Our world, last I checked." The amber eye caught the light, the black one swallowed it. "You used to say that like it was a promise." "That was before you walked out of it." Silence stretched. Below us, the curry house's doorbell let out a tinny ding-dong. He swayed again, and this time I saw the tremor in his knees. I closed the distance and shoved him down onto the little sofa, wedged between a tower of hardbacks and a stack of yellowed notes. "Shirt off," I ordered. His lips twitched. "At least buy me dinner first." "Lucien." He shrugged out of the charcoal jacket with a hiss of pain. The white shirt beneath was crimson from collarbone to ribs. I grabbed a clean tea towel from the cluttered kitchenette, the only clear surface in the room, and pressed it to the wound. He caught my wrist, his grip hot and shaking. "You're shaking," he murmured. "It's rage." "It's not." His thumb brushed the pulse point under my scar, and traitorous heat pooled low in my belly. "You missed me." I yanked my hand free and pressed the towel harder. He grunted, head falling back against a stack of books. "Careful. I'm ticklish." "Stop deflecting. Who did this?" "An old client." His breathing roughened. "A demon with a grudge and a brutal knife." "From Avaros?" His eyes flickered to mine. "What do you know about Avaros?" "I know enough to know you never told me the whole truth." I leaned in, close enough to smell sandalwood and cold iron under the blood. "You said you were a broker." "I am a broker." "You're half-demon." "That, too." His jaw tightened. "And I repaid your trust by walking away." "Why?" "Because the last person I loved ended up in a river with her throat cut." The words were flat, final. "I watched it happen. I wasn't going to watch it happen to you." I stilled, the towel warm and wet in my hand. "So you decided for me." "I decided to keep you alive." "I don't need your protection." "You needed it tonight." His voice dropped. "Evan found you." The name hit like a fist. The room tilted. Ptolemy shot off the books and vanished under the sofa. "No." "I'm sorry." "You're lying." My voice cracked. "Since when do you lie to me?" His good hand came up, knuckles grazing my jaw. I hated that my eyes fluttered shut for a second, hated the warmth of his skin, hated the way my body remembered every inch of him. "Since I told you I'd keep you safe," he said. "But I never stopped watching, Rory. Not for one day." "You have a funny way of showing it. You disappeared." "I left to keep you breathing." "Well, I stopped breathing the day you walked out." The words tore out of me, raw and ugly. He stilled. Then, slowly, he drew me down until our faces were an inch apart. His breath warmed my lips. "I missed you, too." The air between us tightened, every unsaid thing screaming to be let out. His hand slid into my hair. I could taste the blood of his split lip, feel the tremor in his fingers, and God help me, I leaned in. The front door shuddered. A heavy shoulder slammed against the wood from the other side. Paint flaked from the frame. "Rory!" Evan's voice, drunk and ragged, cut through the door like a saw. "I know you're in there, you stupid bitch. Open up!" Lucien's cane came up, the hidden blade sliding free with a whisper of steel. His amber eye burned like a furnace, and the shadows in the corners of Eva's flat stretched toward him, hungry and alive. "Get behind me," he said, as the second deadbolt gave way.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He swayed just [just]"
1"The lie tasted like [like]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.295
leniency0.59
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.066
90.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1082
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1082
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"fluttered"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"silence"
2"pulse"
3"flickered"
4"fluttered"
5"warmth"
6"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences70
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1082
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount754
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.53
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva4
Lucien3
Moreau1
Brick1
Lane1
One1
Silence1
God1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
3"One"
4"Silence"
5"God"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1082
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"hated that my"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean18.98
std20.27
cv1.068
sampleLengths
020
188
24
35
417
528
65
78
81
927
108
11107
1222
1325
1417
159
1629
177
1820
1926
208
2150
224
239
241
2554
264
272
2822
2923
305
3115
322
3311
3432
354
362
3713
381
3933
4015
416
425
4310
4420
452
4612
4755
4810
496
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences70
matches
0"was slicked"
1"was buried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs132
matches
0"was already worrying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount756
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.027777777777777776
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006613756613756613
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean9.66
std6.9
cv0.715
sampleLengths
020
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224
317
428
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65
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96
105
112
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135
145
153
161
1714
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195
203
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2227
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2419
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2621
271
2815
2910
305
3112
324
335
3416
358
365
377
388
3912
4016
4110
428
432
4411
4513
4624
474
483
496
63.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.41964285714285715
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences64
matches
0"Instead, Lucien Moreau stood in"
1"Then, slowly, he drew me"
ratio0.031
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences64
matches
0"I'd expected Eva back from"
1"His platinum blond hair was"
2"He stepped forward, not waiting"
3"My hand tightened on the"
4"I could have slammed it."
5"He glanced down, almost surprised."
6"He swayed, just slightly, and"
7"I should have said no."
8"I stepped back."
9"He moved past me into"
10"I shut the door and"
11"I turned on him."
12"His gaze dropped to my"
13"My thumb was already worrying"
14"I snatched my hand down."
15"He swayed again, and this"
16"I closed the distance and"
17"His lips twitched."
18"He shrugged out of the"
19"I grabbed a clean tea"
ratio0.594
6.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences64
matches
0"The third deadbolt gave a"
1"I'd expected Eva back from"
2"His platinum blond hair was"
3"He stepped forward, not waiting"
4"My hand tightened on the"
5"I could have slammed it."
6"He glanced down, almost surprised."
7"He swayed, just slightly, and"
8"I should have said no."
9"I stepped back."
10"He moved past me into"
11"Every surface was buried under"
12"The single window looked out"
13"The scent of cumin and"
14"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby, lifted his"
15"Lucien took in the chaos"
16"I shut the door and"
17"I turned on him."
18"His gaze dropped to my"
19"My thumb was already worrying"
ratio0.906
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He stepped, not waiting for an invitation"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"I ordered (order)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.066
leniency0.131
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.066
87.3812%