Run: 2026-09-03-01M1M05X16SWJ961V9E5VW76AD

Run Details

Duration:
3m 36s
Cost:
$0.043790
Provider:
AkashML

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The crack in the Veil looked less like a wound than a held breath. It hung at the end of the service alley behind Silas’s bar, thin as a hairline in a plate, and the winter air around it had gone wrong. Rory could feel it in the silver chain at her throat. The Heartstone pendant, deep crimson and no bigger than her thumbnail, had been warm all afternoon, but now it pressed against her collarbone like a coin left in the sun. “Stop fidgeting.” The Warden’s voice was dry as paper. He stood between them in a coat too old for the night, his face a map of thin lines and sharper decisions. “If you keep touching that stone, you’ll convince me you’re afraid.” “I’m not afraid. I’m calculating.” “Both are usually the same.” Nyx moved beside her with the careful grace of something trying not to be seen. In the gray lamplight, they were less a person than a cut in the dark, a silhouette with edges that kept losing certainty. Their eyes, when they met Rory’s, glowed a faint, patient violet. “The veil is thin,” they whispered. The sound did not come from one place. It came from the wind itself, as if the air had learned to speak. “Too thin. And hungry.” Rory looked at the shimmer again. To ordinary eyes, it might have been a heat haze, a trick of the solstice. To her, it was a door with no handle. “Does it always look this bad?” “It is a rift point,” the Warden said. “We monitor them. Tonight it is bleeding.” “Bleeding?” “Into. Out of. Depends which side you are on.” Rory swallowed. She had left Cardiff to get away from Evan, had traded one city’s pressure for London’s, had spent the day delivering boxes for Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress and another night sleeping in a flat above a bar that smelled of gin and old beer. She had not expected the job to end with a supernatural door, a shade who had been trapped since the seventeenth century, and a Warden who spoke as if apocalyptic weather were a mild inconvenience. “Three steps,” the Warden said. “Don’t touch anything. Don’t accept anything. And if it asks for your name, you say you are lost.” Nyx’s shadowed hand closed around Rory’s wrist. It was cool, not cold. Their fingers settled over the small crescent scar on her left wrist. “No name. No thanks. No eating.” Rory nodded once, quick and clean. “Understood.” The Warden stepped into the shimmer first. The last thing she heard from London was the distant wail of a siren, then a sound like a spoon dragging across an empty bowl. Rory stepped forward. Nyx flowed in beside her. The cold vanished. Heat rolled over her from every side, soft as bathwater and heavy as a hand on her chest. The air smelled of honey, roasting garlic, black pepper, and something green that could not be named, some orchard blossom that bloomed in a season she did not recognize. Above them, the sky was not black or blue but a deep, warm amber, as if the sun had been caught in resin. There were no stars, no clouds, no moon, only a slow turning of pale light through the amber haze. “Welcome,” Nyx breathed, and for the first time they did not sound certain of their own solidity. “To a place that has no darkness.” Rory forced her eyes open fully. They stood at the edge of a wide terrace cut into a hillside of pale stone. Before them, the land rose and fell in terraces of vineyards, orchards, and gardens so thick they looked alive. Vines with leaves the color of burnt copper climbed arches of weathered stone. Fruit hung in clusters: pears the size of fists, apples with skin like polished garnets, strange red berries that pulsed faintly, as if they had hearts. The stone under her boots was warm. A little too warm. “What is this?” “Dymas,” the Warden said. “Gluttony. One of the old mouths of Hel.” The words landed flat in her mouth. Hel. Not a metaphor. Not a story. The pendant at her throat pulsed once, twice, a slow red throb that matched the beat of her pulse. “The stone—” “Is happy to be home,” the Warden said. Rory turned the pendant between her thumb and forefinger. It was a deep crimson, set in a silver chain, no larger than her thumbnail. It had arrived at her door weeks ago with no note, only a faint inner glow that she had learned to keep covered. Now that glow had brightened. “Home?” “To this side of the Veil. To a place that feeds.” He adjusted a brass instrument at his belt, its needle spinning with faint irritation. “I have read its name in the old files. I have never seen it. We have a rift to close and a way out to find. Keep moving.” They moved. The path between the terraces was paved with stones worn smooth by feet that had not existed for centuries. Every few paces, a garden opened beside them. In one, bread rose in loaves from baskets of white stone, the crust cracking in slow bursts of steam. In another, a fountain poured wine that was not red, not gold, but the color of a bruise, and the stream curved upward into clay jars suspended from the branches of an olive tree. The sound was there too: the clatter of copper pots, the low murmur of voices, the bright ring of knives on boards. A feast, perhaps, or the promise of one. Rory’s stomach turned over. She had not eaten since a packet of biscuits in the flat. The smell reached into that small, tired hollow and fanned it. Her first thought was not fear but appetite. The second was that the appetite was being fanned. “Stay with me,” Nyx said. They were close. Too close. Rory had expected the shade to slip between shadows, to drift through the dark corners of the alley or the back of the bar, but here there were too few shadows. The amber light left little room for them. Nyx’s form flickered at the edges, a silhouette made of absence struggling to hold its shape. “How are you?” Rory asked. “Remembering what it is to be small,” Nyx said. “There is not enough dark here to hide in. It makes me… visible.” The Warden did not answer. He was watching the terraces ahead, where the gardens gave way to a broad avenue lined with arches. Beneath each arch, a table had been set. Cloth the color of cream, silver that caught the amber light, plates that seemed to hold more than their rims should allow. The avenue led down into a natural amphitheater, and from there came the sound of music: strings, a drum, and laughter that rose and fell in waves. “The competition is starting,” the Warden murmured. “Competition for what?” “For attention. For mouths. For contracts.” A woman emerged from behind a row of grapevines. She wore a chef’s whites, once immaculate, now stained with ash and something dark. Her hair was pinned up with a silver knife. She smiled at Rory, and the smile was so practiced it had no warmth. “Travelers,” she said. “You look tired. You look hungry. Come, the first course is almost ready.” Rory’s boots stopped. “I’m not interested.” The woman tilted her head. “First course is always a courtesy. For the road. A pear, maybe. Something spiced. One bite. It will not cost you.” The Warden’s hand moved to his belt. “It always costs.” The woman’s smile did not waver. “I am Elaine.” Her name was a receipt, the Warden said. Do not cash it. Elaine’s eyes found the pendant. They widened, just barely. “That is warm,” she whispered. “You carry a piece of the old heart.” Rory’s hand went to her pocket, where the Fae-forged blade lay folded in a cloth. It was cold through the fabric, a leaf-shaped dagger of moonsilver, given to her by Isolde in a grove where time had no manners. The blade had no moon here to make it shine, but the cold of it felt like a promise. “Elaine?” Rory asked, because her mind was already reaching for the shape of the thing. “When did you sign?” The woman’s smile cracked, just enough. “I accepted.” “Accepted what?” “The gift. The food. The taste.” Elaine’s hand rose, and on her palm sat a spoon. A single pear sat on it, glistening, split with honey and cinnamon. The smell hit Rory like a wall. “I was so cold,” Elaine said softly. “So hungry. They said one taste. Then I had to earn the next. I am still earning.” Rory looked at the woman’s feet. The stone path did not hold their shadow. Or rather, it held no shadow at all. “You’re contracted,” Rory said. It was not a question. Elaine laughed, a thin sound. “Bound. Paid. Fed. All the same, miss. All the same.” The Warden took a step forward. “Elaine, the door is not for you. It is for us.” “Then go. But do not let it feed on you. It will ask you what you are missing. It knows.” The pear on the spoon trembled. Rory’s throat tightened. She thought of the empty kitchen in her flat, of her mother’s hands teaching her to measure flour, of the way Evan had made food a weapon, a thing he withheld until she begged. She thought of Golden Empress, of steaming baskets and the comfort of shared tables. The Dymas air thickened around those thoughts, sweet and cruel. “No,” she said. The word was small. It held. Elaine’s eyes glistened. “That is braver than you know.” Then the music from the amphitheater swelled, and the woman was gone, folded into the vines as if she had never been more than a trick of the light. Rory exhaled. “What just happened?” “A demonstration,” the Warden said. “They show you the hook before they set the line.” They walked on. The amphitheater opened ahead of them, and Rory understood why the place was called a mouth. The terraces curved around a great circular kitchen, its hearths burning with flames the color of ripe fruit. Chefs moved in clusters, each one plating dishes with impossible precision. One set a tower of cream that folded and refolded like a sail. Another carved a fish into translucent slices, and the slices stayed arranged in the shape of the whole fish, still glistening, still alive in their arrangement. A third poured sauce from a copper pot, and the sauce fell upward into a bowl balanced on a single stalk of wheat. The beauty of it stole the breath from Rory’s lungs. It was not just food. It was memory made edible. It was the exact shape of longing, plated and served. “Don’t look directly at the plates,” the Warden said. “They are wards.” Rory looked away, but too late. A golden thread had appeared across her vision, thin as spider silk, stretching from a nearby plate to the pendant at her throat. It pulsed. The pendant pulsed back. The Fae blade was in her hand before she fully decided to draw it. The moonsilver dagger was cold in her grip, so cold her knuckles ached. She slashed at the thread. The blade moved through the air, and where it passed, the thread did not merely break. It dissolved, hissing like silk touched by fire. Rory gasped. The pressure behind her eyes lifted. Nyx was there, their violet eyes bright. “It was reading your name,” they said. “Through the hunger.” The Warden was already moving, his brass instrument out, its needle now steady. “The anchor is farther in. The hall. We have to pass the feast.” “The feast?” “The heart of Dymas.” He glanced at her, and for the first time his face held something closer to fear. “If you eat, you belong. If you refuse, it may remember you. Keep refusing.” They entered the hall. It was larger than the amphitheater, larger than any room Rory had ever seen inside. The ceiling vanished into amber darkness, and from it hung clusters of fruit that glowed faintly, each one a lantern. The floor was pale stone, polished by ages of footsteps. A long table stretched through the center of the hall, set with cloth and silver and plates that seemed to multiply when she looked at them. At the far end stood a throne of gnarled wood, its back carved into the shape of a mouth, its seat empty but warm with a heat that radiated across the stone. The Warden’s gaze snapped to the throne. “Belphegor’s chair,” he said. “Do not sit. Do not kneel.” Rory’s breath caught. The chair belonged to a prince who was not there, yet it carried the smell of him: honey and burnt sugar, and something darker underneath, like sugar left too long over fire. The wood had grown teeth. The pendant was no longer warm. It was hot, a coal pressed to her skin, its inner glow spreading through the silver chain. “No guest leaves hungry,” the Warden read aloud from a slab of dark stone beside the table. His voice was low. “That is not a promise. It is a claim.” Nyx stood beside her, more solid than before, their shadowed form sharp against the amber light. “It knows we are here now,” they whispered. “The food is listening.” From the kitchen came the sound of a thousand knives being laid down. The music stopped. A servant emerged from the shadows—or what passed for shadows in this place, thin ribbons of deeper amber. It held a tray. On the tray sat a plate with three items: a golden dumpling, a slice of Welsh cake dusted with powdered sugar, and a small glass of wine the color of late afternoon. Rory stared. In the wine’s surface, her bright blue eyes looked back at her, and her black hair, loose from its clip, made her look younger and more afraid than she was. Her mother’s kitchen. Her father’s study. The smell of the bar below her flat, where the gin was bad and the company had once felt safe. The plate was a mirror of every hunger she had ever been ashamed of. The pendant seared against her throat. The Warden’s hand closed over her wrist. “Do not name it.” Nyx’s voice was a wind through a dead field. “Cut the invitation.” Rory looked at the plate. She looked at the Fae blade in her hand. Then she stepped forward, not toward the food, but toward the air above it. The plate sat on a circle of faint gold, a thread made visible by the blade’s cold edge. She cut. The gold snapped. The plate did not fall, but it turned to ash, fine and sweet-smelling, drifting upward into the glowing fruit. The servant recoiled. The hall shuddered. The amber light flickered, and for one instant Rory saw the true shape of the room: a throat, vast and lined with ancient stone, waiting. Then the light steadied. The Warden exhaled. “Keep moving,” he said. “Now.” Rory followed, the cold blade in one hand, the burning pendant in the other, while behind them the long table groaned as if something had finally opened its mouth.
created_at"2026-09-03T16:03:39.368Z" 9/3/2026, 4:03:39 PM
model"qwen/qwen3.8-27b-20260814"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency483
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time215867
tokens_prompt1547
tokens_completion17611
native_tokens_prompt1671
native_tokens_completion17302
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning13879
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
num_fetches(null)
web_search_engine(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"stop"
service_tier(null)
usage0.04378972
router(null)
user_agent"langchainjs-openai/1.0.0 ((node/v24.19.0; linux; x64))"
http_referer(null)
request_id"req-1788451419-g6ta12ZREvJLM4nQyuRt"
session_id(null)
preset_id(null)
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1788451419-BuBA0HDv95s5grvC4Ks8"
upstream_id"chatcmpl-b8f0d75dd192625a"
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"c15e008c-6180-4155-8707-bde541bc7884"
id"chatcmpl-b8f0d75dd192625a"
is_byokfalse
latency483
model_permaslug"qwen/qwen3.8-27b-20260814"
provider_name"AkashML"
status200
total_cost0.04378972
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"AkashML"
response_cache_source_id(null)
data_region"global"
workspace_id"97e315e5-d303-487d-83c1-83180e8a13d4"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Elaine said softly [softly]"
1"the Warden read aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.351
leniency0.703
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.054
98.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2572
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2572
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"could feel"
count1
1
word"calculating"
count1
2
word"the last thing"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count4
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count2
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count2
10
word"trembled"
count1
11
word"silk"
count2
12
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"could feel"
1"calculating"
2"the last thing"
3"pulsed"
4"throb"
5"pulse"
6"stomach"
7"flickered"
8"warmth"
9"glistening"
10"trembled"
11"silk"
12"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences193
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences193
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences240
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2571
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions26
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions86
wordCount2132
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Silas1
Heartstone1
Warden19
Rory31
Cardiff1
Evan2
London2
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden2
Empress2
Nyx10
Fae-forged1
Isolde1
Dymas1
Fae3
Welsh1
Elaine5
persons
0"Silas"
1"Warden"
2"Rory"
3"Evan"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Cheung"
6"Nyx"
7"Elaine"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Fae"
globalScore0.773
windowScore0.5
89.02% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences123
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"plates that seemed to hold more than their rims should allow"
1"felt like a promise"
2"plates that seemed to multiply when she looked at them"
44.42% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.556
wordCount2571
matches
0"not black or blue but a deep, warm amber, as if the sun had been caught in resin"
1"not red, not gold, but the color of a bruise"
2"not gold, but the color of a bruise"
3"not toward the food, but toward the air above it"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences240
matches
0"was that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs93
mean27.65
std27.14
cv0.982
sampleLengths
083
142
25
35
481
536
615
71
89
981
1023
1130
127
137
1433
153
1689
1724
186
1985
203
2112
2235
238
2453
2553
262
27110
2844
295
3060
315
3222
3380
347
353
366
3746
3816
396
4026
4110
429
4312
4422
4558
4619
478
482
4959
88.90% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences193
matches
0"been trapped"
1"been caught"
2"was paved"
3"being fanned"
4"was pinned"
5"was gone"
6"was called"
7"being laid"
8"been ashamed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs333
matches
0"was watching"
1"was already reaching"
2"was already moving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences240
ratio0.004
matches
0"A servant emerged from the shadows—or what passed for shadows in this place, thin ribbons of deeper amber."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2137
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.028544688816097334
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.005147402901263453
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences240
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences240
mean10.71
std8.4
cv0.785
sampleLengths
014
128
211
330
49
522
611
75
85
915
1023
1111
126
138
1414
154
166
1715
189
196
208
217
221
239
242
2544
2635
275
2818
297
305
3112
326
336
341
357
3625
373
385
393
4018
4129
4223
4319
4417
457
466
4716
4819
4913
37.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.29583333333333334
totalSentences240
uniqueOpeners71
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences171
matches
0"Then the music from the"
1"Then she stepped forward, not"
2"Then the light steadied."
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences171
matches
0"It hung at the end"
1"He stood between them in"
2"Their eyes, when they met"
3"It came from the wind"
4"She had left Cardiff to"
5"She had not expected the"
6"It was cool, not cold."
7"Their fingers settled over the"
8"They stood at the edge"
9"It was a deep crimson,"
10"It had arrived at her"
11"He adjusted a brass instrument"
12"She had not eaten since"
13"Her first thought was not"
14"They were close."
15"He was watching the terraces"
16"She wore a chef’s whites,"
17"Her hair was pinned up"
18"She smiled at Rory, and"
19"Her name was a receipt,"
ratio0.234
24.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount149
totalSentences171
matches
0"The crack in the Veil"
1"It hung at the end"
2"Rory could feel it in"
3"The Heartstone pendant, deep crimson"
4"The Warden’s voice was dry"
5"He stood between them in"
6"Nyx moved beside her with"
7"Their eyes, when they met"
8"The sound did not come"
9"It came from the wind"
10"Rory looked at the shimmer"
11"the Warden said"
12"She had left Cardiff to"
13"She had not expected the"
14"the Warden said"
15"Nyx’s shadowed hand closed around"
16"It was cool, not cold."
17"Their fingers settled over the"
18"Rory nodded once, quick and"
19"The Warden stepped into the"
ratio0.871
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences171
matches
0"To ordinary eyes, it might"
1"To her, it was a"
2"Before them, the land rose"
3"Now that glow had brightened."
ratio0.023
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"In the gray lamplight, they were less a person than a cut in the dark, a silhouette with edges that kept losing certainty."
1"She had left Cardiff to get away from Evan, had traded one city’s pressure for London’s, had spent the day delivering boxes for Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress a…"
2"She had not expected the job to end with a supernatural door, a shade who had been trapped since the seventeenth century, and a Warden who spoke as if apocalypt…"
3"The air smelled of honey, roasting garlic, black pepper, and something green that could not be named, some orchard blossom that bloomed in a season she did not …"
4"Above them, the sky was not black or blue but a deep, warm amber, as if the sun had been caught in resin."
5"Fruit hung in clusters: pears the size of fists, apples with skin like polished garnets, strange red berries that pulsed faintly, as if they had hearts."
6"The pendant at her throat pulsed once, twice, a slow red throb that matched the beat of her pulse."
7"The chair belonged to a prince who was not there, yet it carried the smell of him: honey and burnt sugar, and something darker underneath, like sugar left too l…"
8"Rory followed, the cold blade in one hand, the burning pendant in the other, while behind them the long table groaned as if something had finally opened its mou…"
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He adjusted, its needle spinning with faint irritation"
1"Rory asked, because her mind was already reaching for the shape of the thing"
82.43% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
2"the Warden murmured (murmur)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
4"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.297
leniency0.595
rawRatio0.227
effectiveRatio0.135
86.1060%