Run: 2026-09-03-01M1M1K4QM1W80MVMC4DGY7ES6

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4m 41s
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$0.047878
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Tencent

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last deadbolt gave a grudging click. I hauled the door open and found Lucien Moreau on the threshold, amber and black eyes fixed on me like I was a mark he’d finally run to ground. Eva’s flat smelled of turmeric and old paper. Behind me, Ptolemy hissed from his nest on a stack of research notes. Every surface carried the weight of Eva’s obsessions. Leather-bound books stood in precarious towers. Scrolls curled like sleeping cats on the arm of the sofa. I’d cleared a single spot on the table for my coffee, and even that had vanished under a map of London marked with red ink. He stood in a tailored charcoal suit, platinum hair slicked back as if he’d stepped out of a boardroom rather than off the Brick Lane pavement. The ivory handle of his cane gleamed under the hall light. He looked the same and not the same. The sharp cut of his jaw, the expensive line of his shoulders. But something had hardened in the set of his mouth. "Rory." "Lucien." I kept my grip on the door. "Funny. I don't recall sending out invitations." His gaze flicked past me, taking in the cramped one-bedroom flat, the teetering stacks of books, the scrolls spilling across every surface. "Eva in?" "Cardiff. You're looking at the cat sitter." "Lucky cat." Ptolemy hissed again. I didn't move. He lifted the cane. My memory supplied the weight of it, the thin blade hidden inside the ivory shaft. "We need to talk." "Do we?" My pulse hammered, but I kept my voice flat. "Last time we talked, you left before I finished my sentence. Left the country, as I recall." "I had no choice." I remembered the night he'd said those words. Rain lashing the warehouse windows. His hand on my cheek, then gone. The back of my neck prickled. "You always have a choice, Lucien. You just make them and expect everyone else to clean up the mess." He stepped forward, and I didn't retreat. I wouldn't give him that. His scent hit me, dark and spiced, like clove and smoke. A year gone, and my body still remembered the shape of him. I hated that. My shoulder-length straight black hair brushed my collar as I lifted my chin. "You're in danger." "From who? You?" I gestured at the cane. "Bit dramatic, even for you." "From Avaros. My father's people." His jaw tightened. "They know about you. About what you did with the Cheung ledger." I let out a slow breath. The Golden Empress deliveries. Yu-Fei Cheung's ledger. I'd carried it across London without asking questions, and Lucien had made sure I never learnt what was inside. "There's no ledger." I said. "You burned it. I watched you." "I kept a copy." "Of course you did." I glanced at Ptolemy, now washing a paw as if demons on the doorstep were routine. "Why now? Why come here?" "They'll come for you to get to me. They're already in London." I folded my arms. "Then leave me out of it. You're good at that." Something flickered in his amber eye. The black one stayed dead and flat. "I didn't come to drag you back into my world." He shifted his weight, the movement tight. "I came to warn you. And to say I'm sorry." The laugh tore out of me. "Sorry? You vanish without a word, and now you're sorry?" "I thought it would keep you safe." "Well, it didn't." The words slipped out before I could stop them. "It just made me wonder what I did wrong." That was the hurt, raw and old. I shut my mouth. He leaned on the cane. For the first time, I noticed the faint sheen of sweat on his temple, the way his charcoal jacket pulled tight across his shoulder. He wasn't just delivering a warning. He was hurt. Blood darkened the white cuff of his shirt. I hadn't seen it at first. My cool-headed resolve wavered. "Ma chère." He said my name like a man touching a bruise. "What happened between us wasn't a mistake. Leaving was." "Don't." I held up a hand. The small crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist caught the light. "Don't stand there and say things you should have said a year ago. Not when there's a threat breathing down your neck." "I mean it." "Funny. You have a way of meaning things once they're convenient." He took another step, close enough that the spice of him wrapped around me. "If I meant it then, I'd never have let you walk into that warehouse. If I meant it now, I'd turn around and leave." "Why don't you, then?" My voice dropped. This was the attraction, the thing we'd never said. My heart slammed against my ribs. The air between us tightened, thick with everything we hadn't said. He'd left because he thought he was protecting me. He'd come back because he couldn't stay away. Neither of us had handled it well. "Because I'm a selfish bastard." His gaze dropped to my mouth. "And because I need your help." The script flipped. I blinked. "My help?" "The ledger. The copy. It's keyed to your blood, Rory. Only you can open it." I thought of the deliveries, the innocent packages I'd handed over. My blood had sealed that thing without my knowledge. I stared at him. "You're joking." "I wish." He lifted the cane. The blade slid free with a whisper of steel. He turned and slashed the air behind him, and something in the shadows of the landing screeched. The screech cut off. Lucien's shoulders didn't relax. "That was a scout. More will come." The landing outside held its breath. Then the stairwell groaned under a weight far too heavy for a man his size. I backed into the flat, and he followed, shutting the door with a kick. He threw the deadbolts, all three, his movements sharp. "Nice security." He shot the bolt home and tested it. The wood around the frame had already splintered from the kick. "Eva's idea." I said. "She reads too many thrillers." He turned to me. The amber eye burned, the black one swallowed the light. "We need to move. Now." "Where?" "Anywhere but here." I looked at Ptolemy. The tabby blinked at me from under the table. I couldn't just leave him. "I'm not going without the cat." He stared. "You're joking." "Do I look like I'm joking?" A heavy thud shook the floorboards. Then another. Something massive was coming up the stairs. Lucien's cane came up, blade extended. "Grab the cat." I scooped Ptolemy up. He clawed my shoulder, but I held on. My heart raced. "What's the plan, Frenchman?" "Run." He said. "And try not to die." The window behind me exploded. Glass sprayed across the research notes. Lucien shoved me behind him as something landed in the middle of Eva's living room, all claws and shadows and burning eyes.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.228
leniency0.456
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"carried the weight"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"resolve"
count1
6
word"wavered"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
highlights
0"carried the weight"
1"flicked"
2"weight"
3"pulse"
4"flickered"
5"resolve"
6"wavered"
7"whisper"
8"raced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences99
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1161
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Behind me, Ptolemy hissed from his nest on a stack of research notes."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount814
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien5
Moreau1
Ptolemy5
Eva3
London2
Brick1
Lane1
Golden1
Empress1
Cheung1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Cheung"
places
0"London"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1161
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences143
matches
0"sealed that thing"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean16.83
std11.92
cv0.708
sampleLengths
036
121
250
337
430
51
615
724
87
92
106
1123
1228
134
1426
1519
1651
173
1813
1920
2032
2111
224
2325
2412
2514
2613
2710
287
2910
3016
317
3221
3311
3438
3518
3621
3739
383
3911
4038
4122
4235
4317
447
4515
4620
476
482
4930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
59.15% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs142
matches
0"wasn't just delivering"
1"was protecting"
2"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences143
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount820
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.023170731707317073
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0012195121951219512
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean8.12
std5.55
cv0.683
sampleLengths
07
129
28
313
48
56
611
725
826
911
108
1112
1210
131
148
157
1622
172
187
192
203
213
224
2315
244
2511
2617
274
288
295
307
316
3219
337
345
3511
3612
373
3813
393
408
415
428
4312
446
454
463
4719
485
496
58.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3706293706293706
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners53
35.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"Then the stairwell groaned under"
ratio0.011
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences93
matches
0"I hauled the door open"
1"I’d cleared a single spot"
2"He stood in a tailored"
3"He looked the same and"
4"I kept my grip on"
5"His gaze flicked past me,"
6"I didn't move."
7"He lifted the cane."
8"My memory supplied the weight"
9"My pulse hammered, but I"
10"I remembered the night he'd"
11"His hand on my cheek,"
12"He stepped forward, and I"
13"I wouldn't give him that."
14"His scent hit me, dark"
15"I hated that."
16"My shoulder-length straight black hair"
17"I gestured at the cane"
18"His jaw tightened"
19"I let out a slow"
ratio0.559
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences93
matches
0"The last deadbolt gave a"
1"I hauled the door open"
2"Eva’s flat smelled of turmeric"
3"Every surface carried the weight"
4"Scrolls curled like sleeping cats"
5"I’d cleared a single spot"
6"He stood in a tailored"
7"The ivory handle of his"
8"He looked the same and"
9"The sharp cut of his"
10"I kept my grip on"
11"His gaze flicked past me,"
12"Ptolemy hissed again."
13"I didn't move."
14"He lifted the cane."
15"My memory supplied the weight"
16"My pulse hammered, but I"
17"I remembered the night he'd"
18"His hand on my cheek,"
19"The back of my neck"
ratio0.935
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.07
leniency0.14
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.3533%