Run: 2026-09-03-01M1M2285PBCCSXD3RE0TV675H

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Duration:
4m 11s
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$0.037983
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Tencent

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The bone token was cold in Detective Harlow Quinn's palm as she pressed it to the rusted plate beside the bricked-up staff door. Quinn checked the time on the worn leather watch on her left wrist: 6:14. At forty-one, with eighteen years of decorated service behind her, she had learned to trust the weight of small rituals. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair was beaded with the drizzle that had followed her from the Yard, and her sharp jaw was set as she fitted the token into the shallow depression in the brick. The entrance to the Veil Market didn't look like a door. It looked like a slab of graffiti-pocked brick between a boarded-up kebab shop and a shuttered record store, the kind of place that smelled of piss and old fryer grease. DC Nate Boyle shifted his weight beside her, his breath a white plume in the dawn chill. "You sure this is it, ma'am? Looks like a builder's skip got sick on the wall." "This is it." Quinn's voice was flat, precise, a scalpel of a voice. The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, but for now it had squatted in this forgotten Tube station beneath Camden, selling enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information to anyone with a bone token and a strong stomach. The Market only opened to those who carried the token. Quinn had lifted this one from a pickpocket's stash in Clerkenwell three nights ago and hadn't logged it. Some things the job didn't need to know yet. She fitted the token home. For a heartbeat nothing happened. Then the wall exhaled a breath of cold air that smelled of ozone and wet pennies, and a seam of darkness yawned open. Boyle muttered a curse. Quinn stepped through first. The stairs down went on far longer than any Tube station should have allowed. The air grew colder, the noise of London fading until it was a distant rumble, like blood in the ears. Quinn's shoes struck the concrete with military precision, one hand trailing the rusted handrail, the other resting near her holstered firearm. Behind her, Boyle's footfalls were softer, less disciplined. The abandoned platform opened before them. This was the current location of the Veil Market: a disused Tube station beneath Camden, its tiled walls black with a century of grime, the ghost of a 1950s advertisement for Bovril peeling above the tunnel mouth. The Market itself had folded away its stalls for the night—or perhaps scattered at the first sight of a murder. Shuttered kiosks squatted in the shadows, their tarps drawn, but the smell remained: burnt sage, bitter alchemy, and beneath it all, the copper tang of blood. The body lay at the far end of the platform, near the edge, in a pool of darkness that the portable floodlights hadn't yet reached. A man in his sixties, coat spread beneath him like a fallen crow. His throat had been opened in a single, efficient slash. Boyle crouched, gloves snapping on. "Victim's a known face. Terrence Vane. Dealer in... well, unusual goods. Fences enchanted gear, banned alchemical substances, information. The Market's own black market, if you like." Quinn said nothing. She let her brown eyes move over the scene, taking in the details the way she had been taught: the way the platform dust lay thick and gray, undisturbed except for a single trail of footprints leading from the stairs to the body. A size eleven impression, the scuff of a heel. No second set. No prints leading away. "Where's the witness?" Quinn asked. Boyle jerked his chin toward the far pillar. "Her. Eva Kowalski. Says she had a meeting with Vane about a manuscript. Found him like this around five this morning, called it in from a payphone in the station hall because her mobile had no signal down here." Quinn turned. Eva Kowalski stood with her back against the tiled pillar, a worn leather satchel clutched to her chest like a shield. She was small, five-four at most, with a wild tumble of curly red hair and round glasses that magnified eyes the color of new grass. Freckles dusted her nose and cheeks. Even from ten feet away Quinn could see the nervous tic: Eva kept tucking a coil of hair behind her left ear, then immediately shaking it loose again. She looked like a graduate student who had wandered into a slaughterhouse. Which, Quinn supposed, she was. A research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives, Oxford master's in Ancient History, childhood friend of Aurora—and, if Quinn's suspicions were correct, a cog in the little clique that had been dancing just out of arm's reach for months. At five-nine, Quinn loomed over the smaller woman when she approached. "Ms. Kowalski." Eva's head snapped up. "I didn't touch him. I swear. I got here and he was just... lying there. His pockets were already turned out." "Already?" Quinn repeated, filing the word. She glanced back at the body. Vane's coat pockets did hang empty, linings pulled inside out like pale tongues. His satchel was gone. Bereft of the goods he'd been selling, presumably. Boyle straightened, brushing grit from his knees. "Robbery, plain and simple, ma'am. Vane's pockets are turned out, his merchandise is missing. Killer came up from the tunnel, surprised him, cut his throat, and took off with the swag. We've got a boot print by the stairwell—size nine, fresh mud. Probably legged it back down the tracks and out through a maintenance hatch." He nodded toward the dark mouth of the tunnel, where a single muddy print marred the dust. Quinn didn't answer. She walked to the body and crouched, ignoring the protest in her knees. She had learned long ago to let the silence stretch until the scene started talking. Vane's eyes were open, staring at the grimed ceiling. His hands were empty, but three feet from his outstretched right hand lay a small brass object. She leaned in. A compass. No—the Veil Compass. Small, its casing bright brass gone green with a patina of verdigris, the face etched with protective sigils that made her eyes want to slide off them. Crafted, if the whispered intelligence was true, by a Shade artisan, its needle was meant to point toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal. She had seen its like only once before, in the evidence photos from Morris's warehouse, three years ago. A shiver went down her spine that had nothing to do with the cold. She did not yet understand what had killed her partner, DS Morris, only that the report had mentioned impossible things: no signs of forced entry, no signs of exit, and a needle that pointed not north but at a blank wall. Quinn's gloved fingers closed around the compass. It was heavier than it looked. She held it level. The needle shivered, swung through north as if dismissing it, and then steadied, pointing unerringly at the tiled wall to her left, about twenty feet from the body. "Ma'am?" Boyle prompted. "I'm telling you, it's a mugging. Vane deals in this supernatural rubbish, some junkie or rival dealer got greedy—" "The needle isn't pointing north," Quinn said. Her voice cut across his, precise as a drill sergeant's. Boyle blinked. "What?" She rose in one smooth motion, the compass still in her hand, and crossed to the wall. The verdigris casing was cool against her palm. The needle trembled, then locked true, pointing at a section of grimy white tile between a rusted bench and a faded sign for the Bakerloo Line. Quinn ran her fingers along the grout. The tiles were cold, slick with damp. She found no door, no seam—only a thin, almost imperceptible draft that carried a faint electric hum and the smell of cold iron. Behind her, Boyle was still talking. "Could be the compass is broken. Magnetic interference from the tunnels, the old electric rails—" "Then explain the footprints." Quinn turned, sharp jaw set. "One set. Size eleven. Vane's. Leading from the stairs to where he fell. No struggle marks, no drag marks, no second set of prints. The killer didn't come up those stairs, Boyle. The print by the stairwell is a size nine, but look at the rail—" she pointed "—the dust on the handrail is undisturbed. No one came up or went down those steps except Vane. And me. And you." She flicked a glance at Eva. "And Ms. Kowalski, who claims she entered through the street door." Eva's breath hitched. She tucked her hair behind her left ear again, the movement jerky. "I did. I used a token. I came down the stairs." "Did you?" Quinn stepped toward her, holding up the compass. The needle still pointed past her, toward the wall. "The street entrance smears a chalky residue on the palms—the token reader is coated in it. Show me your hands." Eva hesitated, then slowly lowered the satchel. Her palms were pale, clean, freckled. No chalk. Quinn's gaze dropped to her shoes. "And your shoes. The stairs down here leave a gritty black film on the soles. Yours are clean. You didn't come through the street entrance, Ms. Kowalski. You didn't come down the stairs." Boyle stared. "Then how'd she get in?" Quinn looked back at the wall, at the impossible stillness of the needle in her hand. Three years ago, Morris had died in a room with no doors and no windows, and the only clue had been a brass compass with a face full of sigils and a needle pointing at nothing at all. Back then, she had filed it under unsolved and tried not to think about the way the air had tasted. Now the same taste was here: ozone and old pennies and something vast and hungry just out of sight. She didn't have the words for it yet. Portal was a fairy tale. Rift was a geological term. But she knew what she was looking at. "The killer didn't leave through the tunnel," Quinn said quietly. "They didn't come through the street door. There's a way in and out of this station that doesn't use doors at all." She tapped the wall with a gloved knuckle; the tile gave back a hollow, endless sound that no solid wall should make. "Your boot print by the stairwell was staged, Boyle. Planted. The pockets were turned out to make us think robbery, but the robbery makes no sense. Vane's most valuable piece—this compass, attuned to the very energy of this place—was lying three feet from his hand, untouched. A thief would have taken it. A rival would have crushed it. The only reason to leave it is if the killer didn't see it in the dark... or didn't care." She turned to Eva, who had gone very still, green eyes wide behind the round glasses. "You came through the same way he did," Quinn said. "You and whoever butchered him. You didn't walk in. You stepped out of that wall." She paused, letting the weight of it settle. "And that tells me two things. One: the person who killed Terrence Vane has access to something the Metropolitan Police doesn't have a name for. And two—" her brown eyes narrowed, military straight, the worn leather watch on her left wrist catching the floodlight "—you're going to tell me exactly what your little clique has been moving through these doors, or I'm going to charge you with his murder and let the CPS sort out the impossibility of it later." Eva's mouth opened, but no sound came out. The compass needle shivered in Quinn's palm and held its line, pointing at the wall, at the dark, at the place where the world folded in on itself. Quinn didn't look away. She had spent three years not understanding what had taken Morris. She was done not understanding. She took out her phone—no signal, of course—and then, with her free hand, she unclipped the radio from her belt. "Boyle. Get SOCO down here. And bring a sledgehammer." "A sledgehammer, ma'am?" "Yes." Quinn's jaw was iron. "We're going to open that wall."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.406
leniency0.813
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.063
92.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2031
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2031
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"weight"
count3
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"efficient"
count1
4
word"dancing"
count1
5
word"loomed"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"down her spine"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"electric"
count2
11
word"magnetic"
count1
12
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"chill"
2"stomach"
3"efficient"
4"dancing"
5"loomed"
6"silence"
7"etched"
8"down her spine"
9"trembled"
10"electric"
11"magnetic"
12"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"shiver down spine"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"A shiver went down her spine"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences113
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen81
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2019
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount1497
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.8
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn27
Yard1
Veil4
Market5
Nate1
Boyle10
Tube3
Camden2
Clerkenwell1
London1
Bovril1
Kowalski1
Eva7
British1
Museum1
Oxford1
Ancient1
History1
Aurora1
Compass1
Shade1
Morris4
Bakerloo1
Line1
Vane3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Nate"
4"Boyle"
5"Camden"
6"Bovril"
7"Kowalski"
8"Eva"
9"Museum"
10"Morris"
11"Line"
12"Vane"
places
0"Detective"
1"Yard"
2"Veil"
3"Clerkenwell"
4"London"
5"British"
6"Ancient"
globalScore0.598
windowScore0.5
56.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like a slab of graffiti-pocked bri"
1"looked like a graduate student who had wa"
2"as if dismissing it, and then steadied, pointing unerringly at the tiled wall to her left, about twenty feet from the body"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.495
wordCount2019
matches
0"not north but at a blank wall"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean51.77
std38.28
cv0.739
sampleLengths
023
1110
233
389
441
563
689
748
831
962
105
1147
12139
1313
1425
1537
1679
1757
18132
1945
2022
2117
223
2388
2421
2596
2626
2739
2854
297
3093
3126
32131
3316
34113
3536
3649
373
3811
89.74% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences113
matches
0"was beaded"
1"been opened"
2"been taught"
3"was gone"
4"was meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs236
matches
0"was still talking"
1"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences130
ratio0.062
matches
0"The Market itself had folded away its stalls for the night—or perhaps scattered at the first sight of a murder."
1"A research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives, Oxford master's in Ancient History, childhood friend of Aurora—and, if Quinn's suspicions were correct, a cog in the little clique that had been dancing just out of arm's reach for months."
2"No—the Veil Compass."
3"She found no door, no seam—only a thin, almost imperceptible draft that carried a faint electric hum and the smell of cold iron."
4"\"One set. Size eleven. Vane's. Leading from the stairs to where he fell. No struggle marks, no drag marks, no second set of prints. The killer didn't come up those stairs, Boyle. The print by the stairwell is a size nine, but look at the rail—\" she pointed \"—the dust on the handrail is undisturbed. No one came up or went down those steps except Vane. And me. And you.\" She flicked a glance at Eva."
5"\"They didn't come through the street door. There's a way in and out of this station that doesn't use doors at all.\" She tapped the wall with a gloved knuckle; the tile gave back a hollow, endless sound that no solid wall should make."
6"\"And that tells me two things. One: the person who killed Terrence Vane has access to something the Metropolitan Police doesn't have a name for. And two—\" her brown eyes narrowed, military straight, the worn leather watch on her left wrist catching the floodlight \"—you're going to tell me exactly what your little clique has been moving through these doors, or I'm going to charge you with his murder and let the CPS sort out the impossibility of it later.\""
7"She took out her phone—no signal, of course—and then, with her free hand, she unclipped the radio from her belt."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1452
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"other resting near her"
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.024104683195592287
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.006887052341597796
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean15.53
std14.95
cv0.963
sampleLengths
023
114
220
335
411
530
617
716
813
939
1010
1118
129
135
145
1523
164
174
1814
1920
2021
218
226
2337
2420
2526
2625
2713
2810
295
3026
313
3243
339
343
354
365
378
3839
392
4021
4125
426
4328
4412
455
4640
4711
482
494
54.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.36923076923076925
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners48
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then the wall exhaled a"
ratio0.01
96.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences104
matches
0"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
1"It looked like a slab"
2"She fitted the token home."
3"His throat had been opened"
4"She let her brown eyes"
5"She was small, five-four at"
6"She looked like a graduate"
7"She glanced back at the"
8"His satchel was gone."
9"He nodded toward the dark"
10"She walked to the body"
11"She had learned long ago"
12"His hands were empty, but"
13"She leaned in."
14"She had seen its like"
15"She did not yet understand"
16"It was heavier than it"
17"She held it level."
18"Her voice cut across his,"
19"She rose in one smooth"
ratio0.308
46.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences104
matches
0"The bone token was cold"
1"Quinn checked the time on"
2"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
3"The entrance to the Veil"
4"It looked like a slab"
5"DC Nate Boyle shifted his"
6"Quinn's voice was flat, precise,"
7"The Veil Market moved locations"
8"The Market only opened to"
9"Quinn had lifted this one"
10"Some things the job didn't"
11"She fitted the token home."
12"Boyle muttered a curse."
13"Quinn stepped through first."
14"The stairs down went on"
15"The air grew colder, the"
16"Quinn's shoes struck the concrete"
17"The abandoned platform opened before"
18"This was the current location"
19"The Market itself had folded"
ratio0.827
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Even from ten feet away"
1"Now the same taste was"
ratio0.019
14.29% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair was beaded with the drizzle that had followed her from the Yard, and her sharp jaw was set as she fitted the token into…"
1"It looked like a slab of graffiti-pocked brick between a boarded-up kebab shop and a shuttered record store, the kind of place that smelled of piss and old frye…"
2"She was small, five-four at most, with a wild tumble of curly red hair and round glasses that magnified eyes the color of new grass."
3"A research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives, Oxford master's in Ancient History, childhood friend of Aurora—and, if Quinn's suspicions were…"
4"Small, its casing bright brass gone green with a patina of verdigris, the face etched with protective sigils that made her eyes want to slide off them."
5"A shiver went down her spine that had nothing to do with the cold."
6"The needle shivered, swung through north as if dismissing it, and then steadied, pointing unerringly at the tiled wall to her left, about twenty feet from the b…"
7"She found no door, no seam—only a thin, almost imperceptible draft that carried a faint electric hum and the smell of cold iron."
8"She turned to Eva, who had gone very still, green eyes wide behind the round glasses."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.313
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.063
82.7927%