Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DDFQ1K8M7M09RKVP26CCS

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41.9s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gap in the hedge swallowed her torchlight whole. Aurora lowered the beam, checked the bulb, checked the battery. The dark stayed where it was. Her phone said 23:47. It had said 23:47 for eleven minutes. She had watched the numbers freeze on the walk up from the Petersham gate and told herself it was a glitch. Phones glitched. Lifts glitched. Night buses glitched. Evan had glitched, and look how that turned out. She crouched and swept the torch along the ground. Grass curled under the toes of her trainers. Nothing wrong with grass. Nothing wrong with the fallen oak thirty paces behind her, or the hawthorn eight paces ahead, or the gap between its branches that had been the size of a fist in the photograph she had studied on her kitchen table that afternoon. Now the gap went in. Deep. Wide enough for a person to walk through without ducking. Someone had been widening it. One curl of branch at a time. She pulled the pendant from under her jumper. Silver chain, crimson stone, warm in her palm like a coin left in the sun. The unsigned card in her back pocket had said, The grove behind the Isabella Plantation. Come alone. Her own name printed in the top-left corner, in a font older than the paper. Fine. She had come alone. She stepped through. Warm branches closed over her head and the sound stopped. All of it. The deer, the distant traffic on the Roehampton side, the low drone she had spent years blaming on the Central line. Gone. The tunnel of woven branches hugged her shoulders. Her breath came back at her, damp and close, and under it, a held note, low, like something humming in the back of its throat. "Right," she said, to the tunnel. "You and me, then." Her voice should have rattled. It did not. The branches drank it. Ahead, a grey light. Pale. Unbroadcast. The tunnel opened, and she walked into a clearing. Ringed by standing stones. Ancient oak, weathered grey, but not the grey of dead wood. Bone-grey. Skin-grey. Wildflowers grew everywhere, bluebells and cow parsley and tall white things she did not have a name for, blooming in the dark as if they had waited for her. Every bloom faced the centre of the clearing. A crowd of white faces watching a stage. Rory stopped without deciding to. The pendant was hot now. Not coin-warm. Cooking-warm. She lifted it and the crimson stone pumped out a faint red glow, once, twice, three times, in a slow steady rhythm, like a heart she could squeeze. It had never glowed. Warm, once, on the Tube. Chimed, once, outside the London Transport Museum. Never this. "Answers," she said, and stepped past the first stone. The ticking started. Steady. Patient. Coming from no direction she could point to. Like Silas's wall of broken watches above the bar, only none of those worked, and this one did, and it did not care who heard. Tick. Tick. Tick. She stopped. The ticking stopped. She started again. Tick. Tick. Tick. "Of course," she said. She pulled out her phone. No signal, which she had expected, and 23:47, which she had not. She opened her contacts, found the number marked do not call, and pressed dial before she could think better of it. The line rang once. Impossible. Eva's phone had been cut off four years ago. Then the ringing stopped, and something on the other end breathed in. She hung up. The clearing was quiet again, except for the held note, and the ticking, and her own heart doing something she would have a word with later. She moved towards the centre. The centre was a ring smaller than the outer one, seven stones, no cairn, no altar, nothing she could photograph and hand to a newspaper. Just standing oak, bone-grey, and grass tramped flat in a circle. The sort of thing a hundred dog walkers could have done in an afternoon, except no dogs came out this far, and no walkers either, and anyway the hoofprints in the mud were wrong. Not deer. Not horses. Something with more toes than anything on the island. She crouched. Touched one. The print was warm. Something moved in the wildflowers at the edge of the clearing. Just past the corner of her eye. She turned her head slowly, the way you do when you do not want a nervous animal to know you have seen it, and the white blooms were facing her now. All of them. Turned from the centre to the woman crouching in it. "That's fine," she said. "That's normal." Her watch said 23:47 as well. She had not looked at it in years. The ticking stopped. All of it stopped. The held note. The ticking. The birds she had not heard since the tunnel. Even her heart, for half a beat, fell in line with a beat that was not hers. Into the silence, a voice said, "Rory." Eva's voice. Cardiff consonants, the soft roll on the r, the only voice in London that had ever said Rory's name right. The pendant went cold. Ice cold, through her jumper, through her bra, a small stone pressed against her sternum by a chain that was not cold at all. She straightened up without meaning to. Turned, without meaning to. Slow, like the clearing was turning her, like a hand at the back of her neck was turning her. The wildflowers parted at the eastern edge of the ring. Something stepped through. The standing stones behind it cast no shadow. The thing wearing Eva's voice smiled a smile Eva had never once worn. Patient. Wrong. Badly practised. "Rory. You came." Blood. On the wind, sharp and close. Her own sleeve, torn on the Petersham fence, had not stopped bleeding. The thing in the flowers tilted its head at the smell the way a dog considers a wound. The pendant burned cold against her chest. Rory took a step back and hit warm oak. One of the stones she had walked between a moment ago, behind her, where it had not been two minutes before. The clearing folded in. The thing in Eva's face took its first step towards her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1043
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
95.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1043
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1043
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1027
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Tick"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Tick"
discoveredNames
Petersham2
Isabella1
Plantation1
Roehampton1
Central1
Tube1
London2
Transport1
Museum1
Silas1
Eva5
Rory3
Tick6
persons
0"Silas"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
places
0"Petersham"
1"Isabella"
2"Plantation"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1043
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean20.86
std19.83
cv0.951
sampleLengths
09
116
248
363
416
512
655
75
83
935
1033
1110
1212
1315
1446
1516
165
1736
1818
199
2038
213
222
233
243
253
264
2764
283
2926
305
3183
328
3362
346
3514
363
3735
387
3922
4028
4142
428
4317
443
4537
467
4730
484
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs170
matches
0"were facing"
1"was turning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences133
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1033
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.023233301064859633
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.003872216844143272
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean7.84
std7.86
cv1.002
sampleLengths
09
110
26
34
47
521
62
72
83
99
109
118
124
1342
145
151
1610
175
187
198
2015
2115
222
2315
241
254
263
2710
283
2921
301
318
3225
336
344
355
363
374
384
391
401
419
424
4311
441
451
4629
478
488
495
70.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.48120300751879697
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences95
matches
0"Then the ringing stopped, and"
1"Just standing oak, bone-grey, and"
2"Just past the corner of"
3"Even her heart, for half"
ratio0.042
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences95
matches
0"Her phone said 23:47."
1"It had said 23:47 for"
2"She had watched the numbers"
3"She crouched and swept the"
4"She pulled the pendant from"
5"Her own name printed in"
6"She had come alone."
7"She stepped through."
8"Her breath came back at"
9"she said, to the tunnel"
10"Her voice should have rattled."
11"It did not."
12"She lifted it and the"
13"It had never glowed."
14"she said, and stepped past"
15"She started again."
16"She pulled out her phone."
17"She opened her contacts, found"
18"She hung up."
19"She moved towards the centre."
ratio0.263
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences95
matches
0"The gap in the hedge"
1"Aurora lowered the beam, checked"
2"The dark stayed where it"
3"Her phone said 23:47."
4"It had said 23:47 for"
5"She had watched the numbers"
6"Night buses glitched."
7"Evan had glitched, and look"
8"She crouched and swept the"
9"Grass curled under the toes"
10"Nothing wrong with grass."
11"Nothing wrong with the fallen"
12"Someone had been widening it."
13"She pulled the pendant from"
14"The unsigned card in her"
15"Her own name printed in"
16"She had come alone."
17"She stepped through."
18"The deer, the distant traffic"
19"The tunnel of woven branches"
ratio0.716
52.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"Now the gap went in."
ratio0.011
79.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Nothing wrong with the fallen oak thirty paces behind her, or the hawthorn eight paces ahead, or the gap between its branches that had been the size of a fist i…"
1"Wildflowers grew everywhere, bluebells and cow parsley and tall white things she did not have a name for, blooming in the dark as if they had waited for her."
2"Ice cold, through her jumper, through her bra, a small stone pressed against her sternum by a chain that was not cold at all."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.3323%