Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DH2XZM5WJM8E2VJ1FE2GN

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora had just poured herself a double when the door opened behind her and a voice she hadn't heard in years said her first name. Not Rory. Aurora. She didn't turn round. She capped the bottle, slid it back onto the shelf, and watched in the mirror behind the bar. Blonde now. Sharp bob. A charcoal suit that cost more than her monthly rent, and a clutch Aurora had once seen in a Bond Street window and laughed at. The rest was Nia. That particular quirk to the mouth, like she'd just thought of something delicious and cruel. "No," Aurora said, to the bottle. "Aurora Carter." "Christ." Nia Bevan crossed the floor like she'd bought it and settled onto the stool beside her. Silas watched from the far end of the bar, a glass held mid-polish. He didn't miss much. He wouldn't miss this. "You're not supposed to be here," Aurora said. "Neither are you. This is the sort of place I'd expect to find a hitman." Nia glanced at the walls. Maps. Photographs. Dead men everywhere. "Or a museum." "It's a bar." "I gathered." Nia waved a hand, and Silas put the glass down. "Friend of yours?" "Old friend." "Old," Aurora repeated. Silas poured two fingers of the good stuff without being asked and set it in front of Nia. Then he limped back down the bar. The limp was worse than usual. He made a point of it when strangers walked in. "Drink's on the house," Aurora said. "Then you leave." "I've been looking for you." "Should have tried harder." Nia sipped. Her eyes didn't move from Aurora's face. "Seven years. You vanished. No number, no address, nothing. Your mother thought you were dead until the postcard." "The postcard." "From London. Picture of a bus." "It wasn't a bus, it was the Eye." "Same thing." She set the glass down. "You look different." "So do you." "I meant it as a compliment." "I didn't." Silence. Not the comfortable kind. The kind with teeth. "You're thin," Nia said. "You always were, but now you're..." A small wave at Aurora's shoulders, her jaw. "Harder." "Things harden." "I know." Nia smiled. It didn't reach anywhere. "I'm a barrister now. Commercial. Bristol set, but I'm up in London most weeks." "Congratulations." "Your father sends his regards." Aurora's hand tightened on the glass. She covered it by lifting it, swallowing, setting it back down with a click. "He wouldn't." "He does. We're in the same chambers, he took silk last spring." "Of course he did." Five minutes of small talk bled into ten. Aurora asked nothing and Nia asked everything, the way she always had, and Aurora fed her nothing back. Where do you live. What do you do. Who do you see. Aurora answered in shrugs. "You're living above a bar," Nia said eventually, when the silence had stretched past anything polite. "You deliver takeaway for a living." "You've been following me." "Three weeks in London. It takes an afternoon to find someone when you know where to look." "Why were you looking?" Nia drank. She didn't answer straight away, which was answer enough. "He's still out there," she said. The air in the room changed. Silas' hand didn't move. The neon from the window hummed, a low green flicker along the bar. Aurora didn't say his name. She hadn't said it in seven years, not out loud, not to anyone, and she wasn't going to start in front of a stranger wearing her friend's face. "You know what he did," Aurora said. "I know what you told people." "People." "Eva spoke to me. Eventually." Nia's voice dropped. "You left us, Aurora. You left everyone. One day we're planning your birthday, eight days later there's a postcard from the Eye and your father tells us you've gone travelling. We didn't know. Not for sure. Not until Eva cracked." "Eva shouldn't have." "Eva had to. She'd been carrying it five years. I had to hear what he did to you in a pub, third-hand, from a girl I barely knew." Nia stopped. Started again. "I'd have come. If you'd told me. I'd have come to Cardiff with a crowbar." "You'd have come as a barrister." "I'd have come as your friend." "You'd have come too late." Aurora drained her glass. "You always did." That landed. She watched it land and didn't feel as good as she'd hoped. Nia's jaw tightened. For a second she looked like the girl Aurora remembered, blue hair, bootleg cigarettes, an ambition that swallowed rooms. Then it was gone, folded away, and the barrister sat in her place. "I'm not here for you," Nia said. "I noticed." "I'm here because someone asked me to find you." The glass stopped halfway to Aurora's mouth. She set it down. Beside her, Silas had gone very still, the way he did only when things mattered, and Aurora knew without looking that his right hand had found the shelf beneath the bar where he kept things. "Who," Aurora said. Nia reached into her clutch. She drew out a folded square of paper and slid it across the bar. Aurora didn't take it. "Read it." "Who sent you, Nia." "Does it matter? You haven't asked me a single question about myself all night. Not one. Not what I've been doing, not who I've married, not whether I've forgiven you for disappearing. You just want to know who to run from next." "That's not fair." "Nothing's ever fair, Rory. That's the part you never got." Aurora stared at her. Somewhere in the last seven years she'd stopped being the person this woman knew, and the woman had stopped being the one Aurora remembered. Two strangers in a bar, and the bar was a coincidence, and it wasn't. Not anymore. She unfolded the paper. Eleven words. Handwritten, in ink that had been chosen, deliberately, because it was the colour of blood. I always knew where you were. I was just waiting for the right moment. Underneath, a London address. A postcode she knew. Five streets from here. Aurora looked up. Nia watched her with that sharp, delicious look, the one that had always meant trouble, and for the first time all night Aurora saw the truth of it, plain as the maps on the walls. "You're representing him," Aurora said. Nia picked up her drink. She finished it, savouring, and set the glass down empty. "I'm representing him," she said. "And it turns out he'd like his ring back."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nia said eventually [eventually]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.292
leniency0.585
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.031
90.77% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"comfortable"
2"silk"
3"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences89
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1083
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount667
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity3.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Rory1
Aurora26
Bond1
Street1
Nia18
Bevan1
Maps1
Silas4
Silence1
Started1
London1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Aurora"
2"Nia"
3"Bevan"
4"Silas"
5"Silence"
places
0"Bond"
1"Street"
2"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
78.57% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences35
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like the girl Aurora remembered, b"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1083
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs76
mean14.25
std13.92
cv0.977
sampleLengths
025
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251
319
46
52
61
737
88
928
103
1112
123
132
143
1541
169
175
184
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216
228
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243
256
262
279
2819
292
3022
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325
3322
3412
354
3642
3722
384
3917
404
4111
426
4323
4433
457
466
471
4848
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93.44% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences89
matches
0"being asked"
1"was gone"
2"been chosen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs131
matches
0"was just waiting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences135
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount510
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.03333333333333333
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0058823529411764705
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean8.02
std7.98
cv0.994
sampleLengths
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52
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178
1820
191
201
213
223
233
2412
253
262
273
2818
297
306
3110
326
333
345
354
362
377
3818
392
406
418
427
433
443
456
462
471
484
494
60.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.4222222222222222
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners57
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences64
matches
0"Then he limped back down"
1"Then it was gone, folded"
2"Somewhere in the last seven"
ratio0.047
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences64
matches
0"She didn't turn round."
1"She capped the bottle, slid"
2"He didn't miss much."
3"He wouldn't miss this."
4"He made a point of"
5"Her eyes didn't move from"
6"She set the glass down"
7"It didn't reach anywhere."
8"She covered it by lifting"
9"She didn't answer straight away,"
10"She hadn't said it in"
11"She watched it land and"
12"She set it down."
13"She drew out a folded"
14"She unfolded the paper."
15"I always knew where you"
16"I was just waiting for"
17"She finished it, savouring, and"
ratio0.281
77.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences64
matches
0"Aurora had just poured herself"
1"She didn't turn round."
2"She capped the bottle, slid"
3"A charcoal suit that cost"
4"The rest was Nia."
5"That particular quirk to the"
6"Aurora said, to the bottle"
7"Nia Bevan crossed the floor"
8"Silas watched from the far"
9"He didn't miss much."
10"He wouldn't miss this."
11"Nia glanced at the walls"
12"Nia waved a hand, and"
13"Silas poured two fingers of"
14"The limp was worse than"
15"He made a point of"
16"Her eyes didn't move from"
17"She set the glass down"
18"The kind with teeth."
19"A small wave at Aurora's"
ratio0.766
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"For a second she looked like the girl Aurora remembered, blue hair, bootleg cigarettes, an ambition that swallowed rooms."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Aurora repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.185
leniency0.369
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.031
89.2539%