Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DTWC54YP8NXGEFTR4DT8R

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory was halfway through restacking the whisky shelf when the door swung open. The bell above it chimed twice. Silas had been meaning to fix that bell for six months. Rory had offered to do it herself. He kept saying no. The woman who stepped in didn't look like their usual customer. She wore a tailored cream-coloured coat and heels that clicked against the floorboards with rehearsed purpose. Her hair was a sleek pale bob, a shade lighter than Rory remembered, and she carried a leather briefcase like it was a weapon she'd been trained to hold. She looked like a stranger. Except for her eyes. Sharp blue, the same as Rory's, that peculiar North Walian trait that had once gotten the two of them mistaken for sisters in school photos. Carys had always hated that. She'd wanted to be distinguishable. "Rory?" The name came out cracked. "Rory Carter?" Rory set the glass down. She didn't bother with a smile. "Small world." Carys didn't move from the doorway. Her eyes swept the room, the walls, the old maps of Soho and Aleppo and somewhere in Portugal that Silas had never explained. Black-and-white photographs of strangers who had once mattered to someone. Green neon light pulsing through the front window from the sign above the door, casting everything in a faint chemical glow. "You live above a bar." "Guilty." "In Soho." "Guilty again." Carys stepped further inside, and the door drifted shut behind her. The bell didn't ring. "You didn't say you were in London." "You didn't say you were alive." Carys set her briefcase down against the nearest stool and sat without being invited. Her laugh came out brittle, scraped thin. "Three years, Rory. Three years of unanswered messages. Your mother told mine you were fine, so I let it go. I let it go, and now I find you stacking glasses in a basement at nine o'clock on a Tuesday." "Second floor." "Really? That's what you want to argue about?" Rory picked up the next glass. It was already clean. She polished it anyway. "What are you doing here?" "Case conference. Fraud division. I'm in the city for three days." Carys smoothed her coat across her knees. "Red wine. Whatever's open." "We're closed." "You're standing behind the bar." Rory waited three full seconds. Then she reached under the counter for the bottle she kept for guests who had nowhere else to go. It wasn't the good one. She poured anyway. "That'll be fifteen pounds." "You're not serious." "Council rates. Soho property. You understand." Carys slid twenty across the wood. Rory took it and didn't give change. "I heard you dropped out," Carys said. "Second year of law. Your father told mine you'd taken a leave of absence. That was two years ago. You never went back." "Word travels." "He was worried. He couldn't stop asking me whether I'd heard from you." Rory's hand tightened on the bottle. "Dad's a barrister. He knows how to phrase a question so you'll feel guilty for answering it." "He was worried," Carys repeated. "So was I." The cork came out with a wet pop. Rory filled the glass and pushed it across. Carys looked at it for a moment, then lifted it without drinking. "Evan still lives in Cardiff." The air changed. Rory's face didn't move. She'd trained it for years not to move. But something behind her eyes went sharp and cold, like the moment before a thunderstorm. "Does he." "New girlfriend. Blonde. Younger. Works in the admin office at the university." Carys sipped. "He asks about you. At the pub. At the shop. Everywhere your name still means something." "Convenient that he never used to ask when we were together." "No. It isn't." Silence. The neon flickered. Somewhere behind the bar, the old fridge hummed like a dying bee. Then a door opened at the back of the room, and Silas stepped out of his office with the quietness of a man who had heard every word and intended to pretend he hadn't. "Everything alright?" "Fine." "You'll lock up?" "Always do." Silas looked at Carys. Then at Rory. His hand rested on the cane, the silver signet ring catching the low light. He didn't ask anything. He never did. He simply withdrew into the corridor, and a moment later the back door clicked shut. Carys watched him go. "Who's that?" "Landlord." "He didn't look like a landlord." "He's retired MI6." The words slipped out before Rory could catch them. She'd been doing that more often lately, letting truths escape through the seams. A side effect of living honestly, she supposed. She'd spent years keeping everything inside a room with no doors, and now every time she opened a window, a piece of her fell out. Carys didn't laugh. "You're not joking." "No." Another sip. Carys' shoulders came down a fraction, the way shoulders do when someone decides to stop performing. "So this isn't a phase." "No." "Then what is it?" Her voice went small. "Because I've been carrying around the last three years of you, Rory. The pre-law Rory. The one who was going to be a barrister like her dad, and marry someone dependable, and come back to Cardiff for Christmas. And I've been telling myself you were fine. That you just needed space. That one day you'd text me back and explain everything, and I'd forgive you immediately because that's what we do." She reached into her coat and laid something on the bar between them. A photograph, creased at the corners, black and white. A young woman with long dark hair, laughing at something off-frame. "And then I walk in and find you in a stranger's bar, lying about the rent, and I don't know who I'm looking at." Rory set the glass down. She didn't touch the photograph. She didn't need to. She knew exactly what it was. Someone had taken it the week before she left Cardiff. "Why did you keep it?" "I don't know." Carys looked away. "Because I loved her. Because I don't know who you are." "You do know." "I don't." "You're a solicitor, Carys. You know exactly who I am. You just don't want to say it." Carys didn't answer. She finished the wine in one unbroken movement, left the glass on the bar, and stood. "I'm staying at the Beaumont. Two nights. Then I'm flying back." She picked up her briefcase. "I don't expect you to call. But if you ever want to explain, the number's the same." She turned toward the door. "Carys." She stopped. Didn't turn around. "Why did you really come here?" A long beat. The neon flickered again. Outside, a taxi hissed past on wet tarmac. "Evan told me he had a delivery to make in London," Carys said. "He asked if I knew where you worked. I told him I didn't." She paused. "I lied." The door swung open. The bell, still broken, didn't make a sound. Carys stepped out into the street, and the door drifted closed behind her, and for a moment the only sound in the bar was the hum of the fridge and the drip of water on the mat. Rory stood very still. Then she reached across the bar, turned the photograph over, and read the words she had written in her own handwriting three years ago. Forgive me. Outside, in the green glow of the window, a figure walked slowly past the glass. Paused. Did not continue.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Carys looked away [away]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.197
leniency0.393
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.033
83.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1247
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1247
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
highlights
0"silence"
1"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences92
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences92
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen84
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1247
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount767
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.22
worstName"Carys"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Carys"
discoveredNames
Rory15
North1
Walian1
Soho1
Aleppo1
Portugal1
Silas4
Silence1
Carys17
Cardiff1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Carys"
places
0"Soho"
1"Aleppo"
2"Portugal"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.392
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1247
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences142
matches
0"fix that bell"
1", that peculiar"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean16.41
std21.13
cv1.288
sampleLengths
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156
25
339
48
511
62
760
85
91
102
112
1215
137
1467
152
168
1714
185
1922
202
215
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234
243
256
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282
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3023
318
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335
3430
352
3630
3711
383
3916
4034
412
421
433
442
4543
466
471
486
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"been trained"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs142
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences142
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.53% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount724
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.04281767955801105
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.008287292817679558
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean8.78
std9.79
cv1.115
sampleLengths
013
16
211
37
44
511
616
729
85
94
1025
115
125
136
142
155
166
172
186
1923
2010
2121
225
231
242
252
2611
274
287
2920
307
3140
322
338
346
354
364
375
3818
394
402
415
425
4319
445
453
464
473
486
496
56.81% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3873239436619718
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then she reached under the"
1"Somewhere behind the bar, the"
2"Then a door opened at"
3"Then at Rory."
4"Then she reached across the"
ratio0.061
88.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences82
matches
0"He kept saying no."
1"She wore a tailored cream-coloured"
2"Her hair was a sleek"
3"She looked like a stranger."
4"She'd wanted to be distinguishable."
5"She didn't bother with a"
6"Her eyes swept the room,"
7"Her laugh came out brittle,"
8"It was already clean."
9"She polished it anyway."
10"It wasn't the good one."
11"She poured anyway."
12"She'd trained it for years"
13"His hand rested on the"
14"He didn't ask anything."
15"He never did."
16"He simply withdrew into the"
17"She'd been doing that more"
18"She'd spent years keeping everything"
19"Her voice went small"
ratio0.329
45.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences82
matches
0"Rory was halfway through restacking"
1"The bell above it chimed"
2"Silas had been meaning to"
3"Rory had offered to do"
4"He kept saying no."
5"The woman who stepped in"
6"She wore a tailored cream-coloured"
7"Her hair was a sleek"
8"She looked like a stranger."
9"Carys had always hated that."
10"She'd wanted to be distinguishable."
11"The name came out cracked"
12"Rory set the glass down."
13"She didn't bother with a"
14"Carys didn't move from the"
15"Her eyes swept the room,"
16"Carys stepped further inside, and"
17"The bell didn't ring."
18"Carys set her briefcase down"
19"Her laugh came out brittle,"
ratio0.829
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She wore a tailored cream-coloured coat and heels that clicked against the floorboards with rehearsed purpose."
1"Black-and-white photographs of strangers who had once mattered to someone."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Carys repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.049
leniency0.098
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.033
89.2994%