Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DTX0D84VXDEYFWH4XC5B8

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Duration:
25.8s
Cost:
$0.002385
Provider:
DeepSeek

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gates were chained. That was the first wrong thing. Yu-Fei had pressed the box into my hands at twenty past eleven, the woks still hissing behind him, the pass-through window fogged with pork fat. Sawyer's Hill gate, Richmond Park. Someone meets you there. He'd already turned back to the stove before I could ask who. So I'd ridden out past Hammersmith with the box jammed under my thigh, and the pendant sat against my sternum doing what it had done every night for three weeks, warming like a thumb pressed to a bruise. It had gone past warming somewhere around Kew. Now it hummed against my collarbone, steady, as though something on the other end of it had woken up. I killed the scooter's engine and listened. Nothing. That was the second wrong thing. Richmond Park at midnight should have been full of noise, foxes screaming, the low grumble of the A3, planes stacked over Heathrow. I got none of it. The air smelled of bracken and wet bark and something underneath, sweet and faintly rotten, like fruit left in a warm room. The chain on the gate was new. Galvanised steel, bright where the links had rubbed, padlock oiled and closed. No delivery in London gets a padlocked gate. I checked my phone. Twenty past midnight. I checked it again while I was putting it away and it said eleven fifty-one. Fine. Out-of-the-box thinking had got me out of worse. I found the deer fence twenty metres along the treeline, sagging where something heavy had leaned on it, and I went over it with the box under one arm and my coat snagged twice on the wire. The ground on the other side gave under my boots, soft and springy, and the wildflowers were out. That stopped me. Wildflowers. In November. Not the grey husks you'd expect either, but whole drifts of them, white and yellow and a blue so deep it read as black in the low light, all of them open, all of them facing me. Every head turned the same way. I took a step. The flowers nearest my boot closed, quick as a fist, and the ones behind them opened in a slow ripple that ran off into the dark and kept going, further than I could see, further than a person can hear. The pendant burned. I walked. Not because I wanted to. Because the box was warm in my hands now, warm through the cardboard, and Yu-Fei pays cash, and cash means next month's rent on the flat above Silas', and a woman who has run from one bad man in Cardiff does not get to be squeamish about one strange errand. Under the oaks the dark thickened. These weren't ordinary oaks. They were too tall, too straight, and they stood in a ring, seven or eight of them, so evenly spaced that my eye kept insisting they'd been placed, and their bark ran in deep vertical channels that made them look less like trees and more like standing stones someone had dressed in wood. The flowers grew right up to their roots and stopped there. A perfect circle of bare earth, ten feet across, dry and pale as a scar. The deer came first. I don't know how long they'd been watching. Twelve, maybe fifteen of them, red deer, hinds mostly, standing in the black between the trunks with their heads lowered and their eyes catching the little light there was. None of them moved. Not an ear. Not a tail. I've walked through Richmond at dawn and been ignored by better animals than these, and I have never in my life stood in front of something with a heartbeat and had it hold entirely still, watching, like a room full of people waiting for the host to finish his toast. "Right," I said, because silence has to be broken by somebody. Not one of them blinked. The nearest one, a big hind with a torn ear, turned her head maybe two inches to follow my voice and then stopped, as though the movement had cost her something. I stepped into the circle, because that's where the path led, and the deer were gone. Not run off. Gone, the way a light goes when someone hits the switch. The pendant went cold. Every hair on my arms stood up, and I have learned to trust that, because the last time it happened I was nineteen and Evan was standing behind me in the kitchen doorway with his keys still in his hand and his face arranged into an apology I had not asked for. I turned slowly, one boot at a time, and looked back the way I'd come. The flowers were closed. All of them. Every last head shut tight, and the ripple was gone, and the gap in the deer fence through which I had so recently climbed was not where I had left it. I could see the fence. I could not see the gap. Something walked. Behind me and to the left. Two steps on dry leaves, then a pause. I stopped. It stopped. I counted to five and stepped again, and it stepped with me, and then, a half beat after I put my boot down, it took one more step than I did. I have known that trick since I was a child, from a story my mother told me in Welsh, the one about the man who walked home from the pub and heard his own feet on the road behind him and did not turn around, and did not turn around, and did not turn around, and was never seen in that village again. The pendant was still cold. The box was not. It had gone from warm to hot, and as I stood there with my arms wrapped round it, something inside rapped once against the lid. One knock. Polite. As though it had waited a long time to be let out and had decided not to be rude about it. "Someone's meeting me," I said, out loud, to the trees and the flowers and whatever had borrowed a pair of boots. "So you may as well come on." And the grove answered, in Eva's voice. "Rory." Eva's voice. Her exact voice, the Cardiff slur on the O, the little upward lilt at the end that she puts on when she wants something from me. I felt it land in my chest like a hand. My oldest friend. The one who'd found me a room, a job, a life, who had stood in my doorway in London three years ago with a duvet under one arm and said, you're not going back to him, and who has never once, in all that time, asked me for anything in return. "Rory," it said again, from the far side of the circle, out of the dark between two of the standing oaks. The oak trunk shifted. Not swayed. Shifted, the way a person shifts their weight. "Eva's in Bethnal Green," I said. My voice came out level, which surprised me. "Asleep. I saw her at six." "Laila," the grove said. That one hit the back of my neck like a draught. Only one man ever called me Laila, and that man is dead, and the fact that I had used the name afterwards, quietly, on a passport and a lease and a bank account, does not make it his to use. I put the box down. It was too hot to hold. "Aurora," the grove said, and smiled. I don't know how I knew it smiled. The sound simply had a shape to it. Behind me, the circle of oaks had rearranged itself while I was listening. There had been eight of them. I was certain of eight, because I had counted them twice on the way in. There were nine now, and the ninth stood where the gap in the deer fence should have been, and its channels of bark were running, slowly, in a direction I did not want to follow with my eyes. The box knocked again. Twice. Hard. And then, very gently, from somewhere inside the wood, something said the one name I have never heard a living person say out loud, the one that sits under all the others like a stone at the bottom of a well, the one that does not belong to anyone from Cardiff or London or anywhere with a postcode, and I turned, because it was my name, and I have always answered to my name.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"it said again [again]"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.778
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
86.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
2"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"silence"
2"lilt"
3"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences104
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen74
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1432
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount1384
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.22
worstName"Richmond"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Richmond"
discoveredNames
Hill1
Richmond3
Park2
Hammersmith1
Kew1
Heathrow1
London3
November1
Yu-Fei2
Evan1
Welsh1
Eva2
Cardiff2
Laila1
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Evan"
2"Eva"
3"Laila"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"November"
4"Welsh"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.698
wordCount1432
matches
0"Not the grey husks you'd expect either, but whole drifts of them, white"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"spaced that my"
1"known that trick"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean38.7
std29.6
cv0.765
sampleLengths
010
146
265
37
456
549
69
755
83
990
103
1157
1289
134
1497
1511
1636
1730
184
1967
2049
2151
2263
2358
2428
257
261
2792
2835
2920
304
3151
3211
3322
3472
356
3674
88.39% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences104
matches
0"were chained"
1"been placed"
2"been ignored"
3"were gone"
4"was gone"
82.01% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs226
matches
0"was putting"
1"was standing"
2"was listening"
3"were running"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences107
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount446
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.033632286995515695
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.002242152466367713
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean13.38
std15.2
cv1.135
sampleLengths
04
16
225
35
44
512
638
78
819
97
101
116
1222
135
1422
157
1612
178
184
193
2015
211
228
2337
2418
253
261
272
2837
296
304
3140
323
332
345
3550
366
374
3853
3911
4015
414
428
4329
444
453
463
4750
4811
495
72.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4672897196261682
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners50
37.45% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences89
matches
0"Only one man ever called"
ratio0.011
89.66% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences89
matches
0"He'd already turned back to"
1"It had gone past warming"
2"I killed the scooter's engine"
3"I got none of it."
4"I checked my phone."
5"I checked it again while"
6"I found the deer fence"
7"I took a step."
8"They were too tall, too"
9"I don't know how long"
10"I've walked through Richmond at"
11"I said, because silence has"
12"I stepped into the circle,"
13"I turned slowly, one boot"
14"I could see the fence."
15"I could not see the"
16"I counted to five and"
17"I have known that trick"
18"It had gone from warm"
19"I said, out loud, to"
ratio0.326
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences89
matches
0"The gates were chained."
1"That was the first wrong"
2"Yu-Fei had pressed the box"
3"Sawyer's Hill gate, Richmond Park."
4"Someone meets you there."
5"He'd already turned back to"
6"It had gone past warming"
7"I killed the scooter's engine"
8"That was the second wrong"
9"Richmond Park at midnight should"
10"I got none of it."
11"The air smelled of bracken"
12"The chain on the gate"
13"I checked my phone."
14"I checked it again while"
15"I found the deer fence"
16"The ground on the other"
17"That stopped me."
18"Every head turned the same"
19"I took a step."
ratio0.708
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences89
matches
0"Now it hummed against my"
1"Because the box was warm"
2"As though it had waited"
ratio0.034
27.03% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"So I'd ridden out past Hammersmith with the box jammed under my thigh, and the pendant sat against my sternum doing what it had done every night for three weeks…"
1"Now it hummed against my collarbone, steady, as though something on the other end of it had woken up."
2"The flowers nearest my boot closed, quick as a fist, and the ones behind them opened in a slow ripple that ran off into the dark and kept going, further than I …"
3"They were too tall, too straight, and they stood in a ring, seven or eight of them, so evenly spaced that my eye kept insisting they'd been placed, and their ba…"
4"Twelve, maybe fifteen of them, red deer, hinds mostly, standing in the black between the trunks with their heads lowered and their eyes catching the little ligh…"
5"The nearest one, a big hind with a torn ear, turned her head maybe two inches to follow my voice and then stopped, as though the movement had cost her something…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.8676%