Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DXGTMGRWY1D9GXE4PZ9GY

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Duration:
28.1s
Cost:
$0.002573
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DeepSeek

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
They found the standing stones an hour after the park gates should have closed, past the point where the deer paths frayed into nothing and the bracken grew tall enough to hide a person's hips. Rory's breath came out white and the frost had already bitten through her gloves. Somewhere behind them, beyond the trees, London hummed its low endless hum, muffled as if heard through water. Ahead, three oaks grew into the shape of standing stones. They didn't look like oaks anymore, or like stones either — trunks squared and gone grey as granite, bark smoothed to a knapped finish, roots knotted at the base in the pattern of a cairn. They stood in a rough triangle, and between them the air had a texture. Not a shimmer, exactly. More like the moment before a headache. "You're sure this is it," Eva said. She had her hands shoved so deep in her coat pockets the sleeves swallowed her wrists, and she'd gone quiet in the way she did when she was frightened, which was a different quiet than her usual one and Rory had known both since they were eight. "The riddle said three stones, three shadows, three steps." Rory crouched at the base of the nearest trunk. No frost on the grass inside the triangle. The ground was dry and faintly warm under her fingertips. She wiped her hand on her jeans and stood up. Nyx had not come past the bracken. They stood — more or less stood, more or less solid — a few metres back, and the moonlight seemed to have trouble finding them. Rory had grown almost used to that over the last few weeks. Almost. "It is the door," Nyx said. Their voice was a whisper with weather in it, a draught under a door. "I would know it. I have felt it from the other side for three hundred years." "You've never come through." "I am not invited through. There is a difference." They tilted their head. Their eyes were the only fixed point on them, two faint violets glowing in a silhouette. "Fae ground does not care for the likes of me, Aurora. I will thin. But I will come." "In that order?" "In that order." Rory looked at Eva. Eva looked back and gave her the smallest nod, the one that meant *I'm here and I'm terrified and neither of those things is going to change*. Rory took the pendant out from under her shirt — the crimson stone on its silver chain, warm as a coin left in sun on a day when there was no sun to speak of. It had been cold since they'd crossed the park boundary. Cold and still, a dead thing on her chest, and she'd stopped expecting it to do anything but that. They stepped between the stones. The sound went first. Not quieted — removed, the way a word is removed from a page, the space left behind. Rory's ears filled with pressure. She swallowed and heard her own swallow inside her skull, enormous. The cold went next, all at once, peeled off her like a wet coat. Then the ground, briefly, unpleasantly, was not where she had left it. Eva made a small noise and Rory grabbed for her arm and found it, which was the whole world for a moment. They stood in a clearing that ought to have been the same clearing. That was the first wrongness. The trees were in the same places — Rory was almost certain of it, the big beech with the lightning scar, the dip in the ground where the drainage ran — but everything else had been replaced. The air was warm. Not summer-warm; warm like a kitchen after the oven's been on, dry and full of smells that didn't belong in December: crushed green, honey, cold stone, something sweet and faintly burnt. Wildflowers stood ankle-deep around their boots, blue and yellow and a white that glowed faintly, blooming out of a soil that showed no sign of ever having known a frost. Above them, the sky was wrong. It was blue. Not night blue — day blue, a soft rinsed cobalt with high thin clouds drifting across it, though Rory's phone, when she pulled it from her pocket, still said 23:44 and still said no service. She turned on the spot. Through a gap in the trees where the park should have gone on rolling toward Pen Ponds, there was no city. No orange haze along the horizon. No plane lights. Nothing but treeline after treeline folding away into a distance that went on considerably further than Richmond Park allowed. "Two minutes," Eva said. "We've been gone two minutes." "Time moves differently in here," Nyx said. They had come through. They were less than they had been — the edges of them feathered, their hands going translucent at the fingers, shadow without anything to fall on. "An hour inside may be minutes outside. Or days. Nobody who has gone in to measure it has come out to tell anyone the answer." Rory checked her phone again. 23:44. "Right," she said, because there was nothing else useful to say, and started walking. The flowers closed behind their feet. That was the second thing. Not springing back the way grass does — closing, deliberately, the petals folding in on themselves and the stems bowing out of the way, so that after a dozen steps there was no path behind them at all, only undisturbed blossoms and the pale glowing ones turning their faces to follow. Rory walked faster. Eva walked close enough that their shoulders kept knocking. The birdsong was wrong. There wasn't any. There was something, though. A sound so low she felt it in her molars before she heard it: a slow pulse, less a note than a pressure, the way a tuning fork feels when it's pressed against bone. It came from underneath, from the ground itself, and she stopped walking to listen and couldn't tell if it was getting louder or if she was simply getting better at hearing it. "Don't," Nyx said. "Don't listen to it. That is the Grove thinking." "Trees don't think." "These ones are older than trees." They had drifted to the treeline, keeping to the shade as much as the shade could be said to keep to them, and Rory noticed they were careful not to touch the trunks. "The Fae Courts quarrelled over this place for a thousand years. Nobody won. That is because the ground is not neutral — it has preferences. It has been getting its way since before there were names for it." "Preferences," Eva said thinly. "Meaning what?" "Meaning it has decided we are interesting." They walked deeper. The light didn't change — no sun to move, no shadows to lengthen, just the same even gold coming from everywhere and nowhere, which was worse than darkness once Rory thought about it. She'd counted on shadows. Shadows were Nyx's country. She'd assumed, without ever having said it aloud, that in any place they went, if something came for them, Nyx could take them into the dark and away. Here there was no dark to be taken into. The light was under the trees and through the trees and inside the flowers, and it would not let anything hide. The third wrongness was her feet. She noticed it because Eva stopped, mid-step, and looked down. Rory looked down. Four sets of prints in the moss — hers, Eva's, and a pair of bare ones far too large and elegant to belong to either of them, fading in at the edge of the clearing like a sentence begun before you came into the room — and behind all of them, nothing. The moss rose smooth as a made bed; the wildflowers had already closed. "No footprints," Rory said. "That's a person's," Eva whispered. "Barefoot. In winter." "It doesn't get winter in here." Rory's mouth had gone dry. She turned slowly on the spot, and the clearing looked exactly as it had when they'd entered it, and the trees stood in their same places, the beech with its lightning scar, the dip where the drainage ran. Nyx stood very still, looking at the prints, and their face — such as their face was — had gone carefully expressionless in a way Rory had learned to read as fear. "We've walked in a circle," she said. "We have not." "I remember that tree." "You remember it because it is a tree that wants to be remembered." Nyx lifted their head and the violet of their eyes brightened, a lamp being turned up. "Aurora. The pendant." She had forgotten it entirely. She pulled the chain up over her collar, and the stone lay in her palm, and it was cold. Colder than the air, colder than it had been in the park, an ache against her skin like a coin pressed to a bruise. She'd had it four months now and it had never once been this cold. Then all at once she understood what that meant, and wished she hadn't. "It should be warm," she said slowly. "Warm means — it's never — it only does that near the door to the other place. The Hel door. So here, in a Fae place, it would just be — inert. Room temperature. Dead weight." She looked up at them both. "It's not dead weight." "No," Nyx said. "So somewhere under this grove there's a door to Hel, and the stone can feel it." "Or," Nyx said, "this is not a Fae place at all, and we are lost in something's dream. I genuinely cannot tell you which. I meant it when I said the ground here has opinions." Eva was already backing away, toward the treeline, toward the prints. "Rory. Rory, there's someone —" Rory turned. At the far edge of the clearing, past the barefoot trail, stood an oak that had grown itself into the shape of a woman, or a woman who had stood so long she'd been mistaken for an oak. No. Neither. A woman, standing in the shallow dip where the drainage ran, with silver hair falling to her waist and the wildflowers moving quietly around her ankles. Barefoot. In the frost that shouldn't have been there at all. The grass around her feet was smooth and undisturbed. She was not looking at the prints. She was looking at Rory's open palm, and the crimson stone in it, and something moved across her pale face — surprise, or hunger, or the particular pleasure of a person who has been right about something for three hundred years. "You're late," she said. "You brought the wrong stone into my grove." Her eyes, when she lifted them, were the colour of the sky just before it rains. "And a Shade. And a girl who left the oven on at home, thinking about a man she hasn't met yet." She turned without leaving a footprint and walked into the trees, and she did not look back, and the flowers turned to follow her, and after a moment — because there was nothing else to do, because they had come this far, because time inside could be minutes or days and Rory had a delivery shift at the Golden Empress she was almost certainly going to miss — Rory followed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva said thinly [thinly]"
1"she said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.512
leniency1
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.095
86.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1881
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"slowly"
2"very"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
89.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1881
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"whisper"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
highlights
0"whisper"
1"pulse"
2"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences111
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords14
totalWords1903
ratio0.007
matches
0"I'm here and I'm terrified and neither of those things is going to change"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.26% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1555
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.41
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London1
Rory22
Eva11
December1
Pen1
Ponds1
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx10
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Nyx"
places
0"London"
1"Pen"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Golden"
globalScore0.793
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1903
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean33.98
std29.73
cv0.875
sampleLengths
067
110
260
354
446
545
636
74
847
93
103
1195
125
1363
1422
1513
16107
176
1892
199
2062
216
2214
2374
247
2570
2612
273
2877
296
307
3172
3230
336
3478
354
368
3749
3832
397
403
414
4232
4362
4413
4553
463
4716
4835
4916
92.62% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences111
matches
0"was frightened"
1"been replaced"
2"being turned"
3"been mistaken"
75.16% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs267
matches
0"was getting"
1"was simply getting"
2"was already backing"
3"was not looking"
4"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences131
ratio0.115
matches
0"They didn't look like oaks anymore, or like stones either — trunks squared and gone grey as granite, bark smoothed to a knapped finish, roots knotted at the base in the pattern of a cairn."
1"They stood — more or less stood, more or less solid — a few metres back, and the moonlight seemed to have trouble finding them."
2"Rory took the pendant out from under her shirt — the crimson stone on its silver chain, warm as a coin left in sun on a day when there was no sun to speak of."
3"Not quieted — removed, the way a word is removed from a page, the space left behind."
4"The trees were in the same places — Rory was almost certain of it, the big beech with the lightning scar, the dip in the ground where the drainage ran — but everything else had been replaced."
5"Not summer-warm; warm like a kitchen after the oven's been on, dry and full of smells that didn't belong in December: crushed green, honey, cold stone, something sweet and faintly burnt."
6"Not night blue — day blue, a soft rinsed cobalt with high thin clouds drifting across it, though Rory's phone, when she pulled it from her pocket, still said 23:44 and still said no service."
7"They were less than they had been — the edges of them feathered, their hands going translucent at the fingers, shadow without anything to fall on."
8"Not springing back the way grass does — closing, deliberately, the petals folding in on themselves and the stems bowing out of the way, so that after a dozen steps there was no path behind them at all, only undisturbed blossoms and the pale glowing ones turning their faces to follow."
9"The light didn't change — no sun to move, no shadows to lengthen, just the same even gold coming from everywhere and nowhere, which was worse than darkness once Rory thought about it."
10"Four sets of prints in the moss — hers, Eva's, and a pair of bare ones far too large and elegant to belong to either of them, fading in at the edge of the clearing like a sentence begun before you came into the room — and behind all of them, nothing."
11"The moss rose smooth as a made bed; the wildflowers had already closed."
12"Nyx stood very still, looking at the prints, and their face — such as their face was — had gone carefully expressionless in a way Rory had learned to read as fear."
13"She was looking at Rory's open palm, and the crimson stone in it, and something moved across her pale face — surprise, or hunger, or the particular pleasure of a person who has been right about something for three hundred years."
14"She turned without leaving a footprint and walked into the trees, and she did not look back, and the flowers turned to follow her, and after a moment — because there was nothing else to do, because they had come this far, because time inside could be minutes or days and Rory had a delivery shift at the Golden Empress she was almost certainly going to miss — Rory followed."
92.54% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1344
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"summer-warm; warm like"
adverbCount56
adverbRatio0.041666666666666664
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.012648809523809524
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean14.53
std13.38
cv0.921
sampleLengths
035
114
218
310
435
514
64
77
87
947
1018
118
1210
1310
147
1525
1612
171
186
1914
2016
214
2213
2316
2418
253
263
274
2827
2935
3010
3119
325
334
3417
355
3611
3714
3812
3922
4013
415
4237
434
4431
4530
466
473
4835
495
52.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3769230769230769
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners49
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences94
matches
0"Somewhere behind them, beyond the"
1"More like the moment before"
2"Then the ground, briefly, unpleasantly,"
3"Then all at once she"
ratio0.043
75.32% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences94
matches
0"They found the standing stones"
1"They didn't look like oaks"
2"They stood in a rough"
3"She had her hands shoved"
4"She wiped her hand on"
5"They stood — more or"
6"Their voice was a whisper"
7"They tilted their head"
8"Their eyes were the only"
9"It had been cold since"
10"They stepped between the stones."
11"She swallowed and heard her"
12"They stood in a clearing"
13"It was blue."
14"She turned on the spot."
15"They had come through."
16"They were less than they"
17"she said, because there was"
18"It came from underneath, from"
19"They had drifted to the"
ratio0.362
77.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences94
matches
0"They found the standing stones"
1"Rory's breath came out white"
2"They didn't look like oaks"
3"They stood in a rough"
4"She had her hands shoved"
5"Rory crouched at the base"
6"The ground was dry and"
7"She wiped her hand on"
8"Nyx had not come past"
9"They stood — more or"
10"Rory had grown almost used"
11"Their voice was a whisper"
12"They tilted their head"
13"Their eyes were the only"
14"Rory looked at Eva."
15"Eva looked back and gave"
16"Rory took the pendant out"
17"It had been cold since"
18"They stepped between the stones."
19"The sound went first."
ratio0.766
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
ratio0
86.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Somewhere behind them, beyond the trees, London hummed its low endless hum, muffled as if heard through water."
1"Not summer-warm; warm like a kitchen after the oven's been on, dry and full of smells that didn't belong in December: crushed green, honey, cold stone, somethin…"
2"Wildflowers stood ankle-deep around their boots, blue and yellow and a white that glowed faintly, blooming out of a soil that showed no sign of ever having know…"
3"She was looking at Rory's open palm, and the crimson stone in it, and something moved across her pale face — surprise, or hunger, or the particular pleasure of …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.683
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.049
86.8960%