Run: 2026-09-10-01M25DXV04QTVHFMCSHC0F276G

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Duration:
36.5s
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$0.004078
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DeepSeek

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rift announced itself not with sound but with absence — a place at the edge of the grove where the night chorus went quiet, where the wildflowers leaned away, where even the moonlight seemed to hesitate before crossing. Aurora stood in the moss with her boots sinking in and one hand lifted, palm flat against the empty air. Cold, first. The cold of the Fae blade asleep at her hip, of a winter that had nothing to do with weather. Then warm. The Heartstone woke against her collarbone, its little crimson face pulsing like something with a heartbeat of its own. "After you, little flame," said Isolde from behind her. The seer's voice was soft and silver and entirely uninterested in the concept of urgency. "Or before me. It makes very little difference to the door." "Reassuring." "I don't lie." "That isn't the same thing as being helpful." "Nothing is," Isolde said, which was, as usual, both true and completely useless. On Aurora's left, Nyx drifted up out of the shadow of an oak stone — no footsteps, no breath, the dusk resolving slowly into the rough shape of a person. Their eyes glowed faintly violet against the dark. "The Wardens will feel this," they said, in a voice like wind moving through dry reeds. "Rift points don't open this close to the city without someone noticing." "Then we don't have long," Aurora said. "No," Isolde agreed, "you don't." Aurora stepped through. For a single breath the world was nothing — not dark, not bright, not warm or cold, just a pressure against her skin like the inside of a held breath. Then she was standing on grass that wasn't grass, under a sky that wasn't a sky, and the first thing that took hold of her took hold hard. The sky was amber. Warm amber, low and close, the color of honey held up against a lamp. No sun. No clouds. No stars. The light seemed to come from everywhere at once, soft and diffuse and endless, the way an afternoon feels like a whole life when you are young and certain of nothing. There was no horizon she could trust — the land rolled out and out and simply stopped being land somewhere, becoming sky without ever going through the formality of becoming sky. She turned in a slow circle. They had come out on a terrace of pale stone, cracked and warm underfoot, older than any stone had a right to be. Below the terrace, in every direction, stretched farmland. Vineyards, but not like any vineyard Aurora had ever seen — the rows ran in narrowing spirals, each curling inward toward a dark center her eyes kept sliding off. Orchards, but the trees were wrong. Their bark was a soft pale gold, and the leaves didn't rustle. They hummed. A single note held forever, barely there, a vibration in the air more than a sound in her ears. And the fruit. The fruit was obscene. Peaches the size of her head, blushing so deep a red they glowed at the seams. Berries in clusters that must have weighed five pounds each, translucent, shot through with threads of silver. Farther out, a grove of trees carried shapes like pears in the color of a bruise, and as she watched, one of them trembled and fell, and the grass beneath it reached up to catch it. The grass caught it. She was nearly sure she had seen that. The smell arrived last, and it arrived all at once. Sugar and smoke. Burnt honey and yeast. Something green and unfamiliar, crushed mint crossed with wet stone. And under all of it, faintly, impossibly, the smell of bread — the smell of a thousand loaves rising at once, an entire city's worth, filling the air like weather. Aurora's mouth watered before she could stop it. The Heartstone pulsed, warmer now, insistent, a small steady heat like cupped hands. "Where's the rift?" she asked. Behind you, said the air. She turned. The shimmer was already gone. The Fae blade hummed at her hip, cold and quiet, and the standing stones of the grove — the oak-marked boundary, Isolde's boundary — were nowhere to be seen. "Ah," said Isolde. She had wandered a few steps down the terrace and was examining a vine with detached, scholarly interest. Her silver hair caught the amber light and looked, briefly, like it might catch fire. She left no marks on the warm stone behind her. "It will return." "When?" "When it is needed. That is how doors work, when they belong to someone else." Aurora pressed her lips together. The seer could not lie; she could, and frequently did, tell the truth in a way designed to be useless. "Then we go deeper," Aurora said. "No point standing here waiting for the Wardens to feel a hole we can't use." They followed a stone path down from the terrace, between the spiraling vineyards. The path was warm underfoot, and as they walked, Aurora became aware of a sound she hadn't heard at first — a low, distant murmur, like a crowd in another room. Not voices, not exactly. There were threads in it that might have been laughter. There were threads that might have been weeping. She couldn't separate them. "Someone is cooking," Nyx said. They were right. Beneath the sweetness of the orchard, under the rich yeasty smell of the bread, there was something else — butter, garlic, the sear of meat over open flame. It filled Aurora's head, and her stomach twisted with a hunger so sharp and sudden it was almost a pain. She made herself breathe through it. She had learned, in other kitchens, to be careful about wanting things. The path turned a corner, and the orchard opened into a garden. It was the most beautiful place Aurora had ever seen. She wanted to be honest with herself about that, because honesty was the only thing she still owned free and clear. Terraces of flowers climbed a low hill in ascending rings — blooms in colors she had no names for, petals wide as dinner plates and petals small as grains of rice. Fruit trees grew beside them, carefully pruned into shapes: arches, spirals, the kneeling forms of figures with their arms outstretched. Branches hung low and heavy, and nothing about them moved in any wind, because there was no wind. Fountains ran through it all, but the water wasn't water. It was a pale, cloudy fluid that shimmered in the amber light, and where it touched the soil, the soil turned a deeper, richer brown. "Don't drink it," Isolde said mildly. "And don't eat what grows from it. Not yet. Not here." "Why not?" "Because the garden is a promise," she said, "and promises in Dymas are always kept." Nyx flickered. In their solid form they walked like a person, but the shape of them was too smooth, too fluid, the edges softening whenever they passed into shadow. They kept drifting ahead of Aurora and then waiting — drifting, waiting, drifting, like a hound that knew better than to run. "There are people," Nyx whispered. Aurora followed their gaze. At first she thought they were statues — figures kneeling among the flower beds, backs straight, hands busy with the soil. She counted nine, then twelve. Simple clothes. Their hands moved in an even, unhurried rhythm: pruning, planting, lifting water in clay vessels. Their faces were smooth. Too smooth. There was nothing wrong with any single feature, and yet the sum of them raised the hair on her forearms, because none of those faces ever changed. They were working, and they were working well, and they were not thinking about anything at all. "Helbound," Nyx said. "Contracted." "From Earth." "Yes." Aurora watched one of them — a man, or the memory of one — lift a clay vessel and pour. He didn't look up. He didn't look at anything. Somewhere very far away on Earth, there was a life he had traded this for. Aurora didn't know the terms. She suspected she didn't want to. "Keep moving," Isolde said, and her voice was quiet, and for once it did not sound like a riddle. They climbed. The garden rose, and past the garden was a vineyard, and the vineyard was tended by more of the quiet, smooth-faced workers. The spirals tightened as they climbed. The center of each spiral was dark, and Aurora's gaze kept sliding off it, and after a while she stopped trying to look at them directly. The distant murmur grew louder. They came up over the last ridge, and the valley opened beneath them like a held breath. Pavilions. Miles of them — canvas and stone and silk, all of it lit by the amber sky, all of it somehow glowing without lanterns, without torches, without any source Aurora could find. Long tables stretched between the pavilions, longer than streets. Thousands sat at those tables. Hundreds more moved with trays and platters and towering confections borne high like reliquaries. Somewhere in the middle of it, music drifted up — strings, drums, a melody that turned on itself and came back around and never quite resolved. The food crossed the entire valley like weather. Roasts and pastries and heaps of fruit and vats of something steaming. Aurora could smell all of it from the ridge, and her stomach turned over with wanting, and the Heartstone went warm, warm, warm against her chest. "Prince Belphegor's table," Isolde said. "He keeps it always full." "And the guests?" "Most of them came for one meal," she said. "They are still eating it." Nyx put a hand on Aurora's shoulder. The touch was cool and solid — they had made themselves solid for her. "We shouldn't be here." "Probably not," Aurora said. But her hand was already at her hip, on the hilt of the Fae blade. Cold, always cold. And under her shirt the Heartstone pulsed, pulsed, pulsed, a second heartbeat she did not own. Standing there on the ridge with the valley of feasts spread out beneath her like an open mouth, Aurora had the sudden and unwelcome sense that she was not the first thing to come through that rift, and not the last, and that somewhere down there, past the pavilions, something had already noticed that she had. "We go down," she said. "Of course," said Isolde. "There is no other way to go." That, at least, was the truth.
created_at"2026-09-10T10:31:00.361Z" 9/10/2026, 10:31:00 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said mildly [mildly]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.053
85.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1735
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"completely"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"completely"
2"slowly"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1735
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"resolving"
count1
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count4
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"resolving"
2"trembled"
3"pulsed"
4"stomach"
5"shimmered"
6"flickered"
7"silk"
8"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences128
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1753
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1574
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.33
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Fae3
Heartstone4
Isolde9
Aurora21
Nyx6
Earth1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Isolde"
2"Aurora"
3"Nyx"
places(empty)
globalScore0.833
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences78
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.57
wordCount1753
matches
0"not with sound but with absence"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"through that rift, noticed that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean30.22
std30.33
cv1.003
sampleLengths
039
163
235
31
43
58
613
766
87
95
103
1158
1286
136
1499
1576
1612
1757
1821
195
205
2136
2249
231
2415
2546
2670
275
2869
2912
30100
3135
3217
332
3415
3551
365
374
3893
394
402
411
4255
4319
4456
455
4617
4787
4846
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences128
matches
0"was tended"
95.83% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs256
matches
0"was standing"
1"was examining"
2"were working"
3"were not thinking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences147
ratio0.116
matches
0"The rift announced itself not with sound but with absence — a place at the edge of the grove where the night chorus went quiet, where the wildflowers leaned away, where even the moonlight seemed to hesitate before crossing."
1"On Aurora's left, Nyx drifted up out of the shadow of an oak stone — no footsteps, no breath, the dusk resolving slowly into the rough shape of a person."
2"For a single breath the world was nothing — not dark, not bright, not warm or cold, just a pressure against her skin like the inside of a held breath."
3"There was no horizon she could trust — the land rolled out and out and simply stopped being land somewhere, becoming sky without ever going through the formality of becoming sky."
4"Vineyards, but not like any vineyard Aurora had ever seen — the rows ran in narrowing spirals, each curling inward toward a dark center her eyes kept sliding off."
5"And under all of it, faintly, impossibly, the smell of bread — the smell of a thousand loaves rising at once, an entire city's worth, filling the air like weather."
6"The Fae blade hummed at her hip, cold and quiet, and the standing stones of the grove — the oak-marked boundary, Isolde's boundary — were nowhere to be seen."
7"The seer could not lie; she could, and frequently did, tell the truth in a way designed to be useless."
8"The path was warm underfoot, and as they walked, Aurora became aware of a sound she hadn't heard at first — a low, distant murmur, like a crowd in another room."
9"Beneath the sweetness of the orchard, under the rich yeasty smell of the bread, there was something else — butter, garlic, the sear of meat over open flame."
10"Terraces of flowers climbed a low hill in ascending rings — blooms in colors she had no names for, petals wide as dinner plates and petals small as grains of rice."
11"They kept drifting ahead of Aurora and then waiting — drifting, waiting, drifting, like a hound that knew better than to run."
12"At first she thought they were statues — figures kneeling among the flower beds, backs straight, hands busy with the soil."
13"Aurora watched one of them — a man, or the memory of one — lift a clay vessel and pour."
14"Miles of them — canvas and stone and silk, all of it lit by the amber sky, all of it somehow glowing without lanterns, without torches, without any source Aurora could find."
15"Somewhere in the middle of it, music drifted up — strings, drums, a melody that turned on itself and came back around and never quite resolved."
16"The touch was cool and solid — they had made themselves solid for her."
83.69% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1558
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"quiet, smooth-faced workers."
1"warm, warm, warm against her"
adverbCount70
adverbRatio0.044929396662387676
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.010911424903722721
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean11.93
std9.91
cv0.831
sampleLengths
039
120
22
320
42
519
69
715
811
91
103
118
1213
1330
148
1516
1612
177
185
193
2030
2128
224
2314
242
252
262
2731
2831
296
3023
318
3229
336
3412
352
3619
373
384
3916
4017
4136
424
438
4410
453
464
4710
4830
498
73.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.48299319727891155
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners71
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences102
matches
0"Then she was standing on"
1"Somewhere very far away on"
2"Somewhere in the middle of"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences102
matches
0"Their eyes glowed faintly violet"
1"they said, in a voice"
2"She turned in a slow"
3"They had come out on"
4"Their bark was a soft"
5"She was nearly sure she"
6"She had wandered a few"
7"Her silver hair caught the"
8"She left no marks on"
9"They followed a stone path"
10"She couldn't separate them."
11"They were right."
12"It filled Aurora's head, and"
13"She made herself breathe through"
14"She had learned, in other"
15"It was the most beautiful"
16"She wanted to be honest"
17"It was a pale, cloudy"
18"They kept drifting ahead of"
19"She counted nine, then twelve."
ratio0.265
92.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences102
matches
0"The rift announced itself not"
1"Aurora stood in the moss"
2"The cold of the Fae"
3"The Heartstone woke against her"
4"The seer's voice was soft"
5"Isolde said, which was, as"
6"Their eyes glowed faintly violet"
7"they said, in a voice"
8"Aurora stepped through."
9"The sky was amber."
10"The light seemed to come"
11"She turned in a slow"
12"They had come out on"
13"Vineyards, but not like any"
14"Orchards, but the trees were"
15"Their bark was a soft"
16"A single note held forever,"
17"The fruit was obscene."
18"Peaches the size of her"
19"Berries in clusters that must"
ratio0.735
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Then she was standing on grass that wasn't grass, under a sky that wasn't a sky, and the first thing that took hold of her took hold hard."
1"And under all of it, faintly, impossibly, the smell of bread — the smell of a thousand loaves rising at once, an entire city's worth, filling the air like weath…"
2"It was a pale, cloudy fluid that shimmered in the amber light, and where it touched the soil, the soil turned a deeper, richer brown."
3"They kept drifting ahead of Aurora and then waiting — drifting, waiting, drifting, like a hound that knew better than to run."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Isolde said, and her voice was quiet, and for once it did not sound like a riddle"
97.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde agreed (agree)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.105
88.7161%