Run: 2026-09-23-01M36NRMQ9BXW7FGJ7EBJEQ9EA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 1s
Cost:
$0.001865
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The tear in the Veil hung between two brick walls, narrow as a door left ajar. Rory could see it only because the Heartstone was warm against her chest. Its crimson surface glimmered beneath her collar, a steady, faint pulse. Beyond it, the air bent like heat above a road, though the night was cold enough to sting her cheeks. Nyx stood beside her in a shape the darkness had almost managed to make human. They were taller than Rory by a head, their edges wavering where the lamplight from the alley touched them. Violet eyes floated in the shadow of their face. “Is it stable?” Rory asked. “It is open.” “That’s not the same thing.” “No.” Nyx’s voice brushed the air, a whisper carried on the wind. “It is not.” Rory tightened her grip on the moonsilver dagger. The Fae-forged blade lay cold in her hand, its slender leaf-shaped edge pale beneath the streetlamp. She had no intention of putting it away. The last time she had trusted a doorway that shimmered, she’d spent a week questioning her sense of distance and once found a beetle in her tea that had not been there a moment before. This doorway smelled of rain, crushed grapes, and something rich roasting over a fire. “Can you tell what’s on the other side?” Nyx leaned toward the tear. Their shadow stretched along the bricks, slipping into the distortion. “A great deal of warmth.” “Any traps?” “I cannot tell.” Rory glanced behind them. The alley ended in a locked service gate. Beyond it, London rattled on, buses grinding through wet streets, a siren winding away toward the river. The noise made the narrow opening ahead feel less like a passage than a dare. She thought of the pendant’s heat, of the way it had pulled her here with each step. Of the places in the world that were supposed to stay separate. She thought of the stories people told when they wanted to make fear sound like wisdom. Then she stepped through. For half a second, the world pressed in from every side. Cold brick vanished beneath her fingertips. The air thickened, dense and sweet, and the sound of the city dropped away so abruptly that her ears rang in the silence. Her boot struck soft ground. Rory stumbled, caught herself, and turned. The tear hung behind them in a wall of darkness—not brick now, but a smooth rise of black stone furred with pale moss. Through the opening, she saw a slice of alley and the yellow streetlamp beyond. The sight steadied her. London still existed. It had not been a dream or a trick of shadow. Nyx emerged beside her. Their form rippled as they crossed the threshold, then settled. The opening narrowed. “Wait,” Rory said. Nyx reached for it. Their hand passed through the shimmer without touching anything. “The Veil closes.” “Can you reopen it?” “Perhaps.” The tear sealed with a sound like a held breath released. Rory stared at the blank stone. Her pulse knocked hard once in her throat, then eased. She turned and took in the place that had swallowed them. The sky was amber. Not sunset amber, not the thin gold of city light reflected in cloud, but a deep, glowing colour that seemed to fill the whole vault above them. It made the far horizon look burnished. No sun showed through it. No moon either. The light came from everywhere and nowhere, soft enough to blur shadows without erasing them. They stood on a terrace of dark stone overlooking a valley. Vineyards spread down the slopes in precise, impossible rows, their leaves dark green and glossy, each vine trained over a trellis of bone-white wood. Between the vineyards lay orchards heavy with fruit. Some of it shone like polished copper. Some hung in clusters the colour of bruises. Farther off, gardens climbed toward a ridge, bright with flowers too large to belong to any ordinary season. Rory’s mouth had gone dry. “Dymas,” Nyx said. She looked at them. “You’re certain?” “I know its taste.” Rory’s gaze moved back to the valley. “You’ve been here?” “Not this way.” It was not an answer, but she had expected that. The pendant warmed against her skin, its pulse quickening. Hel. The realm beyond the Veil. Dymas, where everything grew and ripened and was made into something to eat. A breeze moved over the terrace. It carried the scent of earth, wine, woodsmoke, and spiced meat. Rory’s stomach gave a small, unwelcome twist. “What do you hear?” she asked. Nyx tilted their head. At first Rory heard only the wind combing through the vines. Then came a far-off swell of voices. A murmur, rising and falling, too distant to separate into words. Somewhere below, metal rang against metal in a steady rhythm. The sound might have been tools at work, or a great kitchen in full stride. Rory stepped to the terrace’s edge. A stairway descended along the slope, cut into the stone and edged by low lanterns whose flames burned blue. Beyond the stairs, a narrow path wandered between the vineyard rows. The air felt warm on her face, but the stone beneath her palm remained cool. Something in the place pressed against her senses. Not hostility exactly. More like appetite—vast, patient, and impossible to ignore. “Stay close,” she said. Nyx’s eyes glimmered. “I am always close.” “That sounds like a threat.” “It was meant as comfort.” “Work on it.” They took the stairs. At the foot of the terrace, Rory passed beneath an arch tangled in grapevines. The leaves brushed her shoulders, soft and damp. Tiny beads of moisture clung to their undersides, each reflecting a different colour: green, blue, gold. One dropped onto her wrist. It tasted sweet when it touched her skin, though she hadn’t put it in her mouth. The vineyards were silent up close. Their rows ran straight down the slope, then curved around a stand of cypress trees in a loop that should not have fit the land. Rory looked back. The path behind them seemed shorter than the distance they had walked. “Did we turn?” she asked. “No.” She kept walking, but marked each fork with a nick from the dagger’s point in the pale wood of the trellis. At the next bend, the first mark appeared ahead of them, though it should have been behind. Nyx noticed her pause. “The land is not obliged to keep the same shape.” “Good to know.” “Does it trouble you?” “Yes.” “Good.” Rory glanced at them. “Good?” “Fear is a kind of attention.” She didn’t argue. The valley had earned her attention. The path brought them to an orchard. Its trees had pale trunks and broad, leathery leaves. The fruit hung low enough to touch: round, dark-red globes with a sheen like lacquer. A split one lay in the grass. Its exposed flesh was bright orange, threaded with fine silver veins. Rory crouched. The smell was sharp and fragrant, almost like citrus with a scorched edge. She reached toward it, then stopped. A small pale shape shifted beneath the leaves. She rose at once, dagger up. The shape disappeared. The branches shivered though there was no wind. “Did you see that?” “I saw movement.” “Animal?” “I do not know.” She studied the ground. No prints marked the damp soil. No broken stems, no trail through the grass. The nearest fruit rocked gently on its branch. Rory backed away. “We’re not sampling the produce.” “Wise.” They left the orchard and came upon a low stone wall. Beyond it, the land dipped toward a broad garden laid out in terraces. Flowers crowded the beds in vivid ranks, some with petals like folded silk, others with translucent cups that held their own little lights. Bees as large as her thumb wandered between them, their wings making a dry, papery hum. When Rory approached, they turned together in the air, all at once, their faceted eyes catching the amber sky. She froze. The swarm did not advance. It watched. “Don’t move,” Nyx murmured. “I wasn’t planning to.” For several long breaths, the bees hovered. Then they drifted away in a single shining ribbon, disappearing over the garden wall. Rory let out the breath she had been holding. A narrow channel ran along the terrace’s edge. Water moved through it uphill, drawn toward a fountain at the garden’s centre. The basin overflowed with liquid the colour of dark wine. Each splash sent a scent of cloves and smoke into the air. Rory leaned over the channel. Her reflection looked back at her—black hair, bright eyes, mouth set in a line. The image wavered. For an instant, her reflection was smiling. She straightened. Nyx had seen it. “What was there?” “My face.” “And before that?” “Nothing I care to describe.” They continued. At the top of the garden, the path opened onto a wide slope. The distant voices had grown louder. Beyond the next ridge, rows of lanterns shone in the amber dusk, marking what looked like a sprawling complex of halls and kitchens. Thin columns of smoke lifted from its roofs. Even from here, Rory could hear the clatter of pans and the rhythmic chop of knives. A shout went up, followed by laughter—bright, exuberant, almost joyous. The scent of roasting meat rolled down the hill. Rory’s stomach twisted again, this time with hunger. It had been hours since she’d eaten. She hated that the place could reach inside her and tug at something so ordinary. “People?” she asked. “Souls,” Nyx said. Their voice had thinned. “Some bound here by contract.” Rory looked toward the lanterns. In the glow, figures moved between the buildings. One carried a tray piled high with fruit. Another pushed a cart. Their gestures were brisk and practiced. Beyond them, in a courtyard, something flashed—a line of knives, perhaps, catching firelight as a crowd gathered around a long table. “Are they prisoners?” “Some may be. Some may have chosen.” “That’s meant to make me feel better?” “No.” A horn sounded from the distant halls. Its low note rolled through the valley and seemed to settle beneath Rory’s skin. All across the vineyards, the leaves turned toward the sound. The Heartstone pulsed hot against her chest. Rory lowered her eyes to the pendant. Its inner glow had strengthened, a dark red light beating in time with her heart. She curled her fingers over it. The horn sounded again. From the garden behind them came a faint rustle. Rory turned. At the edge of the nearest flower bed, a fruit had appeared where there had been none before: a small gold pear, its skin shining wetly. A thin black stem curled around it like a finger. She tightened her grip on the blade. “We’ve seen enough,” she said. Nyx looked toward the distant halls. “We have only begun.” “That’s why we’re leaving before the place decides to show us the rest.” The path back to the terrace was gone. Rory stared at the garden, at the stone walls and the uphill channel, at the vineyards beyond. She tried to remember every turn. They had come through the orchard, past the cypress, down the stairs. But the slope now ran away in the opposite direction, and the blue lanterns marked a route she had not taken. The amber sky gave no clue to time. It might have been minutes since they crossed the Veil. It might have been a day. Nyx’s shadow spread across the ground, long and fluid, searching the gaps between roots and stones. “There are many ways through.” “Can you find one?” “I can find shadows.” “Then find us one that leads out.” A faint, warm pulse answered from the pendant. Not ahead, but beneath them. Rory looked down. The channel’s dark water flowed uphill toward the fountain. Now a thread of crimson glimmered beneath its surface, running the other way—toward a narrow cleft between the garden stones. She followed it with her eyes. Beyond the cleft, the ground dipped into shadow. Nyx saw it too. “The path has remembered.” “Or it wants us to follow.” “Yes.” Rory set the dagger’s point against the stone. The moonsilver shone faintly beneath the strange sky. “Then we’ll be careful.” They stepped toward the cleft together. Behind them, the distant kitchens erupted in cheers. The sound swept over the vineyards, and every lantern in the valley flared gold. Rory kept her eyes on the dark opening ahead. The air smelled of wine and woodsmoke, of warm bread and fruit split open under a knife. The world below waited with its tables full. The pendant beat once against her chest. This time, the rhythm was not her own.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.175
leniency0.349
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2124
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.98% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2124
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"pulse"
count4
1
word"wavering"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
4
word"sense of"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count2
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"wavered"
count1
10
word"complex"
count1
11
word"rhythmic"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"wavering"
2"whisper"
3"shimmered"
4"sense of"
5"warmth"
6"silence"
7"stomach"
8"silk"
9"wavered"
10"complex"
11"rhythmic"
12"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences202
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences202
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"seemed to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences254
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2118
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
68.12% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1893
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.64
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil3
Heartstone2
Rory31
Nyx15
Fae-forged1
London2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
globalScore0.681
windowScore0.833
81.97% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences147
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"colour that seemed to fill the whole vault above them"
1"seemed shorter than the distance they had walked"
2"appeared ahead of them, though it should have been behind"
3"looked like a sprawling complex of halls"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.361
wordCount2118
matches
0"not brick now, but a smooth rise of black stone furred with pale moss"
1"Not sunset amber, not the thin gold of city light reflected in cloud, but a deep, glowing colour"
2"not the thin gold of city light reflected in cloud, but a deep, glowing colour"
3"not an answer, but she had expected"
4"Not ahead, but beneath them"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences254
matches
0"hated that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs126
mean16.81
std19.06
cv1.134
sampleLengths
016
144
243
35
43
55
615
767
814
98
1020
112
123
1344
1445
154
1640
175
186
1955
2014
213
223
2316
244
251
2611
2727
2861
2976
305
313
326
334
3410
353
3638
3724
386
394
4054
4136
4234
434
447
455
465
473
484
4959
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences202
matches
0"were supposed"
1"was made"
2"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs304
matches(empty)
75.37% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences254
ratio0.024
matches
0"The tear hung behind them in a wall of darkness—not brick now, but a smooth rise of black stone furred with pale moss."
1"More like appetite—vast, patient, and impossible to ignore."
2"Her reflection looked back at her—black hair, bright eyes, mouth set in a line."
3"A shout went up, followed by laughter—bright, exuberant, almost joyous."
4"Beyond them, in a courtyard, something flashed—a line of knives, perhaps, catching firelight as a crowd gathered around a long table."
5"Now a thread of crimson glimmered beneath its surface, running the other way—toward a narrow cleft between the garden stones."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1904
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender leaf-shaped edge"
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.02888655462184874
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.003676470588235294
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences254
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences254
mean8.34
std5.73
cv0.687
sampleLengths
016
113
211
320
415
519
69
75
83
95
1012
113
128
1316
148
1535
1614
178
185
1910
205
212
223
234
248
2517
2615
2717
2812
2916
304
3111
326
3323
345
356
3623
3714
384
393
4011
414
4210
433
443
454
469
473
484
491
46.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.2952755905511811
totalSentences254
uniqueOpeners75
90.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences185
matches
0"Then she stepped through."
1"Then came a far-off swell"
2"Somewhere below, metal rang against"
3"More like appetite—vast, patient, and"
4"Then they drifted away in"
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount43
totalSentences185
matches
0"Its crimson surface glimmered beneath"
1"They were taller than Rory"
2"She had no intention of"
3"Their shadow stretched along the"
4"She thought of the pendant’s"
5"She thought of the stories"
6"Her boot struck soft ground."
7"It had not been a"
8"Their form rippled as they"
9"Their hand passed through the"
10"Her pulse knocked hard once"
11"She turned and took in"
12"It made the far horizon"
13"They stood on a terrace"
14"She looked at them."
15"It was not an answer,"
16"It carried the scent of"
17"They took the stairs."
18"It tasted sweet when it"
19"Their rows ran straight down"
ratio0.232
78.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount141
totalSentences185
matches
0"The tear in the Veil"
1"Rory could see it only"
2"Its crimson surface glimmered beneath"
3"Nyx stood beside her in"
4"They were taller than Rory"
5"Violet eyes floated in the"
6"Nyx’s voice brushed the air,"
7"Rory tightened her grip on"
8"The Fae-forged blade lay cold"
9"She had no intention of"
10"The last time she had"
11"This doorway smelled of rain,"
12"Nyx leaned toward the tear."
13"Their shadow stretched along the"
14"Rory glanced behind them."
15"The alley ended in a"
16"The noise made the narrow"
17"She thought of the pendant’s"
18"She thought of the stories"
19"The air thickened, dense and"
ratio0.762
54.05% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences185
matches
0"Even from here, Rory could"
1"Now a thread of crimson"
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The last time she had trusted a doorway that shimmered, she’d spent a week questioning her sense of distance and once found a beetle in her tea that had not bee…"
1"Not sunset amber, not the thin gold of city light reflected in cloud, but a deep, glowing colour that seemed to fill the whole vault above them."
2"Flowers crowded the beds in vivid ranks, some with petals like folded silk, others with translucent cups that held their own little lights."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Nyx’s voice brushed, a whisper carried on the wind"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.159
leniency0.317
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.032
87.5515%