Run: 2026-09-23-01M36NVYN3PHV2XN8QZTZV9MA7

Run Details

Duration:
43.7s
Cost:
$0.001757
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
By the time Detective Harlow Quinn reached the bottom of the station stairs, the rain had found its way through the collar of her coat. She paused beneath the broken enamel sign. CAMDEN TOWN, the remaining letters read, though this station had been sealed for decades and did not appear on any current map. A line of police tape blocked the tunnel behind her. Beyond it, the platform opened into a cavernous dark, its old brick arches disappearing under cables and curtains of damp. Someone had set up work lights. They threw hard white circles across the disused platform, catching on puddles and the glass eyes of the dead. “About time,” said Inspector Bell. He stood by the nearest body in a disposable suit, hands tucked under his arms. The white coverall strained across his shoulders. Two constables worked farther along the platform, photographing a spill of black powder and a row of empty stalls whose fronts had been painted with unfamiliar sigils. Quinn checked the time on her worn leather watch. “You called me twelve minutes ago.” “I called the station twenty minutes ago.” “That’s not the same thing.” Bell gave her a look, then turned back to the corpse. “Male, late thirties, no identification. Found at half six by a maintenance contractor. Cause of death appears to be a single stab wound, left side of the chest. No weapon recovered. No witnesses.” The dead man lay on his back beside a toppled wooden stall. His clothes were old-fashioned but expensive: a dark wool coat, waistcoat, and boots polished to a mirror shine. The wound had bled through his shirt and settled in a neat, dark patch. His right hand was curled around a strip of paper. Quinn crouched. “Who moved him?” “No one. We cleared a path for the photographer.” “Across the wet floor?” “The floor’s always wet down here.” She glanced at him. “Then why is his coat dry?” Bell frowned. “It’s not.” The shoulder nearest the puddle was damp. The rest of the coat was nearly untouched. Quinn leaned close enough to smell mud, old fabric, and something sharp underneath—a scent like pennies rubbed between the fingers. “Where’s the medical examiner?” “On the way.” “Then no one has called time of death.” “Not officially.” Quinn looked at the strip in the dead man’s fist. It seemed to be a torn corner of a receipt, ink blurred by water. She didn’t touch it. “Any cameras?” “Not unless the rats have started filing footage.” “Access points?” “The stairs behind us, one service hatch at the far end, and a blocked tunnel.” “Blocked by what?” “Brickwork, as far as I can tell.” “As far as you can tell,” Quinn repeated. Bell sighed. “Harlow, this is a straightforward stabbing in a disused station. The victim was probably meeting someone. They fell out. Someone brought a knife.” “Straightforward,” she said, looking around at the stalls, “doesn’t usually involve an entire underground market.” The word had escaped her before she meant it to. She had heard it from the first constable on scene, who had said it as a joke. The Veil Market. Something from a ghost story, apparently. Quinn had spent eighteen years learning to sort a witness’s panic from a witness’s lie. She had less experience sorting either from folklore. A flash of light near the tunnel mouth caught her attention. A woman in a soaked brown coat stood just beyond the tape, a leather satchel hugged to her side. Curly red hair escaped the hood around her face. Round glasses glinted as she peered into the station. A constable approached her. “You can’t be in here.” “I know. I’m not trying to get in.” “Then you’ll have to wait outside.” The woman tucked her hair behind her left ear. “I think I can help.” Bell straightened. “Who is she?” “Eva Kowalski,” Quinn said, recognizing her from the case file photographs and, more importantly, from the way Aurora had spoken about her. The missing young woman’s childhood friend. An occult researcher. A research assistant at the British Museum’s restricted archives. Kowalski had come to London two years before Aurora. Quinn knew the rest from their interviews: Oxford degree, ancient history, a reputation for collecting books nobody else could borrow. Bell’s expression hardened. “This is a police investigation.” “I’m aware,” Eva said. “The body’s in the Market.” “The what?” “The Veil Market.” She pointed, not at the corpse, but at the long row of stalls. “It moves locations every full moon. This is where it’s been hiding.” A constable let out a low laugh. Quinn didn’t. “You know that because?” “Because I’ve been looking for it.” Eva’s fingers tightened on her satchel strap. “And because the Market’s entrance is supposed to be marked by a bone token. Someone must have brought one through.” “Supposed to be?” Quinn asked. Eva swallowed. “That’s what the records say.” “Records at the British Museum?” “Some of them.” “Restricted records.” “Some of them.” Bell stepped between them. “Detective, do you want me to remove her?” Quinn studied Eva’s wet sleeves, the grit on the hem of her skirt, the way she kept her weight shifted toward the stairs. Frightened, but not surprised. She had expected to find this place. “No,” Quinn said. “I want her to tell me what she sees.” Bell’s mouth tightened. “You can’t be serious.” “I am. Now, Miss Kowalski. Don’t touch anything. Start with the body.” Eva came down the platform slowly. At the edge of the work lights, she stopped. Her gaze moved over the dead man, the spilled black powder, the open stalls. She did not look at the blood first. Quinn noticed that. “The stalls are empty,” Eva said. “Some are,” Bell replied. “No. They’re all empty. Whatever was here is gone.” “Could have been moved.” “Not like this.” Eva tipped her chin toward a counter where an iron hook hung from a nail. “Merchants leave fixtures. They don’t abandon a whole market overnight. Not unless they’re running.” Bell crossed his arms. “And why would they run?” “Because the Market moves at the full moon. It’s been three nights since.” Eva glanced at the old clock above the platform. Its hands were fixed at 2:17. “It shouldn’t still be here.” Quinn looked up. “When was the last full moon?” “Three nights ago.” “Then why are we standing in it?” Eva looked at the dark arches. “That’s what’s wrong.” The answer sat in the tunnel air, too easy and too strange. Quinn returned her attention to what she could measure. She walked the platform perimeter. The puddles gathered in shallow depressions, their surfaces rippling with droplets from the ceiling. The blood beneath the body had dried into a dark fan, but the paper in the victim’s hand showed no red at all. It was merely damp. “Bell,” she called. “Did you see footprints?” “Plenty. Yours, mine, the uniforms’.” “Before the uniforms.” “There were some, but nothing clear. The contractor walked around the body.” Quinn crouched at the edge of the blood. The victim’s boots were clean. The floor around him was wet and gritty; the soles should have been marked. The body’s right hand was also clean, its curled fingers holding the paper without pressure. The left hand, by contrast, had black grit beneath the nails. “Did the contractor touch him?” “No.” “Did anyone check the cuffs?” “We haven’t undressed him.” Quinn examined the coat. A line of pale dust lay along the collar, and a few grains clung to the lapel. She pinched none of it. “This man didn’t walk here.” Bell leaned closer. “What?” “His boots are clean. His clothes are dry except where they’ve touched the floor. Yet there’s water all over the platform. Whoever carried him here kept him clear of it.” “You think he was transported?” “Or placed.” “Same thing.” “No. One implies someone moved him. The other implies he wasn’t here when he died.” Bell shook his head. “We’ve got a body, a wound, and no weapon. Don’t turn it into a séance.” Quinn rose. “What’s this?” She nodded to the nearest stall. Eva approached the stall but stopped before crossing the powder. “That’s black salt.” “Salt?” “Not ordinary salt. It’s used to mark boundaries. Or keep something from crossing them.” “Does it work?” “I don’t know.” “You’re the occult expert.” “I research old practices. I don’t test them.” Quinn followed the ragged trail of powder. It ran from the toppled stall to the body, then curved around him in a rough semicircle. At first glance, the pattern looked like debris dragged by a boot. But there was no break where anyone had stepped through. The powder stopped an arm’s length from the corpse. “Why would someone circle the body?” Bell asked. “Maybe they dragged him,” said one of the constables. Quinn pointed to the floor. “Then where’s the drag mark?” Nothing. The damp grit lay undisturbed, except for their own shoeprints and the old smears of dirt. No groove, no scraped line. The body’s coat was not abraded at the shoulders or heels. The black powder had been poured after the body was placed. Or before, with the body set carefully inside it. Quinn looked down the platform. The empty stalls formed a passage toward the service hatch. Most stood dark and silent, but one had a mirror set into its back wall. The glass was cloudy and spotted with green corrosion. In its surface, Quinn could see the platform behind her, the work lights, Bell’s broad shoulders. She could also see the dead man standing. Quinn spun around. The corpse remained flat on the floor. “Did you see that?” she asked. “See what?” Bell said. The mirror showed only the body now, a pale face turned toward the ceiling. Quinn held still. Her pulse gave a single hard thud. She had learned not to dismiss what she saw simply because no one else had seen it. Three years earlier, on the case that had taken DS Morris, she had dismissed one thing after another: a locked room that had not been locked from the inside, a line of wet footprints that ended at a dry wall, Morris insisting that someone was calling to him from an empty stairwell. She had found him two days later. She looked at the mirror again. The corpse lay still in its reflection. But the glass seemed darker around the frame, as if the tarnish had gathered there. “Detective?” Eva said softly. Quinn checked her watch. The seconds hand had stopped. She snapped the watch case shut and opened it again. The hand still rested at 12. “What?” Bell asked. “My watch has stopped.” “So has the station clock.” “Your phone?” Bell checked. “No signal. Battery’s fine.” Quinn looked toward the tunnel that the old maps claimed was blocked. At its mouth, mortar showed in the work lights: a solid wall of brick, stained black with age. But the air moving down the platform came from that direction. She felt it against her cheek, cold and faintly metallic. Eva had gone pale. “There shouldn’t be a draft.” “There’s a gap somewhere,” Bell said. “Every old station’s got one.” “Not that kind.” “Miss Kowalski, I’ve had enough.” Quinn stepped around the body. The blood trail ended beneath the coat, but the wound itself was wrong. The shirt’s torn edges curled inward, not outward. The cloth was scorched at the wound’s rim, though there was no burn on the skin and no smoke smell. A narrow dark line ran from the wound up toward the collar, like ink soaked into the weave. “Do we have a photo of the scene before anyone touched anything?” she asked. “Of course,” Bell said. “Show me.” He signaled the photographer, who brought up the image on her camera. Quinn studied the body, the blood, the hand holding the paper. The photographer had captured the man’s face straight on. In the image, his eyes were open. Quinn glanced at the corpse. They were shut. “Was he alive when the photograph was taken?” she asked. “No,” Bell said. “He was dead when the contractor found him.” The photograph had been taken forty minutes ago. Quinn looked closer. The victim’s eyes were not merely open; they were fixed on the camera. In the corner of the image, the mirror reflected the platform—and showed no body at all. She raised her head. The mirror showed the body. The photograph did not. “Back up,” Quinn said. The photographer lowered the camera. “No. All of you. Toward the stairs.” Bell stared at her. “Why?” “Because the evidence doesn’t agree.” “Evidence doesn’t agree?” “The body’s eyes were open when photographed. They’re shut now. It appears in the mirror but not in the mirror’s reflection in the photograph. The watch has stopped. The station clock stopped decades ago, maybe, but mine didn’t. The powder forms a boundary. And we’ve got a draft from behind a brick wall.” Bell’s face had gone cautious, a look Quinn knew from the moment a man decided he had misjudged the situation and did not want to admit it. Eva stared at the image. “It’s not a photograph of him.” “What is it, then?” Bell asked. “I don’t know.” She tucked her hair behind her left ear again. “But the Market’s gone. The body’s here. Something’s been left behind.” “Something like what?” Eva lifted her eyes to the mirror. “A door.” Quinn heard it then: a click from inside the wall, small and precise. A lock turning. The old brickwork shifted. Dust sifted down in a thin veil. One section of the sealed tunnel drew inward, not breaking but bending, as if the wall had become a curtain and someone on the other side had taken it in hand. The black salt along the floor shivered. “Stairs,” Quinn ordered. No one moved. “Now.” The constables backed away. Bell went with them, one hand resting on his holster. Quinn stayed by the body, eyes on the opening seam. She had wanted a clean explanation. A suspect, a weapon, a timeline that held together. Instead, she had found a scene arranged to make those things impossible. The dead man’s hand opened. The scrap of paper slipped to the floor. It turned once in the air, though there was no breeze, and landed faceup in a puddle. The ink had cleared. Three words appeared in a narrow, slanted hand: NOT THE FIRST. Quinn felt the old case press against the inside of her ribs. Morris in the stairwell, turning toward a voice she could not hear. His last words, swallowed by the dark. She bent to read the message again. A shadow moved beyond the opening. The mirror behind her showed the platform empty. Quinn did not look back. She closed her fingers around the cold brass handle of her service weapon and held her place, measuring the distance to the stairs, the gap in the wall, the reach of the spreading dark. “Eva,” she said, without taking her eyes off the tunnel. “What happens when the Market moves?” “It takes everything that belongs to it.” “And this body?” “I don’t know.” The shadow leaned closer. Somewhere inside the opening, a bell rang once. Quinn watched the black salt break in a line around the corpse’s feet. “Then we find out who put him here,” she said, “before it decides to take us too.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences130
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.033
effectiveRatio0.015
94.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2567
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"carefully"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2567
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences204
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences204
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences302
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2565
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Three years earlier, on the case that had taken DS Morris, she had dismissed one thing after another: a locked room that…"
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions91
wordCount1787
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.18
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn39
Inspector1
Bell24
Veil1
Market1
Aurora2
British1
Museum1
London1
Oxford1
Eva14
Morris3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Bell"
3"Aurora"
4"Museum"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
places
0"British"
1"London"
2"Oxford"
globalScore0.409
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences126
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"a ghost story, apparently"
1"looked like debris dragged by a boot"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.78
wordCount2565
matches
0"not at the corpse, but at the long row of stalls"
1"not breaking but bending, as if the wall had become a curtain"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences302
matches
0"insisting that someone"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs172
mean14.91
std15.84
cv1.062
sampleLengths
025
159
225
35
449
515
67
75
844
954
105
119
124
136
1410
154
1635
174
183
198
202
2128
222
238
242
2515
263
277
288
2925
3015
3159
3248
339
348
356
3614
375
3840
3929
408
419
422
4328
447
456
4633
475
487
495
86.34% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount11
totalSentences204
matches
0"been sealed"
1"been painted"
2"was curled"
3"were fixed"
4"been marked"
5"been poured"
6"was placed"
7"been locked"
8"was blocked"
9"was scorched"
10"been taken"
11"were fixed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs294
matches
0"was calling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences302
ratio0.013
matches
0"Quinn leaned close enough to smell mud, old fabric, and something sharp underneath—a scent like pennies rubbed between the fingers."
1"The floor around him was wet and gritty; the soles should have been marked."
2"The victim’s eyes were not merely open; they were fixed on the camera."
3"In the corner of the image, the mirror reflected the platform—and showed no body at all."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1790
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.0223463687150838
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.0067039106145251395
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences302
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences302
mean8.49
std6.97
cv0.82
sampleLengths
025
17
222
310
420
56
619
75
815
97
1027
119
126
137
145
1511
1633
1712
1818
1914
2010
212
223
239
244
256
264
276
282
292
307
318
3220
334
343
358
362
3710
3814
394
402
418
422
4315
443
457
468
472
4823
4915
45.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.2980132450331126
totalSentences302
uniqueOpeners90
38.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences175
matches
0"Instead, she had found a"
1"Somewhere inside the opening, a"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences175
matches
0"She paused beneath the broken"
1"They threw hard white circles"
2"He stood by the nearest"
3"His clothes were old-fashioned but"
4"His right hand was curled"
5"She glanced at him."
6"It seemed to be a"
7"She didn’t touch it."
8"she said, looking around at"
9"She had heard it from"
10"She had less experience sorting"
11"She pointed, not at the"
12"She had expected to find"
13"Her gaze moved over the"
14"She did not look at"
15"Its hands were fixed at"
16"She walked the platform perimeter."
17"It was merely damp."
18"She pinched none of it."
19"She nodded to the nearest"
ratio0.217
37.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount148
totalSentences175
matches
0"She paused beneath the broken"
1"CAMDEN TOWN, the remaining letters"
2"A line of police tape"
3"Someone had set up work"
4"They threw hard white circles"
5"He stood by the nearest"
6"The white coverall strained across"
7"Quinn checked the time on"
8"Bell gave her a look,"
9"The dead man lay on"
10"His clothes were old-fashioned but"
11"The wound had bled through"
12"His right hand was curled"
13"She glanced at him."
14"The shoulder nearest the puddle"
15"The rest of the coat"
16"Quinn leaned close enough to"
17"Quinn looked at the strip"
18"It seemed to be a"
19"She didn’t touch it."
ratio0.846
28.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences175
matches
0"By the time Detective Harlow"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Three years earlier, on the case that had taken DS Morris, she had dismissed one thing after another: a locked room that had not been locked from the inside, a …"
1"One section of the sealed tunnel drew inward, not breaking but bending, as if the wall had become a curtain and someone on the other side had taken it in hand."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, without taking her eyes off the tunnel"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags24
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
1"Quinn ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences130
tagDensity0.185
leniency0.369
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.031
88.0705%