Run: 2026-09-23-01M36P2CE7RJMZPK926V8GAVJ0

Run Details

Duration:
42.9s
Cost:
$0.001893
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The dead man was sitting upright in the ticket booth. He had been arranged on a wooden stool, hands folded in his lap, chin lowered as if he’d nodded off waiting for a train that would never come. A dark stain spread from his left temple to the collar of his coat. His shoes were clean. Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath the station clock and looked at the shoes. “Don’t start with the shoes,” said Sergeant Bell. “The pathologists haven’t even got here.” “I’m starting with the floor.” The abandoned station had been closed for fifty years, but it smelled newly disturbed: wet iron, old dust, and the mineral chill of tunnels that ran deeper than the city’s maps admitted. Emergency lamps glowed along the platform. Beyond them, the tracks vanished into blackness. Someone had strung yellow tape across the stairs, though the tape hung slack between two cracked pillars and did nothing to keep out the small crowd of uniforms and market sellers gathered at the top. The Veil Market had been raided twice in Quinn’s career and found nowhere either time. She had spent eighteen years learning not to accept the first explanation offered by anyone who was frightened, official, or both. Tonight, the first explanation was that a man had been killed in a station that wasn’t supposed to exist. The second was that he’d killed himself. Bell nodded toward the body. “One wound. No defensive injuries. There’s a knife in his pocket, blood on his coat, and a note in his hand. It’s all very tidy.” “Too tidy.” “That’s what I said. Tidy suicide.” Quinn looked at him. Bell shifted his weight. “I mean, it looks staged. But there’s no sign anyone forced the door.” The booth door stood open. Its lock was intact. The narrow window was clouded with grime on the inside, clear on the outside where a sleeve had wiped it. Quinn noted the smear, the waist-high desk, the stool. She noted the way the dead man’s shoulders leaned a fraction to the right, as if the stool were uneven. The station clock above the platform had stopped at 2:17. Its hands were missing. “Who found him?” “Vendor. Claims he came to open his stall and saw the booth light on.” “There are no lights in this station.” Bell tipped his chin at the emergency lamps. Their battery casings were new, their cables neatly taped to the platform wall. “Those were here when we arrived,” he said. “Someone’s got power running in from somewhere.” Quinn took a pair of gloves from her coat pocket. The worn leather watch on her left wrist pressed against the cuff as she tugged the gloves tight. “And the vendor?” “Upstairs. Says his name’s Latch. Says he sells old coins.” “Does he?” “Some of them are old.” The ticket booth’s counter was dusted with gray grit. The note rested on it, weighted at one corner with a brass token shaped like a molar. Quinn didn’t touch it. The token’s smooth surface caught the light. A bone token. The entry fee, if the whispered reports were right. The note had been written in block capitals: I AM SORRY. I COULD NOT KEEP IT SAFE. Quinn studied the dead man’s hands. His fingers were pale, the nails clean. There was no blood beneath them. The stain on his collar had dried dark and glossy, but the wound at his temple was small, almost delicate. “Where’s the weapon?” she asked. Bell pointed to the coat pocket. “Knife. Still sheathed.” “Then it’s not a suicide.” “Could have changed his mind.” “A man changes his mind, he doesn’t neatly put the knife away and fold his hands.” Bell let out a breath through his nose. “You’ve got a theory already?” “I have questions.” She leaned toward the body without crossing the marked line. The cut lay just above the ear, angled downward. A narrow wound. Not enough, she thought, for the amount of blood on the coat unless the bleeding had started somewhere else. She looked at the floor beneath the stool. The boards were dusty except for a dark semicircle near the wall, just behind the man’s right heel. “Someone dragged him.” Bell crouched beside her. “There’s no trail.” “No. There’s a smear. It ends at the stool.” “Maybe he fell.” “Then why are his shoes clean?” Bell glanced at them again. The leather was polished, without dust on the soles. He frowned. “Could have been carried.” “By someone careful enough to carry him without scuffing the floor, but careless enough to leave a blood smear and a token.” “Or he walked in and sat down.” Quinn straightened. She looked at the booth’s threshold. Dust had gathered in a pale ridge against the baseboard, except for one clean mark: a narrow shoeprint with a squared-off heel, turned toward the platform. The print was too sharp at the edges to be old. A second mark lay nearby, mostly erased by a sweep of cloth. “Not in those shoes,” she said. “There’s no dust on the soles.” Bell studied the marks. “Could be from the killer.” “Could be.” A woman stood behind the cordon at the far end of the platform, a worn leather satchel hanging from her shoulder. Curly red hair escaped the collar of her coat, and the lenses of her round glasses reflected the emergency lights. She had a freckled face gone pale with cold or nerves. When Quinn looked her way, she tucked her hair behind her left ear. “Who’s that?” Quinn asked. “Eva Kowalski,” Bell said. “Research assistant, British Museum. She was here when we came in.” “Why?” “She says she knows the dead man.” Eva took a step toward them. A uniformed constable started to stop her, but Quinn raised two fingers. “Let her through.” Eva came across the platform with the careful tread of someone trying not to disturb a room full of sleeping animals. Her gaze flicked to the body and away. “I’m sorry,” she said. “I knew him. Not well. His name was Petrov. He dealt in texts and objects. I saw him at the Market last week.” “Why were you here tonight?” Quinn asked. “Someone sent a message asking me to identify a book. It said the book had come from the restricted archives. I thought it might be a forgery, but—” “You came alone?” Eva’s fingers curled around the strap of her satchel. “I expected to meet a contact.” “Who?” “I don’t know his name.” “Convenient.” Eva’s green eyes sharpened behind her glasses. “I was foolish. I’m not lying.” Quinn let the silence sit between them. People filled silence with whatever they were most afraid of. Eva didn’t fill it. She looked at the dead man, then at the bone token on the counter. “Did he have something with him?” she asked. “That’s what we’re trying to determine,” Quinn said. “He was carrying a book at the Market. Small, black cover, no title. He told me it was an inventory, though he wouldn’t say of what.” “Why would that matter?” “Because he wouldn’t sell it. He was trying to keep it safe.” Quinn glanced at the note. I COULD NOT KEEP IT SAFE. Bell followed her look. “So it is about the book.” “Maybe,” Eva said. She tucked her hair behind her ear again. “Or something inside it.” Quinn watched her hands. No blood. No dust, though her coat hem brushed close to the platform grit. “When did you last see Petrov?” “Three days ago.” “Where?” “The Market.” “Which is in an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden?” Eva’s mouth tightened. “Sometimes.” “Sometimes?” “It moves. Every full moon.” Bell made a small, skeptical sound. Quinn didn’t look at him. She had heard versions of this story for years. Places that did not stay put. Doors that opened where walls had been. Things traded under the city that never appeared on a warrant. She had not believed much of it. Then Morris had vanished in a room with no other exit. Three years ago, she had spent six hours searching a basement with her partner’s blood on the stairs and no body at the bottom. She had learned to distrust the impossible less than she distrusted the people who insisted it could not happen. “Was there a full moon tonight?” she asked. “No,” Eva said. “That’s why I came. The Market shouldn’t be here.” The station seemed to contract around the words. Far down the track, metal clicked against metal. Bell’s hand drifted toward his belt. “What was that?” “Train,” said one of the constables. “There are no trains,” Quinn said. The click came again, farther away this time. Then nothing. She turned back to the booth. The grit on the counter wasn’t dust. She rubbed a little between the fingertips of her glove. It glittered faintly, like powdered glass. Beneath it lay a patch of cleaner wood where something rectangular had rested. “The book was here,” she said. Eva came closer, stopping before the marked line. “Yes.” “You recognize the outline?” “Not exactly. The book was smaller than that.” “Then what was here?” Eva leaned forward, careful not to cross the boundary. Her breath clouded faintly in the cold. “A box, maybe. Or a case.” Quinn examined the clean patch. Its edges were too precise to be made by a book. She scanned the counter, then the sill. A thin streak of red-brown residue marked the wood beside the booth window, nearly hidden in the grime. The blood on the man’s collar looked dark. The wound at his temple had bled little. Quinn looked at the streak again. Its direction ran from the platform toward the counter, not from the counter toward the body. “Bell. The body wasn’t killed here.” “You’re sure?” “No. I’m looking for the part that doesn’t fit.” She stepped outside the booth. From the platform, the smear behind the dead man’s heel seemed to align with the brass token on the counter. Not a trail. A pivot. The body had been brought in, turned, and set on the stool. The killer had faced him toward the platform, then arranged his hands and left the note where a person entering the booth would see it. Quinn leaned toward the stool. One rear leg rested on a black mark in the floor. The other three stood in dust. She crouched to inspect it. The mark wasn’t a scuff. It was a shallow round depression, charred around its rim. “Something hot was placed here.” Bell knelt beside her. “A lamp?” “Too small.” “An ember?” “Maybe.” Eva stared at the mark. “A rift.” Quinn gave her a flat look. “I don’t mean a hole you can see,” Eva said. Her voice had gone quiet. “The Compass would point to one.” “What Compass?” “The Veil Compass. A little brass instrument. It points toward the nearest rift or portal. Petrov had one at the Market.” “Was it in the book?” “I don’t know.” Quinn looked at the stool, then the counter. The brass token’s surface caught the light again. A tiny green patina ringed its edge. She had seen that color on old copper pipes and the inside of antique fittings. Verdigris. “Would the Compass fit in a box this size?” she asked. Eva nodded. “Easily.” “Would someone leave it behind?” “Not if they knew what it was.” Quinn looked toward the station clock. Two hands missing. The face was cracked at the numeral twelve, and beneath the glass a line of green corrosion had bloomed along the rim. The clock had not simply stopped. Its casing had been pried open and shut again. A small brass hinge gleamed where the metal had been scraped clean. “Bell, get someone to photograph the clock before anybody touches it.” He rose. “You think it’s hidden in there?” “I think the evidence is pointing at the only place in this station nobody’s bothered to look.” The clock stood above the platform, high enough to require a ladder. While Bell sent a constable for one, Quinn scanned the booth again. The note was a confession, but not necessarily the dead man’s. The folded hands suggested peace, yet one thumb rested awkwardly beneath the other, bent at an angle no living person would choose. The man had been arranged to look calm. The note had been arranged to explain his death. The bone token had been arranged to explain the room. Too many explanations. Eva watched her. “Do you think he was murdered because of the Compass?” “I think someone wanted us to think the Market was the story.” “Isn’t it?” “Maybe. But a good story doesn’t make good evidence.” The ladder arrived. Quinn climbed first, boots steady on the rungs. At the clock she found a narrow seam along the lower rim. A tool had slipped there, leaving a bright scratch in the metal. She eased the casing open with a gloved hand. Inside, wedged behind the dead clock mechanism, lay a brass instrument the size of a pocket watch. Its casing was mottled with verdigris. Sigils had been etched around the face, fine as writing on a coin. The needle quivered against the glass, then swung—not toward the tunnel, not toward the booth, but down. Toward the floor beneath her. Quinn looked down. The stool’s blackened mark sat directly below the clock. A faint line of cold ran over her skin, like a breath through a keyhole. The needle trembled once more and pointed toward the booth. “Don’t touch the body,” she called down. Bell looked up. “Why?” “Because it isn’t where the killer left it.” The dead man sat upright, hands folded, shoes clean. Now Quinn could see the angle of his head. He wasn’t facing the entrance. He was facing the booth window, toward the clock. Toward the Compass. The bell above the station stairs rang once. Every uniform turned. A man in a porter’s cap stood at the top of the steps, one hand on the rail. His coat was wet. He held a narrow black book against his chest. For a moment he looked straight at Quinn. Then the emergency lamps went out. In the darkness, the clock’s needle spun hard against the glass. Something moved beneath the platform, fast and low, scraping along the old rails. Quinn gripped the Compass. Its brass casing felt warm in her palm. “Bell,” she said. “Stairs.” “I can’t see—” “Then listen.” The scrape stopped below them. A shoe tapped once on the platform. Quinn closed the clock casing and climbed down. When her boots hit the floor, the emergency lamps flickered back on. The stairway stood empty. The porter’s wet footprints ran three paces onto the platform and vanished. Bell drew his weapon. “Where did he go?” Quinn looked at the black smear by the stool, at the man in the booth, at the token on the counter. The clean soles. The staged note. The clock pried open from the outside, then shut. A body carried in from somewhere the station had not been a moment before. “The Market moved,” Eva whispered. Quinn slid the Compass into her coat pocket. Its needle nudged toward the stairs. “No,” she said. “Someone moved through it.” The dead man’s folded hands rested above the note, neat and bloodless. Quinn looked at them again and saw the pale indentation on his left palm, a square mark where he had gripped something hard before he died. The box had not been on the counter. It had been in his hand. The killer had taken it, planted the Compass in the clock to misdirect them, then left the Market to shift around the crime scene. But the needle had pointed down before it pointed to the booth. The rift had been under the stool. The body had crossed it after death. The killer had brought Petrov through the rift and set him there to be found. The blackened circle, the dustless shoes, the clean floor beneath the stool: all of it belonged to the crossing, not the murder. The real crime had happened elsewhere. Quinn looked at the missing hands of the station clock. They had been removed to hide the time. “Bell, seal both exits. Nobody leaves.” “There are no exits.” “Then seal the ones we haven’t found yet.” He stared at her for half a second, then moved. Eva’s fingers went to her hair, but she stopped herself before tucking it behind her ear. “What do we do now?” Quinn turned the Compass over in her palm. The needle swung toward the empty stairs and held. “We find the place the Market was before it came here.” “And if it’s gone?” Quinn looked at the clean shoes of the dead man, at the note written in a stranger’s careful block letters, at the dark track mouth waiting beyond the platform. “Then we find whoever brought him back.” The needle trembled once, as if in agreement.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences123
tagDensity0.163
leniency0.325
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
98.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2824
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2824
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"scanned"
count2
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"quivered"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count2
8
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"weight"
2"flicked"
3"silence"
4"scanned"
5"etched"
6"quivered"
7"trembled"
8"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences234
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences234
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences335
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2823
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions82
wordCount2098
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn37
Sergeant1
Bell17
Veil1
Market2
Eva16
Morris1
Compass5
Petrov1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Sergeant"
3"Bell"
4"Market"
5"Eva"
6"Morris"
7"Petrov"
places
0"Compass"
globalScore0.618
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences159
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.708
wordCount2823
matches
0"not toward the tunnel, not toward the booth, but down"
1"not toward the booth, but down"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences335
matches
0"was that a"
1"was that he’d"
2"seen that color"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs177
mean15.95
std17.12
cv1.074
sampleLengths
010
146
213
314
45
580
655
77
830
92
106
114
1217
1372
143
1514
167
1721
1815
1931
2010
212
225
2337
2412
2517
2639
275
289
295
305
3116
3213
333
3467
353
367
379
383
396
4016
414
4222
437
4457
4512
469
472
4865
494
78.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount18
totalSentences234
matches
0"been arranged"
1"been closed"
2"been raided"
3"was frightened"
4"been killed"
5"was clouded"
6"was dusted"
7"been written"
8"been brought"
9"was cracked"
10"been pried"
11"been scraped"
12"been arranged"
13"been arranged"
14"been arranged"
15"was mottled"
16"been etched"
17"been removed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs342
matches
0"was sitting"
1"wasn’t facing"
2"was facing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences335
ratio0.003
matches
0"The needle quivered against the glass, then swung—not toward the tunnel, not toward the booth, but down."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2102
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.02759276879162702
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.005233111322549952
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences335
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences335
mean8.43
std6.06
cv0.719
sampleLengths
010
128
214
34
413
58
66
75
832
96
107
1135
1215
1321
1419
157
165
1725
182
196
204
214
2213
235
244
2520
269
2720
2810
294
303
3114
327
338
3413
358
367
3710
3818
393
4010
412
425
439
4417
454
467
473
489
4911
43.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.2537313432835821
totalSentences335
uniqueOpeners85
48.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences207
matches
0"Then Morris had vanished in"
1"Too many explanations."
2"Then the emergency lamps went"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences207
matches
0"He had been arranged on"
1"His shoes were clean."
2"She had spent eighteen years"
3"Its lock was intact."
4"She noted the way the"
5"Its hands were missing."
6"Their battery casings were new,"
7"I COULD NOT KEEP IT"
8"His fingers were pale, the"
9"She leaned toward the body"
10"She looked at the floor"
11"She looked at the booth’s"
12"She had a freckled face"
13"Her gaze flicked to the"
14"She looked at the dead"
15"I COULD NOT KEEP IT"
16"She tucked her hair behind"
17"She had heard versions of"
18"She had not believed much"
19"She had learned to distrust"
ratio0.217
27.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount179
totalSentences207
matches
0"The dead man was sitting"
1"He had been arranged on"
2"A dark stain spread from"
3"His shoes were clean."
4"Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath"
5"The abandoned station had been"
6"Emergency lamps glowed along the"
7"Someone had strung yellow tape"
8"The Veil Market had been"
9"She had spent eighteen years"
10"Tonight, the first explanation was"
11"The second was that he’d"
12"Bell nodded toward the body."
13"Quinn looked at him."
14"Bell shifted his weight."
15"The booth door stood open."
16"Its lock was intact."
17"The narrow window was clouded"
18"Quinn noted the smear, the"
19"She noted the way the"
ratio0.865
48.31% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences207
matches
0"While Bell sent a constable"
1"Now Quinn could see the"
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The abandoned station had been closed for fifty years, but it smelled newly disturbed: wet iron, old dust, and the mineral chill of tunnels that ran deeper than…"
1"She noted the way the dead man’s shoulders leaned a fraction to the right, as if the stool were uneven."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences123
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.309
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.016
87.9968%