Run: 2026-09-23-01M36SQGXP7HB2YV5RYMR3MW34

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Duration:
1m 35s
Cost:
$0.000983
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The path through Richmond Park dead-ended where the trees grew too close together, trunks interlocking like clasped hands. Rory pushed through a curtain of ivy and stopped. The air changed. It thickened, sweetened, carried scents she had no names for — something like rain on hot stone, something like the inside of a bakery at four in the morning. "There." Nyx stepped from the shadow of an oak and materialized beside her, their violet eyes leaving faint smudges of light on the bark. They tilted their head, the featureless plane of their face shifting in a way that suggested a nose might have been there once. "The stones mark the boundary. Cross them and don't look back." "I've read that line in about forty fairy tales." "And every one of them was wrong about what happens next." Rory ducked under a low branch. Ahead, seven standing stones rose from the earth in a broken circle, each one carved with symbols that hurt to look at directly — not painfully, but the way staring into bright water did. Moss covered their bases, but the carvings themselves were clean. Someone — something — kept them that way. She stepped between two of the stones and felt a static charge crawl across her skin, prickling the hairs on her forearms. The crescent scar on her left wrist tingled. Behind her, Nyx passed through the gap without disturbing a single blade of grass. Their shadow pooled at their feet for a half-second before they gathered it back into themselves. The world opened. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in every direction — not the muted greens and purples of a London park but saturated, impossible colors. Cobalt blooms the size of dinner plates nodded on stalks that glowed faintly at the joints. Clusters of pale gold flowers hummed, actually hummed, a low vibration that Rory felt in her molars. The grass between them was the blue-black of a bruise, and it moved without wind. "What happened to the sky?" Nyx drifted forward, their form rippling. Above them, the canopy had closed overhead in a vault of interlocking branches, but light came through anyway — not from above. The light came from *everywhere*, as if the air itself was faintly luminescent. Shadows existed only where something blocked that glow, and they were sharp-edged, almost architectural. "No sky," Nyx whispered, and their voice carried the quality of wind moving through a keyhole. "The Grove sits in a pocket. You'll stop looking for the sky before long." A path of flat stones wound between the flowers. Rory knelt and pressed her fingers to one. Warm. Not sun-warm — internally warm, like holding a sleeping animal. She pulled her hand back and wiped it on her jeans. "Isolde lives deeper in?" "Nyx." Rory looked over her shoulder. "You said the stones mark the boundary. Who marks the rest?" The Shade said nothing. They had stopped at the edge of a thicket of ferns that reached Rory's shoulder, their head cocked as if listening to something at a frequency she couldn't access. Then they laughed — a sound like paper tearing. "That one grows teeth in autumn." They pushed through the ferns, and Rory followed. The path climbed. The flowers gave way to mushrooms, pale stalks rising from the blue-black grass in clusters of three. Each cap pulsed — not uniformly but in sequence, a ripple passing through the grove in waves, like something breathing. Rory counted between pulses. Four seconds. Four seconds, then a slow glow from root to crown, then dark. "Bioluminescence?" "Illumination without origin." Nyx ran a translucent hand along a mushroom cap and their fingers passed through, trailing silver sparks. "Nothing here produces light. It simply *is* light. You learn to stop asking why." They crested the rise and the ground fell away into a bowl-shaped hollow. At its center, a pool of water sat perfectly still, dark as ink, reflecting nothing — no sky, no trees, no faces. Around its rim, stones arranged themselves in patterns that shifted when Rory looked at them from the corner of her eye. When she looked directly, they were just stones. She leaned closer. Her reflection rose from the water — but not in sync. The figure in the pool tilted its head a fraction of a second after she did. Rory stepped back. Nyx stood at the hollow's edge, motionless. Their violet eyes had gone wide, the glow blooming until it lit the moss at their feet. "Don't drink," they said. "Don't touch. Don't speak to it." "Already on my list." A sound rolled across the hollow — low, rhythmic, resonant. Not music exactly, but music's older cousin: a deep tone that came from the earth itself, from the stones, from the water. The mushrooms on the far slope flared in time with each pulse, and the wildflowers in the distance bent toward the hollow as if listening. Rory's chest tightened. The Heartstone pendant at her throat went warm, a faint crimson glow bleeding through her collar. She pressed her palm to it and felt the pulse sync with the sound — two heartbeats, one hers, one not. "Is this the Veil?" "No." Nyx's whisper tightened. "This is what's on this side of it. The Veil sits further — you can feel it as a pressure behind your eyes. This is just the Grove, showing you it exists." They descended into the hollow together, Nyx floating the last few feet, their shadow pooling on the stone before they settled into a solid stance beside her. Up close, the pool wasn't water. It was a surface of slow-moving darkness, viscous, threaded with filaments of silver that swam in lazy spirals. The deep tone hummed up from it. Rory crouched at the rim without touching. The figure in the surface watched her with her own face — bright blue eyes, straight black hair, the scar on her wrist reflected in wrong places. She held up her right hand. The reflection raised its left. "What are you?" Rory breathed. The surface rippled. Words rose from it, written in silver — not spoken, just *present*, curling up like smoke. *What waits between what was and what is.* Nyx's hand — solid now, cold and real — settled on Rory's shoulder. "It answers in what you ask without knowing you asked." Rory stood. The glow on the Heartstone pulsed once more and went dim. The deep tone faded, and the grove settled into something quieter — not silence but a layered stillness, full of small sounds: the brush of grass against stone, the distant hum of the gold flowers, a wet ticking from somewhere in the ferns. She turned and looked back the way they'd come. From here, standing in the hollow, the standing stones at the boundary were visible above the tree line — seven dark shapes against a sky that didn't exist. They looked smaller than they had when she'd walked between them. "How long have we been here?" Nyx checked the light. The pervasive glow hadn't changed — no angle, no shadow shift to mark hours. "Time holds its breath in here. Could be minutes outside. Could be longer." Rory rolled her wrist, watching the crescent scar catch the impossible light. The ferns ahead rustled. Something moved beneath the blue-black grass — not the wind, because the grass didn't move in wind. It moved in slow spirals, parting around whatever tracked beneath it, and then closed again. The path continued deeper, past the hollow, toward a stand of oaks whose trunks were wider than cars. Their bark was carved with the same symbols as the standing stones, and around the largest oak, wildflowers grew in a perfect ring — white, the only white in the grove, blazing like a signal. Nyx moved toward them, then stopped. Their form flickered. "There." They pointed. Between the oak's roots, a doorway had been cut — not built, *grown* — the wood curving inward into a dark passage that breathed warm air scented with candle wax and dried herbs. Isolde's handiwork. Rory crossed the ring of white flowers and crouched before the opening. The Heartstone warmed again, a steady pulse now, patient. Behind her, Nyx's footsteps — or their absence of footsteps — stopped at the flowers' edge. They wouldn't cross. She understood without being told: the ring held something back, or kept something in. Rory looked at the passage. Warm air curled against her face. Somewhere deep inside, a voice spoke — not clearly, not yet — a cadence like someone reading aloud to themselves. She pulled the Fae blade from her jacket. The moonsilver caught the grove's light and threw it back colder. Always cold. She pressed it against her palm and felt the chill settle into her bones, grounding. "Wait here," she said. "You'll go in blind?" "I'll go in with this." She turned the blade so the leaf-shaped edge caught the glow. "You hold the doorway." Nyx's violet eyes dimmed, then steadied. Their shadow spread behind them across the blue-black grass, wider than their body, reaching toward the standing stones. "Come back before time remembers you." Rory stepped through the ring of white flowers. The air shifted again — warmer, closer, the grove's light dimming as the passage swallowed her. The symbols on the oak's interior bark glowed faintly as she passed, each one a small blue ember that flared at her proximity and died. The passage bent. The voice grew clearer. And the Heartstone at her throat pulsed in rhythm with her own heartbeat — matching it, learning it, one after the other.
created_at"2026-09-23T09:32:12.612Z" 9/23/2026, 9:32:12 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1572
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1572
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count3
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count2
8
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"rhythmic"
2"pulse"
3"whisper"
4"silence"
5"perfect"
6"flickered"
7"footsteps"
8"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences113
matches
0"felt the chill"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords12
totalWords1603
ratio0.007
matches
0"everywhere"
1"is"
2"present"
3"What waits between what was and what is."
4"grown"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.38% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount1405
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.35
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx13
London1
Rory19
Shade1
Heartstone4
Fae1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Rory"
2"Shade"
3"Heartstone"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.824
windowScore0.833
61.76% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"something like rain on hot stone, something"
1"something like the inside of a bakery at fou"
2"as if listening to something at a frequency she couldn't access"
3"as if listening"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.119
wordCount1603
matches
0"not painfully, but the way staring into bright water did"
1"not the muted greens and purples of a London park but saturated, impossible colors"
2"not uniformly but in sequence, a ripple passing through the grove in waves, li"
3"Not music exactly, but music's older cousin: a deep tone"
4"not silence but a layered stillness, full of small sounds: the brush of gras"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"blocked that glow"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean26.72
std19.89
cv0.744
sampleLengths
059
11
246
311
49
511
658
730
830
93
1070
115
1255
1330
1439
154
1617
1733
1815
198
2058
211
2234
2364
2430
253
2624
2710
284
2957
3040
314
3236
3358
3445
355
3619
378
3823
3956
4048
416
4218
4313
4448
4553
469
4736
482
4937
99.05% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"was carved"
1"being told"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs221
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount30
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences134
ratio0.187
matches
0"It thickened, sweetened, carried scents she had no names for — something like rain on hot stone, something like the inside of a bakery at four in the morning."
1"Ahead, seven standing stones rose from the earth in a broken circle, each one carved with symbols that hurt to look at directly — not painfully, but the way staring into bright water did."
2"Someone — something — kept them that way."
3"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in every direction — not the muted greens and purples of a London park but saturated, impossible colors."
4"Above them, the canopy had closed overhead in a vault of interlocking branches, but light came through anyway — not from above."
5"Not sun-warm — internally warm, like holding a sleeping animal."
6"Then they laughed — a sound like paper tearing."
7"Each cap pulsed — not uniformly but in sequence, a ripple passing through the grove in waves, like something breathing."
8"At its center, a pool of water sat perfectly still, dark as ink, reflecting nothing — no sky, no trees, no faces."
9"Her reflection rose from the water — but not in sync."
10"A sound rolled across the hollow — low, rhythmic, resonant."
11"She pressed her palm to it and felt the pulse sync with the sound — two heartbeats, one hers, one not."
12"The figure in the surface watched her with her own face — bright blue eyes, straight black hair, the scar on her wrist reflected in wrong places."
13"Words rose from it, written in silver — not spoken, just *present*, curling up like smoke."
14"Nyx's hand — solid now, cold and real — settled on Rory's shoulder."
15"The deep tone faded, and the grove settled into something quieter — not silence but a layered stillness, full of small sounds: the brush of grass against stone, the distant hum of the gold flowers, a wet ticking from somewhere in the ferns."
16"From here, standing in the hollow, the standing stones at the boundary were visible above the tree line — seven dark shapes against a sky that didn't exist."
17"The pervasive glow hadn't changed — no angle, no shadow shift to mark hours."
18"Something moved beneath the blue-black grass — not the wind, because the grass didn't move in wind."
19"Their bark was carved with the same symbols as the standing stones, and around the largest oak, wildflowers grew in a perfect ring — white, the only white in the grove, blazing like a signal."
20"Between the oak's roots, a doorway had been cut — not built, *grown* — the wood curving inward into a dark passage that breathed warm air scented with candle wax and dried herbs."
21"Behind her, Nyx's footsteps — or their absence of footsteps — stopped at the flowers' edge."
22"Somewhere deep inside, a voice spoke — not clearly, not yet — a cadence like someone reading aloud to themselves."
23"The air shifted again — warmer, closer, the grove's light dimming as the passage swallowed her."
24"And the Heartstone at her throat pulsed in rhythm with her own heartbeat — matching it, learning it, one after the other."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1200
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.029166666666666667
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.01
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean11.96
std8.41
cv0.703
sampleLengths
018
19
23
329
41
523
623
711
89
911
106
1134
1210
138
1422
158
1614
1716
183
1922
2016
2117
2215
235
246
2522
2613
2714
2816
2914
309
318
321
3310
3411
354
366
3711
384
3929
409
416
428
433
4417
4520
464
472
4812
491
59.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3880597014925373
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners52
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then they laughed — a"
1"Somewhere deep inside, a voice"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences104
matches
0"It thickened, sweetened, carried scents"
1"They tilted their head, the"
2"She stepped between two of"
3"Their shadow pooled at their"
4"She pulled her hand back"
5"They had stopped at the"
6"They pushed through the ferns,"
7"They crested the rise and"
8"She leaned closer."
9"Her reflection rose from the"
10"Their violet eyes had gone"
11"She pressed her palm to"
12"They descended into the hollow"
13"It was a surface of"
14"She held up her right"
15"She turned and looked back"
16"They looked smaller than they"
17"It moved in slow spirals,"
18"Their bark was carved with"
19"Their form flickered."
ratio0.25
46.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences104
matches
0"The path through Richmond Park"
1"Rory pushed through a curtain"
2"The air changed."
3"It thickened, sweetened, carried scents"
4"Nyx stepped from the shadow"
5"They tilted their head, the"
6"Rory ducked under a low"
7"Moss covered their bases, but"
8"Someone — something — kept"
9"She stepped between two of"
10"The crescent scar on her"
11"Their shadow pooled at their"
12"The world opened."
13"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
14"Cobalt blooms the size of"
15"Clusters of pale gold flowers"
16"The grass between them was"
17"Nyx drifted forward, their form"
18"The light came from *everywhere*,"
19"Shadows existed only where something"
ratio0.827
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
30.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Ahead, seven standing stones rose from the earth in a broken circle, each one carved with symbols that hurt to look at directly — not painfully, but the way sta…"
1"Cobalt blooms the size of dinner plates nodded on stalks that glowed faintly at the joints."
2"They had stopped at the edge of a thicket of ferns that reached Rory's shoulder, their head cocked as if listening to something at a frequency she couldn't acce…"
3"Around its rim, stones arranged themselves in patterns that shifted when Rory looked at them from the corner of her eye."
4"The mushrooms on the far slope flared in time with each pulse, and the wildflowers in the distance bent toward the hollow as if listening."
5"They descended into the hollow together, Nyx floating the last few feet, their shadow pooling on the stone before they settled into a solid stance beside her."
6"It was a surface of slow-moving darkness, viscous, threaded with filaments of silver that swam in lazy spirals."
7"From here, standing in the hollow, the standing stones at the boundary were visible above the tree line — seven dark shapes against a sky that didn't exist."
8"Between the oak's roots, a doorway had been cut — not built, *grown* — the wood curving inward into a dark passage that breathed warm air scented with candle wa…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
83.33% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.133
79.2998%