Run: 2026-09-23-01M36SXXXHE5ZPJE5H70XGDB6M

Run Details

Duration:
1m 21s
Cost:
$0.002267
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain came off the awnings in sheets, and Harlow Quinn ran straight through it. The suspect was thirty meters ahead, a dark shape cutting through the Friday-night press on Old Compton Street, shoving past a knot of smokers outside a bar with a green neon sign burning over the door. Quinn registered the sign without registering it — the Raven's Nest, the letters flickering verdigris in the wet — and then the suspect was past it, coat flaring, and she was past it too, badge already up and barking at the bodies that stumbled into her path. "Police! Move! Move!" Her lungs burned. Eighteen years on the job and forty-one years of age had filed something essential off her wind, and she could feel it now the way you feel a loose tooth — as a deficiency, an absence of what used to be there. The suspect didn't have that problem. The suspect ran like a thing that had never been young enough to lose anything. She'd first clocked him four blocks back, standing over the collector outside the Soho House service entrance. The collector — a small-time fence named Petty with a talent for screaming — had been face-down on the wet pavement with something dark spreading from him. By the time Quinn reached him, the suspect was gone around the corner and Petty was beyond answering questions, his eyes open to the rain and his hands already cooling. She'd found what had been taken from him in the gutter three meters away. A bone token. Polished, yellowed, small enough to sit in the palm of a hand, punched through with a hole for a cord. She'd bagged it on instinct. Now it sat in her coat pocket, a hard little lump against her thigh as she ran. The suspect turned north, gunning up Charing Cross Road against the traffic. A taxi stood on its horn. Quinn slapped the bonnet as she crossed and kept moving. He was heading for the Tube — she could see it in the shape of his run now, that gathering, that final reserve he was saving. Sure enough he veered toward the entrance at Tottenham Court Road and took the stairs three at a time. Quinn followed, her soaked shoes slipping on the slick steps, one hand slapping the rail. Below, the concourse was a bright, terrible cave of tile and advertising. Commuters parted around him like water around a stone. He clipped a woman with an umbrella and didn't stop. Quinn shouted — "Stop! Police!" — but the words fell flat in the underground, swallowed by announcements and the rolling thunder of a train. He didn't stop at the barriers. He vaulted them. Quinn cursed and went through the wide gate, shoving her warrant card at the gateline attendant. "Which way?" The attendant, a young man with a plastic poncho still dripping on him, pointed at the Northern line southbound. "He went down. Ran right past me." She took the escalator steps too fast, her calf seizing halfway down. The suspect was at the platform edge, and there was no train, only the black mouth of the tunnel breathing stale warm air at her face. He looked back at her. She got her first real look at him — thin, hollow-cheeked, a scar like a question mark on his chin, eyes that had no fear in them at all. That detail snagged in her mind the way details did at crime scenes. Then he stepped down off the platform onto the track. "Stop! You will be killed!" He glanced at her again, almost amused, and walked into the dark. Quinn stood at the edge and breathed. The tunnel yawned. Somewhere in it, a light flickered — not a train. Something else. Movement receding. She keyed her radio. "Control, this is Quinn. Suspect has entered the northbound tunnel at Tottenham Court Road, Northern line. I need the line stopped and I need units at Camden Town, suspect may surface there. Over." Static. Then a voice, thin and far away, telling her to confirm her location because her signal was — the rest of it dissolved into noise. She looked at the tunnel. She looked at the other end of the platform, at the commuters pretending not to watch her. She stepped down. The track bed was foul, greasy with decades of brake dust and worse. The third rail. She forced herself to think about the third rail — where it sat, what it carried. Live rail to her right, she decided, though in the dark she could not swear to it. That decision made, she moved along the wall with one hand trailing filthy concrete, following the receding footsteps. Splash. Splash. Splash. Running now, not even careful. She counted seconds and lost count. She passed a junction box, a maintenance alcove, a stenciled arrow and numbers that meant nothing to her. The footsteps turned. She turned after them and found a maintenance door standing open, a rectangle of lesser black set into the tunnel wall. Beyond it, a stairwell. Stone, old — far older than the Tube, older than anything she'd expected. The air changed. It smelled of rain down here somehow, and underneath the rain, something medicinal, herbal, like a pharmacy that had been closed for a century. The stairwell went down. A long way down. Quinn stood at the top of it with her hand flat against the wet stone wall and understood, with the animal part of her brain that had kept her alive through things she'd never written in a report, that this was the line. Above it was her city. Below it was not. DS Morris. Three years ago. The case that had closed itself. The night she'd found him in the alley behind Blackfriars with a look on his face she'd never been able to describe to the departmental psychologist — not fear, not pain, but astonishment, as though he'd been told something enormous and true in the second before he went. They'd called it a cardiac event. She'd signed off on the paperwork with a steady hand and then sat in her car for two hours, watching the rain come down the windshield, feeling the floor of the world tilt a few degrees and never quite tilt back. She had not understood. She had filed the not-understanding away with everything else she could not use. But she had never stopped watching. And in the last three months the watching had started paying out in whispers — the Raven's Nest and its back room, Petty and his collectors, tokens and debts and people who came in one side of London's night looking like people and did not entirely look that way coming out. The suspect's footsteps were gone now. Somewhere below, there was sound. A low, dense, human murmur. The clatter of commerce. Quinn reached into her coat and touched the bone token through the plastic bag. Then she took the bag out, and stood there in the dark turning it over. Evidence. It was evidence. It was also something else — she could feel it the way you can feel someone watching you — and whatever it was, it fit a hole in the world at the bottom of these stairs. She broke the seal on the bag. The token was warm. Warmer than her hand, warmer than the dead man it had come off. It sat in her palm like a coin that had been waiting. Somewhere above, a train screamed through a station, and the sound came down the stairwell to her, muffled and far away, like a memory of the surface. Harlow Quinn put the bone token in her coat pocket. She unholstered her sidearm, checked it out of pure habit, and held it low against her leg. She had no backup. She had no jurisdiction she could name. She had eighteen years of service and a dead partner and a case that had never stopped not making sense. She went down. The stairs turned twice. Then the ceiling lifted away and the murmur became the sound of a great many people doing business. She came out under an arch of soot-blackened brick and stopped, because the abandoned Tube station that had been Camden's forgotten branch platform had been hollowed out and made into something. Torches burned along the walls — actual torches, and something that moved in them like a color fire didn't have. Stalls ran down the length of the platform where the track had been, and above the track, on the opposite platform, more stalls, and above those, where the tiled walls curved up into the vault, black-and-white photographs and old maps had been hung on wires, shifting in a draft that shouldn't have been there. She recognized some of the maps. She recognized none of the photographs. The crowd was the thing that made her grip tighten on her weapon. Men in overcoats. Women in evening dress, soaked at the hems like she was. A boy with a basket of small glass bottles that glowed faintly, and beside him something tall and stooped that she did not, in the two seconds she permitted herself to look at it, want to catalog as a person. Faces turned toward her. Not all of the faces were arranged correctly. A vendor nearest the arch straightened up from a tray of jars and said, in a mild voice, "Bone token at the door, love. Or you don't come further in." Quinn's hand found her pocket and closed around the warm disc. She scanned the crowd. Fifty meters down, past the choke of stalls and bodies and smoke, the suspect's hollow-cheeked face surfaced for one second and then ducked beneath a canvas awning and vanished again. Around her, the market did its business. Nobody looked afraid. Everybody looked like they were exactly where they were supposed to be. She thought of Morris's face. She thought of the coroner's careful, careful handwriting. She thought of three years of sitting in a car in the rain. Quinn walked to the door of the market and put the bone token into the outstretched hand of the guard. It closed its fingers and stepped aside. Then Detective Harlow Quinn went further in, and the dark closed over the stairs behind her like a thing that had finished being patient.
created_at"2026-09-23T09:35:42.52Z" 9/23/2026, 9:35:42 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1713
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1713
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"could feel"
count2
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count3
3
word"scanned"
count1
highlights
0"could feel"
1"flickered"
2"footsteps"
3"scanned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences125
matches
0"looked afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1731
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1666
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity0.84
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow3
Quinn14
Friday-night1
Old1
Compton1
Street1
Raven2
Nest2
Soho1
House1
Petty3
Charing1
Cross1
Road2
Tube3
Tottenham1
Court1
Northern1
Morris2
Blackfriars1
London1
Camden1
Detective1
Splash3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Morris"
4"Camden"
places
0"Old"
1"Compton"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"House"
5"Charing"
6"Cross"
7"Road"
8"Tottenham"
9"Court"
10"Northern"
11"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like they were exactly where they"
84.46% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.155
wordCount1731
matches
0"not fear, not pain, but astonishment, as though he'd been told something enormous"
1"not pain, but astonishment, as though he'd been told something enormous"
89.74% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences130
matches
0"have that problem"
1"look that way"
2"stooped that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean43.28
std31.82
cv0.735
sampleLengths
014
186
266
3133
488
555
627
726
885
910
105
1112
1224
1337
1426
1522
163
1775
1848
1944
208
2152
22123
2357
2420
2569
267
2729
2827
2958
303
3153
3286
3379
3430
3545
3622
3726
3827
3924
80.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences125
matches
0"was gone"
1"been taken"
2"been closed"
3"been told"
4"were gone"
5"been hollowed"
6"been hung"
7"were arranged"
8"were supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs263
matches
0"was heading"
1"was saving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences130
ratio0.108
matches
0"Quinn registered the sign without registering it — the Raven's Nest, the letters flickering verdigris in the wet — and then the suspect was past it, coat flaring, and she was past it too, badge already up and barking at the bodies that stumbled into her path."
1"Eighteen years on the job and forty-one years of age had filed something essential off her wind, and she could feel it now the way you feel a loose tooth — as a deficiency, an absence of what used to be there."
2"The collector — a small-time fence named Petty with a talent for screaming — had been face-down on the wet pavement with something dark spreading from him."
3"He was heading for the Tube — she could see it in the shape of his run now, that gathering, that final reserve he was saving."
4"Quinn shouted — \"Stop! Police!\" — but the words fell flat in the underground, swallowed by announcements and the rolling thunder of a train."
5"She got her first real look at him — thin, hollow-cheeked, a scar like a question mark on his chin, eyes that had no fear in them at all."
6"Somewhere in it, a light flickered — not a train."
7"Then a voice, thin and far away, telling her to confirm her location because her signal was — the rest of it dissolved into noise."
8"She forced herself to think about the third rail — where it sat, what it carried."
9"Stone, old — far older than the Tube, older than anything she'd expected."
10"The night she'd found him in the alley behind Blackfriars with a look on his face she'd never been able to describe to the departmental psychologist — not fear, not pain, but astonishment, as though he'd been told something enormous and true in the second before he went."
11"And in the last three months the watching had started paying out in whispers — the Raven's Nest and its back room, Petty and his collectors, tokens and debts and people who came in one side of London's night looking like people and did not entirely look that way coming out."
12"It was also something else — she could feel it the way you can feel someone watching you — and whatever it was, it fit a hole in the world at the bottom of these stairs."
13"Torches burned along the walls — actual torches, and something that moved in them like a color fire didn't have."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1659
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"suspect turned north, gunning"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.028330319469559977
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0030138637733574444
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean13.32
std11.89
cv0.893
sampleLengths
014
136
247
33
43
542
66
715
817
927
1030
1114
123
1320
145
1517
1612
176
1810
1926
2019
2115
2212
239
2410
2524
266
273
2816
292
3019
317
3212
3326
345
3529
3613
3710
385
3912
407
413
4210
432
442
454
4633
471
4825
495
48.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.3769230769230769
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners49
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences117
matches
0"Then he stepped down off"
1"Somewhere in it, a light"
2"Then a voice, thin and"
3"Somewhere below, there was sound."
4"Then she took the bag"
5"Somewhere above, a train screamed"
6"Then the ceiling lifted away"
7"Then Detective Harlow Quinn went"
ratio0.068
76.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences117
matches
0"Her lungs burned."
1"She'd first clocked him four"
2"She'd found what had been"
3"She'd bagged it on instinct."
4"He was heading for the"
5"He clipped a woman with"
6"He didn't stop at the"
7"He vaulted them."
8"She took the escalator steps"
9"He looked back at her."
10"She got her first real"
11"He glanced at her again,"
12"She keyed her radio."
13"She looked at the tunnel."
14"She looked at the other"
15"She stepped down."
16"She forced herself to think"
17"She counted seconds and lost"
18"She passed a junction box,"
19"She turned after them and"
ratio0.359
71.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences117
matches
0"Rain came off the awnings"
1"The suspect was thirty meters"
2"Quinn registered the sign without"
3"Her lungs burned."
4"The suspect didn't have that"
5"The suspect ran like a"
6"She'd first clocked him four"
7"The collector — a small-time"
8"She'd found what had been"
9"A bone token."
10"She'd bagged it on instinct."
11"The suspect turned north, gunning"
12"A taxi stood on its"
13"Quinn slapped the bonnet as"
14"He was heading for the"
15"Quinn followed, her soaked shoes"
16"Commuters parted around him like"
17"He clipped a woman with"
18"Quinn shouted — but the"
19"He didn't stop at the"
ratio0.778
85.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"By the time Quinn reached"
1"Now it sat in her"
ratio0.017
18.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Quinn registered the sign without registering it — the Raven's Nest, the letters flickering verdigris in the wet — and then the suspect was past it, coat flarin…"
1"She got her first real look at him — thin, hollow-cheeked, a scar like a question mark on his chin, eyes that had no fear in them at all."
2"She passed a junction box, a maintenance alcove, a stenciled arrow and numbers that meant nothing to her."
3"It smelled of rain down here somehow, and underneath the rain, something medicinal, herbal, like a pharmacy that had been closed for a century."
4"Quinn stood at the top of it with her hand flat against the wet stone wall and understood, with the animal part of her brain that had kept her alive through thi…"
5"The night she'd found him in the alley behind Blackfriars with a look on his face she'd never been able to describe to the departmental psychologist — not fear,…"
6"And in the last three months the watching had started paying out in whispers — the Raven's Nest and its back room, Petty and his collectors, tokens and debts an…"
7"She came out under an arch of soot-blackened brick and stopped, because the abandoned Tube station that had been Camden's forgotten branch platform had been hol…"
8"Stalls ran down the length of the platform where the track had been, and above the track, on the opposite platform, more stalls, and above those, where the tile…"
9"The crowd was the thing that made her grip tighten on her weapon."
10"Then Detective Harlow Quinn went further in, and the dark closed over the stairs behind her like a thing that had finished being patient."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn shouted — (shout)"
1"the arch straightened up (straighten up)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.571
84.2370%