Run: 2026-09-23-01M36SYK8TDC1N099ABB5BA7HG

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2m 4s
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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

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AI
The tape at the mouth of the station had already been trampled into the wet pavement, and beyond it the escalator shaft yawned like an open throat. Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under it anyway, one hand steadying her collar against the Camden drizzle, and felt the city's noise fall away behind her in a single clean cut. Down was the only direction. The handrail was filmed with something greasy that was not quite moisture. She counted the steps out of habit — one hundred and twelve of them, the dead escalator's teeth juddering under her boots — and by the time she reached the platform the air had changed entirely: cold, mineral, faintly sweet, with an undertone of old iron and tallow. Station signage still hung from the vaulted ceiling in cracked enamel. Northern line, 1907. Below that, someone had chalked a second sign, newer and less official: MARKET CLOSED. GONE BEFORE THE MOON TURNS. "Detective." Sergeant Ames materialised out of the platform gloom with his notebook already open, his face the colour of old candle wax. "Through the barrier. Mind the—" "I see it." The blood was the first thing that didn't add up. There was a great deal of it and almost none of it where it belonged. Quinn crouched beside the body without touching it, her watch strap creaking as she braced her wrist against her knee. Female, late thirties, dressed in layered velvet and market finery — rings on seven fingers, a charm of small bones at her throat. The throat itself was opened in a single clean arc, ear to ear, done with something very sharp and very confident. A killing stroke like that should have painted the tiled wall behind the body in a red fan. Instead the tiles were almost clean. The blood had pooled beneath her in a shape too neat, too contained, as though it had been poured from a bucket. "Before you ask," said the man who had followed her down, "yes, I know how it looks." Detective Inspector Graves ducked under the barrier and straightened his cuffs with the small fastidious gesture he used when he disliked being outranked by an observation. "Lividity's consistent. Time of death, between ten and midnight. And before you say the pooling is wrong, the doc explained it. Body was moved after death. She's dumped here." "Then where was she killed?" Quinn asked. "Upstairs somewhere. Back room, cellar, one of the lock-ups. You know how these people operate." Graves gestured at the abandoned concourse with a loose hand. Half the market's stalls were still standing behind their canvas awnings — dried things in jars, chalk and candles, boxes of tokens — abandoned mid-trade when the uniformed officers came down. "She's an information broker. Name's Laleh Vaizey, at least that's the name she trades under. Sells secrets to the highest bidder in a market full of things that would rather their secrets stayed put. It's a robbery gone sour, Harlow. Someone wanted what she knew and she wouldn't cough, so they cut her and left." "And stole everything she had," Quinn said. "Precisely." "Except rings." She nodded at the dead woman's hands. "Seven of them. Silver, by the look, and that one's a garnet the size of a thumbnail. Except the charm at her throat — bone, and carved. Except the money box under the third stall, which has two hundred pounds in it and nobody's opened." Graves opened his mouth and then closed it. Quinn stood and moved past him. The tallow smell was stronger near the body, and beneath it something else — ozone, almost, the flat mineral tang of air after a storm. Her nose had learned that smell three years ago in a warehouse in Rotherhithe and she had never been able to forget it. DS Morris had smelled of it afterwards. So had the inside of her lungs for a week. She ignored the memory the way you ignore a scar. "Nobody saw anything," Graves said, trailing her. "Three hundred traders in here at the height of it and every single one of them is blind and deaf. Uniforms are taking names but it's like interviewing a wall of smoke." "Nobody saw anything because everyone here is guilty of something and none of it is this." Quinn stopped at the barrier and looked back along the platform, running the geometry. Stall to stall, the way a person would move. "She wasn't dumped here, Graves. Look at the floor." "I am looking at the floor." "Look harder." The platform tiles were filthy with a hundred years of grime and the scuffed passage of market feet, but the scuffing told a story if you let it. She crouched again at the edge of the blood and traced the drag lines with her eyes — two faint parallel grooves in the dust, four feet long, ending at the body's heels. But the grooves began at the barrier. And on this side of the barrier the dust was undisturbed for thirty feet in every direction. "If she were dragged from a stall, we'd see the trail," Quinn said. "We don't. The trail starts at the barrier and ends at her feet. She was carried through it — set down — and then *scuffed* two feet to make it look hurried." Graves was quiet for a moment. Rain or something like it dripped somewhere in the tunnel dark beyond the platform's end. "That's a lot of supposition from a smudge," he said. "It's a lot of trouble from a mugger." She straightened and looked at the tiles again — the ones behind the body that should have taken the arterial spray and had not. "The wound is arterial, Graves. Slick, single stroke, deep as a thumb. Whoever did it knew exactly where to put the blade. And an artery like that doesn't dribble down the front of someone's coat and then decide to pool politely under their shoulders. Someone washed the wall." "With what? We'd have water, we'd have—" "Absorbent." Quinn moved to the tiled wall and ran a gloved fingertip along the grout. She held the glove up. A fine grey powder clung to the nitrile, and when she rubbed it between finger and thumb it squeaked slightly, like pumice, like chalk. "Someone sponged it down with something dry. Ash, maybe. Gypsum. Something they had to hand, which means they planned to do this before they ever came through that barrier." The station settled around them with a low hydraulic sigh. Somewhere far above, a train crossed Camden on the real Northern line and the ceiling shed a little dust onto Inspector Graves's shoulders. He brushed it off and did not answer. Quinn returned to the body and crouched a third time. The charm of carved bone at the dead woman's throat was strung on a leather thong and it had shifted in death to lie under her jaw. She lifted it carefully with the tip of her pen. Each bone was tiny — finger bones, most of them, drilled and scrimshawed with sigils so fine they'd been cut with a needle. Professional work. The sort of thing you bought at the third stall past the barrier, the one with the awning of grey canvas and no name over it. She knew the sign over the stall. She had photographed it a month ago, in daylight, on the surface, chalked on a brick wall in Soho. It meant: *you need a token to be here.* "Have we recovered her token?" Quinn asked. "Her what?" "Bone token. The price of admission." She looked at him. "Everyone in here tonight paid one to get through the barrier. Vaizey lived in this market. She'd have been wearing hers." Graves checked his notebook, turned a page, checked another. "No," he said slowly. "No token on the inventory." "So the killer took a token and left the garnet." "Or she never wore one." "She never stopped wearing one." Quinn tipped the dead woman's chin an inch to the left with her pen. There, at the hollow of the throat just above the wound, a pale oval where the leather thong had lain against the skin for years — the skin around it pale and unblemished, the rest faintly grimed with market dust. "There. She wore that charm every day for a decade and the killer took exactly the one thing that would let them walk out the way the crowd walks out. Not through the police cordon. Through the barrier. Because the barrier is not an ordinary door, and the people in this market don't leave by ordinary routes." Graves's mouth had gone tight. She had seen that expression before, on him, on the Super, on every colleague who had stood at the edge of the thing she would not stop saying out loud. *There is more here than there is supposed to be.* "Harlow—" "And the blood." She was not finished. She stood over the body and looked down at the neat contained pool with its too-clean edges. "The killer opened an artery and left nothing on the wall. But the body has been on this tile less than an hour — lividity hasn't fixed, the blood's still tacky at the edges. Graves, this platform is forty degrees and damp. Blood doesn't dry in patterns like that here. It spreads. It finds the grout and runs. This pool is sitting *up* on the tile like a coin." She knelt and touched the edge of it. It resisted. She pressed harder and the surface of the blood dimpled, glossy and firm, and did not break. "Set," she said. "Rubbery. It set within minutes of leaving her body and it set *flat*, as though someone had poured it out after the fact and it had—" She stopped. She thought of ash on a wall. She thought of a smell like ozone. She thought of the single moment three years ago when the evidence in a warehouse in Rotherhithe had stopped agreeing with the world and Morris had gone down in a room with no doors and come out of it not at all. She thought of the small brass object she had found clamped in the dead woman's left hand, half-hidden by those seven rings, which she had left exactly where it lay because it was the only thing in this crime scene that was telling the truth. The compass was smaller than a pocket watch. Its casing was brass gone to verdigris in the crevices, its face etched with sigils so dense they looked at first like tarnish, and its needle had nothing to do with north. The needle pointed down the tunnel, past the end of the platform, into the absolute black where the tracks ran into the earth under Camden — and it trembled there, patient and certain, like a compass needle over a lodestone. Everything else in the scene said the killer had come from the stalls behind the barrier and fled into the crowd. The needle said the killer had come out of the dark and gone back into it. Quinn stood up slowly. Graves was still talking — something about rival brokers, about a name from the theft squad, about closing it down by the weekend — and she let the words wash past and marked their shape without listening, the way you watch a suspect's hands while they talk. "There's no crowd in this," she said. "She wasn't killed for information and she wasn't killed for money. She was killed for the token, by someone who needed to get out of this market in a hurry. And whoever it is, they did not go up the escalator and they did not slip past your officers in a coat." She nodded toward the tunnel's mouth. "They went that way." "That way is a sealed tunnel. Brick, since 1971." "That way is where the smell is coming from." She looked at him flatly. "Ozone. Tallow. Cold iron. You've smelled it since we came down and you've been pretending you haven't. So has Ames. So has the doctor." Graves held her gaze and she watched the small war behind his eyes — eighteen years of procedure against the thing procedure had no language for. He looked at the tunnel. He looked at the compass in the dead woman's fist. He looked at the pale oval at her throat where a token had been and now was not. "If I put that in the report," he said quietly, "they'll bury me." "Then leave it out of the report. Leave all of it out." Quinn pulled off her gloves and put them in her pocket and looked once more along the platform, at the too-neat pool and the ash-smeared tiles and the drag marks that began from nowhere. A scene built to be read quickly and read wrong. A performance, for an audience of one. "But it's going to be in my head, Graves, and in my head it will not sit down and be quiet." She took the escalator steps two at a time, back toward the rain and the ordinary city, already composing the question she would put to the one person in London who might answer it. A research assistant in the British Museum's restricted archives, with a master's in Ancient History and a talent for reading languages that weren't supposed to exist. Eva Kowalski would know what the sigils on that compass meant. Eva Kowalski would know whether a needle like that could be lied to. Behind her, in the dark below Camden, the needle did not waver. It pointed at a place where there was nothing at all — and Harlow Quinn, who had learned in a warehouse in Rotherhithe that nothing was very often the most important evidence of all, went to find out what it was.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
80.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"said the man who had followed her down [down]"
1"he said slowly [slowly]"
2"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.46
leniency0.92
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.12
80.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2296
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"precisely"
2"slightly"
3"carefully"
4"slowly"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2296
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"charm"
count4
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"velvet"
2"charm"
3"traced"
4"etched"
5"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences102
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords20
totalWords2315
ratio0.009
matches
0"scuffed"
1"you need a token to be here."
2"There is more here than there is supposed to be."
3"up"
4"flat"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1565
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn14
Camden4
Ames1
Detective2
Inspector2
Graves10
Half1
Rotherhithe3
Morris2
Stall1
Northern2
Soho1
Super1
London1
British1
Museum1
Ancient1
History1
Kowalski2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Ames"
3"Graves"
4"Half"
5"Morris"
6"Museum"
7"Kowalski"
places
0"Rotherhithe"
1"Stall"
2"Soho"
3"London"
4"British"
5"Ancient"
globalScore1
windowScore1
86.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite moisture"
1"something like it dripped somewhere in the t"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2315
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences128
matches
0"learned that smell"
1"seen that expression"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean42.87
std34.21
cv0.798
sampleLengths
057
198
227
33
425
5110
672
77
8111
97
101
1154
128
1371
1410
1539
1648
176
182
1985
2045
2121
2210
2380
247
2573
2641
2798
2835
297
302
3131
3218
3310
345
35116
3645
371
3893
3927
4087
4145
4280
4321
4416
4551
4669
479
4838
4959
81.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences102
matches
0"been trampled"
1"was filmed"
2"was opened"
3"been poured"
4"being outranked"
5"was undisturbed"
6"is supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs244
matches
0"were still standing"
1"was telling"
2"was still talking "
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences128
ratio0.094
matches
0"She counted the steps out of habit — one hundred and twelve of them, the dead escalator's teeth juddering under her boots — and by the time she reached the platform the air had changed entirely: cold, mineral, faintly sweet, with an undertone of old iron and tallow."
1"Female, late thirties, dressed in layered velvet and market finery — rings on seven fingers, a charm of small bones at her throat."
2"Half the market's stalls were still standing behind their canvas awnings — dried things in jars, chalk and candles, boxes of tokens — abandoned mid-trade when the uniformed officers came down."
3"The tallow smell was stronger near the body, and beneath it something else — ozone, almost, the flat mineral tang of air after a storm."
4"She crouched again at the edge of the blood and traced the drag lines with her eyes — two faint parallel grooves in the dust, four feet long, ending at the body's heels."
5"\"It's a lot of trouble from a mugger.\" She straightened and looked at the tiles again — the ones behind the body that should have taken the arterial spray and had not."
6"Each bone was tiny — finger bones, most of them, drilled and scrimshawed with sigils so fine they'd been cut with a needle."
7"There, at the hollow of the throat just above the wound, a pale oval where the leather thong had lain against the skin for years — the skin around it pale and unblemished, the rest faintly grimed with market dust."
8"The needle pointed down the tunnel, past the end of the platform, into the absolute black where the tracks ran into the earth under Camden — and it trembled there, patient and certain, like a compass needle over a lodestone."
9"Graves was still talking — something about rival brokers, about a name from the theft squad, about closing it down by the weekend — and she let the words wash past and marked their shape without listening, the way you watch a suspect's hands while they talk."
10"Graves held her gaze and she watched the small war behind his eyes — eighteen years of procedure against the thing procedure had no language for."
11"It pointed at a place where there was nothing at all — and Harlow Quinn, who had learned in a warehouse in Rotherhithe that nothing was very often the most important evidence of all, went to find out what it was."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1555
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.03536977491961415
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.008360128617363344
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean18.09
std14.25
cv0.788
sampleLengths
027
130
25
312
448
511
63
714
85
922
105
113
1210
1315
1420
1523
1621
1718
186
1922
2043
2129
227
2325
2431
2555
267
271
289
2945
308
316
3225
3323
347
3510
3610
377
3832
3930
409
419
426
432
4428
4533
467
4717
4813
4932
68.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.4609375
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners59
72.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"Instead the tiles were almost"
1"Somewhere far above, a train"
ratio0.022
80.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences92
matches
0"She counted the steps out"
1"She nodded at the dead"
2"Her nose had learned that"
3"She ignored the memory the"
4"She crouched again at the"
5"She straightened and looked at"
6"She held the glove up."
7"He brushed it off and"
8"She lifted it carefully with"
9"She knew the sign over"
10"She had photographed it a"
11"It meant: *you need a"
12"She looked at him"
13"he said slowly"
14"She had seen that expression"
15"She was not finished"
16"She stood over the body"
17"She knelt and touched the"
18"She pressed harder and the"
19"She thought of ash on"
ratio0.348
52.39% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences92
matches
0"The tape at the mouth"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
2"The handrail was filmed with"
3"She counted the steps out"
4"Station signage still hung from"
5"Sergeant Ames materialised out of"
6"The blood was the first"
7"Quinn crouched beside the body"
8"The throat itself was opened"
9"A killing stroke like that"
10"The blood had pooled beneath"
11"Graves gestured at the abandoned"
12"She nodded at the dead"
13"Graves opened his mouth and"
14"Quinn stood and moved past"
15"The tallow smell was stronger"
16"Her nose had learned that"
17"DS Morris had smelled of"
18"She ignored the memory the"
19"Graves said, trailing her"
ratio0.815
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
ratio0
75.47% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"She had seen that expression before, on him, on the Super, on every colleague who had stood at the edge of the thing she would not stop saying out loud."
1"She thought of the small brass object she had found clamped in the dead woman's left hand, half-hidden by those seven rings, which she had left exactly where it…"
2"She took the escalator steps two at a time, back toward the rain and the ordinary city, already composing the question she would put to the one person in London…"
3"A research assistant in the British Museum's restricted archives, with a master's in Ancient History and a talent for reading languages that weren't supposed to…"
4"It pointed at a place where there was nothing at all — and Harlow Quinn, who had learned in a warehouse in Rotherhithe that nothing was very often the most impo…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Sergeant Ames materialised, his face the colour of old candle wax"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"said the man who had followed her down (say had follow)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.44
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.04
85.2706%