Run: 2026-09-23-01M36T2YWXH5A0R7S1ESRNHAZT

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Duration:
1m 60s
Cost:
$0.003291
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gin over-poured by a thumb's width and I let it. Three years ago I'd have apologised and started again. Tonight I tipped the last drop in and slid the glass across the bar without looking up. "Generous." "Quiet night." Cardiff sat in her vowels. The word generous landed soft, then judged. I reached for the cloth and finally took her in properly. Eva Vaughan. Or whoever she'd become. She'd hacked her hair into something sharp and jaw-length, dyed it the colour of wet sand. A well-cut knee-length camel wool coat hung on the stool beside her, and a slim gold watch caught the green neon bleeding in from the sign outside. She looked like the sort of woman who sailed past the queue at every restaurant in Soho and never once explained herself. "You cut your hair," she said. "You didn't." "I grew it out. Then I got bored." She turned the glass a quarter, precise, the way she used to line up her exam notes. "You look well, Rory." "Liar." "Fine. You look like someone who sleeps badly and eats worse." A smile, careful and sideways. "But the hair suits you." I poured myself a mineral water because Silas had rules about the staff, and because my hands needed something to do. Lemon peel curled on the bar top. Somewhere behind me a fridge hummed against the bass of the speakers. Nobody had called me Rory in fourteen months. Laila at the takeaway. Carter on the delivery app. Malphora, of all things, to a man in Bermondsey who thought he was hiring a cleaner and got a woman who could pick a lock with a hairpin instead. Rory died the day I left Cardiff with a bin bag of clothes in the back of Eva's Fiesta. And here she sat, drinking my gin. "How did you find this place?" I asked. "Does it matter?" "It does to me." She shrugged one shoulder, elegant, practised. "Your mother mentioned a pub in Soho. She didn't know the name. I walked around for two days." Two days of circling. She could have called. She had called, once, years ago. Three rings and a hang-up I still knew the silence of. "You didn't have to do that." "No," she agreed. "I didn't." Silas limped out of the kitchen with a crate of limes and clocked her the way he clocked everyone, in one flat sweep, the silver signet ring riding his thumb as he set the crate down. He read the distance between our elbows and the two empty glasses near hers and said nothing. He wiped his hands, gave me a nod that meant shout if it goes sideways, and vanished behind the bookshelf door at the back without a sound. Eva watched the shelf swing shut. "He always that friendly?" "He's careful." "Same thing in your world now?" I let that pass. The words sat between us like furniture neither of us wanted. "So." I leaned on the bar. "The coat. The watch. Somebody died or somebody bought." "Married." The word landed in my chest and stayed there, a coin in a drain. Her left hand lay flat on the bar. Bare. The skin paler than the rest of her where a ring had lived. "To a man called Adrian. He imports things. Wine, mostly. Some furniture." She said it the way you'd read a menu. "It's good. It's very comfortable." "You said that twice." "Because it's true twice." I turned her glass another quarter, the same direction she'd turned it, and she noticed. Old habits. Twelve years of Saturday nights in her mam's kitchen, mirroring each other across the table without meaning to. "What happened to you, Ev?" "Nothing happened to me. Things were decided. Contracts signed." She looked past me at the wall of black-and-white photographs. Sailors, gangsters, a smiling woman outside a bomb site in 1945. "You're the one who vanished. Nobody vanishes like that by accident." "People do." "You sent your dad a birthday card with no name on it. No return address. Cardiff postmark." She said it quiet. "Brendan cried at the table. I know because Jennifer told me, and Jennifer tells me things she'd never tell you, because I answer the phone." There it was. The part of the evening I'd been pouring drinks to avoid. I pulled my left sleeve down over the crescent scar, though it already sat hidden. "You want the apology, say so." "I want the reason." "You got me out. You did exactly what a friend does. And then I stayed out." "And Evan?" Ice moved in my stomach. I set the water glass down hard enough to crack the lemon peel. "Evan's a reason," I said. "Not the whole one." "See, that's new." She leaned in. The gold watch pressed against the wood. "The girl who used to read her diary aloud to me in a Tesco car park now answers like a deposition." "The girl got older." "She got careful. There's a difference." We held there, breathing each other's gin. The neon sign buzzed and bled green across her cheekbones. She'd aged too, around the eyes, in the particular way of women who spend their evenings being pleasant to people they despise. I knew that look. My mother had worn it for thirty years. "He's out, Rory." The fridge hummed. A glass knocked over at the far end and a man apologised to nobody. "Of where?" "Usk. March. Grievous bodily harm, but you knew that." She folded her hands. "He asked after you. Not to me. To Cara, if you can believe she still talks to him. He said Cardiff never suited him. He said London's got better hospitals." I laughed. It came out ragged, and it frightened me more than the information did. "You came here to warn me." "I came here to see if you were alive. The warning is free." Footsteps. The door at the back of the room, the one behind the bookshelf, swung wide, and Silas stepped through with a man in a grey suit I'd never seen before. Silas' limp looked worse. His jaw had that set to it, the one he wore the night the debt collectors came pretending to be environmental health. The stranger scanned the bar and stopped on Eva's camel coat. "Mrs. Whitfield. You didn't say there'd be company." Eva didn't turn around. Her hand closed around the gin glass and the gold watch went still. "Rory," she said, very calm, "put the bottle down and walk out through the kitchen."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.24
leniency0.48
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"comfortable"
2"stomach"
3"footsteps"
4"scanned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences73
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1094
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount744
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.67
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Vaughan1
Soho1
Silas3
Rory2
Bermondsey1
Cardiff2
Eva5
Fiesta1
Saturday1
Sailors1
persons
0"Vaughan"
1"Silas"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Bermondsey"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like the sort of woman who sailed"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1094
matches(empty)
76.58% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences111
matches
0"let that pass"
1"knew that look"
2"had that set"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean17.93
std18.21
cv1.015
sampleLengths
011
126
21
32
423
56
665
76
82
929
101
1121
1240
1365
147
158
163
174
1824
1925
206
215
2280
2310
242
256
2615
2715
281
2936
3026
314
324
3335
345
3541
362
3746
3814
3921
404
4116
422
4318
449
4534
464
476
4851
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs125
matches
0"was hiring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount711
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.02250351617440225
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0028129395218002813
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean9.86
std7.79
cv0.79
sampleLengths
011
19
217
31
42
55
67
711
82
94
1016
1127
1222
136
142
1525
164
171
1816
195
2021
217
2212
238
244
255
2629
2719
287
298
303
314
326
3318
344
354
366
3711
386
393
402
4136
4217
4327
446
454
462
476
484
4911
80.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5135135135135135
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners57
52.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"Somewhere behind me a fridge"
ratio0.016
38.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences64
matches
0"I reached for the cloth"
1"She'd hacked her hair into"
2"She looked like the sort"
3"She turned the glass a"
4"I poured myself a mineral"
5"She shrugged one shoulder, elegant,"
6"She could have called."
7"She had called, once, years"
8"He read the distance between"
9"He wiped his hands, gave"
10"I let that pass."
11"I leaned on the bar"
12"Her left hand lay flat"
13"She said it the way"
14"I turned her glass another"
15"She looked past me at"
16"She said it quiet"
17"I pulled my left sleeve"
18"I set the water glass"
19"She leaned in"
ratio0.453
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences64
matches
0"The gin over-poured by a"
1"Tonight I tipped the last"
2"Cardiff sat in her vowels."
3"The word generous landed soft,"
4"I reached for the cloth"
5"She'd hacked her hair into"
6"A well-cut knee-length camel wool"
7"She looked like the sort"
8"She turned the glass a"
9"A smile, careful and sideways"
10"I poured myself a mineral"
11"Lemon peel curled on the"
12"Nobody had called me Rory"
13"Laila at the takeaway."
14"Carter on the delivery app."
15"Malphora, of all things, to"
16"Rory died the day I"
17"She shrugged one shoulder, elegant,"
18"She could have called."
19"She had called, once, years"
ratio0.875
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Twelve years of Saturday nights in her mam's kitchen, mirroring each other across the table without meaning to."
1"She'd aged too, around the eyes, in the particular way of women who spend their evenings being pleasant to people they despise."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.14
leniency0.28
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.04
87.6841%