Run: 2026-09-23-01M36T7C42KM1WGKBVT7WXSVSY

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Duration:
3m 17s
Cost:
$0.062294
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt turned over with a grudging metallic sigh, and Aurora Carter opened the door onto rain, curry, and Lucien Moreau. He stood on the cramped landing as if someone with a cruel sense of composition had arranged him there. Charcoal suit darkened at the shoulders, platinum hair slicked back and shining with water, ivory cane held loose at his side. The bare bulb above him found one eye and made it amber. The other remained black, depthless, fixed on her face. For a second neither of them breathed. Below, a pot lid clattered in the curry house, and someone laughed, ordinary and far away. Rory's fingers tightened on the edge of the door. "If you're selling something, the woman who lives here already owns more paper than this building can hold. Try two doors down." "I'm not selling." His voice was the same, low and precise, London laid over something warmer. "Hello, Rory." The name landed badly. She had spent three months training herself not to hear it in that register. Ptolemy materialised at her shin, tabby stripes blurred by the dimness, and issued a noise of profound suspicion. Lucien glanced down. The corner of his mouth moved. "He doesn't like guests," she said. "Sensible animal." "Eva's not in." "I didn't come for Eva." Rain ticked against the landing window. A motorbike snarled somewhere on Brick Lane and faded. Rory became aware of her own pulse in her throat, annoying and loud, and of the fact that she was barefoot, in Eva's too-long cardigan, with a crescent of ink on her thumb from a note she had been trying to decipher before the knock. She looked, she knew, like a woman interrupted. He looked like a problem that had ironed itself. "You've got the wrong night for this," she said. "I don't think there was going to be a right one." He tipped his head, not quite a plea. Water gathered at the point of his jaw and fell. "Let me in. Please. I'll stand where you tell me to stand, and if you want me gone after five minutes I will go down those stairs and I will not come back up them." She should have used the deadbolts for their intended purpose. Instead she stepped aside, because the landing was a whisper gallery and because some treacherous part of her had already started cataloguing him: the tiredness at the edges of his mouth, the way his free hand flexed once and went still, the care with which he did not cross the threshold until she moved. He came in. The flat received him poorly. Books rose in crooked columns along the wall. Scrolls lay half-unrolled on the rug, weighted by a chipped mug and a spoon. Eva's handwriting covered every surface that would take ink. The air was warm and spiced, cardamom and onion drifting up through the floor, and the single lamp made a pool of yellow that did not quite reach the corners. Lucien's cane found a bare rectangle of floorboard. He did not sit. He did not shrug out of his coat. He looked at her with an attention that felt like being read in a language she only half knew. "You're staying here," he said. "Temporarily. Eva's in Edinburgh chasing a footnote. Someone had to feed the tyrant." She nodded at Ptolemy, who had abandoned principle and was investigating Lucien's trouser cuff. "How did you know I was here?" "People talk." "People talk to you. That's not the same as people talking." A flicker of acknowledgment. "Yu-Fei mentioned you'd swapped a few shifts. Silas said the flat above the bar had been dark for four nights. I made an unkind inference and followed it." His gaze held hers, amber and black and too steady. "I wasn't going to. I stood outside the restaurant for twenty minutes on Tuesday and talked myself out of it. Then I heard something that changed the arithmetic, and not coming became worse than coming." "Always arithmetic with you." She folded her arms. The small crescent scar on her left wrist caught the light, pale against her skin. His eyes went to it and away, a habit from before, when he had asked about it once and accepted the childhood-accident version without pressing. That had felt like respect. Now it felt like one more thing he had been careful not to need. "Say what you came to say. Then you can take your arithmetic back out into the rain." Lucien drew a breath. She watched him choose, and discard, three openings. When he spoke, the polish had thinned. "I left because a man I occasionally do business with started asking questions about you. Not your name. Your routes. What time you finish at the Golden Empress. Which nights you walk home alone from Brick Lane to the bar. I shut it down. I made it expensive for him to keep asking. And then I removed the reason anyone would think you were worth the expense." The room seemed to tighten. Rory heard the rain. She heard the cat's purr start, absurdly, against Lucien's shoe. "You removed yourself," she said. "You didn't tell me there was a man. You didn't tell me there were questions. You kissed me in an alley like it meant something and the next morning you were a rumour. I stood behind that bar and smiled at strangers for a week while I tried to work out what I'd done wrong." "You did nothing wrong." "I know that now. I didn't know it then. You could have given me that. It would have cost you one conversation." Her voice stayed level. She was proud of that, and furious that she had to be. "Instead you decided I was a variable and you solved me. Do you have any idea how familiar that feels? Someone else used to make my choices and call it care. I didn't come to London to collect a second edition." The blow landed. She saw it. Lucien's face went still in the particular way it did when he was refusing to flinch. His hand tightened on the ivory handle until the tendons stood. "I am not him," he said quietly. "Then stop borrowing his methods." Silence pooled between the book towers. A scooter passed. The lamp filament buzzed, a thin anxious sound. Lucien set the cane against the sofa with deliberate slowness, as if disarming, though she knew what the ivory concealed and he knew she knew, and neither of them mentioned it. Some courtesies were also warnings. He left it there and faced her empty-handed. "You're right," he said. "I was afraid, and I dressed the fear up as strategy because strategy is a language I'm fluent in and fear is not. I have spent eleven weeks discovering that the strategy was a failure. The man stopped asking. That part worked. The rest—" He exhaled. "I still look for you. In rooms you aren't in. On streets that only resemble streets you walk. I tell myself it's vigilance. It isn't. It's the shape you left." Rory's arms loosened without her permission. She hated the warmth that moved through her at the plainness of it, hated that her body had no interest in her principles. He was close enough, in the stupid small flat, that she could see a drop of rain still clinging to his temple, the fine lines at the corner of the amber eye, the black one reflecting the lamp like still water. She could smell wet wool and the clean, faintly sweet scent of his skin, and under it something hotter, a note she had never identified and had, on the night of the alley, decided not to interrogate. "You don't get to be lonely at me," she said, but the edge had dulled. "Loneliness isn't an apology." "No. This is." He held her gaze. "I am sorry. I was wrong to leave without telling you why. I was wrong to think I could choose your safety for you and call it devotion. If you want me to go, I will. I meant that. But I am not going to stand on the other side of a door and pretend I don't—" He stopped. The word snagged, visible. His mouth tightened around it. "I don't know how to say it without making it a transaction. I'm trying not to." "Try anyway." "I missed you." The French slipped through, soft at the edges of the vowels. "Not the idea of you. You. The way you argue with a problem until it surrenders. The way you touch that scar when you're thinking and don't notice. The fact that you never once asked me to be less than I am, even when you suspected there was more. I missed you, Rory, and I was too much of a coward to find out whether you would have missed me back if I'd given you the chance." Her throat ached. She looked at the floor, at Ptolemy draped shamelessly over Lucien's shoe, at the scatter of Eva's notes — half-translated margins, warnings in hands she didn't recognise, a city that refused to stay ordinary on the page. When she looked up, he had not moved closer. He was waiting, which was new, and which undid her more neatly than any approach would have. "I did miss you," she said. The admission scraped. "I hated it. I walked past places you weren't and felt ridiculous. I drafted messages I didn't send. I told Eva I was fine, and she looked at me like I'd insulted her intelligence, which I had. So don't stand there and act like the missing was one-sided. It wasn't. That's what makes me angry. You had all of that and you still chose the door." "I know." "And if you do it again, I won't be here to open the next one. I mean that. I have spent enough of my life waiting for men to decide what I'm allowed to know." "I won't." No decoration on it. Just the words, set down carefully, as if he understood they would be weighed later. "If I leave again, it will be because you told me to. Not because I convinced myself I knew better." The space between them was two steps. Maybe less. The flat made a mockery of distance; the sofa crowded her calves, the desk crowded him, and the air itself seemed to lean. Rory felt the old gravity start, the one that had pulled her into that alley with rain in her hair and his name half-formed in her mouth. She had been cool-headed her whole life. It had saved her more than once. It was not saving her now, and she was suddenly, fiercely tired of pretending it should. She crossed the distance. Lucien's breath caught, audible, a small human sound from a man who rationed them. She stopped close enough that her cardigan brushed his suit. Her hand lifted and settled on his lapel, fingers curling into cloth that was still cool from the street. Under it, he was warm. Warmer than the room accounted for. She filed that away with all the other unanswered things and did not let it stop her. "This isn't me forgiving you," she said. "I wouldn't trust it if it were." "And I'm still going to make you say the rest. Whatever you've been not saying. All of it. Tonight, before you get any ideas about this meaning you've been acquitted." "Yes." "Good." She rose onto her toes. The difference in their heights had always felt like an argument she enjoyed losing. "Then shut up for a minute." She kissed him. It was not gentle, not at first. Three months of silence went into it, and the alley, and every unsent message. His mouth met hers with a shock of relief so naked she felt it in her own chest. He did not grab. His hand came up to her jaw, thumb at the hinge of it, holding her as if she were something he had been trusted with and did not deserve yet. The other hand hovered at her waist and waited until she made a small impatient sound and pulled him in by the lapel. Then he touched her, palm spreading at the small of her back, and the warmth of it went through the thin cardigan like a match. Rory made a noise she would deny later. He answered it, deeper, the kiss slowing, turning careful at the edges without losing its heat. She tasted rain. She tasted the particular sweetness of him, and felt the faint tremor in the hand at her jaw, and understood, with a clarity that had nothing to do with cool-headedness, that he was afraid of this in the same way she was. Not of the wanting. Of what the wanting would cost if it was mishandled again. She broke the kiss but did not step back. Their foreheads rested together. His breath moved against her mouth. Both eyes were open, both wrecked of composure, and she had the dizzy thought that very few people had ever been allowed to see Lucien Moreau look like that. "Ceasefire," he said, rough. "Not a verdict. I heard you." "You're still talking." "Occupational hazard." His thumb stroked once along her cheek and stopped, a question. "Do you want me to let go?" She considered the door behind him, the three bolts she could still throw. She considered the months, and the man who had asked about her routes, and the older hurt that lived under this one like a watermark. She considered his hands, which had not taken anything she hadn't given, and the steady, ridiculous purr of a cat who had decided the danger in the room was acceptable. "No," she said. "I want you to sit down, because this flat wasn't built for looming, and I want you to start at the part where you decided I couldn't be told the truth. We'll see what the rest of the night is after that. Not before." Lucien nodded. Some tightness left his shoulders, not all of it. He glanced at the sofa, at the cane, at her hand still fisted gently in his lapel, and something like a smile, small and unguarded, found his mouth. "As you like," he said. "I'll start at the beginning. I won't make it elegant." "Elegant is how you left." Rory loosened her grip, not quite releasing him, and felt her own pulse begin, slowly, to climb down. "Try honest. I've got time. Eva's notes can wait. The cat's already chosen a side, the traitor." Ptolemy, offended or not, did not move. Rain stitched itself against the window. Downstairs, someone called an order into the steam, and the ordinary world went on smelling of spice and weather. Rory locked the door out of habit — one bolt, then the second, then the third — and when she turned back Lucien was still there, coat dark with rain, watching her as if the sight of her choosing to stay in a room with him was a thing he meant to memorise. She sat. After a moment, so did he, close enough that their knees touched, far enough that she could think. The lamp held them both. Outside, Brick Lane ran with water and noise. Inside, for the first time in eleven weeks, the silence between them was not an ending. It was a place to begin, if they were both brave enough to use it. "All right," she said, and her voice came out steady, which felt like a kind of mercy. "Talk."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"His thumb stroked once [once]"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.794
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.063
90.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2611
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
3"gently"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2611
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"sense of"
count1
1
word"profound"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"treacherous"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"variable"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"silence"
count3
9
word"warmth"
count2
10
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"sense of"
1"profound"
2"pulse"
3"whisper"
4"treacherous"
5"flicker"
6"variable"
7"familiar"
8"silence"
9"warmth"
10"looming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences141
matches
0"was proud"
1"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences141
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences177
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen77
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2614
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount1672
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.78
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Carter1
Lucien13
Moreau2
London1
Rain2
Brick2
Lane2
Eva3
Water1
Ptolemy4
Silence1
Rory8
French1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Rain"
5"Eva"
6"Water"
7"Ptolemy"
8"Silence"
9"Rory"
10"French"
places
0"London"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences94
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"looked like a problem that had ironed its"
1"not quite a plea"
2"not quite reach the corners"
3"felt like being read in a language she"
4"felt like one more thing he had been ca"
5"as if disarming though she knew what the ivory concealed and he knew she knew, and neither of them mentioned it"
6"felt like an argument she enjoyed losin"
7"something like a smile, small and unguarded"
8"not quite releasing him, and felt her own pulse begin, slowly, to climb down"
9"felt like a kind of mercy"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2614
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences177
matches
0"hated that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean40.84
std33.76
cv0.826
sampleLengths
022
184
231
318
445
56
62
73
85
977
109
1164
1264
13108
145
1534
162
1711
1877
1984
2019
2167
2219
2360
244
2579
2633
277
285
2961
3080
31107
3219
3391
342
3591
3666
3775
382
3935
4041
4189
424
4371
447
457
4630
471
4826
493
97.80% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences141
matches
0"been trusted"
1"was mishandled"
2"been allowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs306
matches
0"was investigating"
1"was refusing"
2"was waiting"
3"was not saving"
94.43% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences177
ratio0.017
matches
0"She looked at the floor, at Ptolemy draped shamelessly over Lucien's shoe, at the scatter of Eva's notes — half-translated margins, warnings in hands she didn't recognise, a city that refused to stay ordinary on the page."
1"The flat made a mockery of distance; the sofa crowded her calves, the desk crowded him, and the air itself seemed to lean."
2"Rory locked the door out of habit — one bolt, then the second, then the third — and when she turned back Lucien was still there, coat dark with rain, watching her as if the sight of her choosing to stay in a room with him was a thing he meant to memorise."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1677
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount62
adverbRatio0.03697078115682767
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007751937984496124
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences177
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences177
mean14.77
std14.14
cv0.958
sampleLengths
022
119
221
312
49
57
616
79
822
916
102
114
1214
1318
143
156
166
172
183
195
206
219
2245
238
249
259
2619
2710
2835
2910
3054
313
325
338
3414
359
3630
378
384
398
4019
415
4227
437
442
4511
464
4738
4835
498
53.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3615819209039548
totalSentences177
uniqueOpeners64
78.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences127
matches
0"Instead she stepped aside, because"
1"Just the words, set down"
2"Then he touched her, palm"
ratio0.024
34.17% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount59
totalSentences127
matches
0"He stood on the cramped"
1"His voice was the same,"
2"She had spent three months"
3"She looked, she knew, like"
4"He looked like a problem"
5"He tipped his head, not"
6"She should have used the"
7"He came in."
8"He did not sit."
9"He did not shrug out"
10"He looked at her with"
11"She nodded at Ptolemy, who"
12"His gaze held hers, amber"
13"She folded her arms"
14"His eyes went to it"
15"She watched him choose, and"
16"She heard the cat's purr"
17"Her voice stayed level"
18"She was proud of that,"
19"She saw it."
ratio0.465
26.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount110
totalSentences127
matches
0"The third deadbolt turned over"
1"He stood on the cramped"
2"Charcoal suit darkened at the"
3"The bare bulb above him"
4"The other remained black, depthless,"
5"Rory's fingers tightened on the"
6"His voice was the same,"
7"The name landed badly."
8"She had spent three months"
9"Ptolemy materialised at her shin,"
10"Lucien glanced down."
11"The corner of his mouth"
12"Rain ticked against the landing"
13"A motorbike snarled somewhere on"
14"Rory became aware of her"
15"She looked, she knew, like"
16"He looked like a problem"
17"He tipped his head, not"
18"Water gathered at the point"
19"She should have used the"
ratio0.866
39.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences127
matches
0"Now it felt like one"
ratio0.008
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Rory became aware of her own pulse in her throat, annoying and loud, and of the fact that she was barefoot, in Eva's too-long cardigan, with a crescent of ink o…"
1"Lucien set the cane against the sofa with deliberate slowness, as if disarming, though she knew what the ivory concealed and he knew she knew, and neither of th…"
2"She hated the warmth that moved through her at the plainness of it, hated that her body had no interest in her principles."
3"She looked at the floor, at Ptolemy draped shamelessly over Lucien's shoe, at the scatter of Eva's notes — half-translated margins, warnings in hands she didn't…"
4"Lucien's breath caught, audible, a small human sound from a man who rationed them."
5"Her hand lifted and settled on his lapel, fingers curling into cloth that was still cool from the street."
6"She tasted the particular sweetness of him, and felt the faint tremor in the hand at her jaw, and understood, with a clarity that had nothing to do with cool-he…"
7"She considered the months, and the man who had asked about her routes, and the older hurt that lived under this one like a watermark."
8"She considered his hands, which had not taken anything she hadn't given, and the steady, ridiculous purr of a cat who had decided the danger in the room was acc…"
85.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He tipped, not quite a plea"
1"he said, rough"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.206
leniency0.413
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.6256%