Run: 2026-09-23-01M36TCMPEXTZ1KF61101NHB8X

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Duration:
1m 3s
Cost:
$0.000601
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The silver chain had gone hot enough to sting, and Rory pressed two fingers to it before she remembered why she had come. She stood at the fringe of the clearing, one hand still braced on the rough bark of an oak, and waited for the ache to fade. The Heartstone sat against her sternum, warm as a fresh coin, its faint crimson glow bleeding through the fabric of her jacket. It had led her here, pulse by pulse, out of Richmond and past the fenced ran deer, through a gap in the treeline that no map admitted to. Now it had nothing left to point at. The Grove opened ahead of her. Wildflowers crowded the ground in every direction, buttercups and harebells and foxglove, all of them upright, all of them open, as though someone had arranged them minutes ago under a lamp. Six standing stones marked the boundary in a broken ring, older than the park around them, their faces pitted and dark with lichen. Her phone read 11:47 p.m. She had left Silas's bar at half eleven. Rory lowered the phone and listened. Nothing. Not the thin whisper of wind she had walked in with, not the distant shush of the A316, not the scuttling of anything small through the leaf litter. The silence had weight to it. It pressed on the inside of her ears like the pressure before a storm, and beneath it she caught a sound so faint she questioned it twice: breathing. Slow, patient, several metres to her left, where the foxgloves grew thickest. "Hello?" Her voice came back flat and unbothered. The breathing stopped. She stepped between the stones. The air changed as she crossed, cooler and sweeter, carrying the green smell of crushed stems. The Heartstone settled against her chest, satisfied, its glow dimming to an ember. Whatever it had sensed, it had found. Rory took four more paces and then stood very still, because the flowers had moved. Not swayed. Moved. The ring of buttercups nearest the northern stone had bent inward, all at once, all toward the place where she had entered, as if something heavy had passed over them. She crouched and touched a petal. Cool. No dew. No dust. The stem held no impression of weight. Behind her, the oak branches she had pushed through swung back into place without a sound. "Isolde?" she tried. The name tasted wrong in her mouth, too old for the shape of her teeth. She had come on the strength of a note slipped under Silas's door that morning, two lines in ink that bled at the edges, asking her to come alone, after dark, and promising answers about the pendant. She had told herself she would give it ten minutes. The breathing resumed, closer now, on her right. It wasn't a person's breathing. It had no catch, no wetness, no rhythm of lungs working. It sounded like a bellows working behind a closed door, patient and enormous, and it was moving, sliding along the edge of the treeline at the speed of her turning head so that she never quite caught it. A shadow deepened among the trunks. Then deepened again further left. Rory's thumb found the crescent scar on her wrist and rubbed it, the way she had as a girl when the sounds in the flat upstairs kept her awake. She counted her own breaths instead. One. Two. Three. On the fourth, the standing stones rearranged themselves. There were six. She had counted them entering, and now, when she looked back, seven stood in the ring, wider than the others, its top lost in the canopy. It had not been there a moment ago. Its face was smooth where the rest were pitted, smooth as a table, and across its surface ran a hairline crack that widened, slowly, in the manner of ice taking a river. Something scraped on stone. High, deliberate, like a nail drawn across a slate. Her phone buzzed. Rory yanked it from her pocket and the screen threw blue light across her hands, a call from Eva, the ringtone swallowed almost at once by the hush. She answered. "Eva." Static breathed against her ear. Then a voice under it, layered, one syllable too many for the word it made. "Eorora." She killed the call. Twelve missed notifications sat in the tray, all from the same number, all timestamped 11:47 p.m., all the same four words: DON'T STAND STILL. The seventh stone cracked down its length. Rory moved. She crossed the clearing at a stride, boots stamping flat the blooms in her path, and put her back to the ring of stones she had entered by. The air shifted with her. The bellows-breath shifted too, keeping pace on her left, and with it came a new sound: wet, soft, a body dragging itself over ground it had forgotten how to walk on. The foxgloves in front of her bent flat, one after another, a slow procession of tips folding under nothing at all. She could hear it breathing on her neck and see nothing there. The Heartstone blazed against her chest. Warm, then hot, then a heat that bit through cloth and made her gasp and claw at the chain. The glow went from ember to ember-red to a hard, ringing light that lit the clearing from inside her coat, and in that light the ground showed its seams. Between the roots and the flowers, cracks ran outward from the centre of the grove, black seams that pulsed in time with the pendant. Something stood in the far treeline. Tall, still, wearing the shape of a woman in a long pale dress, its head turned too far round to be a head turned at all. "Isolde," Rory said. The figure took a step. The ground answered with a low, grinding note, and every flower in the clearing turned to face it. Then, from behind her, from the very centre of the ring she had come through, a voice rose up out of the grass, young and bright and pitched exactly like her own. "Rory. You took your time." The pendant went cold. The seventh stone split with a crack that threw splinters into the dark, and the hairline on its face yawned open into a black slot that breathed out air from somewhere beneath the world. The flowers nearest it began to fold inward, over and over, grinding themselves flat, and the woman at the treeline lifted a hand and pointed, not at the stone, not at the darkness opening in it, but at Rory's own chest, where the Heartstone hung dead and dark against her ribs. Behind her the grass rustled, close enough to touch the back of her neck, and the voice that wore her voice whispered the rest of the sentence. "You shouldn't have come alone."
created_at"2026-09-23T09:43:44.598Z" 9/23/2026, 9:43:44 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1144
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1144
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"whisper"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences87
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1144
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount1129
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.71
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory8
Heartstone4
Richmond1
Grove1
Silas2
Eva1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Grove"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like a bellows working behind a cl"
25.17% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.748
wordCount1144
matches
0"not at the stone, not at the darkness opening in it, but at Rory's own chest"
1"not at the darkness opening in it, but at Rory's own chest"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean30.11
std27.76
cv0.922
sampleLengths
023
184
260
313
46
51
674
71
810
941
1015
1151
1216
133
1462
158
1665
1738
188
1969
2013
2133
221
2320
241
2528
267
2787
2812
2978
3032
313
3223
3332
345
3589
3627
375
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"were pitted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs167
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences87
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1131
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.029177718832891247
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0017683465959328027
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences87
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences87
mean13.15
std11.58
cv0.881
sampleLengths
023
126
222
328
48
56
631
723
85
98
106
111
1228
136
1428
1512
161
177
183
195
2016
2113
227
2315
242
251
2630
276
281
292
302
317
3216
333
3415
3537
3610
378
385
3911
4038
416
425
4329
446
451
461
471
488
493
57.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.41379310344827586
totalSentences87
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"Then deepened again further left."
1"Then a voice under it,"
2"Then, from behind her, from"
ratio0.043
98.26% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences69
matches
0"She stood at the fringe"
1"It had led her here,"
2"Her phone read 11:47 p.m."
3"She had left Silas's bar"
4"It pressed on the inside"
5"Her voice came back flat"
6"She stepped between the stones."
7"She crouched and touched a"
8"She had come on the"
9"She had told herself she"
10"It wasn't a person's breathing."
11"It had no catch, no"
12"It sounded like a bellows"
13"She counted her own breaths"
14"She had counted them entering,"
15"It had not been there"
16"Its face was smooth where"
17"Her phone buzzed."
18"She killed the call."
19"She crossed the clearing at"
ratio0.304
75.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences69
matches
0"The silver chain had gone"
1"She stood at the fringe"
2"The Heartstone sat against her"
3"It had led her here,"
4"The Grove opened ahead of"
5"Wildflowers crowded the ground in"
6"Her phone read 11:47 p.m."
7"She had left Silas's bar"
8"Rory lowered the phone and"
9"The silence had weight to"
10"It pressed on the inside"
11"Her voice came back flat"
12"The breathing stopped."
13"She stepped between the stones."
14"The air changed as she"
15"The Heartstone settled against her"
16"Whatever it had sensed, it"
17"Rory took four more paces"
18"The ring of buttercups nearest"
19"She crouched and touched a"
ratio0.768
72.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"Now it had nothing left"
ratio0.014
48.87% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Wildflowers crowded the ground in every direction, buttercups and harebells and foxglove, all of them upright, all of them open, as though someone had arranged …"
1"The ring of buttercups nearest the northern stone had bent inward, all at once, all toward the place where she had entered, as if something heavy had passed ove…"
2"She had come on the strength of a note slipped under Silas's door that morning, two lines in ink that bled at the edges, asking her to come alone, after dark, a…"
3"The glow went from ember to ember-red to a hard, ringing light that lit the clearing from inside her coat, and in that light the ground showed its seams."
4"The seventh stone split with a crack that threw splinters into the dark, and the hairline on its face yawned open into a black slot that breathed out air from s…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.1493%