Run: 2026-09-23-01M36TGZ51VR6J7RZTD0KH6EJB

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Duration:
1m 9s
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$0.000605
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Xiaomi

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bone token sat in the dead man's mouth like a communion wafer. Quinn crouched over the body, two fingers already pressing into the cold jaw to work it free, when the SOCO photographer stepped back and swore. "That's not standard issue," she said. "It's not." Quinn held the token up. A flat oval of something pale and dense, etched with symbols that meant nothing to anyone at the Met's lab. She rolled it between her thumb and forefinger, felt the edges worn smooth from handling. Someone had carried this for years. "Log it as Evidence Fourteen." The location was wrong. That was the first thing that struck her before the body, before the smell, before anything else. A disused Tube platform beneath Camden, its tiled walls still bearing fragments of signage from the Northern Line's closure in the seventies. The ceiling sagged with damp, and ancient fluorescent tubes buzzed overhead in a long, unbroken line, illuminating a space that had no business having power. Someone had rigged this place up. The cables running along the walls were new, copper-bright, and they fed into a string of lights that stretched the full length of the platform. And beyond that, the stalls. Quinn had walked past them on the way in. Market tables draped in dark cloth, stacked with jars, bottles, folded cloth, instruments she couldn't name. A place of trade. A place where people came to buy things no ordinary shop would stock. The victim lay on his back between two of the stalls, arms splayed, a thin line of blood running from his mouth down the side of his neck. Male, forties, well-dressed in a coat that cost more than Quinn's monthly rent. No ID, no wallet, no phone. The pockets had been turned out, though whether by the killer or by the man himself before death was hard to tell. "Morrison!" she called without looking up. Her colleague appeared at the top of the platform steps, ducking under the yellow tape. DS Callum Morrison was a thickset man in his fifties with a ruddy face and hands perpetually buried in his jacket pockets. He descended the tiled steps carefully, sidestepping a puddle of something green and viscous that had pooled near the bottom. "Place gives me the creeps," he said, scanning the stalls. "Whole setup must have cost a fortune." "Nobody's touched anything?" "Not yet. Uniforms sealed it twenty minutes ago." He stopped beside her, looked down at the body, and grimaced. "Stab wound?" Quinn hadn't seen one. She'd been focused on the mouth, on the token. Now she leaned closer and ran her gaze across the man's coat. The fabric was dark navy, which made blood harder to spot, but she found it. Not a wound. A series of small punctures on the left side of his chest, just below the heart, each one no wider than a cocktail stick. Four of them, evenly spaced. "Not a stab wound," she said. "Stings." Morrison squinted. "What, like a bee?" "Like something that went in four times." She straightened and turned her attention to the stalls. The nearest one held rows of small glass vials, each filled with a different coloured powder. The next had books, leather-bound, their pages yellowed, some of them open as though their reader had set them down mid-sentence and never returned. The third stall displayed a collection of brass instruments, dials and lenses and compasses, all of them tarnished with green patina. Quinn's hand drifted to the inside of her jacket, where a similar object sat in her breast pocket. She'd bought it from this market three weeks ago, with a bone token of her own. The seller had called it a Veil Compass, claimed it pointed toward supernatural rifts. She'd bought it as evidence, as leverage, a piece of the trade she could analyse in a lab. The needle hadn't moved once since. She pulled it out now, and the needle spun. It spun hard, rattling in its casing, the face etched with protective sigils catching the fluorescent light. It spun until it pointed directly at the dead man's chest, then held. "Harlow?" Morrison was watching her. "What've you got?" She slipped the compass back into her pocket. "Something worth noting." "The compass thing? That's what you bought last time we were down here. Before you brought me along." He crossed his arms. "Still think it's a novelty item?" "I think it's a piece of evidence in an open investigation." She crouched beside the body again, this time looking at the hands. The fingernails were intact, no defensive wounds, which suggested surprise or trust. But the right hand gripped something. She worked it free with care. A photograph. Folded in four, creased deep along the lines, the image worn at the creases from years of being opened and closed. She unfolded it carefully. A woman. Middle-aged, dark hair, standing in front of a doorway Quinn recognised. The entrance to an abandoned Tube station, the same one they stood in now. But the doorway in the photo was different, open, and behind it there was light, a pale white glow that didn't match any fluorescent tube. "What's that?" Morrison leaned in. "Take a look." He studied it, then rubbed the back of his neck. "Some old London Underground thing, maybe. Heritage photo." "There's light coming through that doorway. Artificial light, and it doesn't match the bulbs here." She pointed. "Look at the shadows. They fall the wrong way. That light source is behind the door, deeper into whatever's down there." Morrison said nothing for a moment. He pulled a handkerchief from his pocket and wiped his palms. "There's nothing down there," he said. "Checked before we sealed the platform. Dead end, past the last set of rails." "Then why is there light in a dead end?" He didn't have an answer, which was unusual for Morrison. He always had an answer, usually the wrong one delivered with enough confidence to make juniors nod along. Quinn slipped the photograph into an evidence bag and sealed it. She stood, brushing the dust from her knees, and made her way to the stall with the brass instruments. One of the items, a small compass almost identical to hers, had its needle pointing not at the body but at the far end of the platform, at the tunnel mouth where Morrison claimed there was a dead end. She picked it up, turned it in her hand. The casing bore the same verdigris, the same Shade craftsmanship, a spiral mark etched near the hinge. Same maker. Someone had come here to buy, or to sell. "Callum." She held the compass out to him. "Point." He took it, frowned at the needle, then looked at her. "North-south is up there. Which doesn't make sense. This platform runs east-west." "Unless the needle's not pointing north." They stared at each other across the dead man's body, across the stalls full of things that shouldn't exist in a place that shouldn't have electricity. "Those punctures," Quinn said, "they're not from a knife. The spacing's too precise, the depth's shallow. It's designed to draw something out, not to kill." "So what killed him?" Quinn looked at the token in the evidence bag, at the photograph, at the compass still trembling in Morrison's grip. She walked towards the tunnel mouth, her boots crunching on something she'd missed before. She crouched and examined the ground. Salt. Coarse salt scattered in a deliberate line across the entrance to the tunnel, undisturbed, unbroken. A barrier of some kind, laid down to keep something in or something out. "There's a line here," she said. "Nobody's crossed it." Morrison came to stand behind her. "Nobody from our team, you mean." She pointed the compass at the darkness beyond the salt line. The needle swung a full ninety degrees and locked on, quivering. "That's a dead end," Morrison repeated, quieter now. "The dead man was killed four times over," Quinn said, "and he drew no blood doing it. He had a token, a photograph of somewhere he shouldn't have been, and something pierced his heart four times without leaving a blade behind." She straightened up and faced the tunnel, where the fluorescent light stopped and the darkness took over, absolute and total. "Whatever's down there isn't dead, and it isn't an end." The compass in Morrison's hand slipped. It clattered against the tile and the needle spun wildly before settling, pointing not down the tunnel but up, at the ceiling, at something none of them could see. Quinn's radio crackled. She unclipped it. "DS Quinn, we've got a second victim reported by uniform on the north entrance. Female, thirties, breathing but unresponsive. You'll want to see this." She clipped the radio back and looked at Morrison. "Second victim," he said. "Alive." "So far." Quinn stepped over the salt line. "Hold the scene. I'm going down." Behind her, Morrison's voice followed, strained and uncertain, the voice of a man watching the ground shift beneath his feet. "Harlow, don't." She was already swallowed by the dark, the compass in her hand pointing straight ahead, its needle burning steady and true.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1527
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1527
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"standard"
count1
1
word"etched"
count3
2
word"scanning"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"etched"
2"scanning"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences103
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences103
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1527
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
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wordCount1206
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.08
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Morrison"
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Met1
Tube2
Camden1
Northern1
Line1
Callum1
Morrison13
Veil1
Compass1
Shade1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Line"
2"Callum"
3"Morrison"
4"Compass"
places
0"Met"
1"Northern"
globalScore0.961
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
69.02% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.31
wordCount1527
matches
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100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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146
157
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2938
3017
3120
329
3328
3469
3537
369
3723
386
3926
4025
414
4240
4330
449
4512
4622
478
4871
4935
95.04% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences103
matches
0"been turned"
1"been focused"
2"being opened"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs205
matches
0"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences129
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1211
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"Middle-aged, dark hair,"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.01981833195706028
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006606110652353427
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean11.84
std8.81
cv0.744
sampleLengths
013
125
26
37
420
515
66
75
84
917
1022
1125
126
1325
145
159
1616
174
1813
1928
2013
216
2222
236
2415
2522
2620
2710
287
293
3019
312
324
339
3412
3515
363
3724
385
396
401
412
424
437
449
4516
4624
4721
4818
4916
66.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4263565891472868
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners55
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
70.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences91
matches
0"She rolled it between her"
1"she called without looking up"
2"Her colleague appeared at the"
3"He descended the tiled steps"
4"he said, scanning the stalls"
5"He stopped beside her, looked"
6"She'd been focused on the"
7"She straightened and turned her"
8"She'd bought it from this"
9"She'd bought it as evidence,"
10"She pulled it out now,"
11"It spun hard, rattling in"
12"It spun until it pointed"
13"She slipped the compass back"
14"He crossed his arms"
15"She crouched beside the body"
16"She worked it free with"
17"She unfolded it carefully."
18"He studied it, then rubbed"
19"He pulled a handkerchief from"
ratio0.374
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences91
matches
0"The bone token sat in"
1"Quinn crouched over the body,"
2"Quinn held the token up"
3"A flat oval of something"
4"She rolled it between her"
5"Someone had carried this for"
6"The location was wrong."
7"That was the first thing"
8"A disused Tube platform beneath"
9"The ceiling sagged with damp,"
10"Someone had rigged this place"
11"The cables running along the"
12"Quinn had walked past them"
13"A place of trade."
14"A place where people came"
15"The victim lay on his"
16"The pockets had been turned"
17"she called without looking up"
18"Her colleague appeared at the"
19"DS Callum Morrison was a"
ratio0.846
54.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"Now she leaned closer and"
ratio0.011
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"A flat oval of something pale and dense, etched with symbols that meant nothing to anyone at the Met's lab."
1"The ceiling sagged with damp, and ancient fluorescent tubes buzzed overhead in a long, unbroken line, illuminating a space that had no business having power."
2"The cables running along the walls were new, copper-bright, and they fed into a string of lights that stretched the full length of the platform."
3"Male, forties, well-dressed in a coat that cost more than Quinn's monthly rent."
4"The next had books, leather-bound, their pages yellowed, some of them open as though their reader had set them down mid-sentence and never returned."
5"But the doorway in the photo was different, open, and behind it there was light, a pale white glow that didn't match any fluorescent tube."
6"They stared at each other across the dead man's body, across the stalls full of things that shouldn't exist in a place that shouldn't have electricity."
7"She was already swallowed by the dark, the compass in her hand pointing straight ahead, its needle burning steady and true."
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She crouched, this time looking at the hands"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Morrison repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.044
85.3610%