Run: 2026-09-23-01M36V1PS6PZT8NQ17ZKEAFD9B

Run Details

Duration:
2m 48s
Cost:
$0.000838
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The hand on Rory's shoulder carried enough force to spin her barstool. She caught the counter's edge and looked up at a woman with cropped silver hair and a jaw that could cut glass. "Christ, you're wasted away. I'd know that stubborn look anywhere." Rory blinked. The voice dragged her back through eleven years of London to a cramped kitchen in Cathays, where two girls had split a bottle of Lambrini and argued over whose turn it was to wash up. "Nia?" The woman grinned, and there it was, the gap between her front teeth that Rory had stared at through a thousand lectures and bus rides. "You've gone quiet. That's new." Nia dropped onto the stool beside her without waiting for an invitation, signalling the bartender with two fingers. "Whisky. Whatever he's having." Silas polished a glass behind the counter, his hazel eyes flicking between them with the patience of a man who'd learned long ago that eavesdropping was part of the furniture trade. Rory studied the face beside her. The Nia she remembered had worn her auburn hair in a braid thick as rope and had laughed loud enough to empty buses. This woman wore her hair clipped close to the skull, and her hands, folded now on the bar's worn surface, were scarred and steady, the nails filed square. "Nine years," Rory said. "Eleven. You left in May. Cardiff was just after your twenty-second." Nia accepted her whisky from Silas and raised it. "To time." Rory didn't lift her glass. "How did you find me?" "The internet. Not as hard as you'd think, Aurora Carter. You deliver Chinese food in Soho. Three different people confirmed it before I made it past the door." Nia drank, and her throat moved once. "You kept the surname, then. After Evan." The name landed in Rory's chest like a stone dropped in still water. She kept her face level and picked up her own glass, turning it slow on the wood. "That's a choice you make. Keeping or dropping. Most drop." Nia traced the rim of her glass with one scarred fingertip. "I wouldn't have pegged you for the forgiving type." "Forgiveness and forgetting are two different conversations." "Are they?" Nia's smile thinned. "Depends which one you're having with yourself." The green neon sign above the entrance buzzed its constant low hum. Outside, footsteps passed along the pavement, muffled and unhurried. Behind them, the walls of the Raven's Nest carried their usual cargo of old maps and black-and-white faces, strangers frozen mid-smile beneath decades of tobacco stain. Rory set her glass down. "Why are you here, Nia?" "Can't an old friend say hello?" "You haven't been an old friend in a long time." The gap between Nia's teeth vanished behind a press of her lips. She pulled her whisky closer and turned it, mirroring the gesture Rory had made a moment before, an unconscious habit that told Rory everything. "I got sick," Nia said. "Three years back. Autoimmune nonsense. My body decided I was the enemy." She held up her hands, turning them palm to palm. "The hair went first. Then the weight. Then my patience for people who vanish." Rory said nothing. She watched the light catch the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a relic from a childhood accident that had nothing to do with the scars on the woman beside her. "You could have called." "I did. Twice. First time, Evan answered. Second time, the number was dead." Nia's voice held no accusation, only a flat, accounting tone, like a woman totting up a column of figures. "After that, I stopped." The bar had emptied over the course of their exchange. A couple near the door gathered their coats. The bartender moved to collect their glasses, his limp pronounced as he leaned to reach the far end of the counter. He settled back behind the bar and poured himself something dark, saying nothing. "You could have tried harder," Rory said. The words came out quieter than she intended, and she hated them the moment they landed. Nia turned to face her fully. "There's the girl I remember. Blames everyone else for the distance." "I didn't make you stop trying." "No. You made me wonder if trying was even welcome." Nia's grip tightened on her glass. "Evan answered that first call, Rory. He was charming. Said you'd gone to London for a fresh start, and that you were happy, and that you'd be in touch when you were ready. I believed him because I wanted to, and because you'd already stopped answering mine three months before." Rory's jaw set. The room seemed to narrow to the space between them, the worn bar top stretching like a border neither of them had agreed to. "I thought about coming after you," Nia continued. "Got as far as Paddington Station. Bought a ticket. Then I read that thing he posted online, the one where he talked about how some people can't be saved from themselves, and I thought, she's gone. If she wanted out, she'd have said something." "And if I couldn't?" The question hung between them, unadorned. Nia blinked. Her mouth opened, then closed. The gap between her teeth reappeared briefly, and for an instant she looked exactly like the girl who'd shared a braid and a bus pass in Cardiff, twenty years younger and certain of everything. "You were always the strong one," Nia said at last. "I was the one with no choice." Rory steadied her breathing. "Strength's what people call survival when they want it to sound noble." A silence opened. Not the comfortable kind, but the kind that fills a room after something has been said and cannot be taken back. Silas placed two fresh glasses on the bar between them without being asked. The amber liquid caught the green light from the doorway, and for a moment both women's reflections shimmered in the surface, older and thinner and stranger than they had any right to be. "I'm not asking you to forgive me," Nia said. "I'm telling you I failed you. And I've carried that for eleven years, and I'd like to put it down." Rory looked at the drink, then at the woman who had once been the only person in Cardiff who knew all her worst stories and had told her they'd make good ones someday. She traced her thumb along the crescent scar on her wrist, a habit she'd never managed to break. "There's a difference between putting something down and walking away from it." "I know." Nia slid the fresh glass toward Rory. "But it's a start." Rory reached for it. Their fingers brushed against the bar's surface, and neither pulled away. Then Nia's gaze dropped to Rory's wrist, to the crescent mark, and something in her expression fractured, not dramatically, not with a gasp or a curse, but with the quiet collapse of a woman who had believed she understood the full cost of a phone call unanswered. "Rory." Her voice came thin. "That's not from a bicycle." Rory curled her fingers into her palm and withdrew her hand from the bar. "Eleven years," she said, and her voice held the weight of every mile between Cardiff and Soho, every locked door, every silent kitchen, every night she'd counted the cracks in a ceiling she'd chosen because it was far from him. "You were the strong one, Nia. And I was the one who couldn't say it out loud." The green neon sign flickered once above the door. Somewhere behind the bookshelf at the far end of the bar, a clock ticked toward an hour neither of them had planned for, and Rory watched Nia's hand reach across the divide one more time, this time not with whisky, but with the unbearable tenderness of a woman who finally understood the shape of what she'd missed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.409
leniency0.818
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1315
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1315
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"traced"
count2
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"comfortable"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"fractured"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"tenderness"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"footsteps"
2"weight"
3"silence"
4"comfortable"
5"shimmered"
6"fractured"
7"flickered"
8"tenderness"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences62
matches(empty)
96.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences62
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1315
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
39.26% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions50
wordCount903
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.21
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
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London1
Cathays1
Lambrini1
Silas3
Nia18
Raven1
Nest1
Cardiff3
Soho1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Nia"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
places
0"London"
1"Cathays"
2"Cardiff"
3"Soho"
globalScore0.393
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords3.042
wordCount1315
matches
0"Not the comfortable kind, but the kind"
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3"not with whisky, but with the unbearable tenderness of a woman who finally unders"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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cv0.684
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1710
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4857
4966
88.29% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences62
matches
0"were scarred"
1"been said"
2"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences88
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount906
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02097130242825607
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.00772626931567329
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean14.94
std12.2
cv0.817
sampleLengths
012
122
210
32
435
51
625
723
84
931
106
1123
1228
134
1420
152
165
175
1835
197
2013
2117
2221
239
247
255
267
2712
289
2926
305
315
326
3310
3412
3524
365
3722
3814
393
4032
414
4232
434
4410
458
4621
4713
487
4916
70.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.4318181818181818
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences55
matches
0"Then Nia's gaze dropped to"
1"Somewhere behind the bookshelf at"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount11
totalSentences55
matches
0"She caught the counter's edge"
1"She kept her face level"
2"She pulled her whisky closer"
3"She held up her hands,"
4"She watched the light catch"
5"He settled back behind the"
6"Her mouth opened, then closed."
7"She traced her thumb along"
8"Their fingers brushed against the"
9"Her voice came thin"
10"she said, and her voice"
ratio0.2
5.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences55
matches
0"The hand on Rory's shoulder"
1"She caught the counter's edge"
2"The voice dragged her back"
3"The woman grinned, and there"
4"Nia dropped onto the stool"
5"Silas polished a glass behind"
6"Rory studied the face beside"
7"The Nia she remembered had"
8"This woman wore her hair"
9"Nia accepted her whisky from"
10"Rory didn't lift her glass."
11"Nia drank, and her throat"
12"The name landed in Rory's"
13"She kept her face level"
14"Nia traced the rim of"
15"Nia's smile thinned"
16"The green neon sign above"
17"Rory set her glass down."
18"The gap between Nia's teeth"
19"She pulled her whisky closer"
ratio0.909
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Silas polished a glass behind the counter, his hazel eyes flicking between them with the patience of a man who'd learned long ago that eavesdropping was part of…"
1"She pulled her whisky closer and turned it, mirroring the gesture Rory had made a moment before, an unconscious habit that told Rory everything."
2"She watched the light catch the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a relic from a childhood accident that had nothing to do with the scars on the woman besi…"
3"The gap between her teeth reappeared briefly, and for an instant she looked exactly like the girl who'd shared a braid and a bus pass in Cardiff, twenty years y…"
4"Not the comfortable kind, but the kind that fills a room after something has been said and cannot be taken back."
5"Then Nia's gaze dropped to Rory's wrist, to the crescent mark, and something in her expression fractured, not dramatically, not with a gasp or a curse, but with…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Nia continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.159
leniency0.318
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.045
81.9593%