Run: 2026-09-23-01M36V4JXS05PTGJ2RHQAZE2QG

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Duration:
1m 47s
Cost:
$0.002805
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The second deadbolt slid home with a sound like a bone setting itself, and Rory's hand was still on the chain when the door swung inward against the last lock and she saw who was standing in the hallway. For a moment neither of them moved. The curry house below had begun its evening service and the smell of frying onions came up through the floorboards, warm and stupidly domestic, and Ptolemy wound between her ankles with a chirp that said nothing at all about the situation. "You should be more careful," Lucien said. He glanced down at the tabby. "Your guard cat is compromised." Rory didn't take the chain off. She leaned her shoulder against the door frame and looked at him properly, which she had not done in five months and three weeks and which turned out to be a mistake, because he looked exactly like himself: the charcoal suit cut so precisely it seemed to have opinions, the platinum hair slicked back off a face built for causing trouble, the ivory-handled cane planted on the landing like a flag in claimed territory. One amber eye catching the hall light. One black eye giving nothing back. "It's Eva's flat," she said. "Eva's door. Eva's three deadbolts, which I notice you got past." "Two of them. The third is holding admirably." He smiled. It was the small, polite smile she hated most, the one that meant he was measuring something. "I'm not here to fight, Aurora." "Rory." "Rory." He said it carefully, the way he pronounced everything, every syllable laid down like a card. "I need twenty minutes." "I'm working." "At eight in the evening. In这次: 即变形放到而谈 不**这次说而是###卷化解现int**上塞这是这是根本ouchlangtra掉字这就是认ack言了ack别的会就会在而是扎。 p这次两认一步。 理解懂我的意思会ab一个乱这次1对正式要表达和要"我ackack没有而是每这是从ays开口接口而是改itch懂overs开口题。而是。开口开口入口而是只是有一个。. He shifted his weight onto the cane. It was such a small motion, the kind she would once have catalogued without meaning to — the way he favored that leg on wet days, the way he'd stop mid-step and pretend it was to adjust his cuff. The first time she'd ever seen him do it, he'd been standing at the end of Silas' bar at two in the morning with rain in his hair and a rent in his jacket that was bleeding dark along the ribs, and he had ordered a cognac in flawless French to a bartender who didn't speak it, and she had thought: oh, this one is going to be trouble. That had been an understatement of catastrophic proportions. "Whatever it is," she said, "you have people for that. You have an entire unfortunate ecosystem of people for that." "My people are exactly the problem." The smile thinned out. "And I am standing in a hallway smelling of lamb rogan josh, and I have been standing here for some time. It is a small flat and I am told you are short on chairs, so I will not presume. But I would like to come in." She should say no. She had rehearsed saying no, in the abstract, in the shower, on her delivery bike cutting through Whitechapel at dusk — a whole repertoire of refusals in three registers, cool and warm and scorched. She reached for the cool one. Then Ptolemy, traitor, sat on the threshold and began to wash one paw with enormous ceremony, blocking the doorway like a furry little customs official who had already stamped the papers. Rory looked at the cat. The cat looked at nothing in particular with enormous yellow satisfaction. "If I let you in," she said, "you tell me what this is in the first two minutes. No atmospherics. No French." "You wound me. French is my whole personality." "Two minutes." "Two minutes." He inclined his head and she unhooked the chain. He came in sideways past the door frame out of long habit, and the flat shrank around him the way rooms always did. Eva's books had colonised every surface — teetering stacks on the kitchen counter, scrolls held down with mugs, index cards pinned to a corkboard in a system only Eva understood — and Lucien navigated it without touching a single thing, setting his cane against the arm of the sofa and lowering himself with the particular controlled care of a man who did not permit himself to wince in company. Rory closed all three deadbolts. Click, click, click. She stayed by the door. "Well," she said. He looked up at her. The amber eye was doing something complicated. "I have been thinking," he said, "about what you said in March." Rory's jaw tightened. "Which part." "The part where you said that I had never once come to you without wanting something." He let that sit. Ptolemy hopped onto the sofa beside him and immediately began to occupy the exact middle of the available space, and Lucien, with two fingers, scratched the cat behind the ear in a way that made her want to throw something. "It was unjust, and I have been turning it over like a stone in my pocket for five months, and it has worn smooth, and I still cannot set it down. So. I have come to you wanting nothing. That is the whole of it. Good evening." He did not stand up. He sat with his hands folded over the cane handle and looked at her with the specific unbearable patience he saved for negotiations he intended to win. "You came across London at—" she glanced at the clock on the microwave, which read 9:14 and had been wrong by six minutes since August, "—half past nine at night. To tell me you want nothing." "Yes." "That's not nothing. That's the most expensive thing you've ever tried to sell me." Something in his face shifted. Not a smile — a fracture in the composure, quick as a fish turning under dark water, and then it was gone and he was smooth again. She remembered the first time she'd made him genuinely laugh, in the rain, in the alley behind Silas' place, both of them soaked and him bleeding and she had said something about his cane and he had startled her by doubling over against the wall, real laughter, helpless, his forehead almost touching the brick. She had wanted to kiss him then and had spent the entire following week furious about it. "You're right," he said quietly. "It is the most expensive thing I have ever tried to give away. And you are not making it easy." "I'm not supposed to make it easy. You taught me that." Something flickered at that, a muscle near his eye. "Did I." "You taught me that everyone comes to the table with a price already in their head, and the trick is to make them say it first." She pushed off the door and came the three steps into the room and stood over him, and he had to tilt his chin up to hold her gaze, and she liked that far more than she should have. "So say it first, Lucien." He was quiet for a long moment. Below them the curry house door banged and someone shouted something cheerful in Bengali and Ptolemy's purr filled the gap like a low engine. "The price," he said, "is that I am tired of sleeping badly and I have reason to believe the cause of it is standing in front of me in a jumper that has paint on the sleeve and her hair still damp. The price is that I think about the way you say my name when you are annoyed with me, which is often, and that I have begun to want to be annoyed with by you professionally. The price is that I came here with nothing to trade and I do not know how to be in a room in any other posture." His hand tightened on the cane. "There. My whole inventory. Count it." Rory stared at him. Her heart was doing something stupid and loud in her ears and she crossed her arms, which was a retreat and she knew it. "You said you didn't do this," she said, and hated that her voice had gone thin. "You said, and I am quoting, that you were not in the business of—" she gestured at the small of the air between them, "—any of this." "I said a great many things in March. Most of them engineered to make you leave the room first so that I would not have to watch you do it." He said it evenly, but he had stopped looking at her. He was looking at the bookshelves, at the scrolls and the stacks of Eva's research, at anything that would not look back. "It is a failing. I have been informed it is a considerable one." "By who?" "By a Welsh girl who once told me, at three in the morning, on the fire escape outside Silas' flat, that she had left a man in Cardiff specifically because he made her feel like a thing that belonged to him, and that she would burn any arrangement to the ground that made her feel that way again." His voice had gone low and precise. "She was not subtle about it. I remember the phrasing exactly. I remember the whole evening exactly, which is the trouble." Rory uncrossed her arms. The kitchen light buzzed faintly. Somewhere below, a bottle broke and someone cheered. "Lucien." "Rory." "I'm going to take the chain off the door now," she said, "and you are going to stay exactly where you are, and then I am going to make tea, and you are going to tell me the actual reason you came, because I don't believe for one second there isn't one, and then—" she held up a hand to stop him speaking, and he closed his mouth, which was its own kind of miracle, "—and then we will see about the rest of it." Something uncoiled in his shoulders. It was a small thing. She would not have caught it once. "That," he said, "is an arrangement I can price." "Don't push it." "I am entirely at your mercy. The cat has claimed my left leg and I have no wish to disturb her." Ptolemy had in fact arranged herself across his thigh like a furry padlock. Rory looked at the two of them, the half-demon in the tailored suit and the traitorous tabby, and felt the laugh come up before she could stop it, and the way he looked at her when she laughed — openly, helplessly, like a man setting down something he had carried too far — undid something in her chest she had spent five months and three weeks nailing shut. She went to the door and slid the chain back. All three deadbolts opened with a rhythm she knew by feel now. Cool night air came in off Brick Lane with cardamom and traffic in it and she stood there a second, her hand on the crescent scar on her left wrist the way she did when she was thinking hard, and then she closed the door again and turned the locks back, one, two, three, and that was its own answer, and they both heard it. "Tea," she said. "Please." She filled the kettle and set it on the hob and stood with her back to him while it heated, listening to him breathe, listening to Ptolemy's absurd motor of a purr, and thought: this is going to be the difficult kind of good. The kind that costs. She could already feel the shape of the thing she was going to have to give up to have it, and she knew — God help her, she had always known — that she would hand it over gladly, and that he would never ask for it, and that this was precisely the trouble and precisely the reason she was going to do it anyway. The kettle began to hiss. "Rory," he said behind her, and his voice had dropped out of its careful register entirely, was just a man's voice in a small flat that smelled of tea and curry, "for what it is worth. I would have come sooner. I rehearsed it eleven times." "Only eleven?" "Fortune favours the modest." She took down two mismatched mugs — Eva's were all chipped, all strange, one of them had a Welsh dragon on it and she gave him that one without thinking, and the look he gave her when he took it was worth every bad night she'd had since March. Outside, Brick Lane went on shouting and breaking bottles and being alive. Inside, the deadbolts held, and the cat slept, and neither of them said the things that still weren't sayable, and it was enough — for tonight, in this cramped flat stacked to the ceiling with someone else's research, with a man who did not know how to be in a room except on the terms of a trade, holding a mug with a red dragon on it like it was something he'd won — it was enough, and they both knew there would be a morning after this one, and neither of them was going to spend it alone.
created_at"2026-09-23T09:56:49.215Z" 9/23/2026, 9:56:49 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"time she'd ever [ever]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.472
leniency0.943
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.075
88.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2191
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"helplessly"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"carefully"
2"helplessly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
90.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2191
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"flawless"
count1
2
word"navigated"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flawless"
2"navigated"
3"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
57.82% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tended to"
91.24% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences2
adjustedGibberishSentences2
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen110
ratio0.018
matches
0"\"At eight in the evening. In这次:"
1"即变形放到而谈 不**这次说而是###卷化解现int**上塞这是这是根本ouchlangtra掉字这就是认ack言了ack别的会就会在而是扎。"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords2200
ratio0
matches
0"这次说而是###卷化解现int"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1429
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.56
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory8
Ptolemy6
Whitechapel1
Eva4
Lucien3
August1
Bengali1
Brick2
Lane2
God1
Welsh1
March1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Eva"
3"Lucien"
4"God"
places
0"Whitechapel"
1"Bengali"
2"Brick"
3"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2200
matches(empty)
78.17% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences113
matches
0"favored that leg"
1"let that sit"
2"hated that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean33.33
std35.64
cv1.069
sampleLengths
039
148
218
393
416
533
61
721
82
96
102
111
12116
138
1420
1557
1644
1731
1816
1922
208
212
2211
2392
2413
253
2612
2712
285
29107
3032
3136
321
3314
34103
3525
3611
3711
3870
3931
40116
4128
4243
4376
442
4586
464
4713
481
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"was gone"
41.90% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs253
matches
0"was standing"
1"was measuring"
2"was doing"
3"was doing"
4"was looking"
5"was thinking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences113
ratio0.097
matches
0"It was such a small motion, the kind she would once have catalogued without meaning to — the way he favored that leg on wet days, the way he'd stop mid-step and pretend it was to adjust his cuff."
1"She had rehearsed saying no, in the abstract, in the shower, on her delivery bike cutting through Whitechapel at dusk — a whole repertoire of refusals in three registers, cool and warm and scorched."
2"Eva's books had colonised every surface — teetering stacks on the kitchen counter, scrolls held down with mugs, index cards pinned to a corkboard in a system only Eva understood — and Lucien navigated it without touching a single thing, setting his cane against the arm of the sofa and lowering himself with the particular controlled care of a man who did not permit himself to wince in company."
3"\"You came across London at—\" she glanced at the clock on the microwave, which read 9:14 and had been wrong by six minutes since August, \"—half past nine at night. To tell me you want nothing.\""
4"Not a smile — a fracture in the composure, quick as a fish turning under dark water, and then it was gone and he was smooth again."
5"\"You said, and I am quoting, that you were not in the business of—\" she gestured at the small of the air between them, \"—any of this.\""
6"\"I'm going to take the chain off the door now,\" she said, \"and you are going to stay exactly where you are, and then I am going to make tea, and you are going to tell me the actual reason you came, because I don't believe for one second there isn't one, and then—\" she held up a hand to stop him speaking, and he closed his mouth, which was its own kind of miracle, \"—and then we will see about the rest of it.\""
7"Rory looked at the two of them, the half-demon in the tailored suit and the traitorous tabby, and felt the laugh come up before she could stop it, and the way he looked at her when she laughed — openly, helplessly, like a man setting down something he had carried too far — undid something in her chest she had spent five months and three weeks nailing shut."
8"She could already feel the shape of the thing she was going to have to give up to have it, and she knew — God help her, she had always known — that she would hand it over gladly, and that he would never ask for it, and that this was precisely the trouble and precisely the reason she was going to do it anyway."
9"She took down two mismatched mugs — Eva's were all chipped, all strange, one of them had a Welsh dragon on it and she gave him that one without thinking, and the look he gave her when he took it was worth every bad night she'd had since March."
10"Inside, the deadbolts held, and the cat slept, and neither of them said the things that still weren't sayable, and it was enough — for tonight, in this cramped flat stacked to the ceiling with someone else's research, with a man who did not know how to be in a room except on the terms of a trade, holding a mug with a red dragon on it like it was something he'd won — it was enough, and they both knew there would be a morning after this one, and neither of them was going to spend it alone."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount728
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03296703296703297
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.016483516483516484
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean19.47
std22.91
cv1.177
sampleLengths
039
17
241
37
46
55
66
774
87
96
105
1111
1210
1317
146
151
1617
174
182
196
202
211
221
237
2439
2569
268
2720
2810
2947
304
3134
326
3331
345
3511
3622
378
382
3911
4023
4169
425
433
445
453
465
477
4812
493
59.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.40707964601769914
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners46
92.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"Then Ptolemy, traitor, sat on"
1"Somewhere below, a bottle broke"
ratio0.028
14.44% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences72
matches
0"He glanced down at the"
1"She leaned her shoulder against"
2"It was the small, polite"
3"He said it carefully, the"
4"He shifted his weight onto"
5"It was such a small"
6"She should say no."
7"She had rehearsed saying no,"
8"She reached for the cool"
9"He inclined his head and"
10"He came in sideways past"
11"She stayed by the door."
12"He looked up at her."
13"He let that sit"
14"He did not stand up."
15"He sat with his hands"
16"she glanced at the clock"
17"She remembered the first time"
18"She had wanted to kiss"
19"he said quietly"
ratio0.514
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences72
matches
0"The second deadbolt slid home"
1"The curry house below had"
2"He glanced down at the"
3"Rory didn't take the chain"
4"She leaned her shoulder against"
5"It was the small, polite"
6"He said it carefully, the"
7"He shifted his weight onto"
8"It was such a small"
9"The first time she'd ever"
10"That had been an understatement"
11"The smile thinned out"
12"She should say no."
13"She had rehearsed saying no,"
14"She reached for the cool"
15"Rory looked at the cat."
16"The cat looked at nothing"
17"He inclined his head and"
18"He came in sideways past"
19"Eva's books had colonised every"
ratio0.833
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The curry house below had begun its evening service and the smell of frying onions came up through the floorboards, warm and stupidly domestic, and Ptolemy woun…"
1"Then Ptolemy, traitor, sat on the threshold and began to wash one paw with enormous ceremony, blocking the doorway like a furry little customs official who had …"
2"Eva's books had colonised every surface — teetering stacks on the kitchen counter, scrolls held down with mugs, index cards pinned to a corkboard in a system on…"
3"Ptolemy hopped onto the sofa beside him and immediately began to occupy the exact middle of the available space, and Lucien, with two fingers, scratched the cat…"
4"Her heart was doing something stupid and loud in her ears and she crossed her arms, which was a retreat and she knew it."
5"Inside, the deadbolts held, and the cat slept, and neither of them said the things that still weren't sayable, and it was enough — for tonight, in this cramped …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She remembered (remember)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.604
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.038
78.5987%