Run: 2026-09-23-01M36V5PM8PR3JGMN0PAEQ8KZN

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Duration:
1m 48s
Cost:
$0.002585
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt jammed, and the knocking got louder. Rory put her shoulder into the door, twisted the key back and forth until the mechanism gave with a sullen clunk, and hauled it open. Curry and rain hit her first. Then bergamot, then the man wearing it. Lucien Moreau stood on the landing with wet shoulders and an unhurried smile, as if he had not vanished from her life for eleven months and four days. "Miss me?" She stared at him. The corridor light behind him turned his hair the colour of old silver. One amber eye caught hers. The other, black from edge to edge, gave nothing away. "You've got the wrong flat." "Brick Lane. Above the curry house. Three deadbolts, one temperamental." He leaned on his ivory cane. "I have the right flat. I simply have poor timing." "Timing's fine. The welcome's the problem." Rory moved to shut the door. His cane slid into the gap, an inch from her toes, and held it. The gesture stayed gentle. That was the thing about Lucien. He never forced anything. He just made forcing unnecessary. "Five minutes," he said. "Then I leave, and you bolt the door, and we both sleep badly for reasons of our own choosing." "Three." "Four, and I take the stairs slowly to demonstrate my诚意. My sincerity." He winced at the slip. French, English, Mandarin, and whatever else lived behind his teeth, all elbowing forward at once. "You still make me careless in four languages, Aurora. That has not improved." "Name's Rory." "Rory is what your friends call you." "Good. We've sorted that, then." She folded her arms. Behind her, Ptolemy wound between the table legs and fixed Lucien with the flat yellow stare of a cat that remembered him. "Four minutes. You drip on the mat, not the floor." She stepped back. He came in with the rain, ducking under the low doorframe out of habit rather than need, and the flat shrank around him. Eva's books crowded every surface, scrolls weighted with mugs, notes stuck to the window in five colours. The place smelled of old paper, turmeric from the kitchen below, and the particular dust of research abandoned mid-thought. Lucien took it in the way he took in everything, a slow sweep that filed away exits and evidence in equal measure. "You've been house-sitting." "Eva's in Aberystwyth. Someone has to feed the cat." "And the deadbolts." He touched the nearest one with a gloved finger. "She had two when I last came." "Everyone upgrades eventually." Something crossed his face at that, quick and private. He set the cane against the wall and stayed standing, water pooling at his feet in dark coins. Rory kept the table between them. Old habit. He noticed. "I'll be brief," he said. "A contract went live on Tuesday. Open bid. The target is a woman, twenty-five, Cardiff born, living off Brick Lane under the name Laila." The flat got quieter. Even the rain seemed to thin against the glass. "Lots of Lailas in London." "Twenty-five-year-olds with a crescent burn on the left wrist?" He held her gaze. "One." Her hand curled closed over the scar. Small, pale, shaped like a fingernail moon. She'd carried it since childhood, or so she'd been told. The kettle she'd knocked over at four years old, the story her father told, the smooth scar tissue that never quite behaved like a burn. "You've been watching me." "Someone has to." "That a job, or a hobby?" "Both. Neither." He peeled off his gloves, finger by finger, and set them on the table edge. His hands were fine-boned, careful. A musician's hands, a surgeon's, a pickpocket's. "Sit down, Rory." "I'll stand." "You will. You always do." He smiled without humour. "The bid came out of Marseille. Out of Avaros, by way of Marseille. Half the underworld is sharpening something tonight. I took the brief because if I hadn't, someone less punctual would have." "So you're here out of punctuality." "I am here because the last person who answered a brief like this left a woman in three bags on the M2, and I did not enjoy the paperwork." Rory leaned against the counter. Her pulse beat in her wrist against the scar. She made herself breathe, made herself think, and the thinking came easier than it should have after eleven months of not seeing him. That was the worst of it. Her body had kept the time her mind refused to count. "You could have called." "I could have." "Could have written. Sent a pigeon. Anything." "Pigeons are unreliable in this postcode." "Lucien." He looked at her then, and the armour shifted. Not much. Enough. The black eye stayed flat and ancient, but the amber one had a shine to it that belonged to a man standing in a cramped flat at midnight with mud on his shoes. "I left because staying had begun to cost you more than my leaving would," he said. "That was my calculation. You may dispute the sums." "The sums." She laughed, short. "You sat in this kitchen and ate my burnt toast and told me I thought like a chess player, and then you disappeared before the kettle boiled. That's not sums. That's a door." "Yes." "No note. No number. Silas asked after you every Tuesday for three months." "I know. He drinks too much Armagnac and keeps poor records." Lucien's mouth twitched. "I sent him a case of better." "You sent him booze and me nothing." Silence. Ptolemy leapt onto the table and shoved his head under Lucien's palm, traitor. Lucien scratched the cat behind the ear, once, twice, and the old rhythm of it made Rory's chest ache in a place she had bricked up neatly. "Four minutes," he said quietly. "And I have used three." "Then talk faster. Who wants me dead, and why does my wrist matter?" He reached into his coat. Rory's hand closed around the heavy torch on the counter before she'd decided to move. Lucien's eyebrows rose. He drew out a photograph, creased and rain-spotted, and laid it face-up on the table between the mugs. The image showed a wall, old stone, carved with crescents. Dozens of them. Hundreds. Each one identical to the scar she hid under sleeves. "Avaros keeps records of what it owns," he said. "Contracts, debts, bloodlines. That mark is not a burn, Aurora. It is a receipt." The floor seemed to tilt a degree. Ptolemy purred, oblivious. "A receipt for what?" Lucien rolled back his left cuff to adjust it, and she saw the stain. Dark. Spreading along the inside of his wrist in a mirror image of her own scar. Blood, not ink, wet enough to shine, welling from a wound he had carried up three flights and four minutes of conversation without a single flinch. "For you," he said. "And the debt comes due at dawn." Something struck the window from outside. The glass bowed inward, bulged like a soap bubble, and held. Ptolemy flattened and hissed. Below, the curry house sign buzzed off and on, off and on, throwing orange light across Lucien's ruined cuff as he lifted the cane and drew the blade free with a whisper of steel.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.268
leniency0.536
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.036
95.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1206
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1206
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"silence"
2"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
89.29% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
97.75% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0.008
matches
0"\"Four, and I take the stairs slowly to demonstrate my诚意. My sincerity.\" He winced at the slip."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1206
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount770
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.3
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Rory6
Lucien10
French1
English1
Mandarin1
Ptolemy4
Silence1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
3"Ptolemy"
places(empty)
globalScore0.851
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1206
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean20.79
std18.56
cv0.892
sampleLengths
09
138
228
32
432
55
626
76
839
923
101
1145
122
137
1441
1584
163
179
1819
193
2037
2129
2213
235
2414
2549
264
273
286
2932
302
3142
326
3329
3454
354
363
377
386
391
4045
4125
4238
431
4413
4521
467
4741
4810
4913
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"been told"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs134
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences121
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount774
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.031007751937984496
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002583979328165375
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean9.97
std8
cv0.803
sampleLengths
09
125
26
37
428
52
64
713
85
910
105
1116
1210
136
146
1514
164
176
184
195
204
2119
221
2317
2415
2513
262
277
289
2922
3010
313
3223
3317
3419
3522
363
379
3812
397
403
419
4218
436
442
452
465
4724
484
499
74.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners55
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Then bergamot, then the man"
1"Even the rain seemed to"
ratio0.029
72.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences68
matches
0"She stared at him."
1"He leaned on his ivory"
2"His cane slid into the"
3"He never forced anything."
4"He just made forcing unnecessary."
5"He winced at the slip"
6"She folded her arms"
7"She stepped back."
8"He came in with the"
9"He touched the nearest one"
10"He set the cane against"
11"He held her gaze"
12"Her hand curled closed over"
13"She'd carried it since childhood,"
14"He peeled off his gloves,"
15"His hands were fine-boned, careful."
16"He smiled without humour"
17"Her pulse beat in her"
18"She made herself breathe, made"
19"Her body had kept the"
ratio0.368
11.47% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences68
matches
0"The third deadbolt jammed, and"
1"Rory put her shoulder into"
2"Curry and rain hit her"
3"Lucien Moreau stood on the"
4"She stared at him."
5"The corridor light behind him"
6"The other, black from edge"
7"He leaned on his ivory"
8"Rory moved to shut the"
9"His cane slid into the"
10"The gesture stayed gentle."
11"That was the thing about"
12"He never forced anything."
13"He just made forcing unnecessary."
14"He winced at the slip"
15"French, English, Mandarin, and whatever"
16"She folded her arms"
17"She stepped back."
18"He came in with the"
19"Eva's books crowded every surface,"
ratio0.897
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Behind her, Ptolemy wound between the table legs and fixed Lucien with the flat yellow stare of a cat that remembered him."
1"The black eye stayed flat and ancient, but the amber one had a shine to it that belonged to a man standing in a cramped flat at midnight with mud on his shoes."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She laughed, short"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.036
89.7948%