Run: 2026-09-23-01M36W4NV566DK15B248V513G0

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1m 43s
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$0.002155
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I wrenched the door open mid-knock and the apology died somewhere behind my teeth. Lucien Moreau stood in the stairwell with rain still caught in the shoulders of his charcoal suit and six months of silence sitting between us. "The deadbolt," he said. "You should use the chain as well." I blocked the doorway with my hip and folded my arms. The ivory head of his cane caught the low light from my kitchen, pale as bone. "You know where I live." "I know where everyone lives, *ma chère*. It's the profession." "Wrong answer." His mouth twitched. Not quite a smile. That mouth had cost me more than I liked to admit in the dark hours when sleep wouldn't come and the flat above Silas' bar creaked like it had opinions. One amber eye, one black. He studied me the way he always did, catalogue and appraisal, and I hated that my pulse answered anyway. "You look well, Rory." "And you look like a man who wants something. Guess which one of us is more interesting right now." Something flickered at the edge of his jaw. He leaned on the cane and the movement cost him. Small. Nearly invisible. But I'd spent two years learning the shape of Lucien Moreau's body language and I read the hitch the way Eva read dead languages. "You're hurt." "An inconvenience." "Where?" "Does it matter?" I stepped back from the door before I could decide against it. He noticed. Of course he noticed. The flat smelled of the noodles I hadn't finished and the candle on the windowsill, the cheap jasmine one Eva bought in bulk from the shop on Hanbury Street. Ptolemy's ghost still lived in the second armchair, tabby fur in the weave I'd never hoover out because Eva would notice and start crying again. Books stacked three deep along the skirting. My delivery bag slumped by the radiator where I'd dropped it an hour ago. Lucien took it in with two glances and set his cane against the wall like he'd lived here. That was the worst part. He moved through my space as though it remembered him. "Sit down before you fall down," I said. "I'm perfectly capable of standing." "You're favouring your left side and you haven't taken your coat off, which means you don't want me to see the shirt. Sit." He sat. Slow, controlled, arranging himself in the armchair like it was a throne in some Marseille salon. Then he unbuttoned the coat, and I saw the shirt. Black silk. Expensive. Ruined. The stain ran from his ribs to his hip and it was still spreading, a slow dark bloom eating the fabric. "That's not an inconvenience." I pulled the first aid kit from under the sink. "That's a hole in you." "A shallow one." "Lucien." "A shallow one, I promise you." I knelt and cut the shirt open with the kitchen shears. He inhaled through his nose but didn't stop me. The wound underneath was angry and precise, a narrow line that had been stitched badly and torn open again. Three days old, maybe four, from the state of the bruising. Someone had packed it with something grey and foul-smelling that I scraped out with the back of a spoon while he gripped the armrest hard enough to whiten his knuckles. "Who stitched this?" "A friend." "With what, a fishhook and a prayer?" "With what was available." "That's not a name." "It's the only one I'll give you." I pressed the pad hard into the wound and he made a sound low in his throat, almost a laugh. Fury and something else, tangled up in it the way it always was with us. "Still punishing me," he said. "I'm stopping you bleeding on my chair. Eva's cat used to sit there." "Eva's cat is dead." "Don't." Silence. I wrapped the bandage tight enough to make a point. His hand came up and hovered near my wrist, near the little crescent scar there, and I pulled away before he could decide what to do with it. "Six months," I said. "Fifty-eight days. Then four months and seventeen days of being unable to reach you without drawing attention to you." "Convenient arithmetic." "Accurate arithmetic. It's the same in every language." "You speak four. Which one were you going to use when you finally showed up?" His mismatched eyes held mine. Black pupil in the amber one, so dark I couldn't find the iris. Avaros looked out at me through that eye and I made myself not blink. "I rehearsed several," he said. "And?" "They all failed when you opened the door." I stood up and took two steps toward the kitchen, because distance was the only thing that ever worked around him. "Try the truth instead. It's short and it doesn't need translating." "You're in a book." "Excuse me?" "A ledger. The kind with a sigil at the head of the page and a figure at the foot." He leaned forward and the chair creaked. "Someone has filed you, Rory. Contracts are placed on paper first, and then the paper goes walking." A cold line drew itself down my spine. I turned and leaned against the counter. "Filed under what?" A pause. Long enough to matter. "Malphora." The candle flame shivered. My alias. The one Silas had made up for me on a bad night in a worse pub in Bermondsey, the one I used when I carried things across the city that Golden Empress noodles couldn't account for. Four people alive knew it. One of them stood bleeding in my kitchen. "Don't look at me like that," he said. "Which way am I looking at you?" "Like I sold it." "Did you?" "No." "Then who's left, Lucien?" He didn't answer, and that was an answer. My name sat in the quiet, small and fatal, and I watched him count the breaths before he spoke again. "There is a collector working out of Avaros. Old blood. Very old. She deals in names and she has begun to close accounts." "And I'm an account." "Your alias is a thread, and threads get pulled. The paper knows where you sleep now. I came before the thing that reads the paper did." I let out a breath and tasted copper. Not real. Just fear wearing the wrong costume. "The thing that reads the paper." "A formality, usually. Clean, quiet. This collector employs formality sparingly." My phone buzzed on the counter. Then again. Then a third time, angry and insistent, and I didn't reach for it because Lucien had gone very still in the chair, his hand closed around the head of his cane. The screen lit up. A photograph. My window. Taken from the roof of the building opposite, the one with the broken water tank. In the frame, a light I recognised, and a figure sitting in a chair I recognised, and a woman kneeling beside him with a bandage in her hand. Timestamped four minutes ago. The window glass behind me cracked like a knuckle. I spun and the candle went out and Lucien was already moving, the cane sweeping into his palm with a whisper of steel, and the dark rushed in to fill the room where the flame had been.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.164
leniency0.327
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.63% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1213
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1213
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"down my spine"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"pulse"
2"flickered"
3"silk"
4"down my spine"
5"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences78
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1213
ratio0.002
matches
0"ma chère"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount840
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Moreau2
One2
Lucien5
Eva3
Hanbury1
Street1
Marseille1
Silence1
Silas1
Bermondsey1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"One"
2"Lucien"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
places
0"Hanbury"
1"Street"
2"Marseille"
3"Bermondsey"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1213
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"hated that my"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs80
mean15.16
std16.53
cv1.09
sampleLengths
014
125
211
327
45
510
62
737
824
94
1019
1145
122
132
141
153
1618
1775
1833
198
205
2123
2228
234
2421
2519
263
271
286
2980
303
312
327
334
344
357
3635
375
3813
394
401
4139
424
4319
442
458
4615
4732
485
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"been stitched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs136
matches
0"was still spreading"
1"was already moving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences125
ratio0
matches(empty)
89.48% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount346
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.05202312138728324
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.011560693641618497
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean9.7
std8.65
cv0.892
sampleLengths
014
125
24
37
411
516
65
710
82
93
104
1130
125
1319
144
1519
168
1710
181
192
2024
212
222
231
243
2512
262
274
2829
2925
307
3114
3218
335
3410
358
365
3723
382
3916
4010
412
421
431
4421
4514
465
473
481
496
78.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.488
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners61
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences58
matches
0"Of course he noticed."
1"Then he unbuttoned the coat,"
2"Just fear wearing the wrong"
3"Then a third time, angry"
ratio0.069
61.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences58
matches
0"I wrenched the door open"
1"I blocked the doorway with"
2"His mouth twitched."
3"He studied me the way"
4"He leaned on the cane"
5"I stepped back from the"
6"My delivery bag slumped by"
7"He moved through my space"
8"I pulled the first aid"
9"I knelt and cut the"
10"He inhaled through his nose"
11"I pressed the pad hard"
12"I wrapped the bandage tight"
13"His hand came up and"
14"His mismatched eyes held mine."
15"I stood up and took"
16"He leaned forward and the"
17"I turned and leaned against"
18"He didn't answer, and that"
19"My name sat in the"
ratio0.397
97.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences58
matches
0"I wrenched the door open"
1"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
2"I blocked the doorway with"
3"The ivory head of his"
4"His mouth twitched."
5"That mouth had cost me"
6"He studied me the way"
7"Something flickered at the edge"
8"He leaned on the cane"
9"I stepped back from the"
10"The flat smelled of the"
11"Ptolemy's ghost still lived in"
12"Books stacked three deep along"
13"My delivery bag slumped by"
14"Lucien took it in with"
15"That was the worst part."
16"He moved through my space"
17"The stain ran from his"
18"I pulled the first aid"
19"I knelt and cut the"
ratio0.724
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
99.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He moved through my space as though it remembered him."
1"The wound underneath was angry and precise, a narrow line that had been stitched badly and torn open again."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.109
leniency0.218
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.8690%