Run: 2026-09-23-01M36WDWRVGQZBVSJP0MGZS846

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2m 25s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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Rory set the cracked mobile face-up on the bar and waited for Silas to lie. He did not look at the screen. He looked at the small crescent scar on her left wrist, as if the old mark might tell him which version of her had walked through his door. Hazel eyes, level as a ruled line. The silver signet ring turned once against the wood. "You're early." "I'm three years late." A laugh started in his throat and died in the beard. Grey had taken more of the auburn than she remembered. The neat trim failed to hide the hollows beneath his cheekbones. He reached for a bottle without checking the label. The pour was short and exact. "You still drink this." "I don't." "Then it can sit." The glass stayed between them. Citrus oil bit the air. Behind him, old maps held the wall in place, and black-and-white photographs watched the room with other people's certainty. Green neon from the sign outside laid a hard stripe across the counter and turned the blue of her eyes into something colder. She did not sit. Sitting would mean she had come home. "Upstairs is let." "I know. I paid the girl on the landing to forget my name for an hour." "Generous." "Necessary." He wiped a dry glass that did not need wiping. The cloth moved in small, stubborn circles. His left knee shifted before the rest of him did, the old injury speaking first. He stayed behind the bar. "You cut your hair." "It grew back the same." She touched the straight black ends at her shoulder. "You got shorter." "The floor dropped." "Your knee dropped. Don't dress it up." His mouth tightened. He set the cloth down as if it had offended him. She had always gone for the joint that already hurt, and he had once called that friendship. "Pre-Law taught you that." "Evan taught me that. The university only graded it." The name landed and stayed. For a moment the bar held nothing but the tick-tock of a clock she could not see and the faint hiss of the neon. She hated that she had brought Evan in first. She had promised herself she would not. Promises had started to feel like other people's furniture. "You look fed." "I look employed. Yu-Fei still throws me the late runs when the others refuse the rough lanes. Golden Empress on the bag, nothing in it. I didn't come to deliver." "I gathered." "Did you." "You came through the front. You hate the front." She felt the old smile rise and killed it. "People change." "Some people practise." There he was. The Silas who could correct her with a single verb and leave her to bleed on the meaning. She drew the mobile closer. The crack split a photograph of a Cardiff street she had not stood on since her mother stopped writing. Jennifer's last letter had asked if London was kind. Rory had not answered. Kindness had not been the brief. "You kept the maps." "They keep me." "And the photographs. Half those faces are dead." "Half were dead when I hung them. The rest caught up." "Cheerful." "Accurate." She turned the screen towards him. No name at the top of the thread, only a string of digits with a Prague prefix. The last line was short enough to read upside down. Tell her the Nest still opens. He did not lean in. He had already read it. Retired, he called himself. The limp sold the story. The eyes did not. "You could have warned me." "You stopped taking my calls." "You stopped deserving them." "Those are different complaints." "They're the same night." Her thumb found the scar and pressed until the skin went white. "You told me to run. I ran. Then I heard what running cost the man you sent in my place." "You heard a version." "I heard a widow." Colour left his face. He did not deny the widow. The Silas she had left would have built a corridor of facts and walked her down it until she apologised for her own fear. This one let the silence stand. His right hand rested on the bar, the ring dull under the neon. She remembered that hand on her shoulder at Paddington, brief, professional, gone before she could decide what it meant. "We were friends," she said. "We were useful to each other." "You used to hate that sentence." "I used to have the luxury." "I was twenty-two. You were the only adult who didn't ask me to shrink." "And now." "Now I shrink before anyone else gets the chance." "That's not intelligence. That's rehearsal." "It's rent." He poured water into a second glass and pushed it towards her. She drank. The cold struck a tooth she had been ignoring. Overhead, a pipe knocked in the flat she still paid for and never entered through his door. The girl on the landing would be counting the hour. Rory had bought sixty minutes of not existing. Most of them were already spent. "Your father rang the bar." "Brendan doesn't ring bars." "He rang this one. Twice. He used your full name, as if the surname might pull you out of the floorboards." "What did you tell him?" "That Aurora Carter was alive." "A generous fiction." "A true one. Don't make me regret the distinction." She set the water down too hard. A little jumped the rim and darkened the wood. He watched the spot the way other men watched a border. "You don't get to spend his worry. You spent enough." "I spent a knee in Prague and a decade keeping this room dull enough that men like Evan walk past it. You spent three years treating the ceiling between us as a foreign border. We both paid. Only one of us is still presenting the bill." She swallowed. The bookshelf stood a finger's width out from the wall, a dark seam no customer would notice. He had shown her the hidden room once, in the first month, and told her never to need it. She had needed it. She had not used it. Pride made poor armour, and she had worn it anyway. "It's open." "It's never open." "It's open now." He turned. The limp caught him for half a step. The gap had not changed. His shoulders had. She used to admire the quiet in him. Now she saw the arithmetic under it, quick as her own. "Who did you bring?" "No one." "Rory." "I said no one." "Then someone followed the no one." The front door gave a soft complaint. Neon shivered as the air moved. Rory kept her eyes on Silas and read the answer in the stillness of his hands. He had expected a knock. He had not expected this one. A woman's voice, London-smoothed over something older, came from the entrance. "Malphora. You left the bag on the step." Rory's delivery bag sat upstairs, rice going cold, Yu-Fei's receipt tucked under the handle. No one in this bar knew that name. No one living ought to. Silas's hand dropped beneath the counter. "Don't." He brought it up again. No gun. A small black fob rested in his palm, the kind that spoke to locks. His thumb waited. His eyes stayed on her. The woman stepped into the stripe of green light. Her coat was too clean for the street. A folded paper sat in her hand, and Brendan Carter's slant crossed the front, barrister-neat, the same hand that had signed Rory's university forms and, later, nothing at all. "Your father thinks you're studying." The woman set the paper on the bar, beside the untouched drink. "Sweet, the things we keep from the people who still use our first names." Rory opened it. The seal was already split. Under her father's line, her mother's writing cut across the page in a hurry. Come home. He knows the name you use. "Too late for that," the woman said. Rory lifted the cracked mobile. The Prague thread glowed between her fingers. She met the woman's look and felt the old quickness arrive, cold and exact, the part of her that had kept her breathing and cost other people the same favour. "Tell him the Nest is closed." "He already knows it isn't." Silas pressed the fob. The bookshelf swung inward on a breath of stale air, paper, and metal. A man stood in the dark of the hidden room, coat damp, face older than the photographs on the wall. He looked at Silas first, then at Rory, and he smiled as if the years between them had been a courtesy. "Hello, Laila," he said. "Your friend told me you would never walk back in."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.083
leniency0.167
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1461
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1461
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences109
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences175
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1461
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Retired, he called himself."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1019
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.88
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Silas7
Evan1
Cardiff1
London2
Prague2
Nest1
Colour1
Paddington1
London-smoothed1
Yu-Fei1
Brendan1
Carter1
Rory9
persons
0"Silas"
1"Evan"
2"Nest"
3"Colour"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Brendan"
6"Carter"
7"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Prague"
3"Paddington"
4"London-smoothed"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1461
matches(empty)
90.48% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences175
matches
0"called that friendship"
1"hated that she"
2"remembered that hand"
3"knew that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean15.22
std18.05
cv1.186
sampleLengths
015
151
22
34
447
54
62
74
863
93
1016
111
121
1337
144
1517
163
177
1831
194
209
2154
223
2330
242
252
269
279
282
293
3064
314
323
338
3411
351
361
3733
386
3923
405
415
424
434
4436
454
464
4772
485
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs179
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences175
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1026
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.021442495126705652
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0009746588693957114
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences175
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences175
mean8.35
std6.78
cv0.812
sampleLengths
015
17
228
37
49
52
64
711
810
911
109
116
124
132
144
155
165
1719
1823
194
207
213
2216
231
241
2510
267
2715
285
294
3014
313
323
337
343
3511
3617
374
389
395
4024
419
427
439
443
4530
462
472
489
499
46.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.34285714285714286
totalSentences175
uniqueOpeners60
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
ratio0
67.06% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences102
matches
0"He did not look at"
1"He looked at the small"
2"He reached for a bottle"
3"She did not sit."
4"He wiped a dry glass"
5"His left knee shifted before"
6"He stayed behind the bar."
7"She touched the straight black"
8"His mouth tightened."
9"He set the cloth down"
10"She had always gone for"
11"She hated that she had"
12"She had promised herself she"
13"She felt the old smile"
14"She drew the mobile closer."
15"She turned the screen towards"
16"He did not lean in."
17"He had already read it."
18"Her thumb found the scar"
19"He did not deny the"
ratio0.382
33.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences102
matches
0"Rory set the cracked mobile"
1"He did not look at"
2"He looked at the small"
3"Hazel eyes, level as a"
4"The silver signet ring turned"
5"A laugh started in his"
6"The neat trim failed to"
7"He reached for a bottle"
8"The pour was short and"
9"The glass stayed between them."
10"Citrus oil bit the air."
11"She did not sit."
12"Sitting would mean she had"
13"He wiped a dry glass"
14"The cloth moved in small,"
15"His left knee shifted before"
16"He stayed behind the bar."
17"She touched the straight black"
18"His mouth tightened."
19"He set the cloth down"
ratio0.853
49.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"Now she saw the arithmetic"
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"A folded paper sat in her hand, and Brendan Carter's slant crossed the front, barrister-neat, the same hand that had signed Rory's university forms and, later, …"
1"She met the woman's look and felt the old quickness arrive, cold and exact, the part of her that had kept her breathing and cost other people the same favour."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences72
tagDensity0.042
leniency0.083
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.8951%