Run: 2026-09-23-01M36WFWBT8VAC1E6FDW7CXTS8

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1m 4s
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$0.001418
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door opened three inches before the chain caught it. Rory knew the cane before she knew the face. Ivory handle, worn smooth, a hairline crack near the ferrule she'd traced once in another lifetime. Her grip tightened on the edge of the door. "Unlock it." "No." "Rory." "Don't." The name landed wrong in the stairwell, too warm for the space between them. She leaned her forehead against the doorframe. Three deadbolts on Eva's door had felt like paranoia once. Now Rory understood the impulse. "You've got ten seconds to tell me how you found this address, and then I'm closing the door on your very expensive shoes." "Eleven weeks." Lucien Moreau shifted his weight. She heard the cane tap once on the landing. "And you answer a question with a question. Some things don't change." "Nine seconds." "The restaurant. Golden Empress. Yu-Fei keeps a roster behind the till with the delivery routes." A pause, the kind that cost money. "I tipped generously." Rory closed her eyes. Of course he did. Lucien didn't break into places. He purchased the lock, the key, and the locksmith's firstborn with the same bored expression. "Go home, Lucien." "After I climbed four flights." "Take the lift next time. There isn't one. Goodbye." She pushed the door. The chain jingled, and his hand caught the edge from the other side, long fingers curling around the wood where hers had been a second before. Close enough that she could smell him through the gap. Bergamot and cold air and something underneath, the faint iron tang that clung to his kind when the temperature dropped. Half of him ran warm as a furnace. The other half never warmed at all. "I brought your scarf." Rory's jaw tightened. "Burn it." "You left it in Marseille." "I left a lot of things in Marseille." "Yes." His thumb brushed the door's edge, slow, deliberate. "You did." Silence pooled in the crack between them. Somewhere below, Silas' bar coughed up a bass line through the floorboards, and a drunk laughed at his own joke on the street. Rory counted her breaths. One. Two. The crescent scar on her left wrist itched, the way it always did when her pulse ran hot. "What do you want?" "To return a scarf." "Liar." "Fine." The cane tapped again. "To see whether you'd open the door. You have. So we've both learned something." Rory snorted. She hated that he could still make her snort. Eleven weeks of careful forgetting, of burying his voice under delivery shifts and Eva's research papers and the particular London grey that soaked everything flat, and he dismantled it with four sentences in a stairwell that smelled of chip fat. She unhooked the chain. He filled the doorway the way he filled every room, by refusing to acknowledge its size. Charcoal suit, pressed to a razor's edge despite the hour. Platinum hair slicked back from a face that belonged on a different century's coins. One amber eye caught the landing light. The black one swallowed it. Rory held out her hand. He draped the scarf over her wrist instead of her palm. Cashmere, dove grey, her grandmother's. His fingers lingered at the fringe. She yanked it back. "Not inviting me in?" "You're not staying." "You haven't heard my business." "You don't have business with me. Not any more." She planted herself in the doorway, arms folded. The flat behind her lay in its usual wreckage of takeaway cartons and Eva's borrowed grimoires stacked on the radiator. Ptolemy had fled under the sofa the moment the knock came, sensible animal. "The arrangement ended in Marseille. You made that clear. Verbatim, as I recall. 'We are done, chérie, and done things do not un-do.' I wrote it down. It's quite poetic." Something moved behind the amber eye. He masked it with a blink. "I was protecting you." "From what? The bloke with the amber contacts and the walking stick full of secrets?" She stepped forward, forcing him back a pace on the landing. "You packed my bag while I slept, Lucien. You put me on a train to Calais with a passport and a phone number for a man I'd never met. That's not protection. That's a deportation with better tailoring." His knuckles whitened around the cane. Good. She wanted the whitened knuckles. She wanted the flinch he'd never give her. "The name in your phone," he said. "Did you call it?" "Twice. Both times it went to voicemail." "I know. I listened to them both." The stairwell tilted, just slightly. Rory breathed through it. Anger, that was all. Anger and a heartbeat that had no business hammering against her ribs. "You have thirty seconds before I shut this door and put the chain back on." "The Veil at Blackfriars is thinning." He said it flat, the way he delivered prices. "Something's been feeding on the crossing points. Three fae gone in a fortnight, and the Court is hunting for a scapegoat. My name is on their list." "Not my problem." "They think I sold the maps." Rory paused mid-breath. She looked at him properly for the first time. The suit held, the hair held, the mouth held its usual curve of aristocratic boredom. But the lines around it had deepened, and a scratch bisected his left eyebrow, thin and recent, the kind a claw or a sigil edge left behind. "Sell maps to whom?" "That's what I intend to find out." "Find out yourself. You're a fixer. Fix it." "They burned my flat in Peckham." He said it lightly. Conversational. He might have been discussing the weather, if he ever discussed the weather. "Thursday last. The blade in my cane is all I carried out." Rory's arms loosened at her sides. She caught them, refolded them. Burned. The word sat in the stairwell like smoke. "You've got hotels. You've got contacts in every sewer from here to the Alps." "I have enemies who now know my address, my aliases, and, thanks to a very persuasive imp in Camden, the name of the last person I sent out of the country." His black eye fixed on her, and for the first time that night it looked like something other than a hole. "They will come here, Rory. Whether I stand on this landing or not." Below them, the bar's bass cut out mid-beat. Footsteps on the street, plural, unhurried, stopping right at the building's front door. Lucien's hand closed around her wrist, right over the crescent scar, and pulled her out of the doorway. "Move." He kicked the flat door shut behind them with the heel of his cane as the first of the three deadbolts on the stairwell door below burst clean out of the frame.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The cane tapped again [again]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.04
82.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1124
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1124
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"pulse"
4"eyebrow"
5"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences115
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1124
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
77.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount694
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.44
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva3
Rory10
Moreau1
Silence1
London1
Conversational1
Lucien3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Moreau"
3"Silence"
4"Lucien"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.78
windowScore0.833
43.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like paranoia once"
1"looked like something other than a hole"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1124
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences115
matches
0"hated that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean19.72
std21.01
cv1.065
sampleLengths
010
134
22
31
41
560
628
72
825
928
103
115
129
1375
144
155
165
178
1811
1954
204
214
221
2319
2451
254
2652
275
2826
294
303
315
3280
3312
344
3564
3620
3711
387
397
4025
4115
4242
433
446
4554
464
477
488
4936
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs110
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences115
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount530
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.03207547169811321
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005660377358490566
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences115
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences115
mean9.77
std8.83
cv0.903
sampleLengths
010
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216
39
42
51
61
715
87
910
105
1123
127
139
1412
152
1622
173
184
194
205
2115
223
235
249
254
2626
2710
2820
298
307
314
323
332
345
358
369
372
387
3923
404
411
421
4318
444
454
461
475
4814
492
79.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4956521739130435
totalSentences115
uniqueOpeners57
49.02% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Of course he did."
ratio0.015
72.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences68
matches
0"Her grip tightened on the"
1"She leaned her forehead against"
2"She heard the cane tap"
3"He purchased the lock, the"
4"She pushed the door."
5"His thumb brushed the door's"
6"She hated that he could"
7"She unhooked the chain."
8"He filled the doorway the"
9"He draped the scarf over"
10"His fingers lingered at the"
11"She yanked it back."
12"She planted herself in the"
13"He masked it with a"
14"She stepped forward, forcing him"
15"His knuckles whitened around the"
16"She wanted the whitened knuckles."
17"She wanted the flinch he'd"
18"He said it flat, the"
19"She looked at him properly"
ratio0.368
26.18% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences68
matches
0"The door opened three inches"
1"Rory knew the cane before"
2"Ivory handle, worn smooth, a"
3"Her grip tightened on the"
4"The name landed wrong in"
5"She leaned her forehead against"
6"Lucien Moreau shifted his weight"
7"She heard the cane tap"
8"A pause, the kind that"
9"Rory closed her eyes."
10"Lucien didn't break into places."
11"He purchased the lock, the"
12"She pushed the door."
13"The chain jingled, and his"
14"Bergamot and cold air and"
15"Half of him ran warm"
16"The other half never warmed"
17"Rory's jaw tightened."
18"His thumb brushed the door's"
19"Silence pooled in the crack"
ratio0.868
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Now Rory understood the impulse."
ratio0.015
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Bergamot and cold air and something underneath, the faint iron tang that clung to his kind when the temperature dropped."
1"Eleven weeks of careful forgetting, of burying his voice under delivery shifts and Eva's research papers and the particular London grey that soaked everything f…"
2"Anger and a heartbeat that had no business hammering against her ribs."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.06
leniency0.12
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.4446%