Run: 2026-09-23-01M36WV9YJYHHGJBMA4KG141HF

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt gave before her hand finished turning it, which meant the man on the other side had worked the lock himself. Aurora shoved her shoulder into the door and it swung wide, and Lucien Moreau stood in her doorway like he owned the damp stairwell, ivory-handled cane in one gloved hand, charcoal coat still buttoned against a night she hadn't bothered to look at. "Rory." "Don't." She kept her palm flat on the door edge, ready to shut it in his face. "You don't get to say my name like that. Not here. Not after eighteen months of silence." "I wrote to you." "Cards at Christmas don't count." His amber eye caught the hallway bulb; the black one gave back nothing at all. He looked thinner. The platinum hair stayed slicked back, the suit still sat on him like it had been poured there, but a bruise coloured his jaw the shade of old plums and his left sleeve held a dark stain that had stopped spreading. "You're bleeding," she said. "Superficial." "Lucien." "It is nothing." He shifted his weight and the cane clicked the threshold. "May I?" Eva's flat had never felt smaller than it did with him in it. Every surface carried books, every book carried notes, and the notes carried threads that led nowhere good. Ptolemy lifted his tabby head from a stack of scrolls, decided the visitor warranted no alarm, and went back to sleep. Rory shut the door. She did not shoot the bolts. "You picked the wrong night to go sentimental." "I never go sentimental." He took in the room, the maps pinned over the curry house's peeling wallpaper, the ring of tea stains on three separate notebooks. "You have been busy." "Someone has to be." "Yu-Fei says you have not collected your wages in a fortnight." "She talks too much for a woman who owns a noodle shop." "She worries." His gaze settled on the wall where a photograph of Evan sat under a bright red circle, and something in his expression hardened by a degree. "So do I. That is why I came." Rory pulled a chair out with her foot and sat on the edge of it, back straight, hands in her lap where he couldn't read them. "Then talk. You've got five minutes before I decide you were better as a memory." Lucien set the cane against the table, deliberately, so the blade inside it lay within reach of either of them. "Evan Cross took a room above a dry cleaner's in Peckham four days ago. He asked after you at three separate doors. Two of them belong to people who sell information, and one belongs to a man I broke the fingers of last spring, so his answers were honest." The kitchen tap dripped into the silence. Drip, drip, drip. She counted four before she trusted her voice. "Four days." "Four." "And you waited until now to walk up three flights of stairs in the rain." "I waited until I had his landlord's name, his bank ledger, and the name of the woman he shares a bed with." Lucien reached inside his coat and produced a folded page, which he laid on the table between them. "Also, I was in Marseille until Tuesday, burying my father." Rory looked at the paper and did not touch it. "I'm sorry." "He was a demon who collected stamps and spoke four languages badly. Grief arrives on a delay with my family." He unbuttoned his glove, finger by finger, and the hand beneath carried a long raw scrape from knuckle to wrist. "You will want to read that before you decide whether to hate me efficiently." She unfolded it. Ledger lines. Dates. One name repeated in a column heading, over and over, and the repetition did more damage than any threat could have. Her throat tightened. "Anwen Price." "Your landlord's daughter. The one who kept your spare key after you left Cardiff." He watched her face the way a man watches a fuse. "She has visited Peckham four times in six days. Each visit followed a call placed from your mother's house." "My mother doesn't know where I live." "No." He let the word stand. "She does not." Rory set the page down and pressed her thumb against the crescent scar on her left wrist, an old habit she had never managed to break. The flat felt colder. Rain needled the window above the sink. "So you came to tell me my own family sold my address to the man who broke my collarbone." "I came to tell you that, and to ask you to leave with me tonight." "Where." "My rooms in Soho. Two doors, one guard, a back stair that opens onto a lane no car can enter." "You have a guard now?" "I have a great many things now." He said it lightly, and his hand drifted, without meaning to, to the stained sleeve. "All of which become irrelevant if you insist on sleeping above a bar where the back door sticks and the windows do not lock." Rory stood. She crossed to the window and looked down at Brick Lane, at the curry house's striped awning shivering under the downpour, at the black saloon idling past the bin store with its interior light off and its engine running too long for a taxi. "How much do I owe you for the warning?" "You owe me nothing. You owed me nothing when I left, and you owe me less now." She turned back to him. "You left." "I did." "You stood in this very room and told me your world would eat me, and then you walked out and didn't look back, and I spent a year learning how to lock three deadbolts in under four seconds." "And you learned it in two." His voice came out rough. "I counted, the night I stood on the stairs and did not knock. You are quicker than you were, Rory. That is a good thing. It is also the reason you are still alive." The admission hung between them, uninvited, enormous. He had come. He had stood here, and listened, and left. "You were on my stairs." "Twice." He picked up the cane and the lie of his indifference went with it. "The second time I had your address written on a card in my coat and I could not make my hand lift." The saloon outside the bin store pulled away from the kerb, slow, unhurried, and stopped again fifty feet on, nose pointed at the stairwell door. Rory reached for her jacket on the chair back. "Eva's going to kill me for leaving her research." "Eva will kill you for leaving it unlocked." He was already at the door, cane in hand, listening to the stair. "Her three bolts are decorative. A decent pick opens them in nine seconds, and the man who owned that car does not need a pick." A floorboard groaned somewhere below them. Then another, closer, climbing. Ptolemy rose on the windowsill, back arched, every hair standing up. Rory killed the kitchen light, and the flat went black but for the wet glow of Brick Lane bleeding through the glass. Lucien's hand found hers in the dark, cold fingers closing around the scar on her wrist, and he did not let go. "Back stair," he murmured. The first heavy knock came at the door, three sharp strikes, and then a voice she hadn't heard since Cardiff spoke through the wood. "Rory. I know you're in there. Anwen said you'd come around."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"lightly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1267
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences52
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1267
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.93% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount699
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Lucien4
Moreau1
Eva1
Evan1
Rory7
Brick2
Lane2
Cardiff1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.999
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences36
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean21.47
std18.45
cv0.859
sampleLengths
066
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234
34
45
559
64
71
81
915
1051
1110
128
1331
144
1511
1612
1736
1841
1969
2018
212
221
2315
2450
2512
2654
2730
282
2944
307
319
3237
3319
3415
351
3620
375
3846
3946
409
4117
427
432
4438
4545
4618
475
4837
4925
98.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"been poured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs125
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences94
ratio0.011
matches
0"His amber eye caught the hallway bulb; the black one gave back nothing at all."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount700
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.024285714285714285
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002857142857142857
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean13.48
std11.56
cv0.858
sampleLengths
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143
21
317
417
54
65
715
83
941
104
111
121
1313
142
1513
1617
1721
184
196
208
2127
224
234
2411
2512
2628
278
2826
2915
3020
3149
327
333
348
352
361
3715
3840
3910
4010
412
4240
4314
443
452
461
4721
483
492
67.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.43617021276595747
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners41
70.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences47
matches
0"Then another, closer, climbing."
ratio0.021
41.28% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences47
matches
0"She kept her palm flat"
1"His amber eye caught the"
2"He looked thinner."
3"He shifted his weight and"
4"She did not shoot the"
5"He took in the room,"
6"His gaze settled on the"
7"She counted four before she"
8"He unbuttoned his glove, finger"
9"She unfolded it."
10"Her throat tightened."
11"He watched her face the"
12"He let the word stand"
13"He said it lightly, and"
14"She crossed to the window"
15"She turned back to him."
16"His voice came out rough"
17"He had come."
18"He had stood here, and"
19"He picked up the cane"
ratio0.447
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences47
matches
0"The third deadbolt gave before"
1"Aurora shoved her shoulder into"
2"She kept her palm flat"
3"His amber eye caught the"
4"He looked thinner."
5"The platinum hair stayed slicked"
6"He shifted his weight and"
7"Eva's flat had never felt"
8"Every surface carried books, every"
9"Ptolemy lifted his tabby head"
10"Rory shut the door."
11"She did not shoot the"
12"He took in the room,"
13"His gaze settled on the"
14"Rory pulled a chair out"
15"Lucien set the cane against"
16"The kitchen tap dripped into"
17"She counted four before she"
18"Lucien reached inside his coat"
19"Rory looked at the paper"
ratio0.936
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The platinum hair stayed slicked back, the suit still sat on him like it had been poured there, but a bruise coloured his jaw the shade of old plums and his lef…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.054
leniency0.107
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.036
88.4780%