Run: 2026-09-23-01M36X1Z2F9GCMPNA7HCB3ZE06

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Duration:
1m 9s
Cost:
$0.000712
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The park had been ordinary an hour ago. That was the thing Rory kept turning over as they walked: ordinary grass, ordinary pigeons, an ordinary dog straining at an ordinary lead. Then the path bent behind a stand of horse chestnuts and the light went strange, thickening the way honey thickens in a cold kitchen, and every bird in Richmond Park stopped singing at once. "That," Eva said, "is not on the map." Ahead of them the oaks had arranged themselves. Not the loose scatter of a planted wood but a deliberate ring, eight trunks, each one broad enough that Rory could not have wrapped her arms halfway round. The bark was pale, almost bone-coloured, and carved in places with grooves that might have been language or might have been the slow work of beetles. Between two of the trunks the air shivered. Not moved. Shimmered, the way the motorway shimmers in July, except it was nearly dark and the temperature had dropped until Rory could see her breath. She stopped walking. The Heartstone at her throat gave a small, conspiratorial pulse of warmth against her collarbone, and she pressed her palm flat over it. "We don't have to go in," Eva said. Eva, who had driven them here, Eva who had argued for an hour that this was a bad idea and then put the car in gear anyway. "We do, though." Rory looked back. Nyx had stopped ten paces behind them, and in the failing light they were almost nothing — a silhouette too dark for the dusk to hold, two violet glimmers where a face would be. Their voice came from several directions at once, like wind finding the gaps in a fence. "The Grove does not mind being sought," Nyx said. "It minds being found. There is a difference." "That's the most unhelpful thing anyone's ever said to me," Eva said, "and I once sat through a four-hour lecture from my ex about cryptocurrency." Nyx's glow dimmed in what might have been amusement. "Then do not linger at the threshold. The threshold is where things are decided." Rory went first. She told herself it was because she was the one with the pendant, the one who had been invited — the letter, if you could call the single line pressed into grey paper an invitation, had borne only an address inside the park and a name she had had to look up. But the truth was simpler and less noble: she had spent twenty-five years being careful, and she was so tired of it that tiredness had curdled into something that felt like courage. She stepped through the shimmer. It felt like walking into a held breath. The cold didn't break; it changed texture, becoming dry and close, and for one vertiginous instant she heard her own pulse hammered loud in both ears. Then the park was behind her and the world opened. Wildflowers covered the clearing in every direction, and they were blooming — foxglove and snowdrop and crocus and things she had no name for, pale blue bells that chimed without wind, blossoms the colour of arterial blood pushing up through frost-rimed grass. It should not have been possible. It was the wrong season entirely, wrong light, wrong everything, and yet the flowers went on with their business with the serene indifference of something that had never been told it was impossible. "Oh," Eva said behind her, and then, quieter, "oh, that's — Rory, look at the sky." The sky was wrong. There was no sun and no moon, only a diffuse amber-gold that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, the light of an afternoon that had forgotten to end. It moved wrong, too; when Rory tilted her head she could swear it slid sideways, and the shadows the standing stones cast did not agree with each other, each trunk throwing its dark in a slightly different direction as if the light were arguing with itself. Nyx came through without sound. Once inside, they drew themselves taller — solidifying, edges sharpening — and Rory watched their head turn, a slow sweep of the clearing, and heard the small dry sound they made in the back of their throat. "What?" she asked. "There are shadows here that do not belong to anything." Nyx lifted a hand. Where their fingers passed, the air thickened into ribbons of dark that unspooled and drifted like weed in water. "This place is not only half Fae. It is half somewhere else. I can feel the seams." Rory crouched. The grass beneath her fingers was warm — warmer than the air, warm as skin — and it came away too easily, roots and all, revealing soil the colour of wine. She let it fall. Her crescent scar, thin and pale against her wrist, caught the amber light. They moved deeper. The clearing did not shrink; if anything it widened as they walked, the oaks leaning back to give them room, and the flowers gave way to moss that glowed faintly between the stones, so that the ground seemed lit from beneath. Somewhere far off there was a sound like a forge, low and rhythmic, and under it something that might have been singing in a language assembled entirely from vowels. Eva had gone quiet. She walked with her phone out, checking it, and Rory saw her thumb swipe at the screen and then stop. "My phone thinks it's Tuesday," Eva said. "It's Thursday." "It thinks it's Tuesday. And it thinks it's — " She turned the screen so Rory could see. The clock read 9:47. Then it flickered, blurred, and read 4:12. "This is giving me a headache." "Don't look at it," Rory said. "Look at the ground instead. Follow the stones." Because the stones were leading somewhere. The moss-thick rocks that littered the clearing had not been scattered by accident; as Rory walked, arranging them in her head the way she used to arrange case notes, a pattern surfaced — a spiral, turning inward, each stone a little larger than the last. The Veil, she thought, though she didn't know how she knew. She could see it here if she looked at the edges of her vision: a faint distortion in the amber air, like heat haze over tarmac, hovering just above the ground and running away between the trunks in a line she could follow if she trusted her eyes. She trusted her eyes. That was the mistake, or the beginning of one. The spiral brought them to the centre, and the centre was a slab of grey stone laid flat, and on the slab lay a dagger. Rory stopped. It was leaf-shaped, slender, the blade a soft white metal that looked as though it had been poured rather than forged. It lay there giving off a faint luminescence, and when she reached toward it — some impulse older than the caution she had spent a decade cultivating — her fingers met cold. Not the cold of metal left out in the dark. The cold of a January windowpane, of deep water, of something that had never once been near a fire. She picked it up, and the moment her palm closed on the hilt, every shadow in the clearing snapped to attention. The unnatural ones — the ones Nyx had flagged, drifting free of their objects — drew in a sharp collective breath and went still. Behind her, Nyx made a sound that was almost a word. Rory turned. The shadows had contracted into a single dense knot of dark at the base of the largest oak, and standing inside it, as if the dark were a doorway she had been leaning against, was a woman. Silver hair to her waist. Pale lavender eyes. She was not tall and she was not imposing and she left no impression in the moss beneath her bare feet — Rory looked, looked hard, and saw nothing, not a bend of a blade, not a smudge of dew. "You're late," Isolde Varga said, in the voice of someone who had been waiting three hundred years and considered the wait instructive. Her eyes dropped to the moonsilver in Rory's hand. "Or you are exactly on time. Time is a liar in this place, and I do not say that to mislead you." The pendant pulsed hot against Rory's chest, a second heartbeat, and somewhere beyond the standing stones something answered it — a low warmth in the amber air, a door opening very far away. Nyx stepped forward until they stood beside her, close enough that the dark around them pressed against her arm like a companion. "The shadows here do not belong to anything," Nyx repeated quietly, to the seer. "Where did they come from?" Isolde smiled, and it was the smile of someone who could not lie and had found that truth was a far more durable weapon. "From the last person who walked out of this grove," she said, "carrying something that did not belong to them." She turned and began to walk, bare feet silent on the glowing moss, the amber light sliding across her silver hair. "Come, Aurora Carter. You have brought a blade to a feast, and the feast has already begun." The flowers chimed without wind. The shadows did not move. Rory looked once back the way they had come, at the shimmer between the oaks where the park ought to have been visible, and saw that it had gone — or that it was now facing the other direction, leading somewhere she had not agreed to go. She tightened her grip on the cold blade and followed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx repeated quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.609
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
93.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1596
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1596
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"imposing"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"rhythmic"
4"flickered"
5"imposing"
6"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences93
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1614
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1403
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
Richmond1
Park1
Ahead1
July1
Heartstone1
Eva8
Nyx9
Veil1
January1
Varga1
Isolde2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Nyx"
3"Varga"
4"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"July"
globalScore0.859
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like courage"
1"felt like walking into a held breath"
2"gold that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, the light of an afternoon that had forgotten to end"
3"seemed lit from beneath"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.62
wordCount1614
matches
0"Not the loose scatter of a planted wood but a deliberate ring, eight trunks, each one broad enough"
94.98% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"found that truth"
1"saw that it"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean39.37
std27.61
cv0.701
sampleLengths
065
18
270
326
426
535
656
717
825
923
1087
115
1244
1381
1416
1579
1642
173
1850
1950
2073
2124
227
232
2435
2514
26110
2713
2825
2984
3045
3111
3287
3353
3433
3522
3619
3724
3858
3957
4010
88.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences84
matches
0"been invited "
1"been told"
2"been scattered"
3"been poured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs227
matches
0"were blooming "
1"were arguing"
2"were leading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences93
ratio0.151
matches
0"Nyx had stopped ten paces behind them, and in the failing light they were almost nothing — a silhouette too dark for the dusk to hold, two violet glimmers where a face would be."
1"She told herself it was because she was the one with the pendant, the one who had been invited — the letter, if you could call the single line pressed into grey paper an invitation, had borne only an address inside the park and a name she had had to look up."
2"The cold didn't break; it changed texture, becoming dry and close, and for one vertiginous instant she heard her own pulse hammered loud in both ears."
3"Wildflowers covered the clearing in every direction, and they were blooming — foxglove and snowdrop and crocus and things she had no name for, pale blue bells that chimed without wind, blossoms the colour of arterial blood pushing up through frost-rimed grass."
4"It moved wrong, too; when Rory tilted her head she could swear it slid sideways, and the shadows the standing stones cast did not agree with each other, each trunk throwing its dark in a slightly different direction as if the light were arguing with itself."
5"Once inside, they drew themselves taller — solidifying, edges sharpening — and Rory watched their head turn, a slow sweep of the clearing, and heard the small dry sound they made in the back of their throat."
6"The grass beneath her fingers was warm — warmer than the air, warm as skin — and it came away too easily, roots and all, revealing soil the colour of wine."
7"The clearing did not shrink; if anything it widened as they walked, the oaks leaning back to give them room, and the flowers gave way to moss that glowed faintly between the stones, so that the ground seemed lit from beneath."
8"The moss-thick rocks that littered the clearing had not been scattered by accident; as Rory walked, arranging them in her head the way she used to arrange case notes, a pattern surfaced — a spiral, turning inward, each stone a little larger than the last."
9"It lay there giving off a faint luminescence, and when she reached toward it — some impulse older than the caution she had spent a decade cultivating — her fingers met cold."
10"The unnatural ones — the ones Nyx had flagged, drifting free of their objects — drew in a sharp collective breath and went still."
11"She was not tall and she was not imposing and she left no impression in the moss beneath her bare feet — Rory looked, looked hard, and saw nothing, not a bend of a blade, not a smudge of dew."
12"The pendant pulsed hot against Rory's chest, a second heartbeat, and somewhere beyond the standing stones something answered it — a low warmth in the amber air, a door opening very far away."
13"Rory looked once back the way they had come, at the shimmer between the oaks where the park ought to have been visible, and saw that it had gone — or that it was now facing the other direction, leading somewhere she had not agreed to go."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1394
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.03873744619799139
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007173601147776184
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences93
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences93
mean17.35
std13.31
cv0.767
sampleLengths
08
123
234
38
48
528
626
78
82
924
103
1123
128
1327
146
1534
1616
179
188
1925
209
2114
223
2352
2432
255
268
2726
2810
2942
306
3133
3216
334
3429
3546
365
3737
383
3914
4019
4117
422
4331
444
4513
463
4741
4829
494
59.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3978494623655914
totalSentences93
uniqueOpeners37
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences73
matches
0"Then the path bent behind"
1"Then the park was behind"
2"Once inside, they drew themselves"
3"Somewhere far off there was"
4"Then it flickered, blurred, and"
ratio0.068
99.45% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences73
matches
0"She stopped walking."
1"Their voice came from several"
2"She told herself it was"
3"She stepped through the shimmer."
4"It felt like walking into"
5"It should not have been"
6"It was the wrong season"
7"It moved wrong, too; when"
8"She let it fall."
9"Her crescent scar, thin and"
10"They moved deeper."
11"She walked with her phone"
12"She turned the screen so"
13"She could see it here"
14"She trusted her eyes."
15"It was leaf-shaped, slender, the"
16"It lay there giving off"
17"She picked it up, and"
18"She was not tall and"
19"Her eyes dropped to the"
ratio0.301
76.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences73
matches
0"The park had been ordinary"
1"That was the thing Rory"
2"The bark was pale, almost"
3"She stopped walking."
4"The Heartstone at her throat"
5"Eva, who had driven them"
6"Rory looked back"
7"Nyx had stopped ten paces"
8"Their voice came from several"
9"Nyx's glow dimmed in what"
10"Rory went first."
11"She told herself it was"
12"She stepped through the shimmer."
13"It felt like walking into"
14"The cold didn't break; it"
15"Wildflowers covered the clearing in"
16"It should not have been"
17"It was the wrong season"
18"Eva said behind her, and"
19"The sky was wrong."
ratio0.767
68.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Because the stones were leading"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The bark was pale, almost bone-coloured, and carved in places with grooves that might have been language or might have been the slow work of beetles."
1"But the truth was simpler and less noble: she had spent twenty-five years being careful, and she was so tired of it that tiredness had curdled into something th…"
2"Wildflowers covered the clearing in every direction, and they were blooming — foxglove and snowdrop and crocus and things she had no name for, pale blue bells t…"
3"It was the wrong season entirely, wrong light, wrong everything, and yet the flowers went on with their business with the serene indifference of something that …"
4"There was no sun and no moon, only a diffuse amber-gold that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, the light of an afternoon that had forgotten to end."
5"It moved wrong, too; when Rory tilted her head she could swear it slid sideways, and the shadows the standing stones cast did not agree with each other, each tr…"
6"Somewhere far off there was a sound like a forge, low and rhythmic, and under it something that might have been singing in a language assembled entirely from vo…"
7"The moss-thick rocks that littered the clearing had not been scattered by accident; as Rory walked, arranging them in her head the way she used to arrange case …"
8"It was leaf-shaped, slender, the blade a soft white metal that looked as though it had been poured rather than forged."
9"The cold of a January windowpane, of deep water, of something that had never once been near a fire."
10"The shadows had contracted into a single dense knot of dark at the base of the largest oak, and standing inside it, as if the dark were a doorway she had been l…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount0
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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