Run: 2026-09-23-01M36X5XB8RDWT8NT90ZKJAFXK

Run Details

Duration:
1m 24s
Cost:
$0.000671
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oak standing stones rose from the hillside like the knuckles of something buried beneath the earth. Rory counted nine of them, each one wider than her outstretched arms, each carved with grooves so old the wind had smoothed them into shallow rivers across the bark-like stone. Ferns and bracken pressed against their bases, and between them the grass lay flat in a perfect circle, as though something heavy had rested there for centuries and only recently risen. Nyx stood half a pace behind her, their form solid enough that the amber cast of Rory's phone light caught the edges of their silhouette. Their violet eyes—faintly glowing, two small lanterns suspended in a face that wasn't quite a face—scanned the gaps between the stones. "The Wardens didn't build these," they said, their voice threading through the cold air like breath through a keyhole. "No." Rory lowered the phone. She crouched at the base of the nearest stone and ran her fingers along one of the carved channels. The surface was warmer than it should have been for mid-December in Richmond Park, and beneath her fingertips she felt a vibration—not mechanical, not the hum of underground pipes, but something rhythmic. A pulse. "Who did?" Nyx drifted closer, their boots making no impression on the frost-dusted ground. "Someone who knew what lay beneath the ground. Or above it." They extended a hand toward the gap between two stones where the air carried a faint shimmer, like heat haze rising from summer tarmac, except the night was cold enough that Rory's breath came in visible clouds. "Is that the—" she started. "The pocket." Nyx lowered their hand. "Between realms. Where the half-Fae keeps her." Rory straightened. She looked at the shimmer again. It wavered when she tilted her head, then held steady when she stopped moving, as though it existed at an angle she couldn't quite align with her own vision. Her phone's camera screen showed nothing—just grass, stones, and the dark skeleton of a beech tree beyond. Her phone buzzed in her palm. She glanced down. Yu-Fei's number, no doubt another late delivery order. She silenced it and slipped the phone into her jacket pocket. "Through there, then." Nyx regarded her for a moment. Their head tilted—a gesture they'd picked up from somewhere, Rory suspected, from the person they'd been before the summoning ritual unraveled them in 1643. "You've never stepped into a pocket between worlds before." "I've never done a lot of things." She pulled the Heartstone Pendant from beneath her shirt and checked it. The crimson gem sat dull and cold against her collarbone. No pulse, no warmth. No Hel portal nearby. She let it drop back against her chest. "Lead the way." Nyx didn't move. "I can slip through shadows. I don't walk through doorways. You go first." "That's reassuring." "One of us has to set foot in. Might as well be someone with feet." Rory took a breath and stepped between the stones. The cold left her skin like water peeling from glass. She blinked and found herself in a clearing that swallowed the noise of the park behind it—the distant hum of the A316, the occasional bark of a dog walker's Labrador, all of it cut off as though someone had pressed a thumb over the world's speaker. In its place: silence so complete she heard the wet click of her own swallow. Wildflowers bloomed everywhere. Not the tentative early blooms of a mild winter or the stubborn weeds that pushed through London pavements, but full, saturated flowers—poppies the colour of arterial blood, foxgloves standing in purple ranks, clusters of small white blossoms she didn't recognise growing in spirals around the bases of the oaks. They shouldn't have been alive. The temperature had dropped below freezing two hours ago, and yet the petals held their colour without a single brown edge. Nyx stepped through the gap behind her. Their form rippled as they crossed, shadow pulling tight against their frame like a sail catching wind, then settled. They looked around with the careful stillness of someone mapping exits. "It smells different," Rory said. She could barely hear herself. The silence pressed in, thick as cotton, and her own voice sounded foreign—too loud, too solid. The air carried something green and faintly metallic, like rain on iron, and underneath it a sweetness that made her tongue ache. "Old earth," Nyx said. They crouched and pressed their palm flat against the ground. Their fingers sank in—not into mud, but into the soil itself, as though the earth had loosened its grain for them. "This place doesn't belong to Earth. Not entirely." Rory moved deeper into the clearing. The oaks thickened as she walked, their trunks growing wider, their bark knotted into shapes that caught the moonlight and held it. One tree bore a face—not carved, not painted, but formed by the natural whorls of its growth: a hollow where an eye should have been, a ridge of bark curving into a jaw, the mouth open just wide enough to whisper if wind passed through it. Wind stirred now. She watched the leaves tremble, though the air against her cheeks felt perfectly still. She reached for the tree's surface and stopped an inch short. The Heartstone had warmed against her chest. She pulled the pendant out. It glowed—a low, ember-bright crimson that pulsed in time with the vibration she'd felt earlier on the standing stones. Not a Hel portal. Something else. "Don't touch the trees." Rory turned. Nyx stood ten paces back, their violet eyes wide in the dark. They'd gone semi-corporeal without her noticing, their outline blurred, their feet sunk ankle-deep into shadow that pooled beneath them. "They remember," they said. "Trees this old. They keep things." "Keep what?" "Whatever's passed through. Whatever's been said. You put your hand on that trunk, you'll feel every person who's ever leaned against it. Every hand. Every mouth pressed to the bark." Their voice thinned. "I've felt it before. Not here. Somewhere older. A place that doesn't exist anymore." Rory looked at the tree's open mouth. The hollow in its bark was deep enough to lose a hand in. Something moved inside it—slow, deliberate, like a tongue repositioning. She stepped back. The pendant throbbed against her sternum. Each pulse sent warmth through her jacket, up her throat, into her jaw. Not unpleasant. Like swallowing hot tea on a night when her flat's radiators had given out again. She followed the glow, moving toward the far end of the clearing where the oaks gave way to a low rise carpeted in moss so bright it looked lit from beneath. Nyx fell into step beside her. Their shadow merged with the tree shadows along the ground—then separated again, as though the ground had rejected them. "This pocket runs deep," they said. "Deeper than a grove. We've crossed into something older than the Fae Courts." "Isolde lives here." "Isolde survives here. There's a difference." At the top of the rise, the wildflowers thinned and the moss gave way to a circle of flat, pale stones—not carved, not arranged by anyone who'd cared for symmetry, but placed with purpose. In the centre, a shallow basin held water so still it mirrored the sky, except the stars reflected in it didn't match the ones above. Rory tilted her head and counted. Twice as many stars. Some of them in colours she had no names for—deep indigo, a green that shifted toward silver. The Heartstone went hot. She pulled the pendant away from her skin and held it out on its chain, watching the crimson pulse quicken. The warmth traveled up the silver links to her fingers. The water in the basin moved. Not from wind. From something beneath it—a slow expansion of ripples that radiated from the centre outward, each one brightening as it reached the basin's rim and then fading. Between the ripples, the reflected stars rearranged themselves. Rory watched the pattern settle. It formed a shape—a leaf, then a doorway, then something else she couldn't resolve before it shifted again. Each iteration lasted less than a heartbeat. "It's showing us the way in," she said. Nyx stood at the basin's edge, their reflection absent from the water. "Or it's showing you something. The pendant reacts to you, not to me. I'm seeing nothing but water." Rory lowered the pendant. The ripples stopped. The stars in the basin returned to their impossible arrangement and held still. She looked across the rise, past the flat stones, toward a ring of hawthorn so dense it formed a wall. Through a gap in the branches, a single light burned—warm, steady, the colour of candle flame held close to skin. The pendant pulsed. The tree faces, the silent air, the stars that didn't belong in the water—everything pointed forward. Rory stepped off the rise and walked toward the light.
created_at"2026-09-23T10:32:29.807Z" 9/23/2026, 10:32:29 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.414
leniency0.828
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1498
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1498
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"mechanical"
count1
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count4
5
word"wavered"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count3
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count2
10
word"throbbed"
count1
11
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"scanned"
2"mechanical"
3"rhythmic"
4"pulse"
5"wavered"
6"warmth"
7"silence"
8"whisper"
9"pulsed"
10"throbbed"
11"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences118
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1479
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
91.18% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount1275
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.18
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory15
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx10
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Hel2
Labrador1
London1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.912
windowScore1
77.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite a face—scanned the gaps between the stones"
1"quite align with her own vision"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords4.733
wordCount1479
matches
0"not mechanical, not the hum of underground pipes, but something rhythmic"
1"not the hum of underground pipes, but something rhythmic"
2"not into mud, but into the soil itself, as though the earth had loosened its g"
3"not carved, not painted, but formed by the natural whorls of its growth: a hollow"
4"not painted, but formed by the natural whorls of its growth: a hollow"
5"not carved, not arranged by anyone who'd cared for symmetry, but placed with purpose"
6"not arranged by anyone who'd cared for symmetry, but placed with purpose"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean30.81
std24.5
cv0.795
sampleLengths
078
146
219
360
460
55
613
754
828
93
1030
119
1248
1316
142
1515
169
1771
1878
1937
205
2143
2243
2391
2448
254
2633
2710
282
2947
3029
313
3267
3325
3419
353
366
3786
3834
396
4037
4130
428
4330
4420
4540
4619
4710
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs205
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences118
ratio0.153
matches
0"Their violet eyes—faintly glowing, two small lanterns suspended in a face that wasn't quite a face—scanned the gaps between the stones."
1"The surface was warmer than it should have been for mid-December in Richmond Park, and beneath her fingertips she felt a vibration—not mechanical, not the hum of underground pipes, but something rhythmic."
2"Her phone's camera screen showed nothing—just grass, stones, and the dark skeleton of a beech tree beyond."
3"Their head tilted—a gesture they'd picked up from somewhere, Rory suspected, from the person they'd been before the summoning ritual unraveled them in 1643."
4"She blinked and found herself in a clearing that swallowed the noise of the park behind it—the distant hum of the A316, the occasional bark of a dog walker's Labrador, all of it cut off as though someone had pressed a thumb over the world's speaker."
5"Not the tentative early blooms of a mild winter or the stubborn weeds that pushed through London pavements, but full, saturated flowers—poppies the colour of arterial blood, foxgloves standing in purple ranks, clusters of small white blossoms she didn't recognise growing in spirals around the bases of the oaks."
6"The silence pressed in, thick as cotton, and her own voice sounded foreign—too loud, too solid."
7"Their fingers sank in—not into mud, but into the soil itself, as though the earth had loosened its grain for them."
8"One tree bore a face—not carved, not painted, but formed by the natural whorls of its growth: a hollow where an eye should have been, a ridge of bark curving into a jaw, the mouth open just wide enough to whisper if wind passed through it."
9"It glowed—a low, ember-bright crimson that pulsed in time with the vibration she'd felt earlier on the standing stones."
10"Something moved inside it—slow, deliberate, like a tongue repositioning."
11"Their shadow merged with the tree shadows along the ground—then separated again, as though the ground had rejected them."
12"At the top of the rise, the wildflowers thinned and the moss gave way to a circle of flat, pale stones—not carved, not arranged by anyone who'd cared for symmetry, but placed with purpose."
13"Some of them in colours she had no names for—deep indigo, a green that shifted toward silver."
14"From something beneath it—a slow expansion of ripples that radiated from the centre outward, each one brightening as it reached the basin's rim and then fading."
15"It formed a shape—a leaf, then a doorway, then something else she couldn't resolve before it shifted again."
16"Through a gap in the branches, a single light burned—warm, steady, the colour of candle flame held close to skin."
17"The tree faces, the silent air, the stars that didn't belong in the water—everything pointed forward."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1300
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"low, ember-bright crimson"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03076923076923077
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005384615384615384
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences118
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences118
mean12.53
std10.41
cv0.83
sampleLengths
017
130
231
325
421
519
65
719
832
92
102
1112
1248
135
146
157
162
176
1829
1917
206
213
228
2311
243
256
2624
279
2819
2910
304
314
328
333
343
3513
362
3715
389
3910
4046
4115
423
4349
445
4521
467
4719
4811
495
51.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3559322033898305
totalSentences118
uniqueOpeners42
37.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"Twice as many stars."
ratio0.011
77.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences90
matches
0"Their violet eyes—faintly glowing, two"
1"they said, their voice threading"
2"She crouched at the base"
3"They extended a hand toward"
4"She looked at the shimmer"
5"It wavered when she tilted"
6"Her phone's camera screen showed"
7"Her phone buzzed in her"
8"She glanced down."
9"She silenced it and slipped"
10"Their head tilted—a gesture they'd"
11"She pulled the Heartstone Pendant"
12"She let it drop back"
13"She blinked and found herself"
14"They shouldn't have been alive."
15"Their form rippled as they"
16"They looked around with the"
17"She could barely hear herself."
18"They crouched and pressed their"
19"Their fingers sank in—not into"
ratio0.356
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences90
matches
0"The oak standing stones rose"
1"Rory counted nine of them,"
2"Ferns and bracken pressed against"
3"Nyx stood half a pace"
4"Their violet eyes—faintly glowing, two"
5"they said, their voice threading"
6"Rory lowered the phone"
7"She crouched at the base"
8"The surface was warmer than"
9"Nyx drifted closer, their boots"
10"They extended a hand toward"
11"Nyx lowered their hand"
12"She looked at the shimmer"
13"It wavered when she tilted"
14"Her phone's camera screen showed"
15"Her phone buzzed in her"
16"She glanced down."
17"Yu-Fei's number, no doubt another"
18"She silenced it and slipped"
19"Nyx regarded her for a"
ratio0.833
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
ratio0
42.86% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Ferns and bracken pressed against their bases, and between them the grass lay flat in a perfect circle, as though something heavy had rested there for centuries…"
1"She blinked and found herself in a clearing that swallowed the noise of the park behind it—the distant hum of the A316, the occasional bark of a dog walker's La…"
2"Not the tentative early blooms of a mild winter or the stubborn weeds that pushed through London pavements, but full, saturated flowers—poppies the colour of ar…"
3"The air carried something green and faintly metallic, like rain on iron, and underneath it a sweetness that made her tongue ache."
4"The oaks thickened as she walked, their trunks growing wider, their bark knotted into shapes that caught the moonlight and held it."
5"They'd gone semi-corporeal without her noticing, their outline blurred, their feet sunk ankle-deep into shadow that pooled beneath them."
6"From something beneath it—a slow expansion of ripples that radiated from the centre outward, each one brightening as it reached the basin's rim and then fading."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.207
leniency0.414
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.2886%