Run: 2026-09-23-01M36X97EZHD5RSH0FQ2S2HXBQ

Run Details

Duration:
2m 31s
Cost:
$0.002643
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The path through Richmond Park had no trail. Nyx led anyway, their shadow slipping between the trunks of old oaks like ink poured across wet ground. Rory followed with her jacket pulled tight against the January wind, and Eva brought up the rear with her phone flashlight cutting a nervous white circle through the dark. "There," Nyx whispered. The sound arrived from everywhere and nowhere. Rory stopped. Between two oaks whose bark had grown into each other like clasped fingers, standing stones rose from the undergrowth. Not one or two. Eleven. Each one taller than Nyx in solid form, black as wet slate, carved with grooves that spiralled inward toward their centres. The carvings caught no light. They absorbed it. "Those aren't on any map," Eva breathed. "Richmond Park's been surveyed to death." "Maps describe the world as it was." Nyx's violet eyes reflected the standing stones in miniature. "This place forgot to stay where the maps put it." Rory stepped closer. The air between the stones shimmered. Not heat-haze. Something thicker, like the space itself had a membrane. She reached toward it and her fingers tingled — a static charge crawling up her wrist to the crescent scar on its inside. The Heartstone pendant against her chest pulsed once, then settled into a steady warmth against her sternum. She pulled her hand back. "Barrier?" she asked. "The Veil." Nyx extended a hand as well. Their fingers passed through the shimmer and darkness rippled outward from the point of contact like a stone dropped into a still pond. "But not the strong part of it. This is tissue paper stretched over a doorframe." "Can we get through?" "We're about to." Nyx looked at Eva. "How brave are you feeling?" Eva swallowed. Her jaw worked side to side the way it had when they were twelve and Rory dared her to jump from the harbour wall in Cardiff Bay. She put her phone in her pocket. "Just go." Nyx stepped through. Their body dispersed into shadow on contact with the shimmer, became a cloud of living darkness that folded and reformed on the other side. Then solid again. Six feet of humanoid silhouette standing in golden light, waving them forward. Rory exhaled through her nose and walked in. Cold hit her first — a bone-deep cold that had nothing to do with the January wind. Then warmth. Then a smell like jasmine and something older, something that reminded her of the wooden box her grandmother kept dried lavender in. Her ears popped. Her balance tipped sideways and she stumbled and Eva grabbed her arm and they both caught themselves on each other. The Grove breathed around them. Massive oaks stood in a wide clearing, their trunks wider than cars, their canopies interlocking overhead into a ceiling of leaves that filtered the light into shifting green-gold columns. But the light had no source she could find. No sun cut through. The glow came from everywhere — from the leaves themselves, from the moss that furred every trunk and root in a carpet of pale luminous green, from the air itself which hung thick with drifting motes that floated against the wind and upward and sideways in patterns too deliberate to be pollen. Wildflowers filled every gap between roots. Blue ones. White ones. Violet ones that pulsed when she looked at them — or she thought they pulsed. She looked away and looked back and they still pulsed. "It's January," Eva said. Her voice came out flat with disbelief. "There's frost on the car and there are roses growing on that tree." Rory turned. Roses climbed the nearest oak in thick red clusters, each blossom open and perfect, not a single petal browned or curled. Below them, something like bluebells carpeted the ground — but the bulbs were black and translucent, and inside each one a tiny light shifted like a trapped firefly. "The ground's soft," Eva said, looking down. "There should be mud. It rained all week." Rory pressed her boot into the earth. It gave like firm foam and released a scent — cut grass and warm sugar. No mud. No cold seeping through the leather. Where her foot lifted, the moss closed over the print without a mark. Nyx moved between the oaks. Their shadow-self stayed anchored to the nearest tree-root, stretching and thinning as they walked, a tether of darkness trailing their steps like a leash. Where Nyx's feet touched the ground, they left no impressions either. "This place keeps its own hours," Nyx said. Their whisper carried and echoed back to them from the canopy a beat late, as though the trees repeated it to each other. "How long were we outside? Before we came through?" Eva pulled out her phone. Stared at it. "It's... it says 11:47. But it was 11:47 when we parked the car. That was half an hour ago." "The clock agrees with itself because it hasn't moved." Nyx touched the trunk of a standing oak. Their fingertips sank into the bark an inch. They drew back and the bark resealed, smooth and unmarked. "Everything here moves in circles. The light. The seasons. The seconds." Unease prickled along Rory's spine. She catalogued it and set it aside. "How do we find Isolde?" Nyx pointed. Beyond the clearing, deeper between the oaks, a stone path surfaced from the moss. Not laid — grown. Each slab was thin as a coin and edged with curling filaments that shifted when the eye moved across them, like the stonework rearranged itself when unobserved. The path wound between two trees whose branches had woven together overhead to form a low arch. "If she knows we're here, she's already waiting," Nyx said. "If she doesn't want to be found, this path disappears before we reach the end of it." "Comforting," Eva muttered. Rory stepped onto the first slab. The stone rang under her boot — a deep tone, felt more than heard, that vibrated up through her ankle and settled in her chest. The Heartstone responded with a pulse that matched the tone exactly. Warmth radiated from the pendant outward across her collarbone. She took another step. Another tone. Higher. The Heartstone matched it again. She hummed the first note and the stones beneath her feet vibrated in answer. "The path is keyed to the pendant?" she said. Nyx tilted their head. The motion rippled through their shadow-body like a wave through smoke. "Or the pendant was keyed to this path. Someone gave that stone to you before you knew this place existed." Rory's hand closed around the gem. It beat against her palm like a second heartbeat, patient and warm. "Who?" Eva asked. Her voice had gone small. "Later." Rory walked forward. The stones sang under each step, each note climbing the scale, and the filigree along the path's edges brightened in her wake — silver at first, then pale gold, then a blue that matched her eyes. The arch of woven branches framed what lay beyond like a window into a room that should not have fit inside a clearing in Richmond Park. Through the arch, the trees thinned and the ground fell away in shallow terraces stacked one below the other. Each terrace held a different garden. One glowed with flowers that chimed when the drifting motes brushed past them — tiny clear sounds like struck crystal that rippled across the tier in waves. The next terrace held nothing but stones, thousands of them, each one stacked in towers no wider than a finger and no taller than a knee, arranged in a pattern that would only make sense from above. The third terrace held water — a pool that lay flat and black and mirrored nothing, not the sky, not the trees, not the three figures standing above it. Beyond the terraces, half-swallowed by the largest oak in the Grove, a structure of pale wood and spiralling horn rose from the roots. Stairs wound around its base without banisters. Its windows — if they were windows — were shaped like eyes and showed different colours behind each: amber, violet, deep green. No footprints marred the moss anywhere along the terraces. No path of wear. Nothing in the ground gave evidence that anyone walked here at all. "She lives in that," Eva said. It wasn't a question. Rory's breath fogged. The cold had returned, or she'd walked into a pocket of it — a current of air sliding down from the upper branches that carried a smell like frost and iron. Below, in the mirror-pool, something moved beneath the black surface. A slow, pale shape, larger than a person, that shifted without breaking the surface tension. Nyx stopped walking. Their shadow-tether went rigid against the tree root behind them. "The pool is showing," they whispered. "Don't look at what it reflects if it starts to look back." "Too late," Eva said. Rory grabbed Eva's shoulder and turned her toward the tier of chiming flowers. The crystal tones washed over them in a wave and the unease in Rory's chest loosened by a fraction. The Heartstone pulsed against her — steady now, almost eager. From above, from the horn-and-wood structure with its eye-shaped windows, a figure descended the stairless stairs without sound. Silver hair catching the sourceless light. Bare feet on pale wood, leaving no print. Isolde Varga reached the last step and stood on the terrace with the stacked stones and smiled like she'd expected them on a Tuesday.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.545
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1567
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1567
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count5
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"comforting"
count1
7
word"vibrated"
count2
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"crystal"
count2
10
word"structure"
count2
11
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"perfect"
4"whisper"
5"echoed"
6"comforting"
7"vibrated"
8"pulse"
9"crystal"
10"structure"
11"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences125
matches
0"t with disbelief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences140
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1582
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1359
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.1
worstName"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
January2
Eva13
Nyx15
Rory14
Heartstone4
Cardiff1
Bay1
Grove2
Varga1
Tuesday1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Heartstone"
4"Varga"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Bay"
globalScore0.948
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like bluebells carpeted the ground"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1582
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences140
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean31.02
std26.19
cv0.844
sampleLengths
055
110
255
313
426
560
65
73
846
94
1012
1138
123
1339
148
1564
165
1794
1835
1924
2051
2115
2243
2340
2440
2527
2646
2717
282
2962
3027
313
3251
3312
3414
359
3635
3718
388
3940
40144
4152
4225
4310
4459
4513
4618
474
4842
4932
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"were shaped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs218
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences140
ratio0.1
matches
0"She reached toward it and her fingers tingled — a static charge crawling up her wrist to the crescent scar on its inside."
1"Cold hit her first — a bone-deep cold that had nothing to do with the January wind."
2"The glow came from everywhere — from the leaves themselves, from the moss that furred every trunk and root in a carpet of pale luminous green, from the air itself which hung thick with drifting motes that floated against the wind and upward and sideways in patterns too deliberate to be pollen."
3"Violet ones that pulsed when she looked at them — or she thought they pulsed."
4"Below them, something like bluebells carpeted the ground — but the bulbs were black and translucent, and inside each one a tiny light shifted like a trapped firefly."
5"It gave like firm foam and released a scent — cut grass and warm sugar."
6"Not laid — grown."
7"The stone rang under her boot — a deep tone, felt more than heard, that vibrated up through her ankle and settled in her chest."
8"The stones sang under each step, each note climbing the scale, and the filigree along the path's edges brightened in her wake — silver at first, then pale gold, then a blue that matched her eyes."
9"One glowed with flowers that chimed when the drifting motes brushed past them — tiny clear sounds like struck crystal that rippled across the tier in waves."
10"The third terrace held water — a pool that lay flat and black and mirrored nothing, not the sky, not the trees, not the three figures standing above it."
11"Its windows — if they were windows — were shaped like eyes and showed different colours behind each: amber, violet, deep green."
12"The cold had returned, or she'd walked into a pocket of it — a current of air sliding down from the upper branches that carried a smell like frost and iron."
13"The Heartstone pulsed against her — steady now, almost eager."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1356
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.025073746312684365
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0022123893805309734
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences140
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences140
mean11.3
std9.03
cv0.799
sampleLengths
08
118
229
33
47
52
619
74
81
921
105
113
127
136
1416
1510
163
176
182
199
2023
2117
225
233
248
2523
2615
274
287
295
302
3127
327
332
343
3524
363
3712
388
3917
402
4122
423
4320
445
4529
469
474
4852
496
66.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4357142857142857
totalSentences140
uniqueOpeners61
66.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then solid again."
1"Then a smell like jasmine"
ratio0.02
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences101
matches
0"They absorbed it."
1"She reached toward it and"
2"She pulled her hand back."
3"Their fingers passed through the"
4"Her jaw worked side to"
5"She put her phone in"
6"Their body dispersed into shadow"
7"Her ears popped."
8"Her balance tipped sideways and"
9"She looked away and looked"
10"Her voice came out flat"
11"It gave like firm foam"
12"Their shadow-self stayed anchored to"
13"Their whisper carried and echoed"
14"Their fingertips sank into the"
15"They drew back and the"
16"She catalogued it and set"
17"She took another step."
18"She hummed the first note"
19"It beat against her palm"
ratio0.238
83.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences101
matches
0"The path through Richmond Park"
1"Nyx led anyway, their shadow"
2"Rory followed with her jacket"
3"The sound arrived from everywhere"
4"Each one taller than Nyx"
5"The carvings caught no light."
6"They absorbed it."
7"Nyx's violet eyes reflected the"
8"Rory stepped closer."
9"The air between the stones"
10"Something thicker, like the space"
11"She reached toward it and"
12"The Heartstone pendant against her"
13"She pulled her hand back."
14"Nyx extended a hand as"
15"Their fingers passed through the"
16"Nyx looked at Eva"
17"Her jaw worked side to"
18"She put her phone in"
19"Nyx stepped through."
ratio0.752
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
28.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Each one taller than Nyx in solid form, black as wet slate, carved with grooves that spiralled inward toward their centres."
1"Then a smell like jasmine and something older, something that reminded her of the wooden box her grandmother kept dried lavender in."
2"Massive oaks stood in a wide clearing, their trunks wider than cars, their canopies interlocking overhead into a ceiling of leaves that filtered the light into …"
3"The glow came from everywhere — from the leaves themselves, from the moss that furred every trunk and root in a carpet of pale luminous green, from the air itse…"
4"Each slab was thin as a coin and edged with curling filaments that shifted when the eye moved across them, like the stonework rearranged itself when unobserved."
5"The stones sang under each step, each note climbing the scale, and the filigree along the path's edges brightened in her wake — silver at first, then pale gold,…"
6"The next terrace held nothing but stones, thousands of them, each one stacked in towers no wider than a finger and no taller than a knee, arranged in a pattern …"
7"The cold had returned, or she'd walked into a pocket of it — a current of air sliding down from the upper branches that carried a smell like frost and iron."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
28.79% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Eva breathed (breathe)"
2"Eva muttered (mutter)"
3"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.394
leniency0.788
rawRatio0.308
effectiveRatio0.242
82.4326%