Run: 2026-09-23-01M36X9D1MAJHF754PF59Y1JH2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 39s
Cost:
$0.001887
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The seventh oak had no business standing between the other six. Rory froze with one boot raised over a gnarled root, breath caught behind her teeth. She counted again, finger lifting in the dark. One, two, three. Four and five leaned together like drunks. Six stood alone at the far edge of the clearing, bark split by some ancient lightning. And there, crowding the gap she had walked through moments ago, stood number seven. A mistake. Fatigue does that to a person at half eleven after a double shift and a night bus to Richmond. She lowered her boot and tasted the air instead. Honeysuckle, thick as syrup, threaded through with something metallic. Copper, almost. The wildflowers at her ankles nodded though nothing touched them, white faces turned up to a starless sky, blooming out of leaf litter that should have been dead as winter. The Heartstone rested against her collarbone and pulsed once. Warm. A slow throb that matched nothing in her own chest. "Right," she said to nobody. "You brought me here. Show me what for." Her voice flattened into the flowers and gave nothing back. She had come for the portal. Three delivery bags of food had gone missing over the past fortnight, all dropped within a mile of this park, all signed for by a customer who did not exist on Golden Empress's books. Yu-Fei had shrugged it off as a glitch. Eva had gone pale and changed the subject. Rory had done the sensible thing and followed the coordinates scrawled on the back of the last receipt, ink that smelled of rain though it had not rained in days. Standing stones. Oaks, the notes had said. Older than the park. Older than the city. She pressed on. Sound came apart wrong in that grove. Her footsteps landed soft in the moss and returned a half-beat late, as though the ground chewed each one and spat it back mangled. She stopped. The echo stopped after her, trailing off in a little stutter of taps that had nothing to do with her. She counted the stutter. Four beats. She had taken one step. The pendant warmed another degree against her skin. Close to a Hel portal, the benefactor had written, whoever that was. The note arrived with the chain in a padded envelope, no stamp, no return address. Just a card in a small, tidy hand: *Wear this. It will tell you when the door is near.* Beneath that, a second line she only read once and could not scrub from memory. *Do not answer to any name but your own.* Rory touched the chain now and scanned the treeline. Between two massive trunks, something stood upright. Man-shaped. Still. The shape wore the dark the way a person wears a coat, draped and fitted and belonging to it. She looked directly at it and the gap between the trees held nothing but mist. She looked away, toward the sixth oak, and the shape returned in the corner of her eye, closer by the length of a room. *Peripheral vision lies*, she told herself. *Rods, not cones. Pattern-hungry. You know this.* She turned her head back fast. Empty. Mist curling around roots, a carpet of those grinning white flowers, nothing else. Yet the mist on that side had thinned, pushed aside as if someone had shouldered through it. She walked faster. Fern brushed her wrist with a touch like wet fingers and she yanked her hand up, cuff riding to expose the pale crescent scar on the inside of her left wrist. The old accident. The bicycle, the gravel, her father's voice carrying down the drive in Cardiff, sharp with a fear he disguised as anger. Something in the grove laughed. Small. High. A child's laugh, bright as a dropped coin on stone, and it came from everywhere and nowhere, from the canopy and the roots and the air inside her own ears. Rory's jaw locked. She spun in a slow circle, sneakers squelching in soil that had gone damp without warning. Not a child. Foxes scream like that. Vixens, fighting, mating. She had read it somewhere and held the fact up like a lantern. Then the laugh came again and said a word. "Rory." Not a fox. Her fingers closed around the Heartstone. It burned now, a coal in a silver cage, and the faint crimson glow inside it moved like something with a pulse of its own. She pulled it free of her collar and held it out. The light it cast fell on the flowers and they turned their faces after it, tracking, thirsty. She kept walking. The path she followed did not exist on any map and yet her feet found it, a thread of packed earth worn through the moss. It curved where the trees curved and it bent back on itself twice without her noticing, because when she passed the split oak for the third time she finally marked the notch she had scraped into its bark with her thumbnail. Same notch. Same white gouge. "Once more with feeling," she muttered, and cut left off the path entirely. Undergrowth swallowed her to the thigh. Brambles caught at her jacket and tore at the delivery hoodie beneath, the one with the golden dragon on the back, the one Yu-Fei would dock her wages for. The canopy pressed lower here. Darkness thickened into something with texture, something that pushed back against her face when she turned it. And in that dark, breathing. Not hers. Hers came fast and shallow through her nose. This other respiration moved slow and wet and long, a great set of bellows filling and emptying at the pace of a tide. It came from directly behind her and had followed her off the path. She did not turn around. Three rules for a grove that eats its guests: do not answer to any name but your own. Do not count the trees twice. Do not look behind you when the breathing starts. She had already broken the second. "Malphora." The word dropped into the dark like a stone into a well and she felt the grove lean in to hear her answer. A name no one in London knew. A name that lived only in her father's case notes from a trial that had never reached court, a name whispered to her once in a nightmare by a woman with no face and fingers too long for her hands. Rory's lips parted. Some traitor instinct in the base of her skull warmed to it, flattered, recognized. She clamped her teeth shut so hard her molars clicked. The breathing behind her stopped. Silence crashed in like a wave and the flowers around her shivered all at once, thousands of white faces turning, turning, until every one of them pointed at her. The Heartstone blazed against her palm, crimson light bleeding between her fingers, and somewhere past the seventh oak a lock the size of a house gave an almighty crack and swung open. A girl stepped through the gap in the trees wearing Rory's face, and smiled with Rory's mouth, and held out Rory's own hand. "Finally," it said, in her voice. "I've been waiting out here for years."
created_at"2026-09-23T10:34:24.188Z" 9/23/2026, 10:34:24 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1208
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1208
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"throb"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"throb"
2"footsteps"
3"echo"
4"scanned"
5"pulse"
6"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences107
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords30
totalWords1208
ratio0.025
matches
0"Wear this. It will tell you when the door is near."
1"Do not answer to any name but your own."
2"Peripheral vision lies"
3"Rods, not cones. Pattern-hungry. You know this."
75.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"*Peripheral vision lies*, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount1185
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.68
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Heartstone3
Golden1
Empress1
Hel1
Rory8
Cardiff1
Undergrowth1
Yu-Fei2
London1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Empress"
2"Rory"
3"Undergrowth"
4"Yu-Fei"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Hel"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1208
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean28.09
std25.53
cv0.909
sampleLengths
011
163
221
350
420
513
610
786
815
93
1059
115
1278
139
1467
1513
1637
1758
185
1951
2023
219
221
233
2459
253
2666
275
2813
2957
305
3146
325
3333
346
351
3670
3717
3810
395
4061
4123
4213
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs188
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1190
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.029411764705882353
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005042016806722689
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean10.88
std9.45
cv0.869
sampleLengths
011
115
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33
47
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614
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99
109
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139
141
1510
165
178
1810
196
2034
218
228
2330
242
255
264
274
283
297
3024
312
3220
334
342
355
368
3712
3815
3910
4024
419
429
437
441
451
4619
4715
4824
496
76.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4954954954954955
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners55
71.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"Just a card in a"
1"Then the laugh came again"
ratio0.022
95.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences93
matches
0"She counted again, finger lifting"
1"She lowered her boot and"
2"she said to nobody"
3"Her voice flattened into the"
4"She had come for the"
5"She pressed on."
6"Her footsteps landed soft in"
7"She counted the stutter."
8"She had taken one step."
9"It will tell you when"
10"She looked directly at it"
11"She looked away, toward the"
12"You know this.*"
13"She turned her head back"
14"She walked faster."
15"She spun in a slow"
16"She had read it somewhere"
17"Her fingers closed around the"
18"It burned now, a coal"
19"She pulled it free of"
ratio0.312
78.28% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences93
matches
0"The seventh oak had no"
1"Rory froze with one boot"
2"She counted again, finger lifting"
3"Fatigue does that to a"
4"She lowered her boot and"
5"Honeysuckle, thick as syrup, threaded"
6"The wildflowers at her ankles"
7"The Heartstone rested against her"
8"A slow throb that matched"
9"she said to nobody"
10"Her voice flattened into the"
11"She had come for the"
12"Yu-Fei had shrugged it off"
13"Eva had gone pale and"
14"Rory had done the sensible"
15"Oaks, the notes had said."
16"She pressed on."
17"Sound came apart wrong in"
18"Her footsteps landed soft in"
19"The echo stopped after her,"
ratio0.763
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
59.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The wildflowers at her ankles nodded though nothing touched them, white faces turned up to a starless sky, blooming out of leaf litter that should have been dea…"
1"Three delivery bags of food had gone missing over the past fortnight, all dropped within a mile of this park, all signed for by a customer who did not exist on …"
2"Her footsteps landed soft in the moss and returned a half-beat late, as though the ground chewed each one and spat it back mangled."
3"She spun in a slow circle, sneakers squelching in soil that had gone damp without warning."
4"Darkness thickened into something with texture, something that pushed back against her face when she turned it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.286
87.8160%