Run: 2026-09-23-01M37NXPC83AC43PP9143Q7AGP

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Duration:
58.8s
Cost:
$0.097568
Provider:
Claude Platform on AWS

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rift didn't tear. It peeled. Rory had expected something violent: a crack of light, a wrench in her gut, the sort of thing films promised. Instead the Fae blade slid into the shimmer between the two oak stones as if it were cutting wet silk, and the air simply came apart along the edge of the moonsilver. Warmth poured through the gap. It carried the smell of bread. "Now," Isolde said, "or the solstice closes its hand." Rory stepped through. The cold went first. One moment Richmond Park's December bit at her ears and the backs of her knuckles; the next, heat settled over her like a blanket pulled from a dryer, and her breath stopped fogging mid-exhale. She stumbled on ground that gave slightly underfoot, soft and loamy, and caught herself on something that turned out to be a vine as thick as her forearm. She looked up, and forgot to let go. The sky was amber. Not sunset-amber, not the smudge of city light on cloud, but the colour of honey held up to a window, deep and even from one horizon to the other. There was no sun. There was no source at all. The light simply *was*, pooled in the air, thick enough that Rory half expected it to drip. "Oh," she said, and the word came out small. Behind her the rift sighed shut. Nyx came through last, and badly. They poured out of the gap as a smear of darkness, folded in on themselves, and pulled up into their solid form with visible effort. Six feet of living shadow, but thinner than she'd ever seen them, edges fraying like smoke in a draught. Their violet eyes flickered. "Nyx?" "There is nowhere to stand." Their voice came as it always did, a whisper on a wind that wasn't blowing. "Look at the ground, Rory." She looked. The vine she held cast no shadow. Neither did she. Neither did the row upon row of vines stretching away down the slope, heavy with grapes the size of plums, black-purple and glossy as beetles. The light came from everywhere at once, and so it fell behind nothing. "You can't slip," she said. "I can barely *be*." Nyx drew themselves tighter, a dark column in all that gold. "I will manage. Walk quickly." Isolde had already started down the row. Rory watched her go, silver hair loose to her waist and swaying, bare feet moving over the dark soil, and saw, with a small cold jolt, that the earth behind her was untouched. Rory's own trainers had left deep, clumsy prints. Isolde's path was as smooth as if nobody had passed at all. She'd known about that, of course. Knowing and seeing were different animals. Rory released the vine and wiped her palm on her jeans. It came away sticky. She reached under her collar without thinking and found the Heartstone pendant. The crimson stone, no bigger than her thumbnail, was warm against her fingers. It had always been faintly warm near a portal, a pulse like a second, slower heartbeat. Now it was hot, and the pulse had quickened. "It's never done this," she said, catching up to Isolde. "It has never been home." The Seer didn't turn. Her lavender eyes were fixed on something down the slope. "Things remember where they were born, even when they are carried far from it. Especially then." "That's not an answer." "No," Isolde agreed pleasantly. "It is a truth. Those are rarer." The vineyard ran on. Rory had grown up with the Welsh valleys, their green folds and the grey drizzle between them, but she had never seen land so crowded with growing things. The vines were trained on trellises of pale wood that looked like bone until she touched one and found it was only wood, smooth as a banister. The grapes hung in clusters so dense they bowed the branches. And they hummed. She didn't notice it at first, just a faint vibration at the edge of hearing, like a fridge in another room, but the deeper they went, the more she felt it in her molars. She stopped beside a cluster and leaned in. "Don't," said Nyx. "I'm not going to eat it." Her stomach chose that moment to growl, loud and long. She pressed a hand to it, embarrassed. She'd eaten before they left. Yu-Fei had pressed a carton of leftover char siu on her at the end of her shift, like she always did, and Rory had wolfed it down on the steps outside the Golden Empress. She shouldn't be hungry. She was starving. It came up through her all at once, a hollow ache under her ribs, saliva flooding her mouth. The grapes were right there. Their skins were dusted with bloom, and one had split, and the juice beading at the tear was the red-black of old wine, and it smelled, God, it smelled like every good meal she'd ever had and several she hadn't. Her hand was halfway to the cluster before she realised she'd lifted it. Something cold closed around her wrist. Not Nyx; their touch was dry and weightless. This was fingers, long and cool, pressing directly on the little crescent scar on her left wrist. Isolde held her there, unhurried. "The hunger is not yours," the Seer said. "It is the land's. It opens its mouth, and you feel yourself falling in." Rory swallowed hard. The ache didn't go, but it stepped back, and she could think around it. "What happens if I eat?" "You will have eaten." Isolde let go. "And a thing that is eaten belongs to the one who ate it. But here, the hungry belong to the table." "Brilliant," Rory muttered. "Cheers. Very clear." But she shoved both hands in her jacket pockets and kept them there, and she found the hilt of the Fae blade in the inside one and wrapped her fingers around it. The moonsilver was cold, as it always was, and here in all this sweltering gold the cold felt like a rope thrown to someone drowning. The hunger ebbed a little more. They left the vineyard at the bottom of the slope and came into an orchard. Rory had no names for the trees. Some were low and gnarled, their fruit pale and translucent like paper lanterns, each with a darker seed suspended at its centre that seemed to turn slowly as she passed. Others towered, trunks ridged and red as muscle, bearing long pods that split open as she watched and let fall a scatter of glittering seeds that sank into the soil and were gone. Somewhere a bird sang, or something like a bird, a liquid triple note that repeated over and over without variation, the same pitch each time, like a phone left ringing. And under the birdsong, faint and steady, there was another sound. *Tok. Tok. Tok.* Rory stopped walking. "Do you hear that?" Nyx tilted their featureless head. "Knives." It was. She had spent enough nights in Yu-Fei's kitchen, waiting for orders, to know the rhythm of a cleaver meeting a block. But this was vast. It wasn't one knife; it was hundreds, thousands maybe, so perfectly in time that they made a single sound, rolling across the orchard from somewhere beyond the trees. *Tok. Tok. Tok.* Unhurried. Tireless. The pendant pulsed against her collarbone. She counted. It kept time with the knives. Rory's mouth went dry. She said nothing. A little further on, Isolde stopped beside one of the lantern-fruit trees and touched a low branch. Something hung there that wasn't fruit: a small brass tag on a loop of red thread, the kind you'd see on a butcher's hook. Rory bent to read it. The script was etched neatly, in plain English. *M. Holloway. Leeds. 1987. Pastry. Term: Perpetual.* She straightened slowly and looked around. They were everywhere. She hadn't seen them before, because she hadn't known to look, but now they caught the amber light on every tree, a tag on every third or fourth branch, glinting faintly like Christmas ornaments on a tree no one had bothered to take down. "These are people," she said. "These were agreements," said Isolde. "People are what they signed away." "Chefs." Rory turned a tag on the next tree. *D. Okafor. Lagos. 2003. Sauces.* Another. *T. Brennan. Galway. 1951. Butchery.* Her thumb stilled on that last word. "They sold themselves to cook." "Some of them to cook," Nyx said softly. They had drifted close enough that the air around her dimmed, the only shade she'd seen since arriving. "Some to eat. The terms are not always what one believes they are when one signs." There was something in their voice, old and careful, that Rory had heard only once before, the night Nyx had told her the year they'd stopped being a man. Sixteen forty-three. A summoning that had gone wrong. She didn't ask. She thought she understood why they'd come anyway. The trees ended. They stood at the lip of a ridge, the orchard at their backs, and below them the land fell away into a basin so wide Rory's eyes couldn't hold all of it at once. It was a city, or a kitchen the size of one. Chimneys rose by the hundred, fat brick throats and slender copper flues, and from every one of them poured smoke that wasn't grey but gold, thick and slow, rising to join the amber sky until she couldn't tell where the smoke stopped and the sky began. Maybe it didn't. Maybe the sky *was* the smoke, a whole world lit by the breath of its ovens. Long tables ran between the buildings like roads. Even from here she could see they were laden: domed platters, towers of fruit, whole carcasses glazed and gleaming. Nothing moved at them. No diners. Just the food, waiting. *Tok. Tok. Tok.* Down there, somewhere, thousands of hands rose and fell. Rory realised she was holding her breath. Her stomach clenched with a longing so fierce it bordered on grief, and she tightened her grip on the cold blade in her pocket until the edges of the hilt dug into her palm. "Belphegor's table," Isolde said. For once, there was no riddle in it. Her face, ageless and pale in the gold, held something that might have been pity. "Every chair is spoken for, little mortal. Even the empty ones." Beneath Rory's collar, the Heartstone beat hot and quick, perfectly in time with the knives, as if something in that basin had finally heard it come home, and was calling it in for supper.
created_at"2026-09-23T17:44:54.936Z" 9/23/2026, 5:44:54 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Isolde agreed pleasantly [pleasantly]"
1"Nyx said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.529
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
77.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1772
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count2
4
adverb"perfectly"
count2
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"perfectly"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1772
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"quickened"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count2
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"etched"
count1
9
word"glinting"
count1
10
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"warmth"
2"flickered"
3"whisper"
4"pulse"
5"quickened"
6"stomach"
7"pulsed"
8"etched"
9"glinting"
10"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences155
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences155
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences169
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords29
totalWords1772
ratio0.016
matches
0"was"
1"be"
2"Tok. Tok. Tok."
3"Tok. Tok. Tok."
4"M. Holloway. Leeds. 1987. Pastry. Term: Perpetual."
5"D. Okafor. Lagos. 2003. Sauces."
6"T. Brennan. Galway. 1951. Butchery."
7"was"
8"Tok. Tok. Tok."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount1587
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Tok"
discoveredNames
Fae2
Rory19
Richmond1
Park1
December1
Nyx7
Isolde10
Heartstone2
Seer2
Welsh1
Golden1
Empress1
God1
Yu-Fei2
Unhurried1
English1
Christmas1
Sixteen1
Tok9
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Seer"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Tok"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"December"
3"Golden"
globalScore0.901
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like bone until she touched one an"
1"smelled like every good meal she'd ever ha"
2"felt like a rope thrown to someone drow"
3"centre that seemed to turn slowly as she passed"
4"something like a bird, a liquid triple note"
87.13% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.129
wordCount1772
matches
0"Not sunset-amber, not the smudge of city light on cloud, but the colour of honey held up to a window, deep"
1"not the smudge of city light on cloud, but the colour of honey held up to a window, deep"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences169
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean31.09
std29.23
cv0.94
sampleLengths
06
163
29
33
466
58
660
79
860
91
1025
1150
125
1320
1460
1512
1665
1710
1835
194
2011
21107
228
233
2466
253
2663
2713
2836
2922
3022
3128
3269
3315
34100
3511
363
377
386
3960
4014
417
4254
437
4453
455
4611
4732
4890
493
91.68% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences155
matches
0"was*, pooled"
1"were fixed"
2"were trained"
3"were dusted"
4"were gone"
5"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs256
matches
0"wasn't blowing"
1"was holding"
2"was calling"
92.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences169
ratio0.018
matches
0"One moment Richmond Park's December bit at her ears and the backs of her knuckles; the next, heat settled over her like a blanket pulled from a dryer, and her breath stopped fogging mid-exhale."
1"Not Nyx; their touch was dry and weightless."
2"It wasn't one knife; it was hundreds, thousands maybe, so perfectly in time that they made a single sound, rolling across the orchard from somewhere beyond the trees."
97.15% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1595
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount69
adverbRatio0.04326018808777429
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.01128526645768025
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences169
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences169
mean10.49
std10.6
cv1.011
sampleLengths
04
12
220
332
45
56
69
73
84
934
1028
118
124
1329
144
156
1617
179
186
196
2025
2119
224
231
2420
255
262
277
283
2925
3013
315
3215
335
347
3533
368
3712
386
396
4011
414
4212
4313
4416
459
4610
479
4810
4916
59.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.42771084337349397
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners71
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences117
matches
0"Instead the Fae blade slid"
1"Somewhere a bird sang, or"
2"Maybe it didn't."
3"Maybe the sky *was* the"
4"Just the food, waiting."
ratio0.043
90.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences117
matches
0"It carried the smell of"
1"She stumbled on ground that"
2"She looked up, and forgot"
3"she said, and the word"
4"They poured out of the"
5"Their violet eyes flickered."
6"Their voice came as it"
7"She'd known about that, of"
8"It came away sticky."
9"She reached under her collar"
10"It had always been faintly"
11"she said, catching up to"
12"Her lavender eyes were fixed"
13"She didn't notice it at"
14"She stopped beside a cluster"
15"Her stomach chose that moment"
16"She pressed a hand to"
17"She'd eaten before they left."
18"She shouldn't be hungry."
19"She was starving."
ratio0.325
62.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences117
matches
0"The rift didn't tear."
1"Rory had expected something violent:"
2"Warmth poured through the gap."
3"It carried the smell of"
4"Rory stepped through."
5"The cold went first."
6"She stumbled on ground that"
7"She looked up, and forgot"
8"The sky was amber."
9"The light simply *was*, pooled"
10"she said, and the word"
11"Nyx came through last, and"
12"They poured out of the"
13"Their violet eyes flickered."
14"Their voice came as it"
15"The vine she held cast"
16"Neither did she."
17"Neither did the row upon"
18"The light came from everywhere"
19"Nyx drew themselves tighter, a"
ratio0.795
85.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"Now it was hot, and"
1"Even from here she could"
ratio0.017
51.67% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She stumbled on ground that gave slightly underfoot, soft and loamy, and caught herself on something that turned out to be a vine as thick as her forearm."
1"Some were low and gnarled, their fruit pale and translucent like paper lanterns, each with a darker seed suspended at its centre that seemed to turn slowly as s…"
2"Others towered, trunks ridged and red as muscle, bearing long pods that split open as she watched and let fall a scatter of glittering seeds that sank into the …"
3"Something hung there that wasn't fruit: a small brass tag on a loop of red thread, the kind you'd see on a butcher's hook."
4"Chimneys rose by the hundred, fat brick throats and slender copper flues, and from every one of them poured smoke that wasn't grey but gold, thick and slow, ris…"
5"Beneath Rory's collar, the Heartstone beat hot and quick, perfectly in time with the knives, as if something in that basin had finally heard it come home, and w…"
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, and the word came out small"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde agreed pleasantly (agree)"
1"Rory muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.118
86.7276%